Words Whirling Round's (tgifisher77) Reviews

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284 Public Reviews Given
284 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Every word we put to paper comes from someone else. We learn from parents, teachers, books, movies, idle conversations - our entire life becomes our source material. The only thing that's original and unique is our choice of how we put the words together. To be 100% honest, we'd have to credit the Dictionary, Thesaurus, and Google for every poem and story. I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! Only the author can take credit for the final words, no matter what the source.
I'm good at...
My co-workers used to call me a 'typo savant'. Apparently, I read letter by letter instead of word by word. This is both a gift and a curse. I am often distracted by a typo when I should just move on in the story.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Horror, Fantasy, Mystery
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not a big fan of romance writing.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Short Stories
Public Reviews
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Review of The Artist  

Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice story. It's well written and I enjoyed reading it.

You have some good images, the characters are believable and the dialogue felt natural.

However, there are some small typos and grammatical issues that I would like to point out in the spirit of making it even better:

         with their complements compliments and whispers

         grabbed some fancy appetizers and a napkin

         make them buy some of my other artist’s work

         in the twenty's or thirty's twenties or thirties,

         He sat set the empty plate

         a man in his thirty’s thirties

         some photograph’s photographs of his other work

         David recognized the attention to detail and the potential

         That first day, when he walked down this hill and set up his easel, was the beginning

         rock wall below him, waiting at the barrier that prevented her from coming with him


I hope you find these suggestions helpful!

Terrence Fisher


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Review of To My Biological Father  

Rated: E | (5.0)
It takes a lot of courage to put this out for the world to see. I hope writing it helps you to work through the conflicting feelings and emotions. We can't really know what you're dealing with, but you've given us a glimpse into an unfulfilled want that is all too common.

Keep your head up!


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Review of Saving Grace  

Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well done!

I like the overall tone of the story and it developed nicely. The ending may not have been entirely unexpected, but it felt a bit 'tingly' even so. The characters were believable and the dialogue seemed natural.

The only nit I have is a typo - "pants and shirt with bunched up in the corner."

I'm pretty sure you meant 'were' instead of 'with'

A nice piece overall


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Review of The Patriot (a poem in free verse)  

Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow! That's powerful imagery. I like your use of "approved poisons". There's a tension here because some of your "dangerous masses" actually do have venom. It's safer, but cowardly, to sacrifice the innocent along with guilty. I'm not expert enough to give you advice for improvement, but I think you're on the right track here. Keep up the good work.

- Terrence Fisher


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