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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Redtowrite !

Thanks for your entry in my contest, "Spidey's Weekly Poetry Contest [ASR]
This is my review for your entry, "I Listen for Words no Longer Heard [E]

Poetry Mechanics
Theme:

Ah, writer's block! One to which most of us, sadly, can relate. I think you've done very well here to describe the feeling, and I like that there's also a story behind it, too. Nicely done!


Imagery:

Impressive imagery! I particularly loved this line:

a festival of metaphors

Each stanza of the poem contained great imagery which made the poem a joy to read!


Form:

No strict form that I could see. Most of your stanzas contain five lines (with the first containing six). For me, unrhyming lines worked well here, focusing my attention on the great imagery instead of following a strict rhythm. (I sometimes find rhythms distracting, so I think it was a wise choice for this poem)


Tone:

I could feel a definite, personal tone here. The speaker is describing the emotions that are connected with writer's block in a personal way, but I think in a way, too, that makes it easy for the reader to identify with the speaker and the issue at hand.


Flow:

The poem flows very well, due, I think, to your choice of free or blank verse. For me, it focused my attention on the words themselves and the images they conveyed. Good choice!


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

travel tear filled pulsing veins
I think "tear filled" should be *Right* tear-filled



Title/Rating/Genres

Great title and intro! They definitely caught my eye and made me want to read the poem.

Your ratings and genres are also very well-chosen.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* I had a difficult time figuring out exactly what happens in this story. The speaker was once prolific in his/her writing, then someone enters their life, and that causes writer's block? I wasn't sure what happened between the two to cause the writer's block. This may just be my oversight, but I got a little confused at the end of the poem. Perhaps you could make it clearer? Just my thoughts. *Smile*


*Bullet* I had an issue with your use of "you" in the poem. Let me explain. In stanza 4, you have these lines:

Short stories came to life
with characters you'd want to meet.


I took this as the 'universal' you, basically, 'characters anyone would want to meet.'

But then in the next stanza, you start with:

Then you walked into my life,

I took this 'you' as a specific person, the object of the poem, the person the speaker (the 'I' person) is speaking to. That made me wonder if the first 'you' was referring to the same person. Do you see what I mean? I think having these two different (or perhaps the same) 'you's so close together might cause some confusion. You may want to take another look at that part and decide for yourself. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - An excellent poem about writer's block! I love how you made it a personal story about one person, but also a poem with which many can relate. Thanks so much for sharing your work! *Smile*

Winners will be announced soon. Best of luck, and thank you for your entry!

Sincerely,
spidey


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Review of A Friend Forever  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi jaya !

Thanks for your entry in my contest, "Spidey's Weekly Poetry Contest [ASR]
This is my review for your entry, "A Friend Forever [E]

Poetry Mechanics
Theme:

As your intro states, "the constancy of nature." I liked the comparison of "temporary man-made comforts" vs. the constancy of nature. Nice twist on the prompt!


Imagery:

Beautiful nature imagery! I could definitely see everything being described here. Good job!


Form:

Mostly freeverse, though some rhyming does creep up now and again. For me, freeverse fits with the idea of nature, as nature is wild and untamable (though patterns do emerge upon closer inspection). Perhaps that's what your purpose was with having just a touch of rhyme?


Tone:

I enjoyed the tone, which is from the point of view of a friend of nature. The tone showed adoration and utmost respect for the object of the poem, nature. Nicely done!


Flow:

The poem flows very well for the most part. For me, the brief rhyming disrupted the flow just a little as I searched then for other rhymes. I thought perhaps I was missing a particular form or rhyme scheme.


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

I saw no errors.



Title/Rating/Genres

Very nice title and intro! I like that you introduce the theme in the intro.

Your ratings and genres are well-chosen.



Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to perhaps look at your form once more. It's up to you, of course, but I did find myself a little jarred by the irregular form, with some stanzas containing rhyme and others not. If it was your intention to show the wild form of nature reflected in the form of your poem, however, then you succeeded. If not, you may want to look over the form. Just my thoughts as a reader. *Smile*



*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - A beautiful dedication to the constancy of nature! I loved it! Thank you for sharing your work!

Winners will be announced soon. Best of luck, and thank you for your entry!

Sincerely,
spidey


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Review of Summer's Dare  
Review by spidey
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Reyna Jackson !

Thanks for your entry in my contest, "Spidey's Weekly Poetry Contest [ASR]
This is my review for your entry, "Summer's Dare [ASR]

Poetry Mechanics
Theme:

Ah, the joys of summer! I can definitely identify with this one (as I'm sure many can), particularly this past weekend. When temps soar, we're tempted to do nearly anything to relieve the pressing heat. Great theme!


Imagery:

I could feel this poem, which is a great accomplishment for a one stanza haiku! You do what makes a good haiku - create lasting imagery in very few words. Good job!


Form:

Haiku and nature seem to go together so well, don't they? The choice to use a haiku form is a very good one. It suits the theme very well, as both are simplistic yet beautiful.


Tone:

A very soft tone came across in this poem, one that matched the theme quite well. Nicely done!


Flow:

The poem flowed like the gentle summer breeze, making the poem a joy to read! *Smile*


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

I found no errors. *Smile*



Title/Rating/Genres

Great title! I love that it hints at the theme of the poem, but that you don't include the title in the haiku. I think it was a wise choice here.

Your ratings and genres are appropriate. If you wished, you could also use "Experience," "Personal," and/or "Contest Entry" as genres.



Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* I have a suggestion regarding the last line:

risk skinny-dipping

I know you're under a strict syllable count, but the line felt rushed to me. I'd be hard-pressed to find an alternative for it, but it did jar me just a tiny bit.

*Bullet* I've read haiku poems that contain more than one stanza, and though I like the very simplistic form here, I wonder if the poem could be extended with a few more stanzas? Just a thought. *Smile*




*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - Excellent poem and a great entry! Thanks for entering again and for sharing your work! *Smile*

Winners will be announced after the current round is closed. Best of luck, and thank you for your entry!

Sincerely,
spidey


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Review of Picture Poem  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Reyna Jackson !

Thanks for your entry in my contest, "Spidey's Weekly Poetry Contest [ASR]
This is my review for your entry, "Picture Poem [E]

Poetry Mechanics
Theme:

A poem about writing poetry! I can really relate to this one, and though this topic has been approached countless times, this has to be one of the most successful attempts I've read. I think you manage to convey the idea behind creating a poem incredibly well. Great job!


Imagery:

Beautiful imagery! I could see the entire process here, feel it as I read. I think the ease at which I could feel the imagery comes from how close I am to the theme. You are describing something many of us experience on a regular basis, so I think that makes it easier for the reader to imagine what is being described.


Form:

Excellent form! The lack of regular rhyme focused my attention on the words and imagery, rather than anticipating a rhyme. Excellent choice! I also like the repetition of "paint a poem." It reiterates the theme nicely.


Tone:

The tone comes across as very descriptive, as the speaker is describing the creative process in a creative, beautiful way. I particularly love these lines:

Write with the words the heart and eyes form,
but the lips shy from speaking;


The last line is very cliche, though it fits very well here. Kudos to you on using an often-used line where none else would fit as well!


Flow:

The poem flows very well. I read through it easily again and again as I reread. Wonderful job!


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

I found no errors. *Smile*




Title/Rating/Genres

Great title and intro! The title made me wonder what the poem would be like, and the intro set up the poem nicely.

Your ratings and genres are well-chosen.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to make the poem just a little more personal. I don't really have an idea who the 'speaker' of the poem is. Perhaps it was your intention to make it more universal, but I found myself wanting to know who it was that was describing this process. Just my thoughts. *Smile*



*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - An excellent poem! I truly enjoyed this! Thank you for sharing your work. *Smile*


Winners will be announced after the current round is closed. Best of luck, and thank you for your entry!

Sincerely,
spidey


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Review of A Comeback  
Review by spidey
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi rahbee !

Thanks for your entry in my contest, "Spidey's Weekly Poetry Contest [ASR]
This is my review for your entry, "A Comeback [ASR]

Rating change required: Cigarette requires an ASR rating. Please change your rating to accurately refelct the item's contents or edit the content if you wish to keep the E rating.


Theme:

A woman struggling on her own. I can appreciate the independent woman described in this poem, the woman who struggles but doesn't give up.


Imagery:

I can almost feel everything described in this poem. Great job with description and imagery. I particularly liked this line:

Like a thousand exhaled drags of a cigarette.
I could easily picture that.

I also liked the use of "Descending" and then "Ascending" in the poem. It moves the poem forward, progressing the theme of the poem. Well done!


Form:

I liked the lack of rhyming here, the loose feel. It fit the theme well. A woman coming undone (even if she's on the verge of a comeback) fits well with a loose form or blank verse. Good choice!



Tone:

This had a very informal, almost "gritty" tone to it that I really enjoyed. I could feel the tone of the speaker in this, and I think it worked really well to not include an "I" speaker in this. It pulled the reader closer to the "She" object of the poem. Nicely done!


Flow:

The poem flows fairly well. For me, the word "And" may be a tad overused, but overall it connects and flows well. I think the flow of the poem is directly related to your use of freeverse as a form. Using rhyming or any strict form would have greatly taken away from the poem.


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

I found no errors. *Smile*


Title/Rating/Genres

Good title and intro. They caught my attention and gave me important information about the item.

As previously stated, your rating needs to be changed in order to reflect the content of the poem. The word "cigarette" requires an ASR rating.

You could also include a few more genres here if you wished, perhaps "Women's" and/or "Drama."



Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* For me, using the word "And" so often took away from the poem a little. You may want to read through the poem again (aloud perhaps) to decide for yourself.

*Bullet* The poem also felt unfinished to me... I found myself wondering if the "She" character does hold on and rise to triumph, though I think the struggle is the important part of the poem, so you don't have to include whether she's successful or not. For me, though, I felt there could have been just a little more of her "rising" or her determination. Just my thoughts. *Smile*

*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - A good poem that I enjoyed reading very much! Thank you for sharing your work!


Winners will be announced after the current round is closed. Best of luck, and thank you for your entry!

Sincerely,
spidey


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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there snofallangel

Welcome to Writing.Com! If you have any questions, feel free to ask! *Smile*

This is my review for "{A Work In Progress}


Overall Thoughts:


Wow! This is a great beginning! You paint such a vivid picture here; I could see everything very clearly, as well as feel the emotions of the main character.

For me, your language really helped set the scene here. You use soft words like "Strands," "Azure eyes," and "long eyelashes" all in the first paragraph to set a very soft, graceful tone. I think it works wonderfully with the scene!

You do well to present a good deal of information to the reader in few words. The flowers and notes signify that the man was well-liked and that his death was perhaps tragic. The infantile scrawl shows that their children are young. The phrase "nightly ritual" shows that this isn't the first time the main character has knelt at this spot, and it probably won't be the last. You do very well in "showing" this to your readers instead of "telling" them. Kudos! *Smile*



Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not.
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

She laid it gently upon the earth infront of the grave.
I believe there should be a space inserted here:
infront *Right* in front


*Bullet* I can't help wanting to know the name of the main characters. It's totally up to you whether to reveal this information in the prologue, though.

*Bullet* I'm not sure why you use such a small font here. Perhaps you are missing a closing bracket somewhere ({/size}) ? I didn't have a problem reading it, but some may have a difficult time reading such a small font. You may want to consider making it a normal size font.

*Bullet* My only other suggestion would be to continue writing this! Please continue to develop the story, characters and plot. I think it'll make an excellent novel! (And don't forget to come up with a title to draw your readers in!)

*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - A great start! This is a very good prologue that really sets the scene for a larger work. I gave you a 4 because there is obviously room to develop the story further. Once you write more, I'd be very happy to read (and re-rate) your work. *Smile*

Keep on writing!

Sincerely,
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Review of The River Mouth  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there LostAsStardust

Welcome to Writing.Com! If you have any questions, feel free to ask! *Smile*

This is my review for "The River Mouth


Overall Thoughts:

I really enjoyed this poem! I like the feeling of indecision, particularly expressed in the last three lines of the poem. For me, the poem contained a lot of emotion and feeling, which is clearly expressed through carefully chosen words. Nicely done!

I also enjoyed your use of capitalization and punctuation. For me, the punctuation really helped me while reading through the poem, and the capitalization pointed to important words, words that hold a deep meaning to the speaker of the poem. I think you made some wise choices here. *Smile*

Extremely descriptive words! The words you've chosen to use really push the images and emotions onto the reader, making the poem a joy to read!




Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not.

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to further develop the poem and the ideas presented to the reader. For me, this felt like it just scratched the surface of a larger scene, a larger meaning. I'd love to see more of a contrast between the nature images and the feeling of the speaker vs. the object of the poem. I'd like to see the speaker struggle with his/her emotions a bit more, perhaps coming to a conclusion (or not). I think just a little more would add a sense of closure for the reader, and it would also give the reader a greater idea of what is going on here. Just my thoughts. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - An excellent start! You've got a way with words and imagery! For me, the poem felt a tad unfinished or like it could be developed just a bit more. I enjoyed reading your work! Keep it up!


Sincerely,
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Review of Chick Flick Quiz  
Review by spidey
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi and thanks for entering my contest, "Invalid Item

I truly enjoyed your quiz, though I must admit that I've only seen a handful of the films in the quiz. Even though I hadn't seen many of them, the quiz was still fun and I enjoyed guessing. *Bigsmile*

I do want to say that some of your questions involve mentions of sex, which calls for a higher rating of your quiz. A 13+ rating would be appropriate here. *Wink*

Thanks for entering! Keep an eye on the next Contests & Activities Newsletter to see if you've won!

~ spidey
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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi ~~Mc Young~~ !

This is my review for " Religion now vs. Where you are born [E].

General Thoughts:

Hiya *Smile*

I just had to comment on this poll, because I think it's a really good question that will have people thinking (or they should be thinking about it, anyway).

Strengths

*Bullet* I like that you explain your reason for asking the question, and that this is more than a "yes/no" type of question.

*Bullet* Good choices in this poll! I think you've covered the majority of answers you'd get from a question like this. I like that the tone of the poll is very friendly and unbiased. I think that helps to get honest feedback from a poll based on religion.


Grammar/Spelling
(These are suggestions with regard to my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)


and the religion teachings that they taught you at that young age,

I believe "religion" should be *Right* religious


would their be a greater chance that you would believe in that religion today,
their *Right* there


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* The title made me want to click on the poll to see what this was about. I think it's a good attention-grabber.

*Bullet* Your ratings are appropriate.

*Bullet* If you wished, you could also use a few more genres (that way the poll will show up when users are browsing genres), like "Cultural," "Personal," and/or "Spiritual." It's up to you of course. *Smile*


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*

*Bullet* My only other suggestion would be to perhaps find a way to simplify your main question. It's a little long which might make it harder to understand what it is you're asking. Perhaps if you worded it more like a hypothetical situation, like:

Let's say you were born in another country, and were raised to believe in that culture, the people and the religious teachings that they taught you at that young age. Would there be a greater chance that you would believe in that religion today, or would you still believe in the one you believe in now?

Just my thoughts. Ultimately, it's up to you. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - I really enjoyed this poll! It's a thought-provoking question, and you've presented it well with a great variety of choices. Good work!

Keep it up! *Smile*


Sincerely,
spidey


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Review of House  
Review by spidey
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hi there AEMoseley

Welcome to Writing.Com! If you have any questions, feel free to ask! *Smile*

This is my review for "House


Overall Thoughts:

A creepy poem! I liked how you contrast normal images (the Mother and Father, for instance) with eerie ones, like ghosts and rats. I also enjoyed the poem's form, four line unrhyming stanzas. For me, it added a feel of structure and movement in the poem. I also liked how the end of the poem tied in with the beginning.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not.
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* The poem's rating should be raised. The line: And where screams have been killed requires an ASR rating due to the word "killed."

*Bullet* The poem feels a bit short to me. Perhaps you're planning on adding a bit more, another stanza or two? It felt unfinished, I think. I love what you have here so far, and I'd love to see more!

*Bullet* Also, you may want to experiment with punctuation. For me, punctuation highly enhances a poem's flow and rhythm. It lets the reader know where you intend pauses or breaks. You might want to consider using punctuation in this poem. Just my thoughts. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

3.5 - I think you've got a great start here! You've got some great imagery, and I love the form! For me, the poem could use a little more development. I did enjoy reading it very much. Thank you for sharing your work!

Keep on writing! *Smile*


Sincerely,
spidey
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Review of Hook  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there comehere

Welcome to Writing.Com! If you have any questions, feel free to ask! *Smile*

This is my review for "Hook [E]


Overall Thoughts:

I love the rhythm of this poem! It really makes it enjoyable to read. I like the internal rhyme of the first two lines. I also liked that the rhyme scheme shifts. For me, that moved the poem forward and also made it enjoyable to read.

Good use of punctuation, too! For me, punctuation is really important in setting the rhythm and the flow of a poem, and I think you've done well here.

I think a lot of writers can identify with this poem and its subject matter.




Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not.
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* I don't think you need the word "lame" in the intro. *Laugh* I like your writing in this poem. I think the rhyme scheme is rather unique, and I enjoyed reading it. To me, this poem isn't lame, so I don't think you should be telling your readers that it is. Just my thoughts. *Wink*

*Bullet* You have this listed as "Other" for the item type, when I think "Poetry" would work better. Also, feel free to use a few genres, perhaps Writing or Experience. That way people will find your work while browsing genres on the site. *Smile*

*Bullet* I think the poem could also be longer. Perhaps this is just the first stanza of a larger work? I think you've got a great start here, but I'd love to see more!


*Star*My Rating*Star*

3.5 - A great start! I love the mechanics and form of this poem. For me, it could be a bit longer to be a truly successful poem, though I did very much enjoy reading it. Thank you for sharing your work!

Keep on writing! *Smile*


Sincerely,
spidey
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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ~MorningStorm~ !


This is my review for "The Nightmare Before Christmas Crossword [E]. I was browsing Crossword Puzzles this morning and I was glad to see this one.

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* I'm a big fan of The Nightmare Before Christmas, so I was excited to try this one out. I think you've asked a good variety of questions. I would think that most people who've seen the movie and know a little about it would be able to complete this quiz without a problem.

*Bullet* I like that you have a lot of questions here, and the answers vary in length. It made the puzzle fun to complete.

*Bullet* I also like that you included your reason behind creating this puzzle in the intro.


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Straightforward title and intro. It tells the reader exactly what to expect.

*Bullet* Good choices for ratings and genres. They're well-chosen for the item. If you wished, you could also use "Holiday" as a genre.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* I can't think of a single suggestion! This crossword is perfect as it is! *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

5.0 - An excellent crossword puzzle. Thanks for the fun! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review by spidey
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Prosperous Snow Creative !

This is my review for "If An Alien Spacecraft Landed [ASR]
Thanks for your entry in
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#1324566 by Not Available.



Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* Great question! I find aliens/UFOs quite interesting, so I was excited to see the topic of this one!

*Bullet* You have great voting choices, but I think you missed one - "Run away screaming!" *Laugh* Just kidding! (I took a class on UFOs in college, the only one like it in the country I'm told, and it was really sort of frightening!) Anyway, I like your choices here! I like that this has a comical feel to it, and it forced me to think about what I would do if I couldn't run away screaming. Good job!


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Great title and intro! It definitely pulled me in, made me want to read and vote in your poll.

*Bullet* Good choice for ratings. They're appropriate for the item.

*Bullet* I'm not sure the genre "Contest" fits here, as that's usually reserved for contests themselves. I think you could also use "Comedy" or even "Sci-Fi" if you wished for genres.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to perhaps make the intro a little longer, perhaps more detail to the question or even an image or some WritingML to spice it up a bit. Just a thought. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - A great and entertaining poll! Thanks for the fun! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review of How Many Licks?  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Contorted Cookie !

This is my review for "How Many Licks? [E]
Thanks for your entry in
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1324566 by Not Available.



Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* Great question and topic! A classic question! My husband, sister and I once sat down and performed this experiment. I voted for the "Approximately 364" choice because I think that's around the number we decided upon.

*Bullet* Great variety of choices! It looks like your viewers think so, too, as each choice seems to have gotten a few votes. I think that shows that you have a good variety here of the choices most would consider.


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Good title and intro! I would think that most people would know exactly what to expect inside this poll. Great job!

*Bullet* Good choice of ratings and genres. Very appropriate. I think you could also use "Food/Cooking" as a genre if you wished.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)


*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to add some WritingML or perhaps an image to go along with this poll.



*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - Great poll! A classic question with great choices!

Keep up the awesome work! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review of Dream Assignment  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi TariElanesse !

This is my review for "Dream Assignment [E]
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Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* Great intro! I love that you explain the purpose behind this, where you got the idea, etc. I think it makes the viewers more interested in the poll and its results, and it will help increase votes. Great job!

*Bullet* Very interesting dreams! I voted that the second one is the real dream. I'm very curious to know if I'm right. *Smile*

*Bullet* Great choices for the viewers! I'm very surprised at the results!


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Good title and intro. I think they do well to capture the interest of viewers.

*Bullet* Your ratings and genres seem appropriate and well-chosen.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)


*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to have a way of letting viewers know which is the real dream and which is fiction. Perhaps you could have the results in another static item and link to it. I suppose you could just reply to any who send a review/comment. That could help get more ratings & reviews, but you could also mention that to viewers. Something like, "If you send a review, I'll let you know the correct answer." Just a thought. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - Very creative and interesting poll! I had fun viewing and voting in it!

Keep up the great work! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review of Insomnia  
Review by spidey
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Elliott Klaassen !

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This is my review for "Insomnia [18+].

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* I like that the first few lines set up a sense of Nature. For me, the mention of rain and the deer-skin parka created an interesting tone, of the character being at one with nature. That made me sympathize and identify with the character immediately. I think that works really well particularly because of what is revealed next, that the character has committed murder.

*Bullet* Even before I read the last line (mentioning a mythology series), I had a good sense of "mythology" or even "fantasy" to this piece. It's a subtle feel, which I think works really well. I like that this feels other-wordly yet very realistic at the same time. I think that is due in part to the first person point-of-view. I felt very connected to this piece because I was seeing it through the main character's eyes. Good job!

*Bullet* I also enjoyed the use of italics for thoughts. It was a good way to reveal the character's name, and it helped show the conflict within the character. You do very well at subtly revealing information to the reader. Well done!


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* I didn't quite see how the title related to the piece. Perhaps I just missed something? *Blush*

*Bullet* I'm not sure you should use the word "emo" in your intro. Perhaps it's just my own qualms with the word, but I think it could also keep some people from reading this. I didn't find it particularly "emo-ish" as you say it is. It's up to you, of course!

*Bullet* Your ratings and genres fit very well. If you wanted, I think you could also use "Mythology" and/or "Fantasy" as a genre.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

that I had a duel personality,
I think "duel" should be *Right* dual
(duel is a combat between two persons; dual means double)


A sudden burst of hysteric laughter burst from my chest.
Using the same word in close proximity ("burst") isn't necessarily wrong, but it can be jarring to the reader. You may want to change one of them to another word. Perhaps something like: A sudden burst of hysteric laughter erupted from my chest.


*Bullet* The tense in this piece of fiction switches several times. It starts in present tense (Rain pours), but often switches to past tense. For instance:

But I don't feel bad for them, no squeamish feeling came to my stomach as I looked at the thirty-six dead, mutilated bodies in front of me.

"don't" is present tense, while "came" and "looked" are past tense.

You may want to take a look through this again and edit to keep the tense consistent. I do think this piece works well in the present tense, but that choice is up to you.


*Bullet* My other suggestion would be to continue writing this! It definitely feels like an incredibly powerful scene in a much larger work. I'd love to see the rest of the story! *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - I enjoyed this piece of writing. The shifts in tense jarred me a little, but othern than that your writing is excellent! I hope you'll continue this! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi !

This is my review for "Sherri Gibson an Angel Among Us [E].
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Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* You entered two word searches. The rules state, however, that only one entry will be accepted, so I'm only counting the first one. *Smile*

*Bullet* What a thoughtful way to show appreciation for another member! I loved the idea of this word search! I'm glad you explained your reason for choosing it in your intro!

*Bullet* Good selection of words! I like that you have longer and shorter words/phrases mixed together. It makes a good variety for viewers to find. Good job!


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Good title and intro! Descriptive and I'm sure anyone who knows Sherri (which is pretty much everyone) will click on and enjoy this word search!

*Bullet* Your ratings and genres are well-chosen and appropriate.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* Just one thing - One of your phrases is "3 of Hearts." Numbers don't show up in word searches, so the phrase I found was "of hearts." I still found it, but I thought I'd point that out, anyway.


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - A great word search! Thanks for your entry! Winners will be posted in my next newsletter, which will be out in a few days!

Thanks! *Smile*

Sincerely,
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Review of The Verdict  
Review by spidey
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi ahmmburr !

Thanks for stopping by "Invalid Item and helping me reach my goal. *Smile*
This is my review for "The Verdict [13+].

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* This has a very interesting structure to it. Particularly at the start of the poem, your lines are very long. It's not necessarily a bad thing, but I couldn't tell where some of the lines were intended to finish. At the start, it read more like a short story or monologue.

*Bullet* I like that this is very straightforward, with the speaker of the poem talking to the object of the poem. It's like a private conversation that is overheard.

*Bullet* I loved this line:
Where the color red doesn’t make you flinch,
For me, that was the turning point in the poem. After that point, the poem felt like a true poem. Before that, it felt more like a monologue or one-sided conversation.


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* I like the title very much. It captured my interest.

*Bullet* Your ratings and are well-chosen.

*Bullet* I think you could use another genre in place of "Contest" for this. I believe the Contest genre is generally used for contests themselves, rather than contest entries. Upon reading the title, I immediately thought of the Crime genre, and I think that one might fit here. Also, Death or Tragedy could work, too. It's up to you in the end, of course. *Smile*


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to take another look at your form. Perhaps you are unaware of the line lengths at the start of the poem? I think the structure could confuse some readers at first.


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - A good poem! I enjoyed reading this! For me, the structure cold be a little stronger, but overall I really liked this poem. Thank you for sharing it!

Keep on writing! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review of Shopping Spree!  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Elisa, Snowman Stik ☃️ !

Thanks for your entry in "Invalid Item *Smile*
This is my review for "Shopping Spree! [E].

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* What a cool idea for a word search! I really liked the variety of words you used here. For some reason, "Jersey" was the hardest for me to find. *Laugh*

*Bullet* I like your intro, how you explain the idea behind the word search. I particularly liked, "You are free to browse my shops if some of the words baffle you or pique your interests." Some of the words definitely piqued my interest, like "mayaca" and "comma splices."



Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Great title and intro! I think many people will click on your word search due to the attention-grabbing title and intro.

*Bullet* Your ratings and genres are very well chosen.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)


*Bullet* I honestly can't think of any suggestions for this. It's a perfect word search! I did have a problem, but I don't think it was your fault, perhaps something strange with the system. One word (Calendars) showed twice in the list, and to find the second, I had to highlight the one I already found. It also didn't get crossed off the search list, though the puzzle timer stopped and it said I was finished. Strange, but I don't think that was your fault. *Wink*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

5.0 - An excellent word search! Thanks for the fun! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi the last cicada !

Thanks for your entry in
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*Smile*
This is my review for "Subtextual Lexical X Box [E].

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* This one was tough! *Delight* It took me over 5 minutes to find all the words. Good job! I love your word choices. Using words with a similar letter makes the search tougher, and I liked that you chose an uncommon letter.

*Bullet* The intro to the puzzle is intriguing and very colorful. It drew me in and made me wonder what this one was all about. Great job capturing my interest!

*Bullet* I liked that you used smaller words as well as larger one. In my game, a few words showed up twice in the puzzle!


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* Cool title and intro! I liked them. They're intersting and fit the puzzle well.

*Bullet* I didn't see anything in the puzzle that would require an ASR rating. I think E would be fine if you wanted to use it. *Smile*

*Bullet* Your genres are very well-chosen.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* My only suggestion would be to perhaps add more words. It's fine the way it is, but word searches can fit more than 16 words, so you could add more if you wished.



*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.5 - An excellent word search! I truly enjoyed this one!

Keep it up! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review by spidey
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi LovelyOne !

Thanks for stopping by "Invalid Item and helping me reach my goal. *Smile*
This is my review for "The Fundamental Truth (an opinion poll) [13+].

Overall Thoughts:

Very interesting question! I can imagine that people might have a tough time answering this one, and that's a good thing! I'm sure you've managed to get viewers thinking deeply about their lives and themselves.


Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* I think you should rate this higher. There is implied violence here (particularly with the word "executed") that, I think, would require a higher rating. Since you are using the word to mean ending a human life, I believe this should be rated 13+ to reflect that.

*Bullet* Interesting and attention-grabbing title and intro!

*Bullet* Good choices of genres!


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

*Bullet* I have to say that this confused me just a bit. I wasn't sure what was meant by, "give up your moral principles." Let's say, my moral principles include not stealing. By giving up my moral principles, would I believe that stealing is not wrong, or would I go out and steal myself. Because asking people if they would give up believing in their moral principles is one thing, but asking them to act against moral principles is another, I think. Until that part is clear, I'm not sure I could vote in the poll.

*Bullet* You may also want to consider adding some WritingML in this poll. It could help illustrate your points and make the poll generally more visually appealing. Just my thoughts. *Smile*


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - A good poll with a very interesting and thought-provoking question!




Sincerely,
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Review by spidey
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Lilandra !

Thanks for stopping by "Invalid Item and helping me reach my goal. *Smile*
This is my review for "The cottage at the edge of time [18+].

Overall Thoughts:

*Bullet* A clever story of redemption and second chances. I loved the message of this story!

*Bullet* I really enjoyed the beginning. I love the first sentence! It drew me in, and set a good tone for the rest of the piece. I like that the last sentence of the first paragraph was about 4 lines long. It created almost a frantic pace, a desperate feel. Then the narrative switches to the present tense for the memory, which is a nice contradiction of the present story (told in past tense) and the past memory (told in present tense). I loved it! Good job!

*Bullet* I love how descriptive your writing is in this story. I could clearly see, hear, and feel everything. It helps that the pacing is slowed (while still keeping a frantic feel), so that each detail comes across to the reader. I particularly loved this lin: She smiled at him then, and the smile nearly ripped his heart out with its beauty.



Title/Rating/Genres:

*Bullet* I don't see any reason for your intro to be rated non-E. It's up to you, but I think you could safely rate it E.

*Bullet* Good choices in genres! They fit perfectly.

*Bullet* I like the title. Some may say it's too long, but I think it fits well.


Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not. *Smile*
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)

He ran like he hadn’t in years, in all those years since Traimdal,
Using the word "years" twice in this sentence felt a little jarring to me. You may want to consider taking one of them out and replacing it with another suitable word.


His lungs burned as if the fires of Hell were lit in them for him to roast in.
This one felt jarring, too, perhaps due to having two instances of the word "in" so close to each other. I wonder if it could be stronger written a little differently, perhaps even two separate sentences. Something like:

His lungs burned as if the fires of Hell were lit in them. He couldn't help thinking those fires were meant for him.


Let’s not loose our head completely here.
I believe "loose" should be *Right* lose


His mouth was watering quite eloquently.
I think the meaning of the word (showing feeling or meaning) fits in this situation, but the word "eloquent" doesn't seem to fit Eric, in my opinion. Perhaps another word would fit better? It's up to you, of course. *Smile*


“Do you always eat this much, or only when you’re invading young, defenceless women’s hearth and home?”
defenceless *Right* defenseless
(spelling error)


“Where are we? I’ve never seen your cottage marked on any map. Did you set it up recently?”
I was a little confused by this. I thought he was lost and didn't know where he was? How could he know her cottage wasn't on a map? You may want to clarify this part.


Like his thoughts have all been wrapped in some kind of cotton.
have *Right* had
(shift in tense)


her hands sure as she handed the cards to him to shuffle.
There is an extra space between "handed" and "the."


transforming it into something of beautiful.
I think "beautiful" should be *Right* beauty


For a moment, their hands touched, and the world stood still as wave after wave of what felt like electricity currented through his body.
According to my dictionary, "current" cannot be used as a verb. You may want to consider an alternative, like "pulsed" or "rushed."


He watched her hands as she preformed the last parts of the ritual,
preformed *Right* performed
(spelling error)



*Bullet* You so rarely use the main character's name that it felt strange to me when it was used. I found myself asking, "Who is Eric?" and then I'd realize it was the main character. I like that you don't name him in the first paragraph, only using "He," but you may want to introduce his name earlier and use it a few more times in the story. Just my suggestion. *Smile*

*Bullet* There are a number of repeated words and phrases in this (particularly using the same word close to one another), and that can bring the reader out of what is being read. I find that reading the story out loud can sometimes illuminate those places.


*Star*My Rating*Star*

4.0 - I enjoyed reading this very much! It's a clever, well-written (with just a few minor discrepancies) short story. I loved the end! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your work, and keep on writing! *Smile*


Sincerely,
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Review of Chocolate  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there *Smile*

I've never had so much fun searching for chocolate! *Delight*

I think I drooled on my keyboard a little... *Laugh*

You have a great selection of words here. I particularly liked searching for the smaller ones, as they're a little more difficult.

I love the brown chocolate-y font, and the "Emotional" genre. *Laugh*

Normally I'm a little cranky when searching for chocolate, but this was fun! Thanks!

I'll be featuring this as one of my picks in next week's Contests & Activities Newsletter. *Smile*

~ spidey
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Review of Holiday Search!  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there *Smile*

This is truly a great word search! You've included a great mix of words! I'm glad you included the reason you decided to create this word search! It gives the puzzle a personal touch! *Smile*

My only suggestion would be to choose a few more genres for this item. That way, when members are browsing genres, they'll come across this fun activity! I'd suggest Friendship, Family, Activity, Community, and there are probably a few more that could apply, too.

I'll be featuring this as one of my picks in next week's Contests & Activities Newsletter. *Smile*

Thanks for the fun!

~ spidey
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Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi *Smile*

This looks to be a fun Word Search, and I'm a fan of Dean Koontz novels, so I thought I'd check it out! *Smile*

You seem to have a typo in your description:

how long will it atke you to solve the puzzle?

atke *Right* take

Also, many of the titles show up twice in my word search list. My guess is that you wanted to fill up all the word blanks, and it does make it a little harder, I suppose, to find titles more than once.

It seemed a little strange seeing so many titles twice, though. I just wanted to let you know about that in case you weren't aware.

Also, I'm pretty sure "Hideaway" is the correct title, one word instead of "Hide Away" as listed in the word list.

Thanks for the fun! *Smile*

~ spidey
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