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Review of FEBRUARY  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem, sometimes acrostic poems can be kind of silly or sappy. I liked what the poet chose to highlight in this one about February. From Punxsutawney Phil to valentines day. It might have been cool having a reference to leap year or lack of leap year.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
From the first line, I thought this was going to be a sad story about the loss of love, but the story took a different off-ramp. Instead this is the story of a life turned around. Of making the choice not to think of oneself as old and used up just because a marriage failed. It becomes inspirational as the symbol of that failure pays for a whole new life.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting start to something. I would be interested in both the backstory and the answer of where this was going. The idea of a woman president is kind of cool I can only wonder how she left the presidency. Perhaps in dishonor? Perhaps it was just by being what is considered a good president when it is a man. Possibly both at once.
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Review of Trans/action  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Short, but significant. I can't tell if robin volunteered for this conversion for sure or not. I have to wonder if there is an opposite group offering a change from male to female it would be only fair that some guys make that transition, fair and far more traumatic. I am not sure they could handle it.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh, so sweet. I loved this one. It is so romantic. She gives up everything to be with him. It is just so... cute. The characters are perfect. I would love to read more about the "Immortal" culture. It is just so cool a worldbuilding concept. It takes the whole magic is just technology we don't understand yet to the next logical step.
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Review of Serpent lies...  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is highly esoteric. It really questions reality and dreams for me. It seems to crawl through nightmares in places and then back to the safety of dawn. It makes me feel like writing poetry. It gets my thoughts crawling through poetic places. Highly inspiring poem for me.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It was a nice puzzle It didn't take very long but it was fun. The words were good choices and I think the puzzle was not too crowded. It was rather pleasant. Just about the right size for a quick solve. That is good when I have a lot of other things to read and review.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Okay, so in your post you requested help with editing for POV. Here you go. I quoted the paragraphs where you slipped into first person.

I also cited a place where you switched into present tense inappropriately.

This review is more detailed than I usually do but you had your requests.

Overall I liked the characters and had hopes for their successful completion of their mission. I am sad that it wasn't an ideal ending but... The characters were fairly well rounded and I felt their personalities as I was reading. Good job. I hope this review helps you sufficiently.




broke into first person-
"Absolutely." Like a pawn on the chessboard, I could only hope to advance or hold my ground. "I wouldn't go there with a hundred of us."

The click of the cobblestones on the wooden wheels kept time for his incantations as I checked the wards for stealth and refreshed the fading runes. I held up my due diligence. Yet the greatest defense would be the walls of our great college, far from the diabolical mess that duty had us heading toward. The time to drop out drew nigh; if only my beloved could see it. "Elisha, do you not worry that we might be in the wrong?"


As our mule pulled us toward Viseki, the cart swayed to and fro.

I followed her gaze into the storm clouds above, scratched about in my pockets for my mage glasses.


From the alarm on her face, I had no time to interpolate the tune or guess the spell's nature. I put on my glasses to see a giant batlike monster spitting venom in our direction before a giant wave of clouds blew in to swallow it whole, venom and all.

She smiled and patted me on the shoulder as well. "And a terrible one if you're thorgabent."

That my oaths fade to lies. "Nothing of consequence."


I pulled the mule to a stop. "Hail, Urgan Guard. I come in peace."


In the great room, only a few doors down, a piano sang greetings to me as it gave voice to the magnificent ghost of my beloved.



switched up tenses-
The law of two; and there she had Voltaire. He rarely bothered to argue with Elisha, even when she had no piano within reach–because she always has the right idea. Yet this time, her logic inexorably led to doom. "Gian has vicious power–"



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Review of Chats  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cute story I can see a precocious child asking this question and dragging their mom down lines of conversation that could so easily turn out inappropriate. The dialog is fun and believable. The characters are strong and entertaining. The mom squeaks by though in the end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I have heard horror stories about going to catholic school. I really feel for the people who survived this experience. My kindergarten teacher was like everyone's kindly old grandmother she even baked banana or applesauce bread for us to enjoy during winter and spring break. I know I had it easy.
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for entry "Aim, Misfired
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is an interesting fairly trippy poem. It is all over the place but manages to remain united in one theme. I enjoyed it. I wish I could hold a poem together in a theme for as many lines as this author has. I am impressed and pleased with the result.
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Review of Butterflies  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I wish I could have had these feelings when I was younger. I couldn't let myself because of my family's beliefs. I had friends I felt more about than just friendship. I didn't really find happiness like this within myself because of these feelings until I met my partner. With her love was just automatic.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love the way this poem builds the story of a life's dream fulfilled step by step. It reminds me of the club in our town. Unfortunately, it burned down, and rather than rebuilding they sold the land to developers it is going to be high-class apartments now.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, what a sweet kitty. It really cares for its human despite the self-centered nature of being a cat. After tearing him down for his human inadequacy she builds him back up with a nuzzle and a purr. Seafood medley seems to be a flavor popular with cats it's what mine ask for too.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Omg! You really captured the essence of a cat. They so rule the world but let us believe we are in charge. They just don't want to open their own cans of cat food. If they really cared about us they would learn to use the toilet rather than repeatedly soiling our dirty laundry.
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Review of Hello from Helen  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing. All of us have our own reasons why we write, and why we do or do not post our writings. Many of us can sympathize with having a job we love but that hates us back. Unfortunately stress is universal. I love the way that you have combined all of these truths about yourself and shared them with us.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel for you. It is sad that you weren't gifted with that special someone who would encourage you to follow your passions. The world is full of boxes and too often people are excluded because they don't fit the fine print of the label on the box. And yet everyone admonishes people to think outside the box. It is a paradox.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This a good poem that clearly describes the comfort and strength of your faith. It is a good advertisement for God's peace and joy. It leaves the reader to understand that having God as a focus doesn't mean bad things won't happen just that you will never face them without his support.
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Review of Smile for Life  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very yellow poem for me with daffodils and baby chicks and lilies and all I usually think of spring as green this was a nice change of pace and reminds me that even when seasons are associated with a color it doesn't mean that there isn't a rainbow worth of colors going on.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem seems to be a warning between intention and the actual act performed. It argues it doesn't matter what you say if you do the opposite. It also argues that it doesn't matter what you intend or plan to do if you don't get off your butt and make an attempt.
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Review of Invalid Item  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (1.5)
This is a surprisingly good one-star poem. I can tell you were trying to write a really bad poem but I think you did a terrible job of it. You let your inner poet out too much while writing it. It makes too much sense I might just have to displease you and give you two stars.
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Review of Caged  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can see the worry and concern of a close friend for someone too willing to submit to captivity rather than existing in the world where they could come to harm. I feel for the friend, from outside you can see that the cage is causing as much harm as the outside world would. I wish I had advice.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It seems like a pretty good poem. It is kind of sappy. I don't think I ever felt that way about anyone but then I haven't ever been separated from my partner. I do think she is being pretty clingy. And it seems to be kinda stereotypical of a woman pining for a man like she isn't whole without one.
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for entry "~ My Black-Out Poem ~
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love it. I attempted this form too, but I used strikeout for my blackout words and the words I used were a size bigger font in bold.i think the way you did it was prettier. It is an elegant solution to what can look like a big mess.the actual words you used were inspiring. Great poem!
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Review of Pubs Closed  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice clean limerick. Still, it manages to have a less than pg twist to it. promoting drinking and all. Damn corona for taking all the fun out of St. Patrick's day. Corona has taken the fun out of almost everything, how much fun can you have when you can't even stick your tongue out at people anymore.
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