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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: The story starts with Jay lost in thought, walking on campus, trying to figure things out when he bumps into another student. At first, Edward is pissed and yells some profanity, but once the two get a good look at one another, things change.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
shoved y my way,

The only thing I'd point out is to watch the use of repetitive words. I am constantly using my Thesaurus to avoid this pitfall in my writing.

Description/emotion: You describe what Edward looks like physically, enough to get a picture of him in the reader's mind. You have room to add emotional aspects to this short story. For instance, when Jay knows he will be sitting next to the guy he'd just run into, how does he feel about that? Aside from avoiding eye contact, you could elaborate here. Is it because he's shy, or nervous? Is he playing hard to get? Your audience wants to know their main characters; these moments are an opportunity to do just that.

Overall Impression: You have a solid beginning here. Adding more description and the emotional connection between the characters and your audience will pull the reader into the story and have us rooting for Jay as the story evolves.




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Review of You and I  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review

Subject: This feels like a budding relationship as one stays guarded, and the other tries to convey how they feel, hoping their love interest will let their guard down and let him in.

Flow: The poem moved well from beginning to end as this tale of love unfolded.

Description: The first line pulls the reader in, thoughts of not being able to get lost in another, when they actually already are, to be so connected and giving themselves to the other as a gift, almost like an open book for discovery laid bare.

Overall Impression: There seems to be a struggle here as if the main person is experiencing some sort of restraint in letting their feelings out, almost as if their love interest is not accepting what they have to offer, yet they somehow manage to bring out the best of them. Bringing out the best in someone is never a bad thing in my opinion. When that kind of insight hits, it brings about profound understanding. When those feelings are reciprocated, it brings about experiences no one wants to let go of. The dream of being together forever, of sharing eternity with the one you love is something most of us hope to find. I am still rereading this one, hoping I truly did understand the message not miss the mark entirely.






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Rated: E | (4.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Hello fellow GoT-er! I meant to read and review some of these right out-of-the-gate Door One stories, but yours is the first! I like how you used the prompt at the very end of the story attached to the note at the bookstore cafe. I found it creative the way you tied up the story of Susie out to do something her mother disapproves of, but taking this opportunity to do something for herself.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: Susie is headstrong, a good character trait. She is nonplussed by the fact that her mother thinks the trip isn't a good idea, and she is used to being told that throughout her life. There was no fear in taking the less traveled route to her hotel. She seemed quite confident as she chose it, and then walked on, taking the turns from her map app. The impulse to go into the bookstore cafe turned out to be good.

Overall Impression: I love this idea of getting coffee, something to eat, a good book, and a note of inspiration. This should be a thing! Like a fortune cookie gives you some glimpse of a well-known saying, the bookstore cafe takes that to new lengths with solid advice everyone would love to have. I enjoyed your take on the song and the prompt.




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Review of The Portrait  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: A haunting tale about a close-knit father and son who share a love for art and paintings in particular. John is heartbroken to see his son go off to war, but Sam makes a promise to his father. He swears he will paint a self-portrait and bring it back as soon as possible for his father to hang up with the rest of their art collection. John holds onto a letter from Sam, staring at the art collection, hoping that his son will return soon.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: John's heartache was spot-on. And although I knew this story would come to a tragic end, I was shocked by how it all came about. During the visit of Sam bringing the painting at Christmas, John is thrilled to see him and accepting of Sam's friend orphan friend, Ralph when the war is over. That grandfather clock that continually kept time, chiming little reminders that time moves forward.

Overall Impression: I was surprised to learn that Sam was a ghost once Ralph arrived to tell John of the fire. Even more shocked to learn that Sam saved Ralph's life and all of his artwork was destroyed. I enjoy these stories of mystery, and how the universe somehow manages to leave little gifts behind that seem almost impossible.




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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Mary works for a newspaper and really wants to be a reporter, but her boss only puts her in the position of taking dictator for his less-than-exciting stories. She is bored with the mundane of this job. Mr. Livingston is sick on this particular day and cannot come into the office. When the phone rings, the caller mistakes her for her boss and gives her a tip. She runs outside to investigate and gets the story herself.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: I identified with what Mary felt in her job and with a husband who thinks she should consider herself lucky that he allows her to work in this field. The timeline is 1968, but even still. I loved that she jumped right in and went after that story when it fell into her lap. Her surprise at seeing the enormity of the situation, with a dozen cows hanging out on the street was great.

Overall Impression: Great job with this short story. It was good that you showed how grateful Mary was submitting that story, and having her name in print. She realizes that it may be the only article she gets to write, but that is enough for her. The cows grazing down Main Street had a great comedy to it since that's not something that happens every day.




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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Flash fiction about two people sitting beside one another at a work conference, listening to the motivational speaker. Sam and Carl strike up a conversation, and he gives her some advice about surviving her new environment.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: I enjoyed the interaction between Carl and Sam and the added elements of humor you managed to get into this piece. I like female characters who aren't afraid to speak up, and Sam asking for some advice about her new job showed strength. Carl's three pieces of advice were great, especially repeating the words from the opening of the story for added humor, giving Sam some insight into Carl's personality. Comparing inauthenticity to a stinking perfume I have to say had me turning my nose up as I continued reading.

Overall Impression: You got the prompt words into the story smoothly. That's not always an easy task. I liked that Carl mentioned that there were free drinks when it was over and then followed that up a minute later, offering to buy Sam a drink. He definitely showed off his marketing skills with that one. Their interaction was smooth and felt real. Great job with this three-hundred-word story!




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Review of Date Night  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: The task for this assignment was to evoke emotions on a date night.There were moments when you excelled at that task, and other portions of the writing where the story was more told than shown, and it didn't hit the mark.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
next to wall on the -- to the wall at the booth - think this will make it clearer

There were a few more issues, mostly typos with added letters, etc.

Description/emotion: Longing to wrap his arms around her showed what he wanted most on this night. Even this could be taken a bit further by describing how she felt in his arms, the warmth of her body, or that she was soft against, things of that nature. Even hitting in what she smells like. The food, her flowery perfume, or a vanilla soap. All these little details really help connect the reader to the characters.

Overall Impression: I know what your assignment was, and I believe you were trying to portray the newness of the relationship. I think the added information of what they do in school, what they agree upon and how aligned they are took away from the scene itself. When writing these kind of assignments, it's not necessary to give the background information on your characters. Stay in the scene itself. Where they are, the weather, what they're doing, secret smiles to each other, bumping of hands or feet if they are lying on a blanket at the park. Just some things to think about.




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Rated: E | (3.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Tom and Helen are heading to Las Vegas by car to elope. Both feel they are ready to take on this new journey and want to get out from under their parents so they can control their own destinies. They are excited as they talk on the drive, but sudden revelations of how they each see their future together start to conflict.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
than an apartment for
They two

Think about using other dialog tags instead of relying on on said Tom, or Tom said. For instance, instead of I know,” said Tom. try something like. "I know," Tom said, his voice filled with excitement.

Adding more details with the dialog connects the reader to your characters and gives them a sense of who they are.

Description/emotion: I wondered what the weather was like and what kind of car they were driving in. Are the windows down and the wind whipping Helen's hair if it's hot?

Overall Impression: You have the basics down, try expanding upon it. Your characters clearly know what they want, and although Tom is rethinking things, you need to show your audience. Do either of them have inner thoughts? When Helen begins to realize that Tom's ideas and hers aren't the same, perhaps she wonders if she's making a mistake, or she's disappointed that he's decided they aren't buying a house right away. Just some things to consider.




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Review of Chasm  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Alexis goes hiking alone in the mountains, and that's when she takes a tumble that sends her into a cavern. Her leg hurts, and she doesn't see a way out. No one knows exactly where she went, and she worries that she won't be found. Life hangs in the balance as she tries to decide what to do. Before long, she begins to hallucinate, seeing almost every person she's ever known making her feel worse.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
have successful careers,
What's happening to

Description/emotion: My mother is battling Alzheimer's now, so this really hit home. All of the little things we miss when their mind starts go. I'm glad that the person that gave her the push to get out of that hole was her mother. That she got that conversation, even though it was more of a dream, but regardless, she got that. The visual of her mom, the way she used to be was great.

Overall Impression: Just a little motherly love and encouragement was enough to get Alexis to try again, to grit through the pain and make it up and out of that hole until she could be rescued. I liked that her mother used her saying that life is hard to get Alexis to get up and get moving. Overall, it's a solid story that takes you through Alexis' thought process and determination to keep going.




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: After three long years, a man is released from the mental hospital. The year is 2408 and a lot has changed. The nurse is not bothered by the fact that this patient has no where to go, just that he's taking up a room that they will be using for someone else. I am assuming that after losing his wife and job, and his children going off to fight a war, that it was too much for him to take.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: Noen

Description/emotion: Great descriptions of Bobo the clown. His round red nose fell off, his streaked make-up, crooked wig, and the tears. Bobo tells the man how he is no longer needed, and he's devastated about that. The man cannot comprehend all that Bobo is telling him and walks away. Spending time reading books in the library, he becomes informed and looks for Bobo, believing that if people laughed again, they would be happy. Bobo, he feels, is the key to unlocking both of their happiness.

Overall Impression: I did wonder where this story would end. And even though I read the description, I did not see that coming. I love surprise endings. Good job with the unpredictability of the story. Too bad Bobo didn't make it. Though it does leave questions about how the man will be received with his bowling pins.




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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Henry is celebrating his one-hundredth birthday. He doesn't speak, and it doesn't become clear why until the end of the story. Good job keeping that truth hidden. He is a veteran, I'm assuming from Normandy Beach, and lives in a retirement home. He isn't happy there. The waves crashing against the shore hold too many dark memories for him, and he is surprised no one has ever made that connection to understand why he's unhappy.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: No issues.

Description/emotion: Really good descriptions of Henry's mindset. He sees the young aid as bouncy, and cannot remember when he was that way. He thinks a lot about his time growing up on a farm, a place he still misses.

Overall Impression: Henry is surprised by the son of a soldier he was friends with so long ago on this birthday. David asks if Henry remembers his father and tells him how his father always spoke fondly of him and had been searching for him for a long time. Just this information was enough to pull on the heartstrings. It really didn't matter where the story went when the acknowledgment and understanding Henry needed came from David. But I loved the ending, for Henry found the peace he so desperately needed and deserved.




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Review of The Locked Door  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: This was a nail-biter, as I felt like I crawled up beside Benjamin and followed him through every step of this journey, desperate to know what was beyond that locked door. The ending did not disappoint, and was more a total shock that I'm still shaking my head over. I assumed someone was there, but the reality - wow.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: Great job here. Benjamin shows how much love he holds for his father, and how spending time with him in the basement working on projects together is the best part of his day. He liked being praised for doing well, it makes him feel good. But the mystery behind that door, the expressions from his parents when he asks about the door, and their conflicting responses pique his curiosity. Determination leads him to sneak downstairs and unravel the mystery.

Overall Impression: What a gripping tale you've spun. I couldn't read fast enough to get to the end. Shocked is an understatement. Losing a child is a parent's worst nightmare. It's heartwrenching. These parents found a totally unconventional way to remedy their heartache. And not only once, but multiple times. Great detail and that twist ties it all together and then the questions begin regarding Benjamin.




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


I'm not gonna lie, I always love a good rant. Usually, I'm the one doing the ranting. Whew, where to begin with this? Well, you said it was written in 2002, so 22 years ago. Here it's, good old 2024, with inflation on the rise and everything going up around us; I can honestly say the one thing that hasn't changed for me financially is my membership fee. I started with the basic membership, completely affordable. The more of the site I explored, the more I wrote. With writing comes storage. Static items turned into book items, so I upgraded my membership. And seriously if you do the math and round up, this equates to about twelve dollars a month.

Let's put that into perspective, shall we? Friday night I ordered grinder subs. We used to eat there all the time, but I'm older, work more, and I'm just plain lazy. I hate traffic and people where I live do not know how to drive in my opinion. We are a family of three now. One whole sub, two half subs, which I drove and picked up, no delivery fee involved here, to the tune of forty-three dollars! I am still shocked by this. I had their menu in the draw. They haven't even been in business for more than twenty years. When I looked at the menu, I had stashed at home, and the price of the same food about ten years ago was half what I had paid. I am still scratching my head over that.

As for this site, I commend you for being able to articulate your argument well. I wouldn't have been so nice about it. I remember when the big upgrade was happening here and chatted with a few people and we discussed how much work went into it. Moving a server, trying to make it as painless as possible. All of that took a lot of work on your part, and it's way over my head as to how these things work behind the scenes. This article should be front and center for the newbies, and for the old timers like myself who need a reminder of what is truly Free on this site. It's one hell of a list!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Description: As the contest title informs you, you are not allowed to use dialog, which includes inner dialog as well. This sounds like a great challenge for short story writers who tend to use dialog to move the story forward. Another challenge of this contest is to get the story written in seven hundred words or less. It must be newly written for that month's contest and do not forget the word count! This is so necessary and a lot of writers forget to do that, which results in disqualification, sadly.

Overall Impression: The page layout if fun and colorful. The rules are clearly stated and easy to follow. Good prizes away the winner of this contest, from the exclusive contest ribbon for first place, to their exclusive merit badge and gift points for second or third. This contest has been around for almost as decade and has even won some Quill awards. Congratulations. There are a lot of writing acitivites and contests on the site, but this one stands out because it is different from other contests. Being a bit more restrictive makes the writer take their time, polish up their skills and get to work at crafting a great story. It's too bad this contest is on hiatus. It looks like a lot of fun!




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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: A little insight into taboo subject matter according to the masses. It was nice to read something out of my usual comfort zone, and this quick read was really good. I was pulled in from the first line and you held my attention until the last line and gave me things to think about afterward. It's always a good thing in my opinion.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: none

Description/emotion: You made it easy to get into the head of the woman who waited. Her thoughts were clear and focused. She knows exactly who she is and what she wants, and the thought of these things happening has her ready for the next experience. Her song is a melody of her journey in domination and submission, though her definition of the word differs from the dictionary. To her, it's a freedom of expression, of giving all she has to give to another.

Overall Impression: I liked that you clearly spelled out how trusting someone must be to go this route. It is a mindset, as well as a physical act. Between books and movies these days, that point tends to be overlooked. Using the form of her own song made this a standout piece. Now my mind is wondering what happens next, and will it be all she hopes for.




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Review of The Detached  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review

Subject: If I understood this poem correctly, it is about being detached from humanity, easily being swayed to the dark side, for lack of a better term, and carrying out the evils without remorse because material things are what we deem as important, not life itself.

Flow: This piece moved pretty well, though I did get hung up in the middle. That could just be me.

Description: This unfolded like a gripping tale and pulled me in right from the beginning. The highlighted words added to the eeriness of this piece as evil and dark shadowy figures come out to do their bidding. Rancid, fetid breath, now that really stood out and cause me to turn up my nose, as if I could actually smell it. You do so well with imagery in your writing.

Overall Impression: This is like a ritual continually carried out, pouncing on those in grief or turmoil because they are already in a state of despair. I'm still pondering the detachment because I see it every day in life as the world seems to be ruled by it. No common courtesy or morals; just live your life and forget about the consequences of your actions. Anything that I read that keeps me thinking about it long after is always a good sign in my book.






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Review of One Way  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Oh so very creepy. Damn, I'm still trying to shake that chill from my spine! Alex and Melissa are on a drive in the middle of nowhere. The GPS cannot tell them where they are. They trade banter about it when the car suddenly dies. Their dog, Sheba, is excited to get out of the car and go on a walk to try and find help. That's when they discover One Way.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: You can always tell when a couple has been together for a while by the way they interact with one another. I liked this couple a lot, and their banter was great. Good description of the narrow road they are on, worried about an oncoming car. And the sudden disappearance of their vehicle and the house, which appears out of nowhere. That truly creeped me out. That older man put an image of Lurch in my mind. Tall, slim, gaunt. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's where my mind went.

Overall Impression: What a choice to make. Their options were clear enough, pointed out by the older man, and I wasn't surprised that Melissa wasn't fooling around and went for it. That character has spunk. Alex seemed thankful and relieved that Melissa took the decision out of his hands. Great job.




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Review of ~I'm Coming Home~  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: Whoa. I am still shocked by this flash fiction short. I was hooked right away as her husband gave up so easily and left her all because she couldn't give him physically what he wanted. What a bum. Fate of course stepped in, as it has a tendency to do and gave her something in return for her heartache and sorrow.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: No issues

Description/emotion: Good job showing the accident as the rain came down. Miss Riveria works quickly to extricate the child from the crashed vehicle and then she makes a monumental decision right there and then. The parents have died in the wreckage, who will look after the child? It's funny that the husband had her prepared for emergencies by keeping a flashlight in the car, and when she used it, it would be for something he desperately wanted.

Overall Impression: I didn't expect that outcome, though I should have I suppose. It's not like you weren't leading the reader there. Being that close to Mexico, it's understandable that this was her chosen route. Who would question that the child wasn't hers? No one really. Three years and she holds no regrets which means it was the right decision for her. Customs didn't even second guess her coming into the country on foot, with a strolled and small child.




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: One of the scarier thoughts happening right now as technology takes over, and we still don't fully know how we fit into all of this. They love to pretend we're not going anywhere, but the powers that be don't know how to keep their mouths shut, and this leads to conspiracy theories running rampant. The whole chip thing is something worth getting a little upset about. If you can't trust the government, who can you trust?

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: Wow, the whole blowing your arm off thing sounds pretty freaky, but in this climate of insanity, who are we to stay with one hundred percent confidence? This could or will never happen. I've lost faith in all these institutions that are supposed to keep us apprised of situations and safe. They are doing a bang-up job already.

Overall Impression: Many people have already put the chip into their pets hide. It does make a person wonder when they will start doing this to their children to track them.

Funny story: my daughter-in-law has an iPhone, as does my son, my husband, and her entire family. Imagine my surprise when I found out that she and her parents, who live in France, watch my kid drive to and from work daily. It is this exact reason I refuse to get an iPhone. I do not want them tracking my movements.




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Storyline: I swear it is always the case: when one thing breaks, expect at least two more appliances to decide it is past time to time and make you fork over more money for new and improved versions. At least the companies claim they are new and improved. I have been on the fence for a solid year now about getting one of these things, hoping it will keep my wood floors clean while I'm at work. I think I'm too cheap to break down and actually do it. *Laugh*

Spelling/Grammar Issues: No issues.

Description/emotion: The visual of the planks and the Roomba getting stuck was comical. So was the Roomba hiding under the couch and waiting for the exact moment you decide to walk by and it creeps out and knocks you off balance. It sounds scary, and I'm not sure I would appreciate something like that happening.

Overall Impression: Your comedic timing in the midst of all these things going on in your life is impressive. However I must say, that these days, it's almost imperative that you keep a sense of humor because when bad things happen, they tend to happen in rapid succession. It's like the fates lined up and said one slap is not enough, it should come in threes. I don't know, but that's what it feel like anyway, and this story leans toward proving me right!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: The California school system leaves much to be desired in this short story of a mom dealing with the powers that be and a child who has taken it upon themselves to skip off to do some afternoon shopping. Honestly think I'd lose my mind if my children were still in a public school these days. School shootings are out of control and our lawmakers do nothing. Don't even get me started on that subject. *Laugh*

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Description/emotion: I loved how you told the principal what would happen with your daughter from then on. Way to go. And I agree with you about the way things were done when we were in high school. Those entitled kid today are clueless about the way the world works, and they only have their parents to blame, honestly. In 7th grade, I was in a Catholic school and saw the teacher toss a kid and his desk out the damn window for spouting off. Having a teacher sit there and tolerate the abuse, although I'm assuming there was some discipline for that student later, is beyond me.

Overall Impression: Another great story, reminding this generation of how things worked, and the stark contrast to how they work now and teachers lose everything and kids think they are the ones in charge.




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Storyline: Moving to Wyoming was an experience right from the beginning. From the Texas winter you were familiar with to a new Wyoming winter hell, for lack of a better word. I've read plenty about their extreme winters to know it's best to stay put if a storm is brewing.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: As always, great descriptions. It was easy to connect with you through the worry and the tricks your mind played, sending you from one horrible scenario to the next in record speed, all while drinking some vodka on top of it. I will say that I like this husband, as he seems to be a stand up guy, though things might not work out the way he thinks they will, props to him for giving it the old college try.

Overall Impression: Wow this was a memorable move for certain. That is one determined man you have, returning after moving into the condo just to get that Suburban to your place. I liked that he made friends with the hotel cook, who helped him out, to police officers as they did their best to get that vehicle up the hill and went out of their way. You do not find this kind of unwavering help in the big city, at least not around here. Locked out, huh? In the winter with just a robe. Webbie, you are just a doll.




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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm Review


Storyline: This author often moves around the country. Leaning in Texas and learning how to make hot wings became a must, and this dish moved with her from one state to the next, with the same results. It becomes a feeding frenzy, an addiction where everyone is welcome, and once the word is out, they come in droves to experience this delightful spicey dish.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: It's great that you look back on this with fond memories, wondering if those you'd dished up the hot wings to over the years also have. They certainly should! I cannot wrap my mind around how big and heavy that cast iron skillet must be to accommodate two pounds of chicken wings. Good job with the visual aids and aromas you described. That made it easy to close my eyes and picture it and inhale that peppery aroma as it wafted its way outside to the waiting army of hungry schoolers.

Overall Impression: I liked that this became a Friday staple for everyone. Even though the move went from Texas to Wyoming and then California, everyone agreed on those Buffalo wings. This is what shows the kids that home is where family is, no matter where you're living. Great job.




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Storyline: Vacationing in California leads to a scary, albeit funny story that can be told for decades to come. Finding humor in the most unexpected places is always a good thing, and this was great. The family on a fascinating vacation, cameras in hand, ready to see the sites and then something inevitably goes wrong. Isn't that always the way of it.

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Description/emotion: I had to feel bad for the father chasing after his teen who didn't get off the trolley car, screaming obscenities, running as fast as possible, though it was comical too. You made it easy to picture that scene with the daughter's horrified reaction to realizing the rest of the family had gotten off.

Overall Impression: I am enjoying these little tidbits from family life and how you manage to make the best of what could be really scary situations. The reactions fo the family are spot-on, especially the grandmother in tears. I've been there myself with one of these situations where they think their loved one will never return, or horrible things are about to happen. Solid advice for the rest of us when it comes to family vacations and staying alert and together. Nice job!



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Storyline: Isn't it great when true life is ten times better than fiction? Taking your mother to Reno for her first foray into gambling bliss is serious business.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: I don't even know where to begin with all the fantastic gems you laid out in this short story. From begging magical monsters to granny from hell to a giddy, giggling grandmother. This piece did not disappoint it went beyond what I thought a five-hundred-word short story would entail. This would be great in a longer piece.

Overall Impression: I see this kind of craziness in what we call 'the scratchers' at work. You know, the people who come in with a hundred dollars and start buying scratch-off, go out, scratch, come back, and buy more, never truly cashing in winnings, just giving it back to the lottery Gods. Let's face it: no one gets ahead in the gambling frenzy. I could picture you snatching that bucket of nickels from your mom and hightailing out of the casino. This is a family story that will shock the younger ones as they try to wrap their minds around the woman they know and love turning into a gambling demon. The comedy you promised was top notch!




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