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Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi! Hope you are doing fine!

*Notev* Title:

I found your item on wdc and was intrigued by the title. It made me wonder what the story was about. Great choice!

*Notev* Body/Narrative:
I really enjoyed the story, and the choices it gives for the reader to choose. I chose the friends, not enemies, I also chose to go inside of house and overreacting.

It was fun to read a d even though I know is a mystery, sometimes it made me smile.

Great job! Keep on creating items like this one for the whole community to enjoy!

All the best
Winnie
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Review by Winnie
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
WOW! I LOVED it!

You have painted and incredible picture with every verse you wrote. You can visualize every word, plus you can feel the obvious pain you felt while writing this. I hope you've healed. I know the pain, and like you thoroughly described, for me, it stabs you deeply, but nonstop.

Great choice of words. You made me search my dictionary once! "quixotically" I love to use the word intoxicating in my writings!

I really loved the way you related your pain to Winter. How cold it was. Loved the choice you made of asking: "the Queen of ice?" Perfect! It makes the reader go: "that's what she is. She deserves it!" Your purpose with that line was met.

Here my suggestions. And remember they are just suggestions. You indeed created a beautiful piece. It breathes on it's own.

I would choose another title. One that could catch the attention of the reader more. Maybe something about the cold, Winter, about your pain, or even "Apathetic Queen of Ice."
I understand what you wanted to portray, but for me it needs a little bit of spice to capture my attention and go: "I gotta read this!". Kind of feeling.

Another thing is that while you read, sometimes there's a break on the musicality of the piece. I know it doesn't have to rhyme or anything like that, but sometimes the picture you painted fits perfectly with the musicality of the piece, until a word at the end, breaks it. Sometimes that makes you have to read it again, trying to find the lost musicality. Maybe if you read it out loud you'll understand what I mean. But it's no biggie. Your piece is absolutely beautiful. You achieved what you wanted to portray, which relates to the true events involved.

Two thumbs up!

Thanks for taking me into consideration with this piece of art.
Sorry for the late review. So much going on at the same time!
Take care my friend and keep on writing.
Winnie
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Review of Phoebe  
Review by Winnie
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Nasser!
Loved your poem. As you read it out loud you can feel the musicality on every stanza, even though it changes from time to time. As you start reading you get the idea this is a lovely and sweet poem, but as you keep on reading it changes your perseption completely. Love the ending. A great and unexpected twist. Never thought it was her father. The little girl really deserved to die.
Great choice of words and rhyme.
Keep up the good work. It takes courage and a lot of reasoning to be a poet!!! Proud of you!!

Write on!!!

Winnie
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Review of Slaughterhouse  
Review by Winnie
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi! Hope you are doing great!! *Bigsmile*

This is a great story! I enjoyed every part of it, with the exception of all the details of the cows dying, (thing I know, and why I chose to be a pesquiterian, and I don't eat meat or chicken). *Wink* I totally understand, no worries!! I know it's a very important part of your story, and it worked perfectly and help create the mood, and the tension. It was great! Perfect title!

Great ending! I thought he was going to slaughter his entire family when they sat to enjoy diner!! I was waiting for that!!! Waiting for them to be all siting down, and he gets up and BANG!! LOL! The same way he does with cows!!

Blessings always and keep on creating such amazing stories!
They are a pleasure to read!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Review by Winnie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Good poem, with a good rhyme. Easy to understand. Very creative to write a critique like into a poem. Good job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices, they make you wonder, what you created using such a commented novel as a prompt.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No suggestions. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of List of Contests  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Great job!!! It's a great list, because even though we have the list on our right, you managed to organize it: daily, weekly, etc. Its also a great way of sharing that list with others to benefit from those contest. I'm going to take a look at a few of contests too. Thanks for sharing.!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Short and to the point! Good choices!!!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! A good suggestion would be to keep the list growing, hehe, so we can benefit from it too. Thanks for sharing!*Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Thanks God!  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Beautiful poem dedicated to the one and only. Full of faith and also gratitude for the things you know you couldn't have if it wasn't for his mercy and his glory. Beautiful!! Love the ending!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Meeting Him  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Beautiful!! I reviewed your highlighted items on your port and this is My favorite so far!! LOVED every single line!!! I kept reading and reading, and picturing everything in my mind. Beautiful!! The ending was WOW! Perfect!! Love it!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Great choices for both of them! Work perfectly with what you wrote!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None suggestions, just to keep writing this way! Beautiful and full of emotions, and makes the reader want to read more and more. Great job!!I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Helping Santa  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Great poem! Loved it!! I imagined Santa on the bed! hehe! Great job!! Loved the ending! What more can a poem want for Christmas? hehe Blessings and great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them! They relate to the story and makes you wonder. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None, just keep writing such wonderful and full of magic poems. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of The Jester  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
This is a great poem! Loved the way you described every line, painting us the picture. My favorite lines were those about the jester, letting us know about his feelings and pain, if I can use that word. Good ending! Congratulations on winning the contest!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No suggestions at all, you told us the story in a beautiful poem! Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Crosshairs  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi!  Hope you are doing fine!


Overall:
That was so sad! Well described and vivid, but the ending was so sad for me! You are good on creating those twists at the end. Good job! And ... Poor deer!

Title/Description
Good title, but the same advice as always for the description.

Spelling/Suggestions
No more suggestions. Good job! No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Review of Squirrel Survivor  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi!  Hope you are doing fine!


Overall:
A funny little story! Good entry for the contest! Good job! Great ending! Hehehe

Title/Description
Good choice for title, but for the description try to capture the attention of the reader by adding another description.

Spelling/Suggestions
No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi!  Hope you are doing fine!


Overall:
What a challenge! No repeat! You managed to work with the promp and came out with a good story! Well done!

Title/Description
Good choices, simple and to the point.

Spelling/Suggestions
Great! No suggestions. No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
It was like reading a story, it kept me going, fun to read. Beautiful message, easy to understand and you used the right words. Love the ending. It has a good flow! Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
The title is good but the description needs a little spice. What you added can be used as an author's note at the end of the poem. Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*
No more suggestions!

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing and having fun while doing it!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of 2BR02B REVIEW  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Easy to read and understand. I didn't know about those stories, but your insights about it are so great that you makes us readers want to read them. You explain your points of view very well, it was like reading a blog, if you don't blog, you should. Good job with the review.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices, don't need too much.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing! When we read, is like we are listening to you. You explain the things very well. Good job!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Awww Pinochio!! I love that story!! Your poem is lovely, short, but easy to understand and fun to read. Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices for both of them! Even though the description is simple, it captures our attention.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
To make it longer!!! I would love to read a longer poem writen inspired on Pinochio!! Lovely! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
This one felt like written from the heart too. Great job! I can feel the pain and sorrow you talk about on the description. My favorite line is: My heart is full of love the type instilled from above WOW!! Loved that line!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices for both of them. This time for us to understand you needed that description. Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is!
I think I found a typo, but remember, I'm Spanish speaker, so maybe I'm wrong. I think that almost at the end, you missed an o on the word too! Because you said "me too" that word needs another o. *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing from the heart, it's your weapon. Have a great night!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
LOVELY!!! I'm a fan of your little poems! Great job! Really amazing, because we can picture every line, so vivid. Well done!! *Laugh* I could see the little one covered in mud.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices, even though the description is simple, its a good one.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No one yet! Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
I'm making you a fan, because I loved your poems! Keep writing them!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of She's a Thief  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Awww The ending is beautiful!! Loved it!! It makes you wonder, maybe a fairy is stealing the fruits, hehe, very original, and lovely! Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Again great choices for both of them! Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
You ignited in me the love for this little poems, dedicated to children! GREAT!! Maybe is that I've never read one that captured my attention! Good job!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of I Saw a Dragon  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
I LOVED the poem! SO FUN to read!! LOVED the rhyme! I'm not a fan of poems written for children, but this one captured my attention in every way. It's lovely! I could see everything like in a movie! GREAT JOB!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Great use of both tittle and description, they both capture the attention of the reader, and make you wonder! Great job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Great job! Keep on creating such beautiful poems for kids, they are very fun and imaginative!!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review by Winnie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
My favorite so far! Very original! Loved the way you included that verse at the end of each part, and it gave a lot of power and meaning to the writing. Love the ending!! POWERFULL, my favorite line from it all! Great job!! Loved it!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good title, but again, you can use the description part to capture the eye of the reader, ti deseves it!! good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
To create more items like this one. *Wink*
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:


Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Jewel-toned Words  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Loved it!! hehe, I don't know why the rating is so low. Maybe because they didin't understood it. Loved the ending! My favorite part of it all!! I loved that contest!! Very difficult to create an entry with such a limited word count. Great job!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices! Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
One suggestion would be to add an author's note with the given prompt, so we can relate a little more, and see how creative you were. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing stories, poems, haikus, with those types of endings, in this case a twisted one, loved it, it gave meaning to the whole piece. Without that ending the piece would not work at all. Good job!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of A bud in bloom...  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
The combination is great, hehe *Laugh* Love the ending!! Even though haikus are supposed to be about nature themes, we can also write other types of haikus, and this one alone would say nothing but with the poem, it fits perfectly. Again great combination. Fun and good rhyme too.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Again, simple but to the point. In this case its good to use a simple description like yours, because the item is a short one, and if you use another line or phrase from the poem, instead of capturing the attention of the reader, you would be giving away the ending, so good job.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep creating such funny items in your port. *Smile*

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Memories  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
I've never seen that contest! It sounds fun. I love quotes, and also to create ones. Your quote is simple and to the point. Good one, and also very true!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices for both, because the item is simple and don't need more information. Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None!
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on creating quotes, I love quotes.

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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Review of Surreal  
Review by Winnie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
This is a lovely poem. Liked the words you used to paint the picture. It flows, and the ending is great. Good job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Love the title, but I suggest that you add an author's note at the ending of the poem, with the words you have on the description part. On that space, I suggest to add another type of description that can capture the eye of the reader better.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
I suggest that you take out those hearts, that you added on the poem. It takes your concentration out of what's important. Nothing more. Good job!
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing and participating from Writing.com contests! Good luck!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
Winnie

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