Hi Dr. MC Gupta,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the wonder of children. I don't have any myself, but I remember the curiosity and wonder of childhood. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi princessthai,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a woman who dates but prefers to be left along. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. There is an unusual rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi ForeverNightmare,
This is a fantastic essay. The title indicates that it is a tribute, and the reader is anxious to hear more about the person it is about. They will begin to read immediately. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on your topic. They will read to the last word. You have written a beautiful tribute to your late wife. The reader is delighted as the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use and emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi Queen Kee,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The story is about someone who has a major revelation on a walk in a highway. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1) You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Queen Kee,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of obsession and frenzy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone is compelled to have a person they know in their life almost to the point of obsession and insanity. The reader is wondering if harm will come to either person in the poem because of the feelings of the speaker. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Annaliese,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens as Mimi and Elizabeth are just arriving at Mike's home. The reader is wondering what the purpose of the visit is. They will begin to read to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They get completely involved in the relationships of the characters and want to more about them. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Chris,
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with X having bad dreams. The reader is wondering what has brought this on. They will read on to find out the answer to this question and more about X. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are immersed in wondering how these young soldiers will adjust to their new instructor. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Rodney,
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with a description of what the main character is doing in the moment. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the main character and the chapter. They will continue to read to find out more. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters are plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what can happen when you have diverse interests. I like to do so many things and enjoy many aspects of life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi SandraLynn,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will enjoy their drive. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a woman observes many things when she takes a drive in a transport truck. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is full developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and she comes across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, an it is well done and realistic. Paul speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Dave,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Jake's team will do in his last game. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a baseball player who plays the last game of his career. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi SomaSilver,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and full of cynicism. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is sorry for the speaker. They seem to find no joy hope in life. They will read to the last word to see if the speaker will find the good side of life. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Just Jae,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is one of anticipation and anxiety. It takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if this group will successfully ambush the old man's campsite. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a group of people trying to raid a campsite. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
Hi RodneyGray,
This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description of the weather and the main character's mood. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail is vivid and detailed. You have set up the main characters are plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make and you intend to make it. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. I have actually paid attention to politics and what is going on the world the past few years. This poem reminds me of when I started that. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Thankful Sonali,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is one of regret. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what the speaker decided. The poem is about someone who regrets never learning to stand on their own two feet. They will read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi KadenK0ker,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with worry and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Edward will get away with his stolen goods. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a thief who gets caught up in finding other thieves. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Richard,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about taking life as it comes and enjoying whatever you can in it. I view life exactly like this. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Tim,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about victims of a fires who have to find other homes and rebuild their live. I am so sorry for these people as I read. I hope they will find safety and a way to build a new future. I read to the last word to find out if this happened. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Skurpio,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is aggressive and filled with apprehension and worry. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Shannon will become aware of the danger that awaits her. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who is being stalked while worrying about her missing husband. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi Scotty1615,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone wishing they could be closer to the moon as the blue moon rises. I love the moon. It has such a mysterious quality to it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi ForgottenDreams,
This is a fantastic synopsis. The title is the title of the novel you are working on. It is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in this synopsis or the novel. They will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the synopsis without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the synopsis. They will read to the last word. You are outlining for your reader the novel you have been working on. The reader is delighted with the look they get at your thought process behind the writing. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the synopsis tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
Hi J,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem a man is injured but is prevented from slipping into depression by a dog his wife included in their family. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Girzon,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is slightly annoyed. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Kellie will make a good life for herself and her daughter. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who can't get rid of the annoying, troubling people in her life. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)the girls wanted anger.-Should be "the girls wanted anger from."
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
Hi HollyMerry,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is mocking. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone rejoicing in someone else's pain over the end of a relationship. I am wondering why the speaker is so full of malice for the person they are talking about. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works very well in this poem and you have handled it excellently. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The meter is consistent from line to line. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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