Another beautiful poem and I have only one suggestion.
Last line - use it if you like - [come to sleep within my bed]. Just a thought as I read this wonderful poem.
After reading this excellent article on men and women I realize what my Father and Mother meant by love being a partnership between two people. As I get older and share the years with my wife it becomes more apparent with the passing of time. We've been married 28 years and I wouldn't change a thing if given the chance. Thanks for writing this, I enjoyed it. Very nice work.
That's why some of us write and keep trying to win. We do it because it's there, that elusive prize! One small consolation is you're not alone and we're the majority.
Very nice work on this and I especially liked your imagery. Fantasy and supernatural writes interest me but I don't do very well with them myself.
If I can pick out any faults they are very minor and all-in-all I enjoyed reading this. I also could see where it could be expanded into a larger work.
You got me laughing on this one and I would have never thoght of that. Odd for a guy from snow country.
I've seen some funny stuff but this was a belly buster. Thanks for sharing this with us.
I can rememember when things were like that. You and I were born the same year but I'm still the old man. [April 27, 1951] and the rolling hills and the Finger Lakes of western N.Y.State. Congrats on the contest.
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