Wow, what a switch from the last one I read of yours. Still a very nice job and the imagery was very good. Just one suggestion - in line 31 it might flow a little better if you said [Take one more long ass good look] instead of the way you have it now. I know I've heard more [long ass] in conversations. Just my opinion and ya I know the one about those opinions.
Isee someone else is as varied in their work as I am.
Wow! You blew me away with this. You have a real talent there and don't let anyone tell you different.
I honestly can't find anything wrong with this and enjoyed it. Wish I'd written it.
Another great piece and you really are good with words. Excellent work and don't change a thing. I have to agree with the topic as I have one too. They can be a pain at times.
You put a smile on my face today Thanks.
I read this one and thought this is really good! There are some suggestions I have and their just that and you can disregard them if you like but some readers have done the same for me and occasionally I use them. Line seven maybe try "Which I cling to in times of need"-- line 12 "and never come back again"--and last line 20 "To my teacher and friend indeed" don't get me wrong this is a good poem but I couldn't help think this would make it even better.
This sounds good and I know something of the topic as there was some of this activity in our small town at one time until their meeting house mysteriously burned to the ground one night and no one was ever charged with fire.
I'll be reading more of this one.
T.L.Finch
I enjoyed this immensely and certainly can appreciate the difficulties of twins that are joined like this, and we think we have problems! Bravo! Teff another fine piece of writing for me to look at!
Excellent story about your grandfather and I think he was undeniably a very interesting man with varied interests. Sounded like a wonderful person to know and love. Thanks for sharing the story with us and it's definately worth the five stars.
Wow! Iliked this one a lot! Especially the last line about "They are in heaven repaid" This is good we should look at each others work more often. Thanks for the nice review of mine.
Hmm! Mono-Rhyme, Loved it and totally enjoyed the phrasing, think you just gave me some good ideas.
Thanks for sharing these with us, you're definitely a talented poet.
I liked this one and your descriptiveness is very good so keep up with the poetry. Your morning walk sounded nice to me and more of us should take the time to do the same.
I liked the way you did this and it flows well. Hope you can find that someone special someday. I know some people think they don't need anyone in their lives but it makes lifes' speed bumps a little easier to take with someone to help hold us up! Keep up the nice work!
Liked what you had to say in your prose here. Nice job but you know I'm a critic and I think you forgot a word in the part you wrote about Hell check it out and you'll see what I mean.
Yeah! I know I gotta leave your site and pick on someone else and I can only hope they pick on me as much because that's what makes us better at this.
Very nice poem and only can make one sugestion that you may or may not consider. Where you say [dancing in the rain under a cloudless sky] I just thought it might read better if that was changed but if it was your intent please ignore what I think.
I like this poem and thought it realy expressed the doubt and insecurity some of us feel when we have been jilted in a previous relationship. The only thing I might have thought about changing is the length of the lines in the last two stanzas and only if it didn't change the impact of the piece. All in all very nice work and I'll have to read some more of yours.
Thanks
T.L.Finch
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