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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was interesting and dealt with a serious issue, child labor was a real problem at the turn of the 20th century.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but a suggestion would be to provide a link at the bottom of the page telling readers more about the time and setting of this piece.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you described briefly what this story was about.
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Review of Heartbeat  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Love poems are my favorite, and you did an outstanding job using metaphors to describe true love. I hope you were writing about a real person, because you showed a lot of passion.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the variety of metaphors you used to describe love, you kept it interesting! I also like the image that accompanied the text, I feel it added to the composition.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting account of the weather from your own personal experience. With the numbers laid out like that in sequence of triple digit heat, it really brings it home that our world may be getting hotter.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like your dig at Rush Limbaugh, as a democrat I rarely agree with him, and I like the fact that you're spreading awareness of global climate change.
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Review of Empty Tracks  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was certainly an interesting poem, you did a good job of expressing your emotions about the subject of the poem.

Errors/Suggestions: Although this poem rhymed, it seemed to me that the cadence was a little forced in certain places, like you were trying to fit too many or not enough syllables into certain lines.

What I liked: I liked the theme of this poem, it was sad reading about you lamenting the loss of something you loved.
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Review of Dear Gretel  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting concept, pulling a fairy tale character into the modern world. The emotions of Hansel seem genuine, given his extraordinary circumstances.

Errors/Suggestions: In the fourth paragraph, I found this error: I can’t let this little thing holds me back. The word "holds" should not have an "s" at the end.

Also in paragraph four, I found this: every night, they baths with yellow streetlight. I think this would sound better: "Every night, they bathe with yellow streetlight."

Also, this isn't an error, but a suggestion: I was left wondering how Hansel got to another world, and I was wondering if there was a backstory behind this. I think you should have a link at the bottom of the page taking readers to a place where more information is given about how Hansel ended up in the modern world.

What I liked: I liked the fantasy element of this piece, and I thought the concept was interesting, to bring a fairy tale character into the modern world.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about dealing with a family member who has bi-polar disorder. I myself have been diagnosed with a mental illness, so this hits close to home for me. You described your daughter's mood swings with clarity and detail, and your emotional reaction to them.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you chose to deal with mental illness, and I enjoyed your personal perspective on the issue. It is good for more people to be made aware of mentall illness, because it is more common than people realize.
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Review of June 3--Waiting  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting short story inspired by a writing prompt, I liked the fictional milieu you wove together, the people and place seemed incredibly plausible.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I really liked the believability of the characters and the universe you've created for them, Dana seemed very real, and the town she lived in seemed like a real place. All too often I'm pulled out of a story and start thinking about technical details, such as: "I wonder why he chose this theme" or "I wonder why he chose this character quirk as part of his character's character development." With this story, I was pulled into the story and the story didn't let go of me until I was done reading. I felt like I was reading about a real place and a real person. I can't put my finger on exactly what you did right, but you did an excellent job of suspending disbelief.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You used interesting metaphors to describe love in this poem, it was like something that devours a person, then it is like a tsunami that brings relief. I found this poem interesting and beautifully written.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't find any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: You have an outstanding mind for metaphors, some people are good at it and some are not, but you really have a knack for describing things in unique ways.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a really weird story, but strange in a good way; I like stories with magical transformations like this. It's interesting how his day started out ordinarily in his garden, then something miraculous happened.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how the bird behaved and got the man's attention. The transformation sequence was surprising and fascinating.
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Review of Onward  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting snapshot of events in the far-flung future, I enjoy stories about colonizing other worlds, and this story was interesting to me. It would be interesting to read what else happened to these people.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw a place toward the middle of the story where the beginning of a sentence was in bold lettering for no apparent reason.

What I liked: I liked the action when the object flew out of the woman's mouth and damaged the robot's camera. I also liked the setting, an indeterminate time in the distant future.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting piece of prose, I was left wondering if the person who came to you in your dreams was a deceased lover, or someone you knew who was still alive, but far away. The imagery you conveyed was beautiful, it sounded like the dreams you had were pleasant.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. One thing I wondered about, this wasn't a mistake you made, just a thought I had, was why you went to bed so late and got up so early. It would be interesting to me if you could provide more information about that.

What I liked: I liked how romantic your dreams were without being erotic, everything you wrote was in good taste. I also like how detailed you were in accounting your time in bed, you even had the exact hour and minute that the events in your story occurred.
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Review of Will You  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a well-written love poem that was short and to the point, you did a good job of getting your message across. I like love poems like this, I found it very entertaining.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any spelling, punctuation or grammar errors.

What I liked: I liked the theme of this poem, the message of two people coming together and finding true love.
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Review of What's My Name?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This poem went over my head, like a lot of poetry does. My guess is that this story takes place in the afterlife, since there is mention of angels. I apologize for not being better at interpreting poetry.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any spelling, punctuation or grammar errors, but a suggestion I would make is for you to have a link at the bottom of the page taking readers to another page where you explain the meaning of this poem, for those of us who aren't good at interpreting poetry.

What I liked: I liked the sense that there was a situation, conflict, and resolution of conflict. I think you did a good job in that area.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a popular subject for a poem, expressing your feeling of love for the partner you found. You did a good job of expressing your emotions.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no technical errors as far as grammar or punctuation or spelling, but the cadence of this poem seemed a little off in places, as if there were too many syllables in some of the lines.

What I liked: I like vicariously experiencing someone's joy at finding true love through reading a love poem written by them.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting concept you chose to write about, I haven't watched an animal show like the one you decribed in a long time. It's interesting that you made this poem rhyme, I think you did a good job with the cadence of the poem. The words seemed to flow well.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the subject of this poem, you should definitely write about what interests you, because chances are, you'll hit on something that will interest others as well. I also liked the cadence of the poem, you did a good job of incorporating the right amount of syllables into each line.
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Review of Lost From God  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: As far as the theme is concerned, this was a good poem about someone's relationship with God.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors, but the cadence of the poem seemed forced in some areas. It seemed like there were too many syllables in some of the lines.

What I liked: I enjoy religious poems, it's always nice to read of how someone interprets their relationship with God.
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Review of Mistaken Identity  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a well-written horror story, I enjoyed the surprise ending. This was a rather realistic approach to a vampire story, I felt that this vampire character was living in the real world.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the shocker ending, and I also liked not knowing what kind of a story I was reading until the end. I also enjoyed the sense of realism.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is an imaginative concept, I like the fantasy element. This reminds me of some of the ancient legends from different parts of the world, written before a time when people completely understood the ways of the universe or of science; because of this, this story has a certain charm.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the simple charm of this story, and how it didn't try to rationalize itself to fit with our modern understanding of the universe.
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Review of Regret  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: After reading this, I was left wondering if the two of you had met in real life or not. Some lines give the impression that you met, and other lines give the impression that you didn't. It's an interesting poem, if this is a true story, then you have led an interesting life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the idea of two people from across the Ocean communicating with each other, there is something magical about that.
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Review of Doomed  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Wow, this was a truly epic poem, but I'm one of those people who have difficulty interpreting poetry. The imagery you described was beautiful, though I'm unsure of what story you were trying to tell. That is due to my ignorance of poetry, and not because your writing ability was lacking; on the contrary, I think you are a very talented poet.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the imagery and the choice of words you used, it was very skillful!
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Review of Addiction  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about addiction. I can relate to this on a personal level, because I have battled substance abuse for many years.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how I was able to relate to this poem on a personal level. It was all too familiar to a former addict like me.
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Review of Our Moment  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is the most beautiful love sonnet I've ever read on Writing.com, you really managed to convey the love of two people. I've read a lot of love poems here, but none as good as this! I'm interested in knowing who you were writing about, and if you're going to marry that person.

Errors/Suggestions: My only suggestion is to let us know if you are a man writing about being in love with a woman, or a woman writing about being in love with a man. I was just curious about that.

What I liked: This was an epic love sonnet, rivalling the Song of Solomon! You did an outstanding job! This is my favorite love sonnet I've ever read at Writing.com!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story/poem, the theory about death your characters describe is something I've heard before, but you managed to put it beautifully into your own words and explain it in a unique way.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the fact that the girl's father was a scientist, and he tried to explain death in scientific terminology.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute poem told from the perspective of a teenage girl. It was enlightening as well as humorous. It brings back memories of my own teenage years, and shows that as time goes by, teenage girls remain the same. (That's not an insult, just an observation.)

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. A suggestion I have is to have a footnote at the bottom of the page explaining who the author is you mentioned, because I was unfamiliar with her, and I'm sure some of your older readers might be unaware of her, also.

What I liked: I liked some of the things that seemed important to you, like chocolate and cute boys. It showed how innocent teenage girls are, and how the things they desire can be the simple things in life, nothing complicated.
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Review of heeeelp!  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a unique way to ask for gift points and reviews. I thought it was an imaginative approach to describe a fictional scenario to humorously get your point across. You did a good job of describing the place where your protagonist was trapped, I could almost visualize it in my mind and I could see the slimy water running down the rocky walls.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't really see any errors of any kind, other than using too many exclamation marks, but that was a style choice and I'm sure you knew you were breaking a punctuation rule when you were doing it.

What I liked: I liked how I was able to visualize the setting you described. I also like how imaginative this whole set-up was, in an effort to secure gift points from other Writing.com members.
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