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#4743595

Review of Exploding Daisy?

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Exploding Daisy?"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE STORY

The narrator knows the real reason for the expression "Exploding Daisies," but are you ready to hear it?

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the conversational tone of the story. I felt like I was drawn right into the narrator's confidences and a ring side seat to the story.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by the narrator who is a giant. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Suffice it to say, "I'm height enhanced." Prior to this there's a tad more description, told in a comical way, and I'm just chuckling. I could easily picture our narrator in my imagination.

SETTING

TIME: not sure
PLACE: for whatever reason I'm picturing a beanstock, but I think it's near a mountain.

I don't think time in this story really needs to be defined. Just still back, read, and enjoy.

CHARACTERS

Giant narrator

He's a fiesty tall guy and if you believe his exploding daisy story, I say two thumbs up.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well and the opening engages the reader with a nice, easy style. If anything, I might suggest spacing between the paragraphs and maybe increasing the font to it's easier on the eyes? Overall, a light hearted story that's enjoyable!

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#4743590

Review of Faith Healer

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW

This is a review for "Faith Healer"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE STORY

Connie is hoping to meet a man and start a family, but she gets a little help from her Grandma and faith.

WHAT I LIKED

The story had a nice flow to it. Once I started, I didn't want to stop. I wanted to find out if Connie was going to have a happy ending. I'm a sucker for happy ending.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient from Connie's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. I would suggest an edit for dialogue tags. Use only "he said" or "she replied" in tags to identify the speaker only, if you have to. Put action in a seperate sentence. Put the action first, then the dialogue.

FOR EXAMPLE, AS WRITTEN: "I apologize for bursting in on you, Miss," he said with an awkward, pained wrinkle in his brow, yet a gentle smile on his face. "I desperately need your help."

MY SUGGESTION: "I apologize for bursting in on you, Miss." He paused, and wrinkled his brow and wrung hands, and yet despite this, had a gentle smile on his face. "I desperately need your help."

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "The house was warm and dry, but outside the wind howled." I could easily visualize the scene in my imagination.

SETTING

TIME: in the past
PLACE: rural setting with cabins for houses

This is something that was clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Connie

Connie is a kind hearted soul and deserving of a kind-hearted family.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story well and the opening engages the reader. If anything, the part where Connie talks about the evil eyes seems a bit out of place or forced? I might strike up a conversation of faith and invite Ryan to pray, especially since she's gone out of her way to dissuade his fears over her being a witch. All together, it was a very enjoyable story!

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#4743587

Review of Which One Will Win?

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Which One Will Win?"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem shares an old Cherokee legend that asks us to look into ourselves.

WHAT I LIKED

Having spent time as a Boy Scout leader, I used to include an Indian story called, "Everyone's Canoe," into the Scout's Own and this story poem reminded me of teaching points. The old stories and legends are very relatable to our everyday life.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation/spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read and understand.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "tearing at one's feelings, behaviors, and attitudes," and while it isn't necessarily a physical description, it's an emotional one that every reader can understand. There are have been times we've all been a little torn over a situation that has confused us.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem challenges the reader to examine themselves in a very thought provoking and critical thinking way. Do you want to be the ugly wolf or the good wolf? It is your choice. This poem will resonate with readers long after it's read.

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#4743494

Review of St. Patrick Acoustic Contest 3-24

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

This poem tells the tale of St. Patrick and his beliefs.

WHAT I LIKED

I thought the poem was a very concise and succinct look at St. Patrick with a focus on the more spiritual aspects he brought to Ireland.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. I did spot a formating error in that !size} is after Lord which I don't think was intended. The poem is easy to read. If anything I might suggest using WDC ML to increase the font to make it a little easier on the eyes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Kindness, love, compassion, and forgiveness won the day." It speaks to those traits we all strive for. I think we can say, "be kind," every day, but if we don't see an action that shows us what kindness is, then it's hard to imagine and I think St. Patrick was about showing us through his deeds what concepts likes this was about.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I believe the contest rules wanted the first letter in the line offset with green or a bold and that isn't done here. The poem is an honest look at St. Patrick life.

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#4743162

Review of Looking Up to My Flag

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "Looking Up to My Flag"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

This poem is a tribute to the American flag and what it represents not only to the American people, but to the world.

WHAT I LIKED

Being a veteran, I gravitated right to this poem. For me, it speaks to the hope the flag offers, to all peoples. The flag is a poultice for an open wound, a light of peace, representative of a nation's pride.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "white clouds, blue sky, and red stripes of dawn." The line paints a nice visual that the colors of the flag aren't just on the flag, but embedded in the nation's every day life.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fit the poem well and the opening lines engage the reader. I liked how the poem tapped into emotions; patriotism, hope, peace, and more. The author uses a good economy of words to blend those emotions with visual vinyettes that readers can see in their mind's eyes as they read. Well done! I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4743106

Review of Ode to the Emerald Isle

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

This poem is set in the nature of Ireland.

WHAT I LIKED

I appreciated that the setting became the main character of the poem. There are lot of nice visuals that paint pretty pictures in my imagination.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to bold the starting letters of each line.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The green of clover and blue of sky, Ponder the wonders of each new day," -- nice word choice here hints at a deeper meaning than just a pretty day, but also of a human need to appreciate the day and setting that has been given to us.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

An inspirational poem that will resonate long after its read. I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4743101

Review of Green Goes Gross

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A look at what happens when one uses shamrocks in soup.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the comedy in this poem. We all enjoy a shamrock or two, but in our food, especially, our soup.... maybe not so much. It was a very creative task on the prompt.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make the starting letter of the line green.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Tasted putrid, looked like sewage. Awful choice to make." - Great word choices to paint a vivid picture!

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I almost spit out my coffee reading this poem! I hope there wasn't a touch of shamrock in it?! Yikes. A very entertaining read. I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4743096

Review of St. Patrick's Day

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A great look of the lore that St. Patrick left behind.

WHAT I LIKED

A heartwarming tribute to St. Patrick, touching on the land and the objects he inspired.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Clover and heather; the ghostly moor which day dispels." - It pained a nice visual in my imagination.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

There's a nice flow to the poem. Great visuals using a good economy of words. I have no suggestions for improvement. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4742521

Review of ~Singing In Strange Places?~

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Steph Bee's Bee Hive

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POLL

A very engaging poll about where you like to sing your favorite tunes.

WHAT I LIKED

I think with a poll you need a strong introduction and a great question and this poll has both. The introduction draws you right in with it's conversational style of writing. The tone is light-hearted and endearing, and let's face it, it's a question we "struggle" with every day. Glad to see I'm not alone.

ENGAGING

The introduction draws the poll taker in with it's heartwarming, sincere tone.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices for answers. I didn't realize how many places we sing tunes at!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, and this is minor, I like that the question is bolded, but I might increase the font on it so it's more catching to eye.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Great question! I thought the poll was a lot of fun. I did notice it has a lot of responses, which is awesome.

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#4742470

Review of ATTENDANCE SHEET

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE BOARD/ATTENDENCE REVIEW

This is a review for "ATTENDANCE SHEET"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE BOARD

The Message Board serves as a Guestbook for the author.

WHAT I LIKED

What I loved about the guestbook is how the author has chosen a "Back to School" theme and is calling it "Attendance." Other items in the author's port are also school themed, so this is a nice compliment to the over all portfolio.

ENGAGING

The person popping in is invited to sign the attendance log. After all, one wants credit for being in the right place at the right time. The tone of the forum is light-hearted and endearing, encouraging the visitor to leave a missive.

VARIETY

A lot of people have stopped by and left a note, which was nice to see, if anything, it was a while since the last person prior to me had popped in - 27 days, I think. In that regard, I might suggest follow up to encourage engagement. Follow up could be anything. A question a day to bring people back or a prompt like flash fiction. It could be a school based prompt to stay on theme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I liked the graphic in the introduction. It set the tone of what to expect from the forum. It's always a good thing to take attendance.

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#4742465

Review of TeaTotallyTime

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES WORD SEARCH REVIEW

This is a review for "TeaTotallyTime"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE WORD SEARCH

The Word Search has an Alice in Wonderland tea party theme. The tone of the activity is light-hearted and fun.

WHAT I LIKED

Great selection of words. All the words used were in association with a tea party and there were a lot teas being offered. Honestly, I'm craving tea now.

ENGAGING

With this word search, I only spotted a few words off the bat, and I had to hunt a bit more than I thought I would, but it was enough to keep hunting and just when I wanted to give up, I spied another word.

VARIETY

There were a lot of words, which I liked. All the words were items you would find at a tea party which was nice. Nothing seemed out of place.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

If anything, I might suggest adding more content to the introduction to make it more inviting for the activity taker. Suggestion only - catch their eye with a whimsical graphic of a tea party or use WDC to vary the size and font of the introductory paragraph. I enjoyed the word search and would recommend others to try it.

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#4742437

Review of Cure for the Common Coffee

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES FLASH FICTION REVIEW

This is a review for "Cure for the Common Coffee"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE STORY

John writes coffee reviews for a living. It's not a bad job, but you'll soon discover it takes a lot of character to write coffee reviews.

WHAT I LIKED

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coffee!! Every drop. Just like John. hehe. I love how John has an old-fashioned, easy-going way about himself.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from John's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. Honestly, I love past tense stories.

DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue used.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to my own coffee maker, taking in the rich aroma of my own fufu coffee.

CHARACTERS

What I liked about John as a character, is he's fun, quirky, and easily relatable, even if he likes to use a typewriter. Heck, if it wasn't for typewriting class in High School, I wouldn't be here. Sometimes, it's best not to fiddle with what works.

FLOW & PACING

It's perfect. It wasn't too slow, and not too fast either. I was right in the moment with John.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good economy of words communicates well and evokes emotion. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. I highly recommend a cup of "John" when you sit down to read!

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#4742294

Review of Saint Paddy’s Day

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A lively look at the man himself, St. Patrick.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the opening stanza, "Shamrock worn, coloured green, Today's the day to wear it be seen." It drew me right in.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the each line started in the color green. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Asps, away from him they ran," -- I thought it was a very creative way to weave in the legend of St. Patrick driving out snakes from Ireland.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I loved how the poem ended, bringing it full circle and to the modern day with what we usually to do celebrate - dance, drink, and a pint of Guiness. A very imaginative poem that puts the reader in the moment! Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4742193

Review of St. Patrick's Day Shenanigans

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem captures the essence of St. Patrick's Day shenanigans.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem framed St. Patrick's Day in a fun light.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the author highlighted the beginning letter in green. That was a nice touch.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Singing Irish poems Till the cows come home." That put a smile on my face. It was a nice way to set the mood and tone of the poem.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A fun and enjoyable poem that captures the essence of a warmhearted St. Patrick's Day. My only suggestion, and this would be a matter of style, is to add some limited punctuation to give the poem more a rthymic flow. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4741447

Review of My Christmas Prayer

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "My Christmas Prayer"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem is a heartfelt look at how the author's friend had touched their life.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem is poignant and heartfelt. It leaves the reader on an upbeat note, but it goes through emotional highs and lows as it dips and ebbs through life. In this way, it makes an emotional connection with the reader that resonates.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences. The poem presents itself as a Christmas tree which is appealing as well as being done in green.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "To make it through the "tough times" with a strong heart and with wisdom." I think all of us strive for a strong heart when times are tough.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is heartwarming and bittersweet to read. I have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the title was perfect for the presentation.

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#4741446

Review of How is it that

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "How is it that"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem ponders the question "how is it that" I can't forget about you?

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the honest introspection the poem offers. Even when 2 years have passed, the author can remember her with such clarity it's unnerving. I had something similar happen to me and I would consider this man my "first" that I was in love with. Even now, there are times I think "how is it that...?"

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's no vivid descriptions - just everyday descriptions. One that sticks out to me is it's been two long years.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I thought the title matched the thoughts and sentiments of the poem well and evoked the reader to ponder the "what if" in their own lives. That's how the poem emotionally resonates with the reader. The poem is easy to read and understand.

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#4741371

Review of Idalin's Patio

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Idalin's Patio"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE FORM

The forum invites WDC Community members to stop on by, introduce themselves, say hi and share fellowship and friendship.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartwarming tone the introduction set. I enjoyed the greeting: "Other beverages are available for those over 21, but tea is the best." I agree! Tea is the best!

INTRODCUTION

The introduction uses a graphic to help set the mood and tone of the forum along with a quote from Jimmy Buffet. If anything, there is a link to an invalid item in the introduction that I might suggest cleaning up.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to switch up the colors. It catches the reader's eyes more.

EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author connects with their visitors using a variety of techniques, such as heartwarming pictures and whimsical sayings. If anything the last entry was 17 years ago, so I'd love to see more recent interaction. I would be more than willing to stop back and rate the forum higher if there is more recent again and the invalid item is attended to.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the forum and very inviting. See above for suggestions.

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#4741362

Review of Survival

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Survival "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE ESSAY

A look at homeless. The author shares his thought on homeless, possible causes, choices, and how one choice can make a difference in your life.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the tone of the essay. It wasn't accusatory or "woe is me," but a thoughtful look at what causes homelessness and what can be done. Ultimately, it comes down to the choices one makes. Seeking the choice to pick oneself out of homelessness requires a lot of courage and then will power to follow through.

STRUCTURE

This is a paragraph formatted essay.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest the use of WDC ML to make the font bigger so it would be easier to read for the reader.

EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author speaks in a tone that allows for an emotional connection with the reader. He sheds light on a problem that many might not understand to include the causes, drugs and gambling. The piece is poignant and very introspective.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Genuine, heartfelt, and honest. The title is reflective of the content. I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4741351

Review of DragonBlue's Variety c-Notes

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "DragonBlue's Variety c-Notes"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE CNOTES

Dragonblue Variety Cnotes has a collection of cnotes for any occasion, which include humor, to pick one up when feeling blue, friendship, and sorry.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartfelt phrases each cnote contained. If anything, I might suggest changing up the font a little bit, as the font was a little striking.

ENGAGING

The cnotes are deeply rich in color, and if anything, I thought they were almost too vivid for my eyes, so my suggestion here would be to tone down the color plate a little bit.

VARIETY

There are ten cnotes which offer a nice amount of variety. There were a lot of nice heartwarming choices for viewers to choose from.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Nice use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them intrigued to visit the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the price point on the cnotes were a tad high, so I might suggest lowering the price a little. I would recommend WDC members so stop on by and check them out.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4741346

Review of Exercising Faith

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "Exercising Faith"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE CNOTES

Exercising Faith Cnotes are a heartwarming collection of cnotes that are faith inspired with quotes from the Bible.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the whimiscal graphic used for "A little Joy" which caught my attention most, but I also liked the heartwarming message for friendship, and I thought the graphic for "Hear my plea" struck a poignant chord.

ENGAGING

The cnotes offer a nice variety of messages, that while faith based, aren't too preachy to those who aren't of a Christian background. These are cnotes anyone of faith would feel comfortable using.

VARIETY

There are three cnotes in the collection. In that regard, I would like to see the collection expanded.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them excited. They help to set the mood and tone of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Very creative and inspirational. I thought the Cnotes had a nice price point that WDC members could afford. I would recommend this collection for WDC Members.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4741343

Review of Elegant Poetry cNotes

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "Event Notes"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE CNOTES

Elegent Poetry Cnotes combines easy on the eyes visual, nature inspired graphics with verses of poetry that is meant to inspire, motivate, and spread positivity.

WHAT I LIKED

I really liked the fact the photos used in the cnotes were original photography and that they were mixed with original poetry from authors here on WDC. That was a really nice way to bring community members togethe.

ENGAGING

The cnotes offer a nice variety of colors which catch the reader's eye. Due to the creativity, the viewer needs to slow down and "smell the roses" so to speak, but it is a task that is nice to do. It also allows the viewer time to pair up the cnote that is just perfect for the intended recipient.

VARIETY

There are nine cnotes which offer a nice amount of variety. There were a lot of choices with a focus on nature such as spring or the sea.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them excited.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I love how heartwarming the cnotes where and I thought they were very creative! Well done. I highly recommend this collection for WDC Members.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4740775

Review of Tristeza

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (3.5)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Tristeza"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE ESSAY

Written in 2020, a mother struggles with the restrictions that Covid-19 has set on the nation.

WHAT I LIKED

The essay tackles a very recent topical subject. It paints an accurate picture of what was going on at the time and the emotional whiplash parents had to deal with.

CONTENT

I am not familiar with the title. The essay is not long. It describes the problem and offers ideas to deal with the lockdown, but no solutions. The danger of kids leaning on the computer for interaction is a bit scary. The last part of the essay tugs on the heartstrings.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. I might also suggest increasing the font to make it easier for the reader's eyes on WDC.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I think a lot of parents can connect with the author's push/pull of acknowledging their children seek a cortisol boost by being on the computer doing other things than homework and wanting to offer them something other than the quick, addictive fix.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4740768

Review of 10 Days of Spring

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (3.0)

GAMES OF THRONES BOOK REVIEW

This is a review for "10 Days of Spring"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE BOOK

The book contains 7 entries and is fantasy themed.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the title. It caught my attention and made me curious about the book.

INTRODCUTION

The introduction is very plain and doesn't really set an idea in the reader's mind what to expect. I might suggest expanding the introduction by creating a 3-5 sentence blurb that teases what the plot is about. A more fleshed out blurb could also be used here. If so, I would use the first paragraph to explain the hero or heroine, the next paragraph to explain the conflict, and the last to set the rising action.

I would also using a graphic to set the tone or mood of the book.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. on the introduction or the chapter headings. If anything, I might suggest using a larger font in the entries as the current is hard to read on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The book has a lot of potential but none of the entries have been developed since 2014. The entries are short which encourages the reader to pop in, read, and move on.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4740746

Review of I am jobless

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (3.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "I am jobless "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

Does being an overachiever disadvantage others?

WHAT I LIKED

The poem tackles a very topical subject for the modern day and challenges the reader to look at the differences between the overachiever and the jobless. Is there a middle ground? Could the unemployed storyteller have been more tactful in getting his point across? Would that have kept him the job? Questions to ponder.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There is a (") after matches your character which seems oddly placed.

DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions are very "to the point," for example -- "he stares at me." In that regard, the descriptions do a good job of matching the harsh tone of the poem.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is easy to read. The mood of the poem is somber. No likes losing a job.

The poem reflects the reality of life. Even friends, who gifted with an advantage, find it a struggle to think of others when money is involved. "Money makes people funny" is an expression that rings true time and time again. Another thing I thought of - when two sides are polar opposite, how can there be reconciliation?

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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#4737853

Review of Crashing Waves

Review by StephBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A day at the beach framed between the waves that crash on the seashore.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the poem progressed to tell a story. Well done!

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There were no set rythming patterns.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/ punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Dark clouds gather ominously above the scavenging seagulls"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem progressed line by line as it told it's story. I could picture everything. I loved how the repetition of the last line, "crash upon the seashore" ties the poem together. Very good storytelling!

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