|WOW! I LOVED it!
You have painted and incredible picture with every verse you wrote. You can visualize every word, plus you can feel the obvious pain you felt while writing this. I hope you've healed. I know the pain, and like you thoroughly described, for me, it stabs you deeply, but nonstop.
Great choice of words. You made me search my dictionary once! "quixotically" I love to use the word intoxicating in my writings!
I really loved the way you related your pain to Winter. How cold it was. Loved the choice you made of asking: "the Queen of ice?" Perfect! It makes the reader go: "that's what she is. She deserves it!" Your purpose with that line was met.
Here my suggestions. And remember they are just suggestions. You indeed created a beautiful piece. It breathes on it's own.
I would choose another title. One that could catch the attention of the reader more. Maybe something about the cold, Winter, about your pain, or even "Apathetic Queen of Ice."
I understand what you wanted to portray, but for me it needs a little bit of spice to capture my attention and go: "I gotta read this!". Kind of feeling.
Another thing is that while you read, sometimes there's a break on the musicality of the piece. I know it doesn't have to rhyme or anything like that, but sometimes the picture you painted fits perfectly with the musicality of the piece, until a word at the end, breaks it. Sometimes that makes you have to read it again, trying to find the lost musicality. Maybe if you read it out loud you'll understand what I mean. But it's no biggie. Your piece is absolutely beautiful. You achieved what you wanted to portray, which relates to the true events involved.
Two thumbs up!
Thanks for taking me into consideration with this piece of art.
Sorry for the late review. So much going on at the same time!
Take care my friend and keep on writing.