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Review Style
I try to give reviews the way I prefer to receive them. Honesty, thoughts for improvement, and identifying strengths are aspects that I prefer from others, so I give these things in return.
I'm good at...
I can pretty much review anything, whether poetry or short stories. My favorite genres to read are horror and the odder side of fiction, but I am open to reading other genres. If I do review a genre that is not one I particularly enjoy reading, then I am most likely going to review it based on the structure, rather than the content.
Favorite Genres
I tend to gravitate toward writings in the dark genres. With short stories and novels, horror is my favorite. With poetry, I prefer writings that display raw emotions. If your writing tackles a subject that people find offensive, I might like it.
Least Favorite Genres
Christian literature, Western, and Children's. I will NOT read or review anything that consists of XGC material between minors and adults or encourages abuse as acceptable behaviors.
Favorite Item Types
Dark poetry, horror, emotional, autobiographical, erotica, psychology
Least Favorite Item Types
Horror is one of my favorites to read and write. Also, poetry that tackles intense subject matter interests me.
I will not review...
I WILL NOT review anything that encourages abuse as acceptable behavior or includes XGC material between a minor and adult. All review requests asking me to read whole novels or later chapters will be rejected. The reason being is that I can not give a fair review of chapter 3 when I have not read the chapters before that and, the time allowance when requests for reviews are made does not allow for enough time to read a whole novel.
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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi there! I'm finally getting to judging the Honoring the Dead contest. *Bigsmile*

This was a lovely tribute to an amazing human. It is well written as well.

She appears to have been a gifted woman with a big heart. I love how you show how she encouraged your success through her advice and expertise.

Sad her life was cut short by Cancer, but from what I gather from your writing, she made the most out of the life she was given, bringing smiles to the faces of others through her puppeteering and mentoring others, such as yourself, in the art.

Wonderful story and thank you for sharing it with us in the contest.


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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing this because you submitted it to the July/August 2021 round in "Distorted Minds Contest" . Thank you for submitting your story to the contest!

Title and intro
I loved the title and description of this one! It was intriguing without giving up the plot. Nice play on words in the description.

What I liked
At first when I began reading this, I thought it was going to be an adultish version of the littles. The descriptions of their living space further made me think so. Then I found out this boy was the child of one of these giants. I'm assuming the mom was a giant, since she is married to the brute giant. This would mean the little people more so resemble those with dwarfism. Either way, the concept of these hidden people in the walls and secret alleys was very creative.

There's some great dimensional characters here too. I like how you added some cultural things, like how the shop keeper speaks as if English is obviously not his first language.

The prompt was used in an interesting way, without being cliché, which made for a more entertaining read.


Suggestions
It was obvious you spent a lot of time on this story because of how defined the characters are. Though I felt there was something amiss. These little people are not supposed to be seen by the giants, but they are sent out to pick pocket them. If they were little people as in those tiny people in The Little's books, this would make sense. People aren't looking for itty bitty people and they could easily not be seen by the full size humans. With them being the size of children there would be no way for them not to be visible to the larger people.

Due to that, I thought your wording about the little people not being seen might have actually meant not getting caught. Then the little Asian friend meets his little person friend and we find out you actually did mean they were not supposed to be seen.


Thank you for contributing your story to the contest! Hopefully you will continue to share your creativity in the contest. *Heart*


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of Be Brave  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing this because you submitted it to the July/August 2021 round in "Distorted Minds Contest" . Thank you for submitting your story to the contest!

Title and description
The title is perfect to the item. Though, I'd suggest writing a description which would intrigue potential readers. You could always add an authors note at the bottom of your story. As far as the word count. I'm not really picky. You could even only add that in your post when you submit your item.

What I liked
I was excited to see someone tackle this prompt. In my mind I saw all sorts of ways people could go with this prompt, but I knew it was a challenging one. The poetic prose was a smart way to go with this. It is fitting.

Your use of anaphora with the repeated phrase "we dance the dance" works well with intensifying the emotive content of the writing. The end was especially written well. I imagined a Native American, grinning as he/she said it for some reason.

Suggestions
There is a few places in the story poem where you reverse the subject and predicate. At first I thought maybe you were doing what Stephen Graham Jones does in his books. He writes the way those on the reservations speak with slang and all. Though, I don't think people on reservations commonly reverse the subject and predicate. There are also some run on sentences. Below are a few examples of what I mean.

In the heat of renewing flame your faces they will melt.- Reversed subject and predicate

They'll beat in heads and stab through the hearts of the young no suffering will they feel- Run-on sentence and reversed subject and predicate on the second sentence.

For centuries did they wait.- This reads as a question, instead of a statement. Seems "for centuries they waited" would be more fitting.

Overall, this is a great poetic prose, fitting to the prompt, and fitting to the contest. Thanks for sharing your writing. Hopefully you will submit a story again in the future. *Heart*


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of Inner Enemy  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing this because you submitted it to the July/August 2021 round in "Rebel Poetry Contest" . Thank you for submitting your poetry to the contest!

Imagery
Do to the title and description we are introduced to the concept the poem is about the inner self. So, when I read the poem I am reading it as if it were an inner voice of degradation, pointing the finger at the self as being to fault for all. Then the first stanza sets the pace for your inner voice, letting us know there is a dark cloud around you.

I was a little confused by the last stanza because of the "you don't understand". If this is an internal voice, hence you, then you obviously know you are at fault or at least feel you are, so it seems as if you have switched to actually talking to another person who you feel is at fault for whatever pain you are feeling.

Emotive qualities
The language is matter-of fact, which tells the reader exactly what you are thinking. Outside of the initial stanza, there isn't any metaphor. Some other metaphor or simile would have heightened the emotiveness of the poem.


Flow
The poem flows smooth without anything to trip over.

Thanks for submitting your writing to the contest. Hopefully you will continue to submit your poetry. It is always wonderful seeing new faces. *Heart*


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review by Warped Sanity
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This piqued my interest because I am a survivor of multiple types of abuse. That being said, unlike your claim of being accused of victim blaming, I didn't feel as such. It was written from the point of view of someone who is holding himself accountable for his own mistakes, but realizing the whole picture, rather than just a fragment.

Maybe I didn't see it as victim blaming because, after choosing the same qualities in men, I realized I needed to take a hard look at myself and why I made the choices I did. Only then, could I learn to make better choices.

Though, I would like to say, men are not the only abusers. They are just the ones who stand out. Some behaviors in men which are deemed abuse, seem to be acceptable by society by women. My step-father, who raised me when I was in my early elementary years, actually divorced my mother due to her inflicting emotional and physical abuse. It does happen. People just don't talk about it as much. Or, rather abused men are less vocal about it than women are. The same with childhood abuse, especially if it is sexual. I suspect more males are sexually abused more as children than statistics say. The reason being, they are less likely to speak up, which makes them more of a target.

I believe trauma is the leading cause of one being an abuser in their adult life. Maybe I'm wrong, but it makes sense to me. Every abuser I've encountered has had some sort of trauma.


I suppose this is more of a response than a review. Since it was an opinion piece on a touchy subject, it seemed to beg more for a response from me.

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Review of The Arrival  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .

What I Liked
I loved this feministic tale of the biblical flood. Since this apparently happened all over the world, I thought of this as maybe another ark distant from the biblical one, with a different sent of customs and beliefs.

There was some good imagery here as well. For example how you described the lioness appearing.

Thoughts on improvement
I didn't really see anything you needed to improve. The story was interesting and I enjoyed the read.

Thanks for sharing your creativity with us. *Smile*
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Review of Robot Riders  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering!

What I Liked
I thought you did exceptionally well on the dialogue. I could easy tell who was speaking and feel the personalities of the speakers. The story itself was creative and unique.

Thoughts on improvement
For the first half of the story I felt more like I was reading a script, rather than a short story, mostly because you tell us a description, then present dialogue, rather than throwing the dialogue in with the descriptions of what is going on.

Overall, I enjoyed the story. It was a good read. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us.
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Review of The Dawn Riders  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering!

What I liked
I felt a lot of the character descriptions were executed well. The action sequences were written well too. With the girlfriend's gut feelings, I figured the outcome would be the demise of the main character, so the ending was unexpected, which is good.

As a member of the audience, reading this, it seems that there was a lesson here. He had survived an accident before in another race and the fatality in this one could have been him.

Thoughts on correction

This is probably just personal preference, but I'm not a big fan of long flashbacks in short stories. I believe it works well in novels, but is distracting in short stories. Though, I see the purpose and relevance to the story.

Thank you for sharing your imagination with WDC. I enjoyed reading your story.




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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering!


This imagined future was a unique post apocalyptic tale. So, A+ on originality. The descriptions of the alien race were especially interesting as well. Great details there.

The dialogue and character development was executed well too. There is plenty of body language to go along with the dialogue which helps us see these characters. They are likable and as a reader, I found myself hoping for their survival.

Thanks for sharing your imagination with us. I've enjoyed the read.




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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .

What I Liked
These characters came alive for me. I saw the main character a bit more nerdy looking in comparison to this Chavez guy. By his reactions, I got the feeling he wasn't used to getting the pretty girls, which made him more gullible.

Thoughts on improvement
I did guess there was going to be some trickery going on and that he'd be left broke and/or holding the bag and I was correct. So, it would have been nice to be a little more surprised in the outcome. Other than that I couldn't find any issues with the story.


This was a well-written piece with great character details. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. *Smile*
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Review of LA Race  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

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I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering!

What I Liked
I thought the relationship between the siblings was endearing. Them uniting seemed to only be part of the story though. The main character seemed to cope with her new handicap from the accident by avoiding her sister who she once was able to ride bikes with. In the end they find a way they can still do that, which is sweet.

Thoughts on improvement

Finally, she her(heard) the front door open and shut, a bit forcefully.. It appears you forgot a few letters in the word there.

I wasn't really clear on what the accident was. I sort of assumed it was a bike accident, but it was never clarified in the story. Also, she is moody, probably because she is in pain, yet it almost seems a bit dramatic because her sister says something about her back being broken. Yet, she is on crutches. It seems she would be in a wheelchair if her back was broken.

Thanks for sharing your creativity. I enjoyed reading your story. Good luck in the contest. *Heart*
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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi,Beholden ! I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .


What I liked
These two hermits were interesting characters and the pessimistic hermit does make a good protagonist. Plus, I liked the comical revelation at the end. Honestly, I was thinking the experience conflicted with their beliefs, especially with all the conversing with people along the way and the convention, where there would be a lot of people.

Suggestions
The story was wonderful and easy to read, without a bunch of issues to trip over, but it seemed very predictable to me. Even that being the case, I do like that the weakest of the two seemed to be the smartest. *Bigsmile*

Final thoughts
Overall, this was a fun read. I really liked these characters and the premise of the story.

Thank for sharing your writing. Hopefully, you will continue to submit your writing to future contests. *Heart*
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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

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Hi,PureSciFi ! I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .


What I liked
I thought that the concepts within the plot were interesting and unique. It is definitely an imaginative story for sure. Also, you adhered to the prompt. Your villain was made likable. Even though he did so for his own selfish means, his actions were for the greater good.

Suggestions
I tripped quite a bit in areas because you switch from present tense to past tense constantly throughout the whole story. Also, there are some sentence structure issues, where you use sentence fragments.

Final thoughts
This was an interesting science fiction story. I just felt that it needs some editing.

Thank you for sharing your writing. Hopefully, you will continue to submit your writing to future contests. *Heart*
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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

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Hi,Author Ed Anderson ! I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .



Honestly, I can't find anything to not like about this story, except for the bigotry of the family. I found myself rooting for the villains in the story, even though their acts were harmful to others. Of course, they could have found their freedom through more legal means, but it was easy to see how these young men may have not seen another way out of the abuse they were living in.

Overall, you have given us a great story, with plenty of character development and a great plot that hits the reader in the gut. Great job.
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Review of Deadline  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.0)

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Hi,Angelica- House Florent B & W ! I'm here to review this as one of the judges for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" .

What I liked
I thought you did a great job adhering to the prompt. Obviously this character is not the greatest person because they were creating potions that are harmful to humans. Yet, they are likable because they end up using the potions for just means.

Suggestions
I felt there were some issues in the execution of the story. The intro is a bit wordy with a lot of telling, and some grammar issues. Plus, there are some run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and comma issues. You would benefit from using a free grammar program like Grammarly, which would catch a lot of these issues for you.

Final Thoughts
I thought the storyline was good and it adhered to the prompt. I just think it needs more editing.

Thank you for sharing your writing. Hopefully you will continue to submit to the contest. *Heart*
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Review of mGur on Spirit  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Oh, what a lovely little poem! With so few word allowance, you have express such deep meaning.

I believe most could identify with these words, to at least a small degree. We all at one time or another have held back that free-spirited part of ourselves for a multitude of reasons.

That last line was a perfect way to summarize the verse. It expands on the spirit, showing us that you are referring to love. At least that is how I understood it. But, like most poetry, the reader interprets upon their own experience and knowledge of the world, a lot of times. So, for me, I understood it as the writer holds back their heart.

Structurally, as far as my analysis, the poem follows the format of the form perfectly. Grammatically, it is well executed and flows beautifully.

Excellent job and good luck in the contest! *Heart*
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Review of Dragon Poem  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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It is so awesome that you are motivated and doing so many of the extras within Rising Stars! You've put a lot into these pieces too and should be proud of yourself for the effort you have put forth.


First thoughts
My first thoughts after reading this the first time are that this was a cute idea. It would make for a great children's story, with pictures and such. I don't think there is a story published story about a dragon that meows yet. *Bigsmile*

Imagery
The imagery is fun and lively. I could clearly see this big, pretty blue dragon, who might seem fierce, that is until it lets out a meow, rather than a large beastly sound.

Flow
The poem flows well due to rhyme. You use some less cliche rhymes like "various" and "nefarious", too.

The only thing that threw me off a bit with the flow is that in a few places you switch the subject and predicate. For example, "Pets their owners do resemble". If the subject and predicate were not reversed it would read, "Pets do resemble their owners." Often times when the subject and predicate is reversed like that it feels forced, rather than smooth.

Mechanics
I didn't find any grammar or spelling issues, so excellent job on the editing.

Final thoughts
This was an adorable idea. I love the concept and could totally see you expanding on this dragon named Cat into a larger children's series.

Thank you for sharing! And, good luck in the contest! *Heart*


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of By Any Other Name  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I ran across this while browsing the random read and reviews. To my surprise, it is also in your Rising Star folder. Apparently, you have only just written it today as one of the challenges. WdC was awfully quick with putting it in the random reviews!

The hook
Right away we are taken to one of the main dilemmas in the story, her insecurity with her given name. We all have known that one kid in school where we think, what were their parents thinking when they named them that. Kids will find anything to tease others about, why make things worse with targeting them with a horrid birth name.

This made for a good hook, especially since it added to the conclusion, where she contemplates the sound of her possible future name.

Dialogue
The dialogue was executed well, showing these characters well. Thoughts in italics, which makes them stand out hearing the words in our own heads, much like the character would.

Character Development
I liked Ruby. She is easy to relate to because, like her, most of us have some aspect in our childhood we'd like to run away from. She seems to be a bit of a romantic because she already considers how her name would sound if she marries a man she only recently met, or I should say thought she only recently met. Although, this also makes sense to her personality due to the trauma of growing up with a name, which made her a target for bullies.

Scenery
There is just enough to show the story without making things overly drawn-out. You show the most in the traffic scene, which is the most important scene in the story. This brings more attention to it and is fitting. Plus, the scenery is thrown into the actions of the story, making it an important part of the plot.

Plot
The plot is great. There are is enough twists to keep the reader curious without giving away the conclusion. The little surprise was really romantic too.

The only area that caused me to pause is when we find out her boss gave out her personal information. For me, this seemed unrealistic because it is very unprofessional and illegal.

Mechanics
I didn't find any structural issues within the writing. Well done on the editing aspect.

Final thoughts
I enjoyed this story. It is a great little story with plenty of surprises to keep the reader reading. Thanks for sharing it!


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi, Snow! I ran across this emotive little write while browsing the random read and reviews. Your words sort of punch the reader in the gut, forcing them to see the horrors that exist.

There is some strong language here that really impact the reader. This line is especially effective:

"while on the street corners of extinction
innocence victims gather,"

Reading this line, I felt I was looking at a crowd of people gathered in an area, doing mundane things, unafraid as if they were going to have several tomorrows ahead, when in fact soon they will be dead. It is quite chilling if you think about it.

Excellent verse! Hopefully, you won that round. Thank you for sharing your writing. *Heart*
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Review of One Life  
Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I ran across this little free verse while browsing the random read and reviews. At first, after reading this, I felt that I could relate to this on many levels. Although most of the time, if the reader does not know the writer personally, we tend to interpret poetry on our own personal experiences in life or those we have been exposed to.

For me, I thought of the writer overanalyzing their choices in life. Sometimes when this happens there is no movement. The anxiety of whether the choices we see are the right ones causes us to pause and try to see what changes that choice will make in our lives. Yet, the future can not be predicted and we have to have courage, which comes from faith in order to trudge forward in hopes that it is the correct choice to make.

I think it is a poet curse sometimes to over-analyze everything, looking for the greater meaning. In a way, this poem was the embodiment of that for this reader.

No matter, if I was correct about its meaning or not, it is a great little free verse. Thank you for sharing your writing. *Heart*


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of The Poet  
Review by Warped Sanity
Rated: E | (5.0)
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While browsing the random read and reviews, I ran across this little treasure. I absolutely love this. For me, It is showing how the poets intent many times differ from how the reader interprets it. People tend to interpret poetry upon their own personal experience, much like I am right now since I am a fellow poet.

There are some awesome metaphors in this poem. My favorite is

"But the poem
does not wrinkle
smoothed sheets."

Although at first, I saw this as how people misinterpret the writer's original intent, on second reading, I found a possible dual meaning. The poem can represent the embodiment of what poetry is. It is very personal to the creator, because like you wrote, "she arranges and stacks a preponderance of evidence against herself." When I read that line I thought of how many of us poets share aspects we normally hide from the world in our poetry. The evidence of who we are beneath the mundane surface mask we share with the world, one would only have read our hearts in verse.

An amazing poem you have here. One of the best free verse poems I've read in a while. Thanks for sharing!

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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was an interesting read. Upton Sinclair was quite the activist. I'm sure he'd be screaming in his grave if he could see what is going on in the news and the political arena in modern times.

I appreciate how you show how history is repeating itself. It does seem that we don't learn from past errors, or maybe they are feeding on the lesson in another way, expanding on ways of manipulating the public view.

Reading about his influences, I couldn't help but relate because I too grew up in extreme poverty and with a parent who had an addiction. It is a hard life and like him, I too had a family with money, but on my father's side, so I saw the disparity as well. It does give one a unique and more well-rounded perspective.

This was well-written, full of informative information, and even though it is about someone in history, much of the information here is relevant to today. Plus, you use language that shows you have a great appreciation for the writer, which creates more interest in the one reading this.

Overall, great job on the assignment. Thanks for putting so much into this. You are a good writer.



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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


What a lovely write-up for a truly legendary writer! Hemingway was an interesting fellow. Like many artistic individuals, apparently, he was prone to depression, hence your mention of his suicide and experienced shock therapy.

I like that you post some of his writing to show some of the creative thought he is known for. In addition, you add why you chose him. It must be quite an honor to say that he is associated with your home town.

You share some information about him that I was unaware of. I guess though, I should not be surprised he was being tapped by the FBI. A lot of people were at the time due to widespread communist fear.

I especially appreciate that you share references. Due to my years in college, I guess I became a bit of a stickler for this. It is important to use the information in your own words, but give credit where credit is due.

Thank you for putting a lot of effort into this assignment. You did well with it.


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Review by Warped Sanity
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, OOT™ ! For my "a very Wodehouse challenge"  I've been challenged to review five fundraisers on WdC and I've chosen yours as one of them.

This is a great little raffle. I love that you feature a new group each week. It gives the opportunity to spread the love a bit more.

Another cool aspect of the raffle is that you award the one who bought the winner the tickets too. That is pretty creative and something I haven't seen in a WdC raffle before.

Visually, your template is pretty simple, but not so simple it is boring. The theme, in general, seems to match. The image with the tickets, teamed with the top image is like we are buying a vacation ticket. Plus, the image matches the season, at least in my part of the world anyway. The Spring weather has been beautiful and perfect for the lake or beach.

Something I like as well is that you put the ticket number and user in a list on the page. That way, members can visually evaluate what the winnings might be and possibly check your virtual dice roll. Some people do check the dice rolls to make sure the raffle is being fair to know whether they will contribute more in the future.

The only suggestion I would have is maybe to put the tickets bought into a dropdown menu. It would make the page cleaner and more visually appealing. Other than that, I really have no other suggestions.

Thanks for hosting this lovely raffle! I'll be buying more tickets each week for our lovely Rising Star candidates. *Heart*
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Review by Warped Sanity
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi, Amy! For my "a very Wodehouse challenge"  I've been challenged to review five fundraisers on WdC and I've chosen yours as one of them.

What I think is pretty neat is that you make it a daily raffle, that way people don't have to wait a whole month for their awards. Plus, more people can win.

The title is perfect for the season and catchy. I like the play on words. Plus, the top image on the forum is blingy, which adds to the lively feel spring gives.

In addition, you tend to support some great groups with your raffles. For me, this is always a plus.

I do have a few suggestions though. You seem to have forgotten to change the dates on the page. It states that the raffle is taking place in 2017 when it is actually 2019. Also, a dropdown menu showing raffle tickets bought and their number would encourage more to buy tickets. There are a few reasons this would be beneficial. One, as the number goes up, it will show an estimate of how many gift points they might win if they buy tickets. Secondly, it would also give people the opportunity to view your dice roll, since you would be using the numbers listed with the names, which would clarify to others that it was a fair win.

Thank you for hosting this great raffle. Any suggestions I have are only thoughts on making something already good better. Of course, this is the opinions of only one person. It is up to you, the author, to decide which advice to apply.


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