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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: These contest entries were interesting and well written. It must've been quite a challenge to write something where the first letter of each word starts with each letter of the alphabet.

Errors/Suggestions: For both entries, when you got to the letter X the words didn't start with X, maybe you could've used X-ray, Xerox, or Xanadu. Just suggesting several words that start with X.

What I liked: I really like the fact that you explained to us what this contest was about. A lot of people don't take the time to explain contest entries as well as you did.
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Review of Dark Spaces  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: The theme of this poem is familiar to me, I grew up in an abusive home and I can recall the hurtful words my mother spoke to me, and how she wanted my forgiveness afterwards.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how I was able to relate to this poem on a personal level.
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Review of ONE DAY AN ANGEL  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, I like your interpretation of heaven. The description was very beautiful. The afterlife sounded like an exotic place the way you described it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the theme of this poem, writing about being an angel. I found this to be very uplifting.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting and cute little poem about the tooth fairy. I thought it was imaginative and creative.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors, but it seemed to me that the cadence was a little off in places. It seemed that some lines had more syllables than lines they were rhyming with, but that can be easily corrected with a little editing.

What I liked: I like how this brought back memories of when the tooth fairy visited me when I was a kid. This was a fun topic to read about.
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Review of Lilac Time  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very positive image of an older couple together, it makes me hope for my own future that I'll find someone who will love me well into my old age.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you focused on the plants in the garden to symbolize the beauty and strength of the old couple's relationship. I also think you showed wisdom by saying there was no need to speak, because the couple have known each other for so long that it is no longer necessary.
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Review of Sin City  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a disturbing short story, but done in an excellent way, considering that it was written for the horror genre. You did a good job of getting us inside the head of the madman protagonist.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any techncial errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how this reminded me of Hannibal Lecter from "Silence of the Lambs." Although I don't normally read items from the horror genre, I enjoyed this story a lot. Once again you have written something that I found truly awesome.
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Review of Lingering Dreams  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautiful love poem written from the perspective of a person who is longing to be with someone they have not yet met, the love of their life. The cadence of the poem was melodic and carried well, rhyming poems are my favorite type of poetry.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way this poem applies to me, I'm still single and I believe the person who I am meant to be with is out there somewhere waiting for me.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting discussion, I think you're right, that there will always be people who will complain regardless of how good or bad a situation is. This essay described a type of person that we're all familiar with, the chronic complainer.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled Walmart, I'm pretty sure it only has one letter "L" in it.

What I liked: I like your observation that some people are very optimistic most of the time, that's generally how I am, but I do have my bad days just like you do.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an ingenious sword and sorcery tale, and well told, too. You made the villagers seem like real people, and this world they lived in seemed real, as well.

Errors/Suggestions: This story is listed as fanfiction, but I would be interested in knowing what series this is based on, whether it is Dungeons & Dragons, or some other fantasy world such as Tolkien's Lord of the Rings saga.

What I liked: I like how you solved the problem as a writer of where Jonathan should strike with the sword, given that the hide of the dragon is inpenetrable. Striking the eye was a good choice to solve this dilemma.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed reading your four entries in the WDC Survivor contest, I feel that they were all well-written. Each one was different from the others, and each one stood out. Good luck with this contest, I hope you win!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any techncial errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked reading about Piper, it seemed like she was a real person. It seems that you must've done a lot of research for the story about the bandits in Africa, that was well-done.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an epic poem about the Native American people and how they and their land were exploited. I am also Native American, Apache, Pueblo and Cherokee. I learned at a young age what the Indians went through, and poems like yours do a good job of informing people of other races of what really happened.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the image your poem evoked in my mind, of an old Indian warrior out on the plains on his horse.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting short story full of drama, it's amazing that you could establish so much action in such a short story. You did a great job.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors, but I have a suggestion. I wasn't sure if the woman died while saving the child's life, hence the words "Angels toom me home." I know you probably don't want to change any words in your story because of the word count, but maybe you could provide a link at the bottom of the page and explain to your readers whether the woman survived or not.

What I liked: I liked the act of heroism of the woman saving the child, I like reading of things like that.
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Review of "A Man Among Men"  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an excellent poem about a son's love for his father. You did a good job mentioning how brave and honest he was.

Errors/Suggestions: I think for the cadence to be better, the first line should be changed to: "He cast a long shadow wherever he walked" instead of "He cast a long shadow where he walked" Also, I think the cadence of this poem is off just a little bit. If you could adjust a word here or there, you might make it flow off the tongue a little better.

What I liked: I liked how you worked it into the poem that he served during World war Two. The men of that generation were truly brave and patriotic. My grandfather was a WW2 veteran, he served in the Marine Corps. Just out of curiosity, what branch did your father serve in?
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I was born in 1971, so I didn't live through the Kennedy assassination, so it's interesting to vicariously experience it through the eyes of someone who was alive at that time. My dad was born in 1943, so he is close to your age. I think Kennedy was a great president, he got us to the moon, and I have often pondered traveling back in time to try to stop Oswald on that fateful day.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you took something tragic that happened in your lifetime and you did something positive and creative by writing a poem about it.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story of how you got your nickname. It's sometimes interesting how someone came up with a certain nickname.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors. It would be interesting to know how you did in the contest this story was entered into.

What I liked: I like your nickname, it sounds cool. True stories like this are more interesting than fiction.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I didn't understand what mental issues the female protagonist in your short story had, but it was entertaining and humorous to read the results of her bizarre behavior.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I thought it was funny that the woman in your story was smearing spaghetti sauce all over the walls, I really liked it and thought you had an interesting tale here. It's also amazing that you were able to write this with so few words, I know that is a difficult feat.
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Review of FRED AND COCO  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story, I can relate to this because my grandparents had small dogs that I loved as a kid.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you described the dogs' behavior. Some dogs are really possessive, just like Coco is with her toys. I thought her attitude was kind of funny, because I've known dogs who reacted like that over the years.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was interesting, and I'm assuming it's a true story. It illustrates the five-year-old mind, and shows us a segment of a child's life that most of us can relate to.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I like how honest this story is in remembering what it was like being a kid, and how accurately that age is conveyed in the story.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a cute story of two wild animals who were adopted by a nice woman and raised together.

Errors/Suggestions: I spotted this error in the first paragraph: the sun to be up i the air again. I spotted this mistake in the second paragraph: Th yarn I spotted this mistake in the final parageraph: uneven ground made t difficult to move quickly. Also, as a suggestion, you should introduce the two animal characters in a way so that the reader knows which one is the raccoon, and which one is the fox. I was kind of confused at first.

What I liked: I liked the life the animals lived while in the care of the woman who adopted them, because it was in sharp contrast to the struggle they went through during the storm that orphaned them.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story about someone with a young child. I have so many friends and family members with young kids that I can relate to this somewhat. This story was so realistic I wasn't sure if it was fiction or non-fiction, you did a good job, Leger!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors.

What I liked: I liked the innocence of the young two-year-old, I could picture something like this happening in real life.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an informative essay with good advice, promoting ourselves is an important tool for getting recognized. I've followed some of the advice written here.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors, and although I tried I couldn't think of too many additional things you could mention, other than to link here from Deviantart for writers like myself who are also artists.

What I liked: I like the advice about getting business cards made up with our URL on it, I never thought of that! Very excellent advice.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting true story of your struggle in life, and how you grew from it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but you might want to list the symptoms of rheumatoid arthritis for those of us who are ignorant, so we can know more about it and learn what it's really like.

What I liked: I like the fact that you changed your outlook on life because of your experience. That correlates with the inner struggle that characters in screenplays are supposed to go through. Screenwriting books advise aspiring screenwriters to give characters an inner struggle, and to have those characters grow and learn throughout the story, so they have a different perspective at the end of the film than they had at the beginning. I think it's interesting that your struggle in life helped you to grow, learn, and change in a similar way.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story, describing a newbie who is just learning about Writing.com as if it were a real place where the WDC members were physically gathered together. This was very creative and very well done!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you made Writing.com seem like something out of a Harry Potter novel. Great job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an honest account of an American's reaction to trying an Australian delicacy. It's kind of amazing to me that you can eat liver but you can't eat vegemite; I can't stand liver, so I probably wouldn't be able to stomach vegemite, either!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how brave you were for trying vegemite, and I like how honest you were in admitting that you don't like it.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this to be a delightful and informative poem about vegemite! I came across your poem from Nancy's article she wrote that you have linked to. Before I reviewed her item, I decided to read and review yours first.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how your poem informed as well as entertained, I didn't know vegemite was made from yeast.
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