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Review of Bike Riding  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a humorous account of your experience with bike riding after many years without riding, but I think you were a little bit hard on yourself. There are a lot of us who can relate to you. I'm 40 and overweight, so I can see things from your point of view.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I really liked the fact that you got out and exercised, you should do it more often!
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Review of Before 8 November  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a well-written love poem, it really captured the feeling of two people in love. The cadence of the rhyming words was really nice.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you mentioned the different months starting with November, and ending with March. Mentioning March toward the end of the poem seems to give hope, since that is the month Spring starts.
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Review of More About Me  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Sherri, it's an honor to read something from your port! I agree with your view of life, I'm glad you're such a positive person. Your Simply Positive group has made a difference in the lives of everyone in this group.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: Follow your heart and reach for the stars is a good motto, do you mind if I adopt it from this day forward as my own personal motto? I'll never forget those words after doing this review, and I consider it an honor to be online friends with such a positive person as you!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute and funny little item, I'm glad it was featured in the comedy newsletter. With all the seriousness in the world, it's nice to see a story like this to make me chuckle.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I like how I can relate to this, typos have aggravated me, also. I think most writers can relate to your dilemma.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You presented an interesting concept, freedom in exchange for an exceptional gift. The idea seems original to me, and interesting. I hope you are able to turn it into a novel.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I like the originality of your concept and I like how interesting it is!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a sad tale of true love, I'm glad you found true love, but it's sad that he died. You expressed yourself well, the way you told of how he sent electricity through your body.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how strongly you felt true love for your one and only. I hope a woman loves me that intensely some day!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about working in an office environment. I had a job in an office once, and some of what you wrote reminded me of that brief experience. It sounds like you really know what you're doing, and were able to write about it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the positive message you wove into your poem, it was very encouraging.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a nice inspirational poem about writing. I don't drink coffee any more, but I can relate to how it can be important to some writers.

Errors/Suggestions: I had a problem with this line: written by an frustrated author I think "an" should be replaced with "a" instead.

What I liked: I liked how positive this poem was, it's somethign most writers can relate to.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a decent little poem about the Joker. I liked the way you made it rhyme, and I'm glad it was about the Joker from DC comics, because I'm familiar with him. Usually I have a hard time with poetry, but yours was easy to understand.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked the way you made this poem ryhme, those are my favorite poems.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: You had an interesting life, being the last graduating class of the 20th century. I always marvel when I hear of someone who graduated high school, I dropped out, so it seems awesome to me when someone says they graduated. Congratulations to you!

Errors/Suggestions: In several places you mention that the year 2000 was the start of a new century and a new millennium, but you are wrong. The 21st century began on January 1st, 2001. The year 2000 was the last year of the 20th century. Think of it like this: the years one through one hundred were the first century; the second century didn't start on January 1st, 100, it started on January 1st, 101. By the same token, the year ending in two zeros in the last two digits of the year is always the last year of the century, the first year of a new century always starts with a one at the end. (You should edit this, and state that you were the last graduating class of the 20th century, and not the first graduating class of the 21st century.)

What I liked: I liked how you discovered you wanted to go to film school too late and had to go to community college instead; I recently changed my major in college and I will be an art major. I just wish I had discovered that sooner, so I can kind of relate to your situation.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was funny, dogs can be interesting animals. I felt sorry for your other dog, it seems like she was bullied by the newer dog.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the photos of the dogs, it helped to be able to see what they look like.
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Review of Two Mimes  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting concept with a tragic surprise ending. You did a good job with this poem, I like how you made it rhyme and tell a story at the same time.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the twist in the story when we find out the truth about the mimes.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very well-written piece of fiction, you really seem to be able to express yourself gracefully.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: The way you wrote with those eloquent words kind of reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe. Your writing style is kind of similar to his.
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Review of The Brave  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very patriotic poem of the sacrifices made by men and women who choose to serve in the armed forces. You went into some detail about the hardships they endure, and what the United States offers to other countries that are in need.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you wholeheartedly support our troops.
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Review of Faerie Magic  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I liked this poem, I have a friend who believes in faeries and I think he would like this poem. You seemed to take a teaching approach to things having to do with faeries, and you did a nice job explaining your world. As a student, I felt like I was getting informed and it seemed that you knew a great deal of what you wrote about.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked the no-nonsense approach you used to describe faeries; you didn't doubt that they were real, you simply presented their culture as fact, and I liked that.
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Review of Ancient Enemies  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story of why dogs and cats fight each other. The theory that it stems from the lions versus the hyenas is an interesting one, I've never thought of it that way before.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like acrostics, the way you spelled out "Hyena VS Lion" made this much more entertaining to me than if it had been a regular poem. I also like the theory that you propose, that the reason dogs and cats fight is because it can be traced back to the conflict in Africa between the hyenas and the lions. I'm also glad the dogs finally got their revenge.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a touching and heartbreaking story of a young autistic boy struggling to survive in a warzone.

Errors/Suggestions: he flung them towards the street
In the above sentence, you should use "toward" with American writing. In England, they use towards. (Ignore this if you are British or Canadian.)

illuminating a world of a world of rubble and wreckage.
In this sentence, you repeated "a world of" twice, I think you made a mistake.



What I liked: I liked the ending, I'm glad the boy finally found happiness.
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Review of Forgiveness  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a poem I can personally relate to, because I am bothered daily by memories of people who did me wrong many years ago. If I could just let it go and forgive them, like the protagonist in your poem, I would be better off.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the resolution of this poem/story, a lot of the time, someone will tell a story like this an there is no solution, but I'm glad you found yours.
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Review of Deep Well  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I have trouble interpreting poetry sometimes, but the sub-title helped me a little bit. I gess you were talking about the inner self getting renewed by the process of life. I still had a little trouble understanding it, because poetry isn't my thing, so I gave you five stars as I do with all poems I don't understand. I don't want to lowball you just because I didn't understand it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any technical errors.

What I liked: I like the way you capitalized each line of the poem, not all poets do that.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a heart-warming story of a man's struggle and the answer to his problems. Stories like this are nice because they remind us of the good people in this world, and we should never forget that.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the font you used, and I like how you changed the font to show the note that came with the key. Little touches like this make stories like this seem more professional. I also like the happy ending of this story.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I encountered this poem on the front page, and clicked on it. This was a well-written humorous poem that pokes fun at all races represented in the poem equally; none of the groups made fun of should find offense with this. I think you did a good job keeping cadence and making the poem rhyme, and the story you told with this poem was very original; never in my life have I encountered anything like this before.

Errors/Suggestions: I don't think I need to point this out, but there were anachronisms. Modern day Mexicans who spoke Spanish didn't exist back then when the ten commandments were written, and the same with the French guy. I realize this poem was meant to be funny, and that things like this aren't important, but I just thought I'd point it out.

What I liked: I like how stereotypes of each race presented here reflected each race equally; if Europeans had been given some slack you could've been accused of racism, but since everyone was made fun of, it was all in good fun.
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Review of The Painting  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You did a good job of obeying the prompt, your story vividly carries the reader back to the past, to the time when the painting was made.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I like the way you made the reader visualize that hillside in the 1800s, and I think it was cool that you included the prompt that this story sprang from. A lot of people write stories based on a prompt, but they fail to include the original prompt for the reader to look at, to understand why the writer wrote the story.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You managed to weave an interesting tale from the prompts you were given. I thought it was interesting that the man tried to help the female protagonist instead of trying to pick up on her. Of course, he was married, but I'm glad he remained faithful to his wife and tried to help the girl.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled Rubik's cube in several places, it isn't supposed to have an "R" in it.

What I liked: I like how seamlessly you wove the prompts into the story without making them seem like they didn't belong. I also like how you mentioned the prompts so the readers have an idea of what you were trying to do.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I'm not going to lie to you, I had trouble interpreting this poem. I'm not a poet, so I don't "get" most poetry I read. As I always do with poems I don't understand, I'm giving you five stars because I don't want to low-ball you by giving you too low of a rating you might not deserve. If this poem was some kind of a metaphor, I'd appreciate it if you'd explain it to me.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled maize, with an "i" it means corn as pronounced by the Native Americans. If you're talking about a maze you're trying to escape from, it is spelled: maze.

What I liked: I liked the way you described your escape attempt, it was full of energy.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a tragic tale of life on the streets. I got the feeling that you knew what you were writing about, as if you had experienced some of what you wrote about.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked the feeling of vicariously experiencing life on the streets from the safety of my home. This was scary and exciting!
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