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This is my review for "The cottage at the edge of time" [18+].
Overall Thoughts:
 A clever story of redemption and second chances. I loved the message of this story!
I really enjoyed the beginning. I love the first sentence! It drew me in, and set a good tone for the rest of the piece. I like that the last sentence of the first paragraph was about 4 lines long. It created almost a frantic pace, a desperate feel. Then the narrative switches to the present tense for the memory, which is a nice contradiction of the present story (told in past tense) and the past memory (told in present tense). I loved it! Good job!
I love how descriptive your writing is in this story. I could clearly see, hear, and feel everything. It helps that the pacing is slowed (while still keeping a frantic feel), so that each detail comes across to the reader. I particularly loved this lin: She smiled at him then, and the smile nearly ripped his heart out with its beauty.
Title/Rating/Genres:
I don't see any reason for your intro to be rated non-E. It's up to you, but I think you could safely rate it E.
Good choices in genres! They fit perfectly.
I like the title. Some may say it's too long, but I think it fits well.
Suggestions
These are just suggestions. Feel free to use them or not.
(In reference to any grammar/spelling suggestions these are suggestions made with my understanding of grammar/spelling rules. If I'm mistaken or missing a regional difference in usage, I apologize in advance.)
He ran like he hadn’t in years, in all those years since Traimdal,
Using the word "years" twice in this sentence felt a little jarring to me. You may want to consider taking one of them out and replacing it with another suitable word.
His lungs burned as if the fires of Hell were lit in them for him to roast in.
This one felt jarring, too, perhaps due to having two instances of the word "in" so close to each other. I wonder if it could be stronger written a little differently, perhaps even two separate sentences. Something like:
His lungs burned as if the fires of Hell were lit in them. He couldn't help thinking those fires were meant for him.
Let’s not loose our head completely here.
I believe "loose" should be  lose
His mouth was watering quite eloquently.
I think the meaning of the word (showing feeling or meaning) fits in this situation, but the word "eloquent" doesn't seem to fit Eric, in my opinion. Perhaps another word would fit better? It's up to you, of course.
“Do you always eat this much, or only when you’re invading young, defenceless women’s hearth and home?”
defenceless defenseless
(spelling error)
“Where are we? I’ve never seen your cottage marked on any map. Did you set it up recently?”
I was a little confused by this. I thought he was lost and didn't know where he was? How could he know her cottage wasn't on a map? You may want to clarify this part.
Like his thoughts have all been wrapped in some kind of cotton.
have had
(shift in tense)
her hands sure as she handed the cards to him to shuffle.
There is an extra space between "handed" and "the."
transforming it into something of beautiful.
I think "beautiful" should be beauty
For a moment, their hands touched, and the world stood still as wave after wave of what felt like electricity currented through his body.
According to my dictionary, "current" cannot be used as a verb. You may want to consider an alternative, like "pulsed" or "rushed."
He watched her hands as she preformed the last parts of the ritual,
preformed performed
(spelling error)
You so rarely use the main character's name that it felt strange to me when it was used. I found myself asking, "Who is Eric?" and then I'd realize it was the main character. I like that you don't name him in the first paragraph, only using "He," but you may want to introduce his name earlier and use it a few more times in the story. Just my suggestion.
There are a number of repeated words and phrases in this (particularly using the same word close to one another), and that can bring the reader out of what is being read. I find that reading the story out loud can sometimes illuminate those places.
 My Rating
4.0 - I enjoyed reading this very much! It's a clever, well-written (with just a few minor discrepancies) short story. I loved the end!
Thanks for sharing your work, and keep on writing!
Sincerely,
 
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I like your writing in this poem. I think the rhyme scheme is rather unique, and I enjoyed reading it. To me, this poem isn't lame, so I don't think you should be telling your readers that it is. Just my thoughts. 
It took me over 5 minutes to find all the words. Good job! I love your word choices. Using words with a similar letter makes the search tougher, and I liked that you chose an uncommon letter. 