I like this poem and thought it realy expressed the doubt and insecurity some of us feel when we have been jilted in a previous relationship. The only thing I might have thought about changing is the length of the lines in the last two stanzas and only if it didn't change the impact of the piece. All in all very nice work and I'll have to read some more of yours.
Thanks
T.L.Finch
Maybe I'm reading too much into this but it sure sounds like someone burned in too many relationships but is trying very hard to trust again. Nice poem and good job.
T.L.Finch
I really enjoyed this one and you did a very nice job with it. I found it touching and emotional and can't find anything to pick at. Keep on writing you show a lot of talent and there's a nice flow to your words.
Sounds like our old house cat. Her name is Baby but I prefer Morrissa. They do have a mind of their own. Loved the poem and definately worth some gift points. Keep up the nice work!
Nice job and loved your line of thinking. The American Indians believed that everything in nature was part of The Great Spirit and we should live in harmony with the earth.
Liked your poem "Prayer To The Devil" and could follow it well-only one thing I noticed- fourth line
Did you mean [allow us eternal knowledge] I think you got a type-o.
Got your review of Conscience and I know what you mean and it was longer lines when I first wrote it but I thought it flowed better in the shortened version. Thanks for taking the time
I'm by far no expert but I have read a large amount of Dean Koontz and Stephen King. Personally I liked it and think you have enough talent to write a good suspense novel. keep writing
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