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#4659898

Review of Lost in the Storm: Weeping for a Willow

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Rated: E

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item because I came across it while perusing writings in "One Writer's Favorites!"

. I was pulled into reading this from your title and brief description.

I, too, have seen what storms can do to beautiful, mature trees. In my case it was an ice storm that wreaked havoc on some of my trees. However, none were Weeping Willows.

I have always wanted a huge willow tree on my land, but as you say, they do dig their roots deeply into drainage systems.

Your story, very much a prose-like writing, short, almost lyrical in nature because it talks about the nature of a majestic tree.

I loved how you describe its destruction and the feelings of sadness when it was down on the ground after the storm. Weeping for a Weeping Willow -- mourning its loss. Beautifully crafted to bring the personal tragedy of its loss to the reader.

I found no spots where there needed to be any repairs. Well written and actually, well-painted imagery sketched into the reader's mind. I saw that tree both standing proudly, and lying down on the ground, not salvageable.

Great job!

Until next time--write on!

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#4659897

Review of Darkness Doesn't Frighten Me

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Rated: E

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My dear Sherri, I fell upon this poem via another writer's link. I couldn't resist saying a few words in honor of your mom's memory and yours.

This poem touched my heart and made me reflect on that sudden feeling of a daughter who lost her mother.

I give it 5 stars, because no one knows the feelings of the loss of a mother until they've experienced it, and it was one they loved so dearly.

I felt all of that reading your poem.

I remember how wonderful you were to me when my mother died, notes and card of sympathy sent to my home. You left us here a couple years later.

Thank you for the books you wrote that I have read.

It may seem odd to others, that I review a White Case, author, because she'll never see the review. But actually, I believe that you can see it too, and feel the spirit of love being sent right back to you.

I have reviewed your writings when you were here, but somehow missed this one. It is no longer missed, but you are, my friend.

You'll always be remembered, here!

Beautiful poem, with a spiritual touch of love after loss.

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#4657732

Review of Off the grid

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing this item because it really fit in nicely with my WDc Newsletter. Thus, Your poem has been highlighted in this week's Comedy Newsletter. I'm a bit late in sending this notice, but thought you'd like to know.

This was a fun read, fine rhyme, quick and quirky with good humor!

Until next time--write on!

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#4657010

Review of Meditation

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt!

First Impressions:

Love the title "Meditation" I knew you'd bring the reader down memory lane of springs forward and past and the times enjoyed or missed but always bringing back those memories.

You combine the nature with the images of the times of dancing in the rain.

Further Impressions:

You chose a Villanelle form of poetry.

I loved the smooth rhythm and rhyme.

I really loved the refrains used:

"bringing bygone visions into my sight."

"gossamer rainbows shimmer in the light."

Simply beautiful!

Other Favorite Parts:

arcane mystic droplets pull at my mind

forgotten sorrows and joys are entwined

Vague wisps of what was begin to rewind

All very well woven into the lines to bring the reader into the the life cycle which renewal is ever present after the winter's past. Love and loss, yet the promise of fresh beginnings come with spring. It's alive with nourishing rain, colors bursting forth ... all adding to make the memories sweeter rather than sorrowful.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done!

Until next time--write on!

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#4657005

Review of Remembrance

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Rated: E

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Poetry Month prompt in April.

First Impressions:

Love the title, it evokes thoughts of memories of people and times gone by. Your brief description shows the reader it is indeed a dual meaning of springs rebirth and remembrance of one who has passed on. It is the circle of life, and spring is always the time of rebirth.

Further Thoughts:

You chose a Villanelle form of poetry.

The rhythm and rhyme pattern is beautifully done. It paints vivid imagery that evokes both joy and sadness within its lines.

The joy of spring and the sounds and sites of the sea, as well as one of the refrain lines which is a reminder that there is a mourning as well. "in the mourning darkness heard, it is that night."

My Favorite Parts:

a godwit's peeps or the gull's shrill singing ...

so many gilded, silvered fish in the shallows finning

Remember to live life by faith and not by sight,

And of course the other alternating refrain: the clear clang of a bay's red buoy bright.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done! It brought both tears of hope and the misty eyes of sadness all at the same time.

Until next time--write on!

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#4656994

Review of April's Motivation

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Rated: E

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt.

You chose a Vilanelle:

It is beautifully crafted an embodies the senses that mingle within our spirit regarding the month of April.

The "Bones" of the Vilanelle:
5 tercets followed by quatrain with 2 repeating rhyme and 2 refrains.

Your poem does this handily!

Further Thoughts:

I loved the refrain chosen.

"Inhale the petrichor perfume of dawn."

Petrichor,thoughts of that very first spring rain which has an unmistakable scent. Excellent word choice.

Conclusion:

Very well done, indeed! I felt April within every fiber of my being.

Until next time--write on!

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#4656991

Review of Gervic's Poetic Explorations

for entry "Springtime in the Tropics"

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Rated: 13+

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt.

First Impressions:

"Springtime in the Tropics" It got me to thinking about how different April is in the tropics than so many other regions around the globe. It is of course that way where I reside half a year -- South Florida. It feels like summer in April.

Poetry Form:

You chose a sonnet. You have three quatrains and a couplet, 14 lines.

It has the magic of lyrics woven within.

Favorite Parts:

"Perhaps the deities sprinkled some magic
To please the gods with the grandest display"

"Of verdant plated prairies and meadows
Perfectly complements the azure sky.

These lines jumped out as true visual delights! Loved the azure sky.

Conclusion:

Well woven words to paint a beautiful scene of April in the tropics.

Nicely done!

Until next time--write on!

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#4656981

Review of Manna

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at T"The Bard's Hall Contest"

. Thank you for entering our April Poetry Month prompt.

You have chosen a Sapphic.

You completed this poetic form handily with the accentual syllabic meter.

The complete design inspires the meaning of April's spring renewal after a winter's sleep of nature.

Well-chosen words provide impact and a cadence that keeps the rhythm beating within the reader's mind's eye.

Loved these lines:

Bloated skies release the elixir needed.

Nature's manna nourishes sacred treasure,

Daffodil delivers a pollen luncheon--
mutual comfort.

nature's bountiful sacred treasure.

I breathed the breath of spring while reading this refreshing poem.

Conclusion:

Wonderful job with this form!

Until next time--write on!

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#4655330

Review of An Old Familiar Dream

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Rated: 18+

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review.

First Impressions:

The image of the bridal gown and the title with brief description captured my curiosity.

The fact that it was listed under the Genre Horror/Scary really clinched it. I had to dive right in!

Further Impressions:

I loved the building up of the mystery surrounding his nightmares. His self-loathing and still, the attempt to convince himself he had done much more good in his life than what had transpired 35 years, prior.

I could feel his struggle and pain. Your descriptions pull the reader right into the scene.

Observations:

A few Grammatical errors needing attention.

“What a thin, flimsy things your love was, Sandra." "Thing" should be singular as used in this sentence.

"He made no considerable attempt (at)discretion; if a floorboard creaked, no one noticed."

"The shot crashed the stillness of the cottage, and on the wedding gown blood splatter bloomed like red, poison roses." Spatter, not "splatter" I've watched lots of Dexter.

"Turning off his bathroom light, he stepped back into the bedroom..."

Parting Thoughts:

This is a good horror story. It has great bones! It just needs some edit spots here and there to make the read smoother.

Conclusion:

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

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#4655218

Review of Anatomy of a 6am Grocery Run

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review.

First Impressions:

I felt like I was going down that dark tunnel of trying to shop when Covid 19 first hit. The idea of masks, disinfectant, six feet apart and up and down marked aisles in the grocery stores were surreal to say the least.

Further Impressions:

Amazon became my best friend for all things canned and with a long shelf life. Also, I ordered bulk paper goods -- still have some stored away, I believe. I see you opted for Target, there wasn't one close by in my very rural area.

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the realism you wove into your story. The cat needing to get those probiotics into the system, added to everything else to be dealt with, made this story come through brilliantly. Yes, meat is important if you enjoy cooking and having something to go along with the frozen veggies. The early a.m. time to get it made me too sleepy to imagine. I am night hawk, myself.

Conclusion:

Very nicely done! I saw no errors that jumped out at me. Probably because I was too focused on the intensity of the story.

Until next time--write on!

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#4655197

Review of Nighttime

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review.

I loved the images you painted with your words in this poem. It exudes mischievousness as well as the innocence of a child.

Here, the child loves exploring the dark quiet city nights. The reader is not privy to the fact that the narrator is a child until the very end, but is intrigued with the rhythm of the poem and is pleasantly surprised.

Observation:

I peeked into each windowpane
as I passed by each house.

The repeated word within those two consecutive lines gave me pause. I think one can be easily removed without messing up the rhythm.

TRY:

I peeked in every windowpane
as I passed by each house

"Every" replacing the word "each" on the line above.

Just my observation. You may find a better way to reorganize the lines.

The ending is adorable and pulled the poem together neatly.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

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#4655117

Review of Matt Duggan - Detective Series

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Rated: E

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I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review.

Initial Impressions:

I love detective stories--wrote a few myself.

Matt Duggan is the detective in this series.

Further Observations:

Since this is a series of stories with this character, I have missed the first two. Random does mean exactly that ...random. I decided to read this third entry to get a taste what the series would be like.

There is a murder and he is the detective taking the first crime scene observations.

Observations:

The neglected hanger bay parking lot began to light up up like a hastily, unplanned Christmas event as one emergency and police vehicle after another, sirens blaring, lights flashing, dutifully followed the other onto the worn out asphalt next to the abandoned hanger.

"hanger" is what a person hangs shirts on. "Hangar" would be the appropriate word to use for abandoned airport hangar.

There were several mentions of this word so you'll want to read through it again to catch them all.

Also, Neglected/abandoned hangar, used in the same paragraph. One well-placed is sufficient. Thus, writing tighter and removing unnecessary words would be helpful for the smooth reading of this story. I mentioned those in particular, however, there were other spots that could use less repetitive words close together.

Parting Thoughts:

You lead the read into a crime scene and cleverly let the reader know that the excitement continues in the next part. Thankfully you dropped the link so a reader may continue forward in the series.

Cool mystery detective series!

Until next time--write on!

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#4655115

Review of The 'New' Superfood Debate

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Rated: 18+

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I am also reviewing this item because it popped up on the Random Read & Review!

I dare not comment from personal experience as to the diet debate put forth or offer any advice that could be construed as medical ...in fact I never read this story!

My Thoughts:

This was a fun an possibly educational story based on whatever science had offered in the article accompanying it. I have a high regard for the consumption of superfoods, however, and the title of course sucked me in, so to speak.

Parting Thoughts:

The ending was quite satisfying for someone I would think. May poor Greg make a full and fast recovery .

Conclusion:

I enjoyed this spicy adventure that gave us women Superfood for thought!

Hey, at least I didn't say this story sucks.

Until next time--write on!

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#4655112

Review of I Am Bi.....

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Rated: 13+

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Review!

I am also reviewing your ite because it popped up on the Random Read & Review.

This was such a humorous look into life from the eyes of a klutz. I say this because I have had the reputation for being one myself.

I loved the examples used to show a reader how the feet tend to not work in concert with the rest of the body when it wants to ambulate.

Observation:

I found a grammar error of two along the way. One particularly example jumped out at me.

"Amazingly, before I crashed to the last step, ( and risked far more than fresh bruises )

Commas should never be placed before parentheses.

Also, one form should be used on WDC for easier reading, two spaces entered between paragraphs rather than indent and spaces used. Some of the ends of sentences look a little orphaned that way.

Parting Thoughts:

This was a fun read and so close to true for so many of us fellow klutzes.

Until next time--write on!

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#4653616

Review of Time Traveling Adventure

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Rated: 13+

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Hello there The Puppet Master

This is a {bitem:army Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at {item:981150} Thank you for entering our March Sci-Fi Prompt.

You did a great job following the prompt:

A canoe ride, ripples in the water, vortex and voila, time traveled to 1924.

You must do something heroic for your hosts before leaving

You must find a way back home to your time

You made this story your own and I could tell you had fun with it. I loved that you tried to sneak in a 1930's dance in the 20s! That put some humor into the story.

Observations:

"No time for that! Dial 911 and let me talk to them!" I said. He dialed and put me on. "There's a fire at the big white building by the lake..."

911 is not historically correct in this story's timeline. The first 911 call was made in 1968. However, Great Britain had their 999 emergency number in use in 1937. (Wonderopolis)

I know this was Sci-Fi, but, Charleston is in South Carolina not North Carolina.

Perhaps you meant Charlotte NC?

Conclusion:

The story was interesting and succinct. No wasting words to fill a page. Yet, the reader knew exactly what was happening.

Loved the Charleston SC firefighter who heroically saved the day when the fire started in the dance hall.

His trusty canoe brought him home again when he caught a returning vortex.

It was fun, and, except for the couple observations mentioned above, very well done!

Until next time--write on -- and travel on!

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#4650225

Review of Le Voyage Magnifique

for entry "Is You?"

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Rated: 18+

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Cupid Slam poetry contest in February.

As you may well know, the purpose of the Slam is to rip that Cupid a new one! I think you have done it in a a very succinct manner.

Hey, no need to mince words -- get that dastardly creature and let him know what's what!

The other objective to this contest is to earn the coveted 1-star, review!

Now, I do really hate to bring down an overall great rating of a book/blog with a one-star. But, you asked for it when entering the contest. Hmmm,

should I do this to you? It's such a dilemma. However, once the contest ends, you could ask us nicely to remove our terribly low rating, I suppose.

I mean it's difficult to ignore the classic lines,"Is you is, or is you ain't gonna be my loving mate,"

So, I'm going to go with the intended purpose of the contest -- get that one-star! You know where to find me if you need a future retraction.

Thanks again for entering!

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#4650118

Review of Epistle to Cupid

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Rated: 13+

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our annual Slam Cupid Poetry contest!

Initial Thoughts:

You had me at "you always miss that body part"

I knew the rest of the poem would be so bad!

Further Thoughts:

Strong words to bring out the worst in this poem.

"solar Plexis, noxious missiles and thunderous belches not to mention the lower end of the gas expulsion!

Final Thoughts:

I loved the conclusion. You wrapped this poem up perfectly with "make your wallet thinner
and mine fatter"

Yup, get a lawyer involved!

This poem was so bad it was good. However, the object of the contest is to try and get a coveted 1-star rating.

I am pleased to break this news to you ...this deserves a 1-star rating!

Thanks again for entering, and good luck!

Until next time--write on!

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#4646522

Review of The Full House

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Rated: E

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our January Clearance prompt!

Initial Thoughts:

This was a fun read. I always enjoy a bit of humor woven within a poem or story.

Your poem fills the mind's eye with clutter imagery, which helps the reader to view years of collections. I can identify with that.

A favorite Part, The vinyl records:

They might be worth a fortune in
Another hundred years

I'm sorry now I got rid of so many of mine.

Great Conclusion:

This was the perfect ending to poem.

"What I must do is ditch the house
And keep the junk instead"

Good job with the prompt!

Until next time--write on!

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#4646374

Review of Le Voyage Magnifique

for entry "Clutter"

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Rated: 18+

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall, January Prompt, "January Clearance."

This, I must say, is quite the unique use of the clutter prompt. You are right of course, our minds are filled with messages bombarding them day after day with spam and various ads.

Good way to do a switch-up with your poem.

Clutter is clutter and has to be dealt with. Unfortunately, with our brains it's a little more difficult to get additional storage space out of the already filled-up thought process.

Thanks again for entering!

Keep on removing that clutter.

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#4646098

Review of Horizontal Surfaces

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Rated: E

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our January Clearance Prompt.

Initial Thoughts:

Loved the fact that the story started off with a room remodeling. Boy, do I understand the labor that goes into that. Mostly, what will stay and what will go. I did a couple rooms up North, and will continue on when I get back in the spring. New paint does make other collections appear out of place.

Further Impressions:

I use the attic -- a lot! Out of sight, out of mind. However, I got to the point where you are in this story. Can't hang on to stuff forever. Find a good home for them or dump them and move on.

Observations:

"So, I dutifully empty the wall of one room of all picturesthen the top of a bookcase of all knicky-knacky stuff."

"some other fun stuff. I empty the wall of all pictures that were there. At least ten really interesting pictures were all over this large wall. Special items, fun items."

Repetitive words: walls, items, stuff, pictures. Could probably tighten up that portion and delete the repeats.

Parting Thoughts:

This was a fun read. It really hit home in my home.

I enjoyed the whole horizontal surface comments. Hey, horizontal surfaces beg to be adorned with ... stuff!

Conclusion:

You followed the rules, did justice to the prompt -- and I believe got a wonderful new-old room plus the transom windows. It's all good!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4645470

Review of A Jingle Belle Christmas

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Initial Thoughts:

It has a holiday theme and romance plus comedy -- what could be more of a pull for a reader?
Further Impressions:

I was surprised and I must say pleased at the same time to notice the dividing the story by chapters. It still fit within the word count rule. It was indeed a short story. I questioned myself about the connection between the story and the photo prompt, but I imagine the bright lights were supposed to take place during the concert that the reader finds out about once it has passed.

Loved the fact that the grandma found herself a love interest. Love can happen later on in life.

Observation:

"When is it? I'd be happy to pitch in," Belle answered with a smile. "When is it?" No need to repeat this question as it was already asked at the beginning.

Conclusion:

It was a sweet story with much conflict tossed into it. Lanie had a secret that had to come out even if the man she loved would never forgive her. He did of course, and love would blossom.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645469

Review of The Aliens Above Them

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

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Initial Impressions:

An invasion of some kind appears to be taking place in Lattan.

I know it's going to be a wild ride and wanted to know what the story would unfold for me.

Further Impressions:

Explosions are happening, nobody know where the next one will be, but they show up during a "visit" from another planet.

It is disclosed that the Law Enforcers are the bad guys in the mix. Hearrol and Jakoline put their heads together to try to prevent the takeover. It appears that the visitors have some sort of mind-control abilities, but are unable to fight back with weapon power that the other side has.

Observations:

"If he is going to place the explosive here soon, he’s going to need to do it before too much longer."

This sentence above is a bit wordy.

TRY: If he is going to place the explosives here, he's going to have to do it soon.

Especially in a short story with a strict word count, you want to write a bit tighter. The sentence highlighted above is one with an easy fix -- cut away the repetitive part. There are more parts of the story that could use a bit of tightening up as well.

Parting Thoughts:

I found I had to reread the story to get a better picture of what was going on and which group was the "bad guy." Probably you were running out of the word count limit and had to wrap it up concisely.

It has a vivid message once the reader pictures the explosions and the need for one side to control the other.

Conclusion:

Unique story and use of the picture prompt!

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645468

Review of The Rapper

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Initial Impressions:

This is going to be a story about the band. They are an up and coming Rapp group practicing in the parents' basement. They are noisy and irritating to the parents. The son is told to get a job, basically.

Further Impressions:

Youth does come with its growing pains because they think what they have to offer in the music world is fresh and will be a success.

Loved the whole sneak trip to audition on Australia's Got Talent. They were convinced they would advance to the finals once heard.

Parting Thoughts:

I found this story humorous as I pictured the group with stars in their eyes heading up on stage to perform and when done with they thought was the best they've ever done, were told "Sorry, not this time." Oh, the shock of it all!

Conclusion:

It's good to see Greg found a job. He could sing lyrics in his head while earning a paycheck.

Nice touch with the newest lyrics shown at the end of the story. It made me chuckle.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645467

Review of Kiss the Devil

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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First Impressions:

Paris as a backdrop and romance. What better mix?

Further Impressions:

Tom fell in love with Marie Clair and she with him. He enjoyed her French style and personality. The attended a concert she wanted to go to.

Tom was a Godly man who believed in heaven and hell, while Marie was more or less a non-believer.

Tom could get by putting that aside presently if there were not a terrorist attack within the music hall. They escaped with their lives thanks to Tom's previous war experience.

It was the pivotal point that made Tom turn away from Marie, because he realized that his faith was more important than falling for a woman who took him to a concert that appeared to be hailing the devil.

Parting Thoughts:

As fate would have it he was brought back to the town to testify after he had separated from Marie for years. The old flame sparked, but more so, he realized Marie had found faith after their separation.

Conclusion:

Nice budding romance with its conflicts and resolutions. Sometimes years change everyone's world in ways that make them look through more focused eyes.

You wove in some realistic images of the times with the Covid mask being removed at the end. Could it have been better as a novella with a higher word count? I believe so, since there were many facets to be developed with the characters. We readers get a brief glimpse of what really makes them who they are.

Ending had a certain satisfaction, albeit wrapped up a bit quick.

However, I guess life has been a harsh battle the past couple years and it's good to find a happy ending.

Well done!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4642402

Review of Red Nuts Roasting

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our December Holiday Song, parody prompt.

First Impressions:

It's gonna get hot in here! I detected an adult theme.

Further Impressions:

You went with an adult version of the Christmas Song, otherwise identified as Chestnuts Roasting On An Open Fire. That's fine, we have no rating limit, here. You took that song and made it your own.

It was painful at times.

Just the thought of roasted red nuts, rashes from spandex, gyms?!!! Yes, painful way to try to get together with a girlfriend.

The rhythm was as smooth as the salve used to calm the itch.

Conclusion:

You followed the rules. You chose a song from the prompt's list and --YOU made it your own!

Good job!

Until Next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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