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Hello Lidi! I read "The Heart Of Me" and I offer you this review:
Emotional Impact:A bittersweet poem that talks about how love can hurt, yet gives us hop because we can heal given time. It reminded me of my own breakup with my first boyfriend and how hard it was to move on, yet one day I found out that it didn't hurt anymore.
Effectiveness of Form:I enjoyed the rhyming, but it was hard to figure out where one stanza and another began, unless it was supposed to be one continues poem. I would recommend single spacing each stanza and then double spacing between them. This allows the reader to figure out where one ends and the other begins. I loved the images that you infused into this poem. I could picture someone searching in their soul like it was a dark cave, worried about what might be behind the corner. It almost actually reminded me of Nancy Drew, okay enough dating myself here. I think we can all relate to this poem, for we all have been hurt and had to hide behind masks to hide the pain.
Punctuation and Grammar:"Shine a spotlight, must I see" I would think about adding some punctuation at the end of this, the reader automatically pauses to take a breath.
"Dare I take a peek" A question mark would be a great addition, make the reader pause and adds a dramatic flair.
Closing Comments:Well done and Keep on being a star!
Jewel Busy Busy Busy!