I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge during this week:
|Will This World Go On? (13+)|
Wondering about the world's end, or are there ages yet to come? Are we a future stone age?
#1898112 by Fi
Impressions: I really like this poem. It is filled with deep questions posed as a very viable dilemma that this world has come to know. Whenever we think of world's end, we sometimes commit to acts of war. But this poem tells it like it is and is more candid and believable. More so, the earth will probably go down in fire or rain. And so often, humans have a duty to uplift each other in doing acts of what I would like to call Green, to honor Earth Day, so that these questions you speak of when you talk about yourself in the first person and ask the rhetorical age-old mysteries about what comes first before what comes next for us. I am impressed. It is nice effective poem.
Grammar,Spelling, Style: Your punctuation and lineage is fine. Your spelling excellent. I like the style even though it is a bit stark. You are giving alot here, and there are enough lines for you to do that in. It's quite curiously done and very clever. I like your graphics as a product of the style of this Quilna poem.
Suggestions: None. It is a good poem as I had found it under the genre "Environment".
Final comment to contend with: I just just picture you, the heroine, gazing out the window, with your hand on your cheek, lost in "Wonder". The examination of one's conscience comes across in a good way and finds us asking ourselves: what do we, the readers, also think about when the end comes.