This is a review by Sweet Honesty The views expressed here are only my opinion. The purpose is to give support, encouragement and (hopefully) useful advice and is my way of trying to give back to our wonderful virtual community here at WDC. I promise to try and review your work with the respect and consideration I would like in reviews whilst still pointing out mistakes or any ways I think your work can be improved - please respect my review? That said please understand that I am no expert and can only give my opinion.
I read your piece and clearly you have something interesting to say. There needs to be a little more work done in how you present it. It is just a matter of words and placement and that will come with time. I found that reading the poetry of our WDC partners is a great help in that. I think you are on the road to discovery and am sure you will find it with time. Thank you for sharing this with me. It was a good read. You have a gift. write on Sweet Honesty.
This is such an enjoyable read. It is well written and hooks the reader right from the start. Spelling and grammar are faultless and the story evokes strong feelings on Mother's Day. You have the gift of the Blarney as you well know. Lovely story thank you for sharing. Write on.
This poem is so real. You have made your daughter sound as though she were speaking. You have a wonderful gift. I sense that somewhere in this piece is a story and if so bring it out because you have the ability to tell it. Write on. Sweet Honesty
I recognize so much of what you are saying. You tell a tale of great loss and your images evoke my own memories of loosing someone who I treasure to this day. The structure in this piece is good and grammar and spelling are also good. You picked a good title. Just keep in mind my friend, you do not need to fear forgetting because that will never ever happen. Those memories will get sweeter and sweeter with time. treasure them because no one can take them away. You write well. Write on. Sweet Honesty
This is a beautiful piece. Excellent images, well written, and I was hooked all the way through. Spelling and grammar perfect. A beautiful story and so well told. The gift of writing is yours. Write on. Sweet Honesty
What a lovely piece this is. It is well written and the refrain is clear as is the structure. Spelling and grammar are flawless. This poem evokes feelings long stored away for me. Lovely walk back to a sweet time long ago. Thank you.
Sweet Honesty
How special this piece is. Clear to see a very special love. Your ability to relay the moment was excellent. Carried me right there with you. Good images and clearly stated. No spelling or grammar that I could find to be corrected. Good job.
Write on Sweet Honesty
This poem evokes a feeling of serenity and had a very calming effect on me. It is well written. Good structure and images. I am not a pro but this was a fine read. Write on. Sweet Honesty
Your confliction is apparent. This is a good piece. Good images and feeling. I thank you not only for this poem but for being there for us representing our country. Coming back home after what you lived had to be so difficult. Best to you on getting your life back you write well. Write On. Sweet Honesty
Please take note these are only my suggestions and opinions and I mean no offense by them. This story was done with a great deal of sorrow. I could feel it in every line. You told it beautifully. Grammar and spelling were excellent. I was a little confused by the last paragraph. Again, this is my opinion but I would have put it back up in the context of the accident after the throwing back of the heads in laughter. I would have ended this with the same line I opened with. What are we doing tomorrow? That is just me. Please do not think that makes your less for my opinion because you are gifted with your writing and you tell a story that held my interest. Thank you Write on Sweet Honesty......
I stand in ovation to your voyage through and out of Hell. Only someone who has lived it can say it so perfectly. You are a gifted writer. Your structure is excellent and I can easily identify with your story. I too have lived my life with major imperfections and you expressed my feeling perfectly. Thank you. I look forward to reading you other works. Write on
Sweet Honesty
This was a most interesting read. Your ability to tell a story is wonderful. I think your personal feelings came through and this reader could feel your pain. Your presentation was excellent with a couple of excellent little inserts like your moldy black feet, nice touch. You have a wonderful gift and can only say do not waste it. Keep on writing. Thank you for this unusual trip. Write on .... Sweet Honesty
This was a wonderful read. You held my attention throughout. With the gift that you have of storytelling I feel unqualified to rate this. Your use of metaphors and your descriptions of all are amazing. I can not even guess how long it took for this story to jell into what it is. Thank you so much. I look forward to reading other material which you have put your pen to. Write On Sweet Honesty.
This is truly a wonderful piece of poetry. You come across with an impact and leave the reader breathless. You are a gifted poet keep on writing. Sweet Honesty
I am a fairly new reviewer so please understand this is my opinion and like you I know I will get better in time.You have a wonderful imagination and your story was original and interesting. Had a little trouble following in a couple of places as the story took some unusual turns when least expected but that sometimes happens when the ideas come so quickly. You have a story tellers gift and I can tell you enjoy what you are doing. Do not give up. Write on. Sweet Honesty
Your poem was an excellent read. It was clear and spoke of familiar emotions to all of us. I also wrote of a first kiss but I was only 12 years old and most of your description escaped me, but as an adult now it clearly defines the feeling that I felt at t he time. Beautifully said. Write on. Sweet Honesty
You are a gifted writer and I enjoyed this read. Your write from your soul and I can clearly feel your emotion in every word. I look forward to reading other works by you. I am fairly new at writing but you have my admiration. Write On Sweet Honesty
Your poem was a real thought provoking piece. How often we are in the presence of people who just get it and it escapes us till they are not around any longer.. I identified with your loss and truly understood what you were saying. Somehow I know you have been there. Thank you Sweet Honesty
That was a beautiful read. It moves along at a good pace and it was so very real in every way. I found myself living in the moment of the kid in his new room. The method of reaching the unique find and the sweet results held me right till the last line. Thank you for a lovely trip. Write on my friend.... Sweet Honesty
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging.
The title is true to the theme of the poem.
The poem is a story told with a great deal of sadness and the poetry sings it clearly. THe darkness of a life due to losses and time is sometimes very difficult to put into words but you have managed to do so with great success.
You paint a vivid picture of a lonely soul but somehow I did not get depressed as it is clear there is a great deal of poetic beauty which still remains. There is a nice depth of feeling.
It is clear you are a writter of the kind of poetry which makes one think as they read. You have a gift keep writting.
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