We often wonder those familiar questions, among many others. Like, Why can't everyone just get along? What if you did it like this? Many, many wonders out there. It was a nice piece. Thank you for sharing. Now I am trying to think about what you're thinking about....lol I look forward to read more of your work. Have a blessed evening.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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I enjoyed your story. It was well written, you had a few error's that I have included. For a quick fix. It is great to have a second pair of eyes. To bad the police officer's didn't believe her. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Then I was late (getting) home from my (zumba) class
I (looked) at the two police officers (that) stood in my kitchen
I (realised) my eyes had betrayed me; you have 2 (realized) in a row after this sentence.
Wow, I can say you had me on the edge of my seat. I love the twist and turns that you added. I didn't see that coming at all. A filming of a soap opera wedding. Gezzz and how his mom got wrapped up in it also. Takes me back when I was hooked on them. Thank you for the trip down memory lane. I really enjoyed it. I most definitely look forward to reading more of your work.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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This is really getting me to think that most people really do, do this...lol I even looked up what the tip of a shoelace is called. So I learned something new today. Awesome, thank you. I found no errors. If I didn't know better it sounds like a wife talking to her husband I loved it. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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Your quote is something to ponder about. Never really thought of it until you pointed it out. Being a seamstress, I can relate to this. I look forward in reading more of your work.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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I enjoyed your poem. It gave me another side of Bonnie and Clyde. Such a tragic, romantic story that we have of Bonnie and Clyde. I found no errors in your grammar or otherwise. I will enjoy reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing.
Happy writing,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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I read this poem with such admiration. Everytime I witness anything military I stand proud with tears in my eyes. My son and so many of my relatives were military. This was very close to my heart. I too have a close bond with anyone military. Thank you for your service. I'm honored to know you.
It is a nice way to explain one's thought's of being chained to their own feelings. I found it intriguing how you combined the 2 together and made them into one. I only found one error, I have included it so you can update it. I find it helpful when I have an extra set of eyes looking. I hope to read more of your work.
I never thought about the Yellow light for love. But after reading your outlook on it. It makes perfect sense. I enjoyed it very much. Although you had a few grammar error's with it. It was totally encouraging to those who aren't certain about how they feel about love. I have included 2 that you might want to update. I, myself find it very helpful to have a second pair of eyes. Hope to see more of your work, I really enjoyed it. Have a very blessed day.
1. everything from my head to (me) feet
2. given me the hope (i) have longed for
My thoughts and prayers are with you for your niece. I can relate to your poem very much. It had me in tears which is a good thing. That means it spoke to me. It did bring memories back. My bubblewrap days. This was a very touching sentiment and a great dedication to Toni.
What a great poem. I enjoyed it very much. It reminded me of a dark night I had not too long ago. It was a night I will never forget. He wrapped His arms around me and told me that it was going to be ok. The warmth and glow of His light filled my soul. I look forward into reading more of your work.
This is so true of the world today. If we could only stop for a few minutes a day and look, listen and reach out to each other. It would be a better world. Great poem. Look forward to reading more of your work.
The possibilities are endless with dreams. Captured by one's heart. All Smiles you made me ponder within my dreams, what could be. A very nice piece clearly from the depths of your soul.
Hope you have a great day,
Girl with a Heartbeat
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