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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I was attracted to this item after encountering it because I am overweight, and am currently trying to lose weight. I have been somewhat successful so far, but I still have a ways to go. The character you wrote about seems to be a lot fatter than me, but I hope there can be hope for someone like that.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion, maybe you could offer some hope for her and have her trying to lose weight, and maybe imply that being fat isn't her destiny.
What I liked: I liked your brutal honesty in your exploration of this overweight woman, you seems to be honest about your observations without being intentionally cruel.