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I try to give reviews the way I prefer to receive them. Honesty, thoughts for improvement, and identifying strengths are aspects that I prefer from others, so I give these things in return.
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I can pretty much review anything, whether poetry or short stories. My favorite genres to read are horror and the odder side of fiction, but I am open to reading other genres. If I do review a genre that is not one I particularly enjoy reading, then I am most likely going to review it based on the structure, rather than the content.
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I tend to gravitate toward writings in the dark genres. With short stories and novels, horror is my favorite. With poetry, I prefer writings that display raw emotions. If your writing tackles a subject that people find offensive, I might like it.
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Christian literature, Western, and Children's. I will NOT read or review anything that consists of XGC material between minors and adults or encourages abuse as acceptable behaviors.
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Dark poetry, horror, emotional, autobiographical, erotica, psychology
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Horror is one of my favorites to read and write. Also, poetry that tackles intense subject matter interests me.
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Review by Warped Sanity Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)

Hi there. This popped up on the random read and review and I thought I'd share my thoughts on it.

Reading your words brought me back to those with dementia that I have encountered. I once did in-home healthcare where I took care of elderly, many of which had dementia. Many of the things you describe, like the lack of eating are common with those with the disorder.

Like you express, it is a huge toll on the family. Though, I also see it in a different light too. It is traumatic for those who are experiencing it too.

You mention that you give her one word explanations when she asks what you are talking about. Hopefully you are kind when you do so. She may not remember it in after a while, but at that moment she does and her emotions are still very real.

Interesting that she wants people to do things for her. From my experience, most want to do things themselves when they really shouldn't. I found that giving them the allusion of control worked well in compensating them and helping to get them to do things they need to do.

For example, one lady I took care of, the family claimed nobody could get her to take a shower. The reason was is because they were speaking to her like a child, telling her to do it, rather than giving her choices. My solution was to go for a walk with her. She loved walks and there was a donkey around the corner that she loved to pet. When we got back to her home I would say, "Eww, I smell like B.O. and like that donkey." Then she would say, "Oh, so do I. I'm taking a shower." So, I manipulated her into doing what she needed to do, without taking her choices away.

Reading about your family member, I thought to myself, this woman seems sweet. When you express that she likes to flirt with men, I thought it was adorable. It saddened me when you exclaimed that her sleeping a lot was a positive thing. Although she has dementia, these are your last years with her. In between her forgetfulness are stories, her stories that are worth hearing, even if you have heard them a hundred times. One day she will be gone and those stories will be all you have left.


Suggestions
This is written from the perspective on how dementia impacts the family in the form of annoyances. It would be nice to have a little more substance, since this is an article. By substance I mean maybe resources that help families who are dealing with this, scientific reasoning of why those with the disorder do what they do, how doctors say family should handle loved ones, suggested counseling services etc.

There is also an issue with your formatting. Paragraphs are not spaced and some are moved awkwardly mid-sentence. This sometimes happens when you copy/paste from another writing program. Once you give it a readover you will see what I'm talking about.


Thank you for sharing your writing. Remember, these are just the thoughts of one person. It is up to you, the writer, to determine which advice to apply. Hopefully my thoughts on your writing have been helpful. If you get around to making any corrections, hopefully you will let me know and I will up my rating according to your corrections.















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Review by Warped Sanity Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I am reviewing this as part of "a very Wodehouse challenge" Open in new Window.. The obective is the review five members in the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window..

As I was browsing your port, I realized that I have read your writing quite a bit, but have never reviewed you. I tend to read way more than I review. This poem in particular I remember reading a while back. It was posted in a newsfeed if I am remembering correctly. Anyways, I thought it was a great poem then and still do.

Emotive qualities
The title mentions sarcasm and you deliver it. It seems that you are speaking to an attention wh##e that is very surface. The world surrounds around her and in a way you will take advantage of that ignoarance by appealing to her inflated ego. Or, at least that is the conclusion I came to when I got to the end of the poem. Also, she lacks deeper thought, which is evident when you mention her blank stare.


Flow
Line breaks are done well. Each line flows into the next cohesively without any confusing bits.

Final thoughts
This poem made me think of those annoying women I avoid. They are more interested in the tabloids and their two hundred dollar purse, than they are in actual other people and real issues in the world.


Great little poem. Thanks for sharing your writing. ♡


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Review of Circle of Life  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm here for your final review that was purchased by Andy in the Holiday Cheer Fundraiser. I've had a lovely time browsing your port, especially learning the most emotional aspects of you through your poetry.

First thoughts
This was a beautiful poem! Your mother must have been amazing woman. Although this is sad, it also has elements of healing. Most importantly, you were lucky to have had such an amazing connection with your mother. Not all of us are gifted with such things in life.

Imagery
For me this poem seemed like an analogy of healing from loss. The flowers surviving in Winter symbolizes great strength, posibly reminding you of the strength of that mother and daughter bond, but also that strength it takes to move past grief, yet still cherishing those memories.

Emotive qualities
This poem was a tear jerker, but not completely due to sadness. It is one of those situations where there are tears, but still smile thinking, "She will always be with me."

Flow
When read outloud the poem flows beautifully. Rhymes are consistant without seeming forced. Each stanza flows effortlessly into the next without any confusing bits.

Final thoughts
This was a well written poem, deserving of the merits it has received so far.

Thank you for sharing your writing. I've enjoyed the read. ♡
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi there! I'm here to conduct the first of the three reviews Andy purchased the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.. Reading the description inside the book item, you had me at politically incorrect.

I've read a few of the adventures by Hooves, but this one is my favorite so far. It is relatable to us writers and humorous.

What I liked
I just love the name for the whale! It gave me a giggle. *Bigsmile* little personification details like when he "huffed and spit" really show his character and the story.

The reviewer smelling gave the impression that he/she passed gas. This wouldn't be an analogy for your feelings toward reviewers who make head-hopping claims against your writing now would it? I got a good laugh from that. I too have been judged for switching POV. Nothing wrong with third person omniscient or third person limited, so long as the plot isn't given away too soon. Like the animals said, novelists do it all the time.

Suggestions for improvement

Honestly, it is great as is. As far as I could tell, it is error free, without any confusing bits for me to trip over.


Thank you for sharing your writing. I've enjoyed the read. ♡


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there. I'm here for your second review, which is part of the gift purchased by your Secret Santa. ♡

The description you give for this poem is what caught my attention. Since this is in your non-fictional poetry file, I figured it was about your personal spiritual journey with the Goddess.

Imagery
Since I am Pagan and go to many Pagan centered events, I totally understand the dancing at midnight. The only imagery missing was the fire. Dancing around the fire to drums is pretty common in Pagan circles. Due to these elements not being there, I get the image of you giving a personal devotion through dance, whether than doing so in the coast of others.

There is also evidence that this personal ritual was for healing. This is clearly evident in the last stanzas.

Emotive qualities
I especially like how you express the Goddess holding your hand, as if she is guiding you to freedom through dance. Dancing in itself is particularly liberating, whether for spiritual reasons or not. So, the expression of it having healing qualities is very fitting.

Flow
Enjambment is done well. When read out loud, my first thoughts were that it would sound well with drums. Also, each stanza flows to the next without any confusing gaps.

Mechanics
Choosing not to use punctuation works. From my perception, there were no mispellings or word usage issues either.

Final thoughts
I enjoyed your devotional to Isis and could find no faults to bring to your attention. Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself through verse. ♡







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Review of Letting Go  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Elizabeth! I'm here to conduct your reviews as part of your package in the Holiday Cheer Fundraiser. My favorite type of poetry is non-fictional because I believe the best poetry is an emotive expression of the poet and very personal. So, I searched your poetry file with a description claiming the writings were about you and your experiences. This particular poem caught my attention due to the title. Letting go told me that the poem would have to do with healing.

First thoughts
My first impression after the first read through it seemed that this was about a cleansing of the heart. In order to move on completely, we must clear all the muck away to accept the new.

Flow
This is a free verse that depends on enjambment to enhance the emotion. I feel that line breaks are done well and I didn't trip over any areas when read out loud. In addition, each subject in stanza progresses smoothly to the next stanza, with no confusing gaps.

Imagery
I like the more Pagan imagery with the Crystal. For those who use Crystals in their spiritual practices, there is an understanding that they store negative or positive energy. A heart could be described in the same way. Depending on our experiemces, it holds on to emotional energies.

Emotive qualities
Poetry should be emotive to some degree in my opinion. I felt that your personal little poem tugged at the emotions of the reader. I appreciate how the writing goes from hurt to healing. There is a strong message in your words.

Final thoughts
I liked the poem. Thanks for sharing a little piece of yourself. ♡


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Review of The Appeal  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Excellent read! I like this Farrington! Definitely the perfect revenge stoty.

The hook
You had me hooked at "finger". I love how you begin all nonchalant, and then end the paragraph with the addition to his collection being a finger. I just had to know what he did for 20k and why he had a finger.

Dialogue
Dialogue was done excelently. I felt like I was watching this transaction between the voice in his head and him. Well done.

Character development

This hitman seems like a real selfish man. He's killed someone and shows no sign of guilt, which shows that he is a true sociopath. I found myself not liking the man and finding pleasure in his demise.

We are not shown the wife much, but it is easy to equate that she is equally a bad person with the given evidence.

Scenery
There is just enough description to show the story. Anymore and it would become too wordy.

Plot
There were plenty of twists to maintain the reader's interest. That little episode with the whores was excellent, adding some imagery to the end. It was sort of simplicity too. And, the conclusion with the wife was perfect. It is easy to conclude what her outcome will be.

Final thoughts
Thanks for the entertaining read. It was a fun read from beginning to end.





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Review of I See You  Open in new Window.
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This is so my fear, especially since I'm getting older. Stress can seriously age us. Well, in her case it was pretty extreme.

The hook
The fist few sentences do grab the reader. You address that there is an issue that she will knows she will be confronted about. I was curious about what it was.

Dialogue
You did really well with incorporating the dialogue into the actions of the story, with the addition of body language. It helped me to see the conversation between these two women more clearly.

There are areas toward the middle where italics for internal dialogue would work better. Other than that, dialogue is excellent.

Character development
The dinamics between boss and employee resembled friendship. The main character doesn't have to give an explanation, yet she cares enough about her secretary that she cares whether false conclusions are made. This tells me that she doesnt want to worry her friend.

Scenery
Since no other employees were mentioned, I imagined it was a small business.

The atmosphere in the home was shown well. It gave a dark vibe which suggested something was going to happen. Once she flicked the light on my heart raced a little in curiosity of what would happen.

Plot
The plot is good!I especially like the ending. It was unexpected. There was just one area of inconsistancy. First she tells her employee that she hadn't slept due to a nightmare from Friday, which seems as if she had a single dream that haunted her enough to make her not able to sleep. Then you expressed that she had it three consecutive days, which contridicts her first explanation.

Final thoughts
Overall, I felt this was a good story. Other than the few areas I mentioned, it is well written.

Thanks for sharing your writing. ♡


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Review of Why?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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I'm here again to spoil you with more reviews as part of your package in the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.. This was an interesting use of the prompt words.

The hook
The first few sentences do grab me. Though, I would suggest expanding on what there were more of in that second sentence, rather than just "them". After reading it, I imagined the dead had risen because he took something from their gravesite. Maybe "them" could be expanded to men with rotting flesh or something to that effect.

The dialogue
Dialogue was done well. There are a few areas where body language would show the story more, but overall you did really
good with the speech.

Character development
I imagine you were restricted by word count restrictions. If so, given the word count, you did well showing the characters. If you expand this some, I would suggest adding a little to the characters, mostly the husband. This way the reader is disturbed by a likable character dying or happy some pick met a demise. Since their isn't much development with his character, I don't really have any emotions about his death.

Scenery
From what I gathered, they are in a home or cabin. The husband had taken a skull from a gravesite and now the (dead?) aboriginal type men are coming to get revenge. The time period is not really specified, so I assumed it was modern times.

Plot
The plot is pretty good, especially the ending. I just feel it needs some clarity. I'm not sure if the men outside are the living dead or just angry that he stole from their ancestral gravesite.

Final thoughts
The story was interesting. I just feel it is missing some elements. Hopefully you will expand on it adding more clarity at some point. When you do, hopefully you will let me know so that I can up my rating according to repairs.


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

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It is so sad how people succumb to greed when prope die. This exchange between sisters seems to portray that aspect in human nature. Apparently, one was left the home, but the other is trying to be steal it in a way.

The hook
You begin with the dialogue between the two sisters, which introduces us to part of the conflict of the story. This serves well in hooking the reader.

Dialogue
The dialogue shows a lot of the characters personalities. The story is shown through the exchange of words with these two sisters. One is apparently trying to cheat the other and lying about why the father left them as children.

Character develment
You use a lot of body language that help with showing these characters. Magyn seems to be a bully, belittling her sister. Rather than respecting her, she calls her crazy. Jez seems to have a lot of confidence, which is likely to do with her understanding the truth.

Scenery
The story takes place in what I imagine to be an older home.we are not given a lot of descriptions, but there is enough to show the story.

Plot
The plot is interesting and relatable. I think that most of us who have experienced someone's passing can relate to this. The little twist at the end was pretty good.

Mechanics
There were a few word usage and grammar issues. Below are what I found.

I want to know what you, think, you remember from the night Daddy abandoned us."- commas are not needed.

Megyn gave her, younger, sister a sidelong look.- commas are not needed.

Now, if you want to here what happened that night- Hear

George, told you. Didn't her?- he

watched Magyn removed a box of groceries- remove

Jezebel sat down on the, sheet covered, couch- commas not needed

Final thoughts
This was a good flash fiction piece. There just needs to be some corrections made.

Thank you for sharing your writing. Remember, the opinions expressed here are from only one person. It is up to you, the writer, to determine what advice to apply. Hopefully my thoughts on your writing have been helpful. As always, when you get around to making corrections, let me know and I will up my rating according to repairs.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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This was an amazing article! The title is what first caught my intererest. Knowing that this was written for Project Write World, I knew it would be a cultural piece on India. The title is sort of light, but when I understood the deeper meaning of that title it weighted heavy on my heart. It is one of those aspects that always sticks with you. When I see a balloon, I will forever see that barefooted girl and her story.

This article shows the sad truth of the cast system in India, but ends with the hope for change present in newer generations. It could serve as a literary write, advocating for change.

You don't include this in your article, but those in the United States contribute to this sad system, encouraging prostitution of these young girls. Sadly, many travel to places like India because the can buy the sexual services of children. It is horrifying to me to think of this being the norm of existance for a child.

Your explanation of modern generations gives me hope that this is in the process of changing. No child deserves such a fate.

I found it interesting how you explained the way of thinking being a comfort to those who are in poverty. It encourages some heavy contemplation. I can see how the acceptance of where one is as being a punishment can serve as a comfort. When one realizes that it is an injustice and wrong, I imagine they would be less accepting of their plite and angry.


Overall excellent writing! You even include some great resources to learn more. Thank you for sharing a part of your culture to educate others.


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Review of The Quilt Block  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)

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What a lovely story, Snow. I am assuming that the words in bold print are prompt words. If so, this was a creative use of the prompt. It is one of those stories that reminds the reader to appreciate those that we love.


The hook

Right away we are introduced to one of the main conflicts in the story, which is finding the letter from her mother. That is a great hook. Though, there are some unneeded descriptions in the first paragraph. We don't really need to know so much about what she did with the scissors and pin. It doesn't really add to the story. Instead, it makes it a bit too wordy.

Dialogue
Dialogue includes realistic speech. You do well adding the actions of the story, rather than the redundant said. This helps the reader see the story more.

Character development
The characters need more emotions. For example, when she notices her mother walk into the room and asks her mother about the quilt, one would think she would be shocked and emotional, yet she just seems calm as if it is a normal life event. With removing some of the wordy content about the scissors and needle, you could add these details while remaining within your word limit.

Scenery
Scenery is pretty basic, but just enough to show the story.

Plot
The plot is really good! This was an excellent use of the prompt words. Even with such a short word limit, you were able to add a twist.

Final thoughts
I really liked the concepts in this story. It was spiritual and inspirational.

Thank you for sharing your writing. Remember, the opinions expressed here are from only one person. It is up to you, the writer, to determine which advice to apply. Hopefully my thoughts on your writing have been helpful.


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Rated: E | (2.5)

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I noticed that you were requesting a review on this for the Power Review Raid. It is an emotive read and I am sure it was emotional for you to write.

I imagine that your reasoning for the capital Y in you and your is to give strength to it, similar to what we do in poetry. For that purpose it works.

The story you present in the letter is a touching one. It is of a daughter who once put a lot of distance between her and her father, yet she realizes she was wrong to do that. I am happy that you made peace with your father.

The issue with this is that you use commas incorrectly throughout. To show you where would be editing the whole item for you. There are also multiple sentence fragments. I would suggest getting a good program like the most recent Microsoft Word.

Again, this is a sweet letter and your words to your father are quite emotional. There is just too many grammar issues for me to give it a higher rating. Hopefully you will take the time to correct this at some point. When you do, hopefully you will notify me. I will be happy to up my rating according to any repairs you make.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Funny poem! Thanks for the belly laugh.

First thoughts

My first thoughts after first reading this, after I had a good laugh, was wondering what kind of voodoo they practice in Chilli. I've studied quite a bit of it, but I am ignorant to the practices in Chilli. Most of what is practiced in the United States is mixed with Christian aspects.

Imagery
The imagery is pretty strait up, telling a story, rather than using metaphor. It works well for the comical aspect you are trying to achieve. I got a vivid image of this man dancing with a chicken and falling in poo. *Bigsmile*

Rhyme and flow
Rhymes are consistant without seeming forced. Though, there are a few issues that make me trip a little when I read it out loud.

Remember the chilli she does create- "Chilli she creates" would flow better

Folkses- I don't think this is an actual word. Did you mean folks?

Final thoughts
This was a fun read. I had a good laugh, which was obviously it's intended purpose. Thank for sharing your gift of comedy!♡


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Review of A Sandy Funeral  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Excellent job painting the disturbing reasonings of a sociopathic mind. At first after reading this I was confused, then I remembered he met her at the beach and now he is burying her there in an unmarked grave.

His excuse for everything he does is so matter of fact, which is chilling and realistic to the mental process of such an individual. Now he has found a new love and one can conclude what her obvious fate is.

This was a cool little introduction to a frightening individual. I could see his character being used in a longer story.

Thank you for sharing your dark imagination with me. ♡


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Review of The Idea  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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With my tablet, for some reason genre and previous story ratings are invisible to me. So, since I could not see the genre, I was surprised more so by the outcome, especially since what you mostly write is horror.

This was an interesting take on those who carved the presidents into that mountain. Those who onserved, must have thought they were insane. Also, like you mentioned, it must have been miserable working in the heat and cold.

The only issue I see here is that "said" is a little redundant. You are an excellent writer, so I would encourage you to improve it even more so by incorporating other descriptions to explain speech, or better yet show the story more by including more body language instead.

I enjoyed your imaginative peek into the past. Thank you for sharing your writing. ♡


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This was hilarious! I (almost) feel guilty getting a Yule tree this year.

The author names was a good touch. Very creative.

You do well with dark satire. In the letter there is a hint at horror with the murderous descriptions. With the tree personified, it is easy to imagine a human telling the story.

Great story! Thanks for sharing your imagination with me.


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Review of Angelique  Open in new Window.
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What a sweet tale! I wasn't sure where exactly you were taking this, but since you didn't include it as being in the horror genre, I suspected it might be more inspirational.

The hook
Right away we are introduced to one of the main characters, who is obviosly out of place in a youthful enviroment. We know that he has been running from something, which increases interest in the reader.


Dialogue
You handle dialogue like a pro. Spoken words in quotation marks follow normal speech patterns, rather than being unrealistically formal. There is also a lot of character development in their words. In addition, you use plenty of body language, instead of the redundant "said"

Character development
Personalities shine through in the actions of the story. Characters are interesting. There are plenty of hints to the main character's full identity, without giving the secret out completely.

Mrs. Belvoir is an interesting woman. Her interest in Michael is obvious, and at first I was thinking maybe she was a demon, hence the group name Demon Spawn. Nice little detour.

Scenery
There is plenty of descriptions in the actions of the story, while avoiding being overly wordy. The contrast between Michael's appearance shows the youthful metal scene more so.

Plot
The plot was interesting. When she realizes his real identity and their purpose, her reaction is realistic. I think we all would react that way to some degree.

There is plenty of hints throughout, some that are purposefully misleading, which help the ending to be a surprise.

Final thoughts
This is one of those stories that leaves the reader with a feeling of hope and happiness. Since your writing is so diverse, I really wasn't sure where you would take this.

Thanks for sharing your writing! ♡


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Finally here to finish up your reviews. Sorry for the delay. It has been a crazy week.

I was surprised that this item was not already awarded. It was a fun read! Thanks for the laugh! *Bigsmile*

When I first started reading this I saw myself. If I saw such an add, my curiosity would get the best of me and I would have to check it out.


Imagery

The imagery is pretty strait forward, telling a story in poetic format. The menu descriptions were quite witty! I especially like the eye scream desert. *Bigsmile*

Rhyme and flow

Rhymes are consistant without sounding forced when read outloud. Each stanza flows effortless to the next, without any confusing bits. The story told and his eventual demise gave me a good belly laugh.

Final thoughts

I was happy to award this, but can't believe this sat in your port for over 3 years without a ribbon. It was an excellently written poem filled with comic elements. Thanks again for the laugh. *Bigsmile*


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Review of Double Wide  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I actually read this a while back when you posted it in a newsfeed. It gave me a good laugh then and it was just as comical on the second read. I have a special connection to this because of where I was living. This was a common site there. Well, that or the more upper class redneck with an overly starched pearl snap shirt and cowboy hat. My non-redneck boyfriend and I are always joking about it. We call it studying the mating rituals of the redneck. Things like revving an engine is their way of flirting.


Imagery
There are some clues to this woman's clothing that make this more commical. When I think of a cross my heart bra, I think of those cotton ones grandma would wear. That mixed with the rest of her clothing, pretty much fit the lower class redneck female species.

The trailorpark slang, comparing the woman to a trailor was funny. I imagine he eventually took her back to his Stabbing cabin (redneck for RV) and told her to get him a beer (redneck for I love you).


Rhyme and flow
The poem flows cohesively from stanza to stanza, building up to comical elements which tell a story of this redneck mating ritual.

Rymes are consistent without seeming forced.

Final thoughts
Everytime I read this, I have a good laugh. You are adept in the comedy genre. Thanks for sharing your wit and sense of humor.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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I am reviewing this as part of the package 🌖 HuntersMoon purchased for you in the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.. Though, I always love browsing your port. You are such a versatile writer, most of which is excellently crafted.


The hook
That first paragraph encourages the reader to believe that the main character is going to do something illegal. I wanted to read more to see what he was going to do.

Dialogue
Most of the story is what is going on in his head, but the limited dialogue that you offer is realistic.

Character development
There is a lot of back story thrown into the actions of the story that show that the man rightfully dislikes the president. Descriptions of the nervous sweat and shaking hand gave me the illusion that his mental state was due to his future actions being against his morality, as well as the fear of getting caught.

Scenery
The scenery is influenced by there being a doorman and the main characters choice in clothing. It is not difficult to imagine a formal political gathering.

Plot
Being that it was written by you, I knew there would be an unexpected turn. You had me so distracted by the idea of a gun with expressing memories of ones he had fired that I didn't even consider there being something other than a gun in his pocked. Very tricky! And a funny ending too!

Final thoughts
I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing your imagination and humor.


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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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I'm back agian, to complete the package purchased for you from Huntersmoon. It has been a pleasure browsing through your port.

This story was relatable, whether one has faced abuse or not. Everyone at one time has felt heartbreak to the point of possibly giving up on love coming into their life.

The hook
Her emotional state about what she calls sappy movies shows that there is a reason rooted in her life that encourages the reaction. It also sets the stage for the story either being about love lost or found. So, I was curious where you were going to take it.

Dislogue
There isn't really any dialogue until the end. We are being told her thoughts, rather than shown them. Though, at the end she speaks out loud to herself, which shows she is trying to keep her resolve.

Character development
Other than the first paragraph, we are told about the character rather than shown her. She is someone who has chosen abusers more than once, but now has begun her journey on being more independent alone. Some, like myself, who can relate, would say this is one of the important aspects of recovering. We must spend time alone, learning to love ourselves, so that we no longer accept unacceptable behaviors of abuse again.

Scenery
There isn't really any of her enviroment shown to show the story. She has obviosly begun again. From my own experience, I imagined her home void of a lot of things, because a lot of times abused women walk away from all material things to get away from the abuser.

Plot
The concept is good and relatable. There just needs to be more showing of the story rather than telling it.

Final thoughts
I liked the concepts in this story. It is one that many of us women have faced. That choosing to be single and less reliant on searching for someone to save us, is an important part of the healing process.

Thank you for sharing your writing. Remember, the opinions expressed here are from only one person. It is up to you, the writer, to determine which advice to apply. Hopefully my ideas have been helpful. If you get around to making any repairs, hopefully you will notify me so that I can up my rating according to those repairs.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Since I love horror, I figured I'd start my journey through your port with reviewing an entry to screams. This was a great little psychological horror.


The hook
The title grabbed me at first glance. As children, most of us had a fear of something lurking in the darkness of the closet. I was curious to where you would take the idea.

That first paragraph hooked me. Right away we know that she is afraid of something. She is apparently an adult, since you mention it being her childhood home, but she is still fearful of something.

Dialogue
Internal dialogue is done well, showing the emotions and personality of the character.

Words spoken in italics follow normal speech patterns, while avoiding being overly formal. When she speaks out-loud, it realistic to what one would say in situalions, like when she shouts a profanity in the beginning and then later speaks to her fears, pretty much telling them to go away.


Character development
I get an image of a child that was not believed, but her fear was very real. Now an adult, she set her goals to prove her fears were valid. She is intelligent and has chosen to face her fears with the use of science.

The body language used between father and daughter seem typical of a healthy relationship. He teases a bit about the closet, but the fact that he put a lock on the door, rather than forcing her to face the fears, shows that he was probably nurturing.

Scenery
There is just enough description into the actions of the story. The reader is shown a typical girls bedroom, but you mainly focus on the closet. The image of this thing in her nightmares is pretty vivid.

Plot
I feel that you took this in an unexpected place. There was plenty of suspense built up through her reactions when entering her childhood bedroom. Once we get toward the end, the use of the invention was a surprise. I wouldn't exactly call it horrific, but it was definitely a unique take on the prompt.

Final thoughts
I enjoyed this story. The beginning gives that creepy feel that is fitting to horror and I liked her resolution.

Thanks for sharing your writing. I have enjoyed the read. ♡


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Although, our belief systems differ, I found this to be inspirational. Growing up with the serinity prayer, I still refer to it when I am stressed. Though, the version I refer to is much different and simplified.

The hook
The story begins with showing the character's emotional state. She has just gotten bad news again. She seems to be losing hope and falling into depression from the weight of it.

This did grab me, encouraging me to read more, because I was curious as to the news she got. Since this is listed under inspirational, I was curious of what would lift her spirits.

Dialogue
Dialogue is done really well. Instead of the redundant "she said", you add dialogue into the actions of the story. This helps the reader see the story and characters more clearly.

Her sarcasm in the dialogue in the begining, shows her negative emotional state well. Her frustration with life is strongly shown in her words.

Character development
At first I was thinking the main character was a bit dramatic, but I suppose we all have been at that point in life at one time or another. Life can become overwhelming at times.This frustration with life and struggle to find the positive, is an aspect that makes the character relatable to the reader.

Simon seems powerful, wise, and gentle. Some of the facts about the pray are interesting. I was completely ignorant to who actually was the first to write it.


Scenery
You did well avoiding long drawn out descriptions. There is just enough description to show the story.

Plot
This was a nice little inspirational story. I somewhat knew what was going to happen once I realized Simon was part of a dream, but it didn't lesson the stories impact or spiritual message.

Final thoughts
This was one of those stories that leaves the reader feeling warm and fuzzy. It is a sweet story with a powerful message. Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Yep, here again for more horror filled stories. This story was intriguing. I kept reading to see what that tapping was.

The hook
I must admit that that first line did grab me, but for the wrong reasons. This being horror, I took it in the literal sense of the food actually speaking to the character. Yet, it became obvious that this was a metaphor for either indigestion or a tummy ache. Since milk is often used to help both issues, you might want to clarify which one it is through a bit of imagery. Maybe describe the acid coming up in her/his throat for indigestion, or the burning in his/her tummy.

Dialogue
There is only inner dialogue, which expresses the main character's thoughts. This is done well and seems to be realistic to the situation.

Character development
There is an issue with whether the main character is female or male. Being that you use "I" and you are female, I assumed the character might be. So, when she looks in the mirror seeing the woman in the reflection, I assumed it was her own reflection that feared her. Then it was clarified that this was not the case after reading the sentences after the first introduction to the woman in the mirror.

Other than that, the main character is realistic. Most of us, whether we are male or female, would react in such a way to a strange tapping.

Scenery
Scenery descriptions are limited, but there is just enough to tell the actions of the story. You avoid long drawn out descriptions that are irrelevant to the plot.

Plot
The plot was interesting. I did want to keep fallowing that tapping. The conclusion was one of horror, which made it a great ending, in my opinion.

Final thoughts
I enjoyed your story and was hooked from beginning until the end. Hopefully at some time you will get around to adding some edits. When you do, make sure to let me know and I will up my rating according to repairs.

Thank you for sharing your writing. I've enjoyed my time in your port. *Heart*














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