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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had a good laugh at this story. Very well written and I liked how you compared the businessmen to animals finding the best spot to relax. I found it funny how easily we trust people behind a desk, and think they actually belong there. I'm surprised you didn't get caught, but then again those information desks don't seem too well manned. At least you had fun. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Missing the Times  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very interesting piece that is melancholy. It brought to mind a person sitting and listening to the radio and when a familiar song came on the radio, sitting back and getting lost in thier memories. I would separate the poem into stanzas, for instance I would put one after: And visions of you at my side? Then again after: Or never was

Of course this is only my opinion and this is your poem. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Perfection  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the way you describe the house, it sounds like what are house used to be like before my mom's back starting to get bad. Although, in your poem, ;you perfect house his an imperfection. Too many people look on the outside without bothering to look deeper. Great poem. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Shroud  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A very lovely survivors poem. It shows how much strenght you have and how hard it is to shake a hold that someone has had on you. Very well written and great word choices. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
A nice poem about a quite moment looking out a window. I would single space the stanzas and then double space between each one, that way the reader can easily tell when a new stanza starts. I really liked how you described the moon and the way the leaves sound when the wind blows. Keep on Wriitng!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of EARTH ABIDES  
Rated: E | (4.5)
When I was reading this I wasn't sure what to make of it at first. But the ending explained it all. I was wondering where a place like this could exist, but it really doesn't. We do need to realize what we are giving. Too many times, we take things for granted. I know I have the tendency to not think about how lucky I am until something happens to poin it out. Great tale.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I got a good laugh at the fact that you named your car. Of course, I know many people that do that. I don't get it but then again I can't drive. At least you learned a good lesson from your uncle. We all need to take a step back from our hectic lives and remember to be friendly to those that we have never met and to treat those we love with the respect they deserve. Great little tale.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Truer advice I have never heard. I have yet to find that special someone,b ut when I do I hope it feels exactly like you described. Maybe that is the reason for so many divorces, they each tend to think about themselves instead of what they can do for the other person. I know my brother has a great relationship with his wife. A great article that everyone should read before they get married. Well done!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This really struck home especially since I am listening to "Soldiers Silent Night". It really struck home on how lonely a life for a solder can be. I hate how people think that race seems to play such a huge part in life. We are all the same, no matter the color on the outside. This brought a tear to my eye, because every solider deserves respect.. I loved this piece, you always bring such emotions to your writing.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I got chills going down my spine, thanks to you! A very spooky tale, and one that I hope never ever happens to me. I enjoyed your description of the soldiers pacing and the way you wrote about the man in the kitchen made me think that the parents were really home. I had to laugh at the fact that you stayed up late, een though you were told to go to bed early, who hasn't done that before? Great yet spooky tale.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Oldwarrior, your stuff always leaves me with a smile. A lovely piece that inspires both laughter and awe. I enjoyed your humor with the people leading the camels and how you described the military terms for us poor non-military people. A lovely Christmas piece. Thank you!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of My Honey  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm glad you met your honey! Most of the people that have tried to fine love over the internet havn't been so lucky. Great poem.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Very well rhymed, and I enjoyed the mesage. I never did get why people hunted. I mean I get why peopled did it before supermarkets and stuff, they needed to fee themselves. But for sport? Doesn't make much sense. Well written!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Poor Hayden, having to learn that lesson at his own hands. Frogs are so easy to kill, if you aren't careful. It was sad yet kinda funny when he stopped on the frog to keep it from jumping away. The poor boy didn't know any better. I loved the names he gave the frogs though, very original. I liked the saleslady too, letting him have the frogs for a few pennies. Hopefully the tragedy didn't scare him and make hm overly protective. Great story!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
A sweet Christmas poem. I really like the warm feeling I recived while reading this. I had to laugh at the part about the way too loud malls, they are insane this time of year! My guide dog loves it though, makes him have to think and choose his path carefully. What I don't enjoy is all those hyped up on sugar children running everywhere. I can't recall how many times I've nearly walked over one! A great poem that captured the joy of Christmas and New Year. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A wonderful way to honor a fallen soldier. Too many have died without being honored. What a great poem. Thank you for writing it!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had to laugh at this story. The boys were taught that they should believe what their wives say. I did use the Ouija board one, and unfortunately my fortune was wrong. I'm no married and I don't have any kids, so oh well. It was a lot of fun though. I liked this piece.

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked this piece and I know what you mean when you are writing it. I have seen many people on the streets and how they are treated. None of them deserve our hatred for them. There are a few out there thart are using our kindness to gain what they want, but should we condemn those that are in dire need because of the few. I don't think so. I really liked how you called them Urban tumbleweeds. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A really lovely Christmas story reminding us that Christmas is not about the presents and its not about the tinsel, it's about what we see. I enjoyed reading about a simpler time, since I was born in the 80's. Even when I was younger things were better. So much has bee lost. I have to say my favorite line was:When insurance was real, instead of HMO’S (Human Misery Option‘S) or PPO’S (Poor Pitiful Option'S,) doctors were paid instead of discounted.

I know as I grow older, Christmas doesn't seem to mean as much, and decorating the tree isn't as important. I keep wondering what is missing, I think you pointed that out to me. Thank you! Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Remember Me Not  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
An interesting take on life after Death. I liked how you used the color, that added some demension to it. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can't tell you how much I love this poem. I agree with everything you say, especially the part about how the world see us. I wrote an essay on that subject for the Authors Spotlight challenge. I love how you wrote this and Obama is going to have his hands full trying to right what Bush did wrong. It's going to take awhile. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this poem. It reminded me of the program I saw with my aunt and uncle telling us about how Christ's love is a perfect Gift. We need to remember this as our lives get crazier as the season progresses. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Carnage  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
A very well written poem. I have to agree, aging isn't pleasant. I've seen what my parents have gone through recently because their bodies are wearing out and I'm not looking froward to getting older. At least I'll hopefully make less mistakes as I age. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Review of Misplaced Love  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Poor Dante, if you ask me he has a better chance the anyone, if he ever got his courage up to talk to her. I really like the line:This fence,” he thought, “cannot keep us apart forever. " I like how you developed Dante, seems like the kind of man I would enjoy going out with. Keep on Writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a sweet story. I liked how they came to surprise her. I would hate to be alone on Christmas too. Keep on writing!

-Jewel of Arabia

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