Good evening Justanotherpoethero,
Just dropping in to say hello and read your "Partner in Crime". Don't we all have one? It is a thought out way to describe a partner in crime. It is a heartfelt piece that everyone can relate to. I related to it, although it's been awhile since I've had a partner in crime.... lol. I found no error's to speak of. I look forward to reading more of your work. I invite you to read some of mine also. Have a great evening.
Hello Intuey,
I just finished reading your "Seeking Peace". It's funny that you wrote this down, for it is the way I seek peace within. When in a not so good place. I step back in start with a deep breath and exhale slowly. I do this until I find my peace, in which case these days it doesn't take long. I really can relate to this and really enjoyed it. I look forward to reading more of your work. I included one error that I found, it's an easy fix. I find it helpful to have a second pair of eyes. Hope you have a great day.
Oh my how I can relate. As I read I could imagine everything around you. The cat, even the walls and doors. I could almost smell the stale air. Maybe I'm just like you. Maybe I'm in the room next door 😊 Thank you for sharing. Very well written. I love that you gave each description.I look forward to reading more of your work. Have a great day.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Just stopping by to say hey. I see I missed one, maybe 2. I can relate to this right now. I just want to run, run and run some more. If I could fly I'd be gone tomorrow. I enjoyed the complexity of it. It brings it into perspective for me. God bless you my friend hope all is well.
I read your Soul Passages, a very unique look at soul's. Yes, you got me to thinking and that is a good thing. (When someone has been mishandled) One's soul can take a long time to trust others to love again. I ponder now of how many people I know that have been mishandled. I enjoyed it and will return to read more of your blog.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Your blog is the first blog I have ever read. I read the last 10 day's and found that you are profound in your wisdom. I enjoyed reading them. I found several like, Disease and How to stay young, made total sense. While near death experiences are an experience in its self. When we encounter our Lord God himself, it makes us realize how important life really is. I look forward to reading more of your blog and other work. I found no error's of any sort. Really awesome job
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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That was so amazing. it has been a very long time since I've just sit down and read a book. You know life! It was a very good story line and as you can tell I enjoyed it very much. Yep I'm one of those who gets wrapped up in the characters. In all yes, there were some error's, but as you indicated this is the first draft. I hope to write one soon, and hope it is written as well as Destiny's End. You did a great job involving your audience with the character's. I look forward to reading more of your work. It was a pleasure reviewing Destiny's End.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Chapters 19
Oh my gosh destiny has struck again.... I am so enjoying this. I believe in destiny, all things come to those who wait. Just a couple of error's. I'm liking how this is working out. Now for the last and final chapter. I'm so excited about it.
Happy wriying,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Oh my gosh, I knew it. But you twisted it pretty good. What a vivid dream, pulling out his heart. Ouch.... I knew she would stay with her husband. I love how you told him that she knew. A few grammar error's found, but nothing a few fixes will do. On to the next chapter, gotta see what happens next.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Noooo way really, I can't believe it! Ok, this just my luck. I'm Lanae and lost the guy again. Ok, I told you that I was involved with your character's. I'm still not sold on Janie. I only found a few grammar error's in this chapter. Now let me see if you twisted the next chapter on me!
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Oh, man Frank is a creep. Now to prove he did it and not her dad. I'm glad to see she has started college. I found a few error's in this chapter. Easy fixes though. I can't wait to read the next chapter to see what develops. Oh no, is Sabastian and Janae going to end up at the same college? Off to read more....
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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No, really. Ok, I know that he broke up with Janae, but I still think it will work out for them. I'm routing for Lanae and Sabastian. I think Janie is still using him, you know having her cake and eating it too. I found a few grammar error's also. But easy fixs. On to the next chapter.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Wow, I'm really feeling sad for all 4 of them. They have found someone to love, but feel it can't be. I found a few grammar error's. But you are keeping this very interesting. Now that it has all come together they are going to be apart. Yep, I say I am involved with the characters now. On to the next chapter
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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I'm glad to see that both girls have a love interest. Finally Sabastian, I thought he would never show up....lol. I did find some grammar error's in this chapter as well. I have enjoyed your story and can't wait to read what happens. I like how vivid you are on details. On to the next chapter.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Wow, about time...lol. I'm looking forward to Janae finding love. I'm not finding many error's. But I keep reminding myself that this is going to be rewritten. I will enjoy reading it when you do. I have the feeling that this guy is Sabastian. I have been waiting for him to join back into the story. On to the next chapter.
Happy writing,
Girl have a Heartbeat
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Ahhh, camping fond memories of camping next to the creek, relaxing and the great times. Thank you for reminding me of those days. on to the next chapter.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Oh my, who is Jim?
Lanae didn't wake in time for breakfast, and Sally told (Jim),
I got confused for a second, but figured you meant Steve. As the plot thickens, an apartment all her own! On to the next chapter. Interesting....
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Lanae is a young girl lost looking for love. A love to replace her father's love she lost. You brought her character to live with that moment. I'm excited to find out more how these 2 character's meet. A few grammar error's, I normally give those, but you have said this is the original book. So I will not be giving those, unless you want a second pair of eyes. It always a help. So off to the next chapter. Enjoying it very much.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Great start can't wait to see what Sabastian tells Janie. Jeeps and Puff the Magic Dragon, my cousin's favorite song....lol. Off to read more. Can't wait to see your revised version. I only found a few error's. Other than that, great work.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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