A very lovely survivors poem. It shows how much strenght you have and how hard it is to shake a hold that someone has had on you. Very well written and great word choices. Keep on Writing!
A nice poem about a quite moment looking out a window. I would single space the stanzas and then double space between each one, that way the reader can easily tell when a new stanza starts. I really liked how you described the moon and the way the leaves sound when the wind blows. Keep on Wriitng!
When I was reading this I wasn't sure what to make of it at first. But the ending explained it all. I was wondering where a place like this could exist, but it really doesn't. We do need to realize what we are giving. Too many times, we take things for granted. I know I have the tendency to not think about how lucky I am until something happens to poin it out. Great tale.
I got a good laugh at the fact that you named your car. Of course, I know many people that do that. I don't get it but then again I can't drive. At least you learned a good lesson from your uncle. We all need to take a step back from our hectic lives and remember to be friendly to those that we have never met and to treat those we love with the respect they deserve. Great little tale.
Truer advice I have never heard. I have yet to find that special someone,b ut when I do I hope it feels exactly like you described. Maybe that is the reason for so many divorces, they each tend to think about themselves instead of what they can do for the other person. I know my brother has a great relationship with his wife. A great article that everyone should read before they get married. Well done!
This really struck home especially since I am listening to "Soldiers Silent Night". It really struck home on how lonely a life for a solder can be. I hate how people think that race seems to play such a huge part in life. We are all the same, no matter the color on the outside. This brought a tear to my eye, because every solider deserves respect.. I loved this piece, you always bring such emotions to your writing.
I got chills going down my spine, thanks to you! A very spooky tale, and one that I hope never ever happens to me. I enjoyed your description of the soldiers pacing and the way you wrote about the man in the kitchen made me think that the parents were really home. I had to laugh at the fact that you stayed up late, een though you were told to go to bed early, who hasn't done that before? Great yet spooky tale.
Oldwarrior, your stuff always leaves me with a smile. A lovely piece that inspires both laughter and awe. I enjoyed your humor with the people leading the camels and how you described the military terms for us poor non-military people. A lovely Christmas piece. Thank you!
Very well rhymed, and I enjoyed the mesage. I never did get why people hunted. I mean I get why peopled did it before supermarkets and stuff, they needed to fee themselves. But for sport? Doesn't make much sense. Well written!
Poor Hayden, having to learn that lesson at his own hands. Frogs are so easy to kill, if you aren't careful. It was sad yet kinda funny when he stopped on the frog to keep it from jumping away. The poor boy didn't know any better. I loved the names he gave the frogs though, very original. I liked the saleslady too, letting him have the frogs for a few pennies. Hopefully the tragedy didn't scare him and make hm overly protective. Great story!
A sweet Christmas poem. I really like the warm feeling I recived while reading this. I had to laugh at the part about the way too loud malls, they are insane this time of year! My guide dog loves it though, makes him have to think and choose his path carefully. What I don't enjoy is all those hyped up on sugar children running everywhere. I can't recall how many times I've nearly walked over one! A great poem that captured the joy of Christmas and New Year. Keep on Writing!
I had to laugh at this story. The boys were taught that they should believe what their wives say. I did use the Ouija board one, and unfortunately my fortune was wrong. I'm no married and I don't have any kids, so oh well. It was a lot of fun though. I liked this piece.
I liked this piece and I know what you mean when you are writing it. I have seen many people on the streets and how they are treated. None of them deserve our hatred for them. There are a few out there thart are using our kindness to gain what they want, but should we condemn those that are in dire need because of the few. I don't think so. I really liked how you called them Urban tumbleweeds. Keep on Writing!
I can't tell you how much I love this poem. I agree with everything you say, especially the part about how the world see us. I wrote an essay on that subject for the Authors Spotlight challenge. I love how you wrote this and Obama is going to have his hands full trying to right what Bush did wrong. It's going to take awhile. Keep on Writing!
I liked this poem. It reminded me of the program I saw with my aunt and uncle telling us about how Christ's love is a perfect Gift. We need to remember this as our lives get crazier as the season progresses. Keep on Writing!
A very well written poem. I have to agree, aging isn't pleasant. I've seen what my parents have gone through recently because their bodies are wearing out and I'm not looking froward to getting older. At least I'll hopefully make less mistakes as I age. Keep on Writing!
Poor Dante, if you ask me he has a better chance the anyone, if he ever got his courage up to talk to her. I really like the line:This fence,” he thought, “cannot keep us apart forever. " I like how you developed Dante, seems like the kind of man I would enjoy going out with. Keep on Writing!
You had me laughing ;throughout the whole story. I have to say my favorite part would be the cows making a mess out of the bar. And the bartender didn't even say a word. I loved the accent you gave the writer of the letter. I enjoyed the names of the cows, it even rhymed. I got a good laugh out of the last one being a bull too. A great Christmas story. Keep on Writing.
Wow, what a great way to tie in so many peoples lives with thier own tragedies. You did a great job. I have to say I liked Ms. Moon's and Beth's chapters the best. It's interesting to find out how different people are all connected. A great read! Keep on Writing!
A sad tale that was well written. I enjoyed the way you described his misery and the room. I almost cried, the emotion was strong in this piece. Very well written. Keep on Writing!
That was hilarous. I was on the floor laughing. At least my dad knows the rules of shopping. Of course, since my mom's blind, he has to steer the cart. I'm sure he's learned. I love how you put everything in the King and Queen spech. Very nice. And oh so true too. My favoirte part has got to be the Land of Bakery. That place is dangerous! And I love the part about the mother bears, because that's how I describe my mom all the time. It's scary! Keep on Writing!
-Jewel of Arabia
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