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Hi 🌜 HuntersMoon ! After reading your wonderful story "Trail Blazer" on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy, I offer these comments:
First Impressions:The title and summery were very deceptive, way to go! That's a great way to get a reader attention. I had a great laugh at this piece, and I just know that those 'friends' won't be friends much longer. A couple's first skiing trip, and the fun that ensues.
What I Liked:Although this was a short piece, the characters were giving a personality and the scenery was easily imaginable. Who hasn't seem pictures of a mountain, especially the Alps? I got a good picture of the woman falling down in a disgruntled pile of clothes and ski equipment, mad because this was NOT her idea of fun. They would both rather be curled up next to a warm fire. I also got the impression they were a slightly older couple, maybe in their later forties. The beginning set the pace and the time of the story and the ending was very nicely done. The impressions of her falling over as she made her way down. Priceless.
Suggestions:I would think about maybe giving the friends a name. It just made the reader wonder a bit. It also got a little annoying reading the word friend all the time. I was also wondering what the man and woman really looked like. We get a vague picture but nothing concrete. I know this was a short piece, so you could add that if you ever felt like going back to this.
Spelling, Grammar, and Punctuation:One little pet peeve of mine, and I know it's up to the author, is a lot of the ... in stories. Once in a while is fine, but too much and it just detracts from the story.
"...the welcome visage of the hotel in distance beckoning us to survive and enjoy the warmth of mulled wine and a roaring fire." I think you are missing a the in between in and distance.
All in all, a well done tale that will be sure to give anyone a laugh!
Jewel Busy Busy Busy!