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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI bear! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

Wow! I enjoyed entering this magical vision based on your experience with dolphins. It is truly moving. The setting and mood of the poet was so vivid and real. I loved it!

The poem verses are balanced in four lines with abcb rhyme scheme though "minutes" and "swimming" is a bit off to me. It does have the short i sound. "sensed" and "bench" was closer. *Wink*
The rhythm is more free style than even and verse 6 had longer lines than the rest. It could use a bit of tightening up in flow, yet reading and pondering on the event was a pleasant one. Good use of some sound devices and imagery. *Thumbsup*

I noticed a few punctuation glitches to me:

Verse 2, line needs a comma instead of a period as it ties to the next line.
In Verse 5 you need to drop the period after "know" as the next line completes the thought.
The rhyme here is off as well, though again the assonance works.
Verse 9 you need a comma instead of period after "tale".

I like the idea of the compassionate sensing nature of the dolphin and how the heart and soul can be received and soothed by nature and it's creatures. We really are never alone. *Heart* Thanks for sharing your reflective experience. What a vibrant memory to have. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Fairy**Tree* Hi Lisa! I am here with a review for you as part of your surprise package in our January Power Raid! *Delight*

I love trees and poetry so when I found this collection (congrats on the Quill nomination) I could not resist jumping in. *Wink* I had not heard of this Ronka form so thanks for the note about it. I wonder if putting the author's note at the bottom of the page would allow for your wonderful poem to get the attention first! *Smile*

I enjoyed the image in this short poem and the philosphical tone at the start. I can relate to that as I can sit in my living room and look out at the woods, where deer come and birds and squirrels flit around. It feels like home and nature is one place that accepts us for who we are too. Relaxing.*Heart*

It is a good read. I only glitched as I think a comma after the first line, and the word "tree" would help with the flow as those lines naturally connect to the next ones in full concepts. *Wink*

I like the idea of a platform perch in a tree for observing nature. One often hears of these for hunting purposes.

The ronka is well composed in form and conception. Lovely vision to enter. Thanks for sharing your craft and love of nature. I am inspired to try one of these. *Star*

Keep on writing on!

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Review of Candle  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)


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*Heart*Wow!This is a spectacular shape poem and it really resembles a candle. *Candleo* I appreciate the effort it took to create it. I have tried to do these without much success. *Smile*

*Candleb*The poem is a delight to read with its inner rhyme and use of assonance and consonance added to a cohesive soundscape. The personification is excellent and I like the way you weave in the elements of candle life. *Laugh* Punctuation assisted the read

*Candleb*It has a happy tone and made me smile. Thanks for sharing this inventive creation and charming vision of a candle. *Star* Brilliant construction.

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Review of Summer Storm  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)

*Delight* Hi Super Power Hero Dave! I am happy to celebrate you in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group raid.


*Heart*I enjoyed reading this delightful poem and liked the idea of the storm bringing something to write. *Smile* That the poet has fright until the writing shows up is interesting idea too.

*Balloong*The quadrilew form is fun to read and you have created a fine model according to your link to the form elements. Both rhyme and syllable count are on track. It is an interesting form in that the third verse does not use the "ashes" rhyme like the others.

*Balloono*The imagery of storm and its relation to the mind is effective and the vocabulary is thematic with good use of consonance and the long 'i' sound. Personification of "shrouds" and "depression" is effective to show the power of the elements over the mind. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonr*An appealing read and vivid vision of a dark time with depression and suggestion that writing can help lighten up the mood. Thanks for sharing your craft. I imagine it took a while to dream this up and get it right! *Starstruck*


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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Lisa! I am happy to review to celebrate you as part of our Celebration Raid! *Star*


*Heartv*Oh wow! This poem is so romantic and lovely! I can really feel the message of love and tribute to your partner from your inspiring poetic vision. He sounds like a Prince Charming. *Smile*

*Heart*It was pleasant to read aloud with its easy flow and rhyme scheme. I loved the nature images and comparisons. My favourite is the first verse where you liken him to the flowers and elements. Wonderful images.

*Quill* OOPs. I see a little typo in "shinning"! *Wink* (shining) Also the first line in that verse seems odd with "no matter come what may". Maybe it is poetic liscence turn of phrase. *Wink* I wonder in line 2 of that verse, do you mean "night" or "Knight"...just checking as either could work. I am not sure how a "night" shines. *Think*

*Heartp* I like the positive vision of partnership that is conveyed here and feel the gratitude of the poet for the gift. A wonderful weave with a gentle tone and romantic flair. Thanks for sharing your *Heart*! Shine on as you write with elegance.

Thanks for you being a dedicated Super Power hero. *Starstruck*
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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*Heart*Wow! This poetic expression emanates a strong vibration and I could sense the emotion of the poet in the observations about the state of life in the land. I like the repetitive word "where" in each line in the free verse poem as it reads like a litany. The comparsions are vivid and the tone had a sad, regretful vibe. At its end I see it is like a prayer. *Cool*

*Balloong*I loved the image conveyed by "cavernous fiefdom" and it really sums up your point of view brilliantly. I really enjoyed reading this verse aloud for its pleasing flow and descriptions. The writing is coherent and I like your style. It is a sad commentary as to where people's treasures seem to be. Wow!

*Balloonr*I think we can all relate to the theme as we all have visions in our countries of things gone out of whack! That there are those of us and YOU who are aware, and willing to ask and stand for greater consciousness is a worthy contribution. Thanks for sharing your heart so eloquently. *Star*

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Review of Slow and Steady  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star* Congratulations Lovina on winning our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package in "Season Tickets! I am so happy to review to celebrate you! *Delight* Here is one of your 10 reviews.


*Turtle1*This is a wonderfully wise message that inspires one to keep on going when it is tough as success in on the other side of what looks impossible. The title made me think of the fable of the tortoise and the hare! *Smile* Really good choice to hook me in.

*Turtle2* The free style and centering suits the theme and the vocabulary is well chosen. Solid sounding words like "conquored" and "hurdle" reflect the idea of a block. I liked the consonsance and assonance useage that makes it good to read aloud.

*Turtle1*I like how you talk directly to "you" in "stop you" and wonder if "believe in yourself" rather than "oneself" might keep it more consistent. Also, maybe add a more active line "requiring you to put forth more effort" as opposed to the passive language you have used there.*Wink* Just something that occurred to me.

*Turtle2* I see you are using periods for emphasis maybe, yet in some cases I felt it stopped the flow of meaning. eg line 5 really does connect with the three lines above, so would not commas be more natural in those lines so that line 5 does not hang by itself? *Think*

*Starstruck* I like the way you reinforce the notion of persistance and make the expression have a feeling of pushing through obstacles until the uplifting ending. It gives hope and inspiration and possibility. Much needed in this world! *Angel*

Thanks for sharing. Light on the path as you write on!

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Review of Ponderings  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star* Congratulations Lovina on winning our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package in "Season Tickets! I am so happy to review to celebrate you! *Delight* Here is one of your 10 reviews.


*Alien*I had fun imagining this little alien stewing and trying to understand humans...like does he help them? Like them? Are they worth visiting or contacting? You capture the human dichotomies clearly in the way the alien observes the contrarieness of the race, the polarity and the luke warm fence sitters and occasional heroes. *Thumbsup* I could hear in my mind the alien's confusion and frustration in the way you share his thoughts clearly.

*Alieng*The free style suits the expression and theme and allowed the alien mind to roam. Beginning with a question drew me in and repeating at the end was effective and served to encapsule the sililoquy. The contrast of an objective, logical alien voice with the emotional, seemingly irrational human heart is a potent image.

*Aliengr*In a few places I was a bit thrown off. Perhaps a bit of tweaking is required.
*Quill* "not even put upon your enemy" was awkward to read and in meaning.

*Quill* "On the other hand is good Angels... I think should be "are good..."
"in but human form" also threw me off.

*Quill* "But ....not bad enough" I might clarify: But, if this polarity is not bad enough...there are those in the middle." This part was a bit awkward to flow.

I think that some natural punctuation would help with the read and make it more potent as it would lead us to pause and consider his opinions with ease. Just an idea as I know puctuation is a choice. *Wink*

*Alieng*I liked the flow of "Those that only see themselves....lines 13-21 especially. Quite a clear picture of general collective.

*Starstruck* Thanks for creating this imaginative speech. It is original in point of view and a telling tale of how we can be as humans.

Light on the path as you write on!

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Review of Busy, Busy  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star* Congratulations Lovina on winning our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package in "Season Tickets! I am so happy to review to celebrate you! *Delight* Here is another one of your 10 reviews.


*Xmastree*The title flows quick and reflects the theme of constant movement and the metaphor of the bee really works! I enjoyed the idea of "feeling like a bee" at the end as you build up to the more personal effect of being "busy".

*Bee* The structure is appealing and well composed with a couplet between each quatrain. It made it feel like a refrain in that you do repeat the idea of time and busy in different ways. Great way to emphasize your main message. The adverbs with "ly" in each couplet is really effective for flow and reinforcing the idea of ongoing movement..like the wings fluttering. *Thumbsup* The simile works well.

*Bee*It was fun to read aloud with its steady movement and rhyme scheme. You used interesting words that fit your theme and create a wonderful soundscape. The imagery is so clear. I like the notions of "possessed" and "devotion", to "motion". *Wink*

*Bee*I did not notice a steady pattern of syllables in each line but it did not detract from my read or the message. Talk about a hyper bee! *Shock2*

*Starstruck*This really strikes a chord and hurries the mind along! One hopes not to burn out! I think the message is something we can relate to and you keep it general so we can imagine our own specific "business"! *Laugh*
Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.

Light on the path as you write on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star* Congratulations Lovina on winning our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package in "Season Tickets! I am so happy to review to celebrate you! *Delight* Here is one of your 10 reviews.


*Pig*YUMMY! What a delightful picture of a Christmas eve dinner you have created. We have a family tradition of having tortieres and ham on Christmas eve (as some in the family don't like meat pie!) The one who does like like turkey gets leftover ham on Christmas day dinner. *Laugh*

*Chicken*The recipe for the stew looks easy and using the slow cooker would be time saving to allow for time for other things of importance during the day. Very convenient. The house would smell nice too as it cooked.

*Pot* The poem is fun to read and the use of emoticons added coulour and to the story telling in a visual way. I wondered if you needed to put two glyphs for plural carrots to make sense. *Wink* Also I wanted to read the word "of" after "a tad". *Think*

*Garlic* The verses are balanced and flow in a quick pace, reflecting the vibe of the day! It was easy to enter into the vision and bustle of preparation. *Thumbsup*

*Carrot* I like how you used rhyme in the second and fifth line of each verse, though I notice a few off rhymes. *Wink* I really liked "preserved" and "served". I often save broth from a chicken in the freezer for soups later! *Smile*

*Cabbage* Awesome job on the 5 syllable count per line even with the emoticons! Hard to do! As I said about adding the word "of" in line 3 of that verse.... I guess would throw of the count. (still a tad onion, sounds wierd. I do like the quick pace and rhyem of "Add a tad") You could just say "Add a chopped *Onion*" for count and grammar. LOL or not!

*Starstruck*Your creation is imaginative and fun, fulfills the prompt and gives us a wonderful addition to a recipe collection! Thanks for sharing your gift and vision.

Light on the path as you write on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Delight*Happy New Year Mastiff! I am thrilled to review your item in "I Write in 2019!


*Swordl* Wow! This title was intriguing and made me curious. The mix of fable with the bard is brilliant notion! *Cool* I recognize the language and references to Shakespeare's play. Wonderful creation. It fits in with the prompt of the contest as the time is more modern. LOL

*Swordr* I had fun reading this humorous twist on the stories and laughed at the last line! The insult at the start was a good one too. *Laugh*

*Quill*I don't think you need a comma after "be" in the second verse as the next line completes the thought. *Wink* I take it "him" refers to "Ben" in the third verse. I had to reread to check.

*Rabbit2*Good work on the form of poem. It flowed with a consistent rhyme scheme with a coherent tale. The syllable count was even but for the longer lines in verse 3, line 1, and verse 1 line 1. If you dropped the word "close" is would have a 10 count.

*Starstruck*This is a truly appealing and entertaining tale and I admire the creativity! I imagine it took some effort to compose it so finely. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.
Good luck in the contest.

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Rocket* Hail Jimminycritic! I am happy to read your entry in "Blast Off!!*Delight*


*Rocket*Wow! This was a fascinating read and I enjoyed the first person narration where you really show the thoughts, feelings and being of the main character. The descriptions of the place and the beings were vivid and it was intense to follow the main character's reaction to the skeletons. *thumbusup* I really felt his feelings of sadness and frustration about trying to help the dying too. Brilliant!

*Rocket*The images like the description of how the illness fell like a vampire and the main character clawing, growling, drooling are effective. It is interesting how his reactions and suspicion to the skeletons is so different from the survivors. I wondered if it could be because he is the size he is or has some different DNA or higher brain. He did not seem to want to be happy and well in this way. The idea of the star being the cause of both the illness and the skeletons was cool and might lead him to consider some sort of game was being played.

*Star*The ending was unexpected and the last line made me smile..as if he made a joke.
It seemed like the consuming was liek a cure and gave the ability to be with the Tabby star with ease. It was interesting that he did not like vampires, which kept him from falling prey until his rage changed him. I wonder what will happen next.

*Quill* A few places that glitched for me:

*Rocket*I did not get the connection between the first paragraph and the second. The latter seemed to begin the story and the first stood by itself though I see you referred to this woman in the second paragraph. *Confused* I like that it had a journal like feel to it though.

In the third paragraph I was curious as to what "it" was so it kept me reading to find out.

In the line "affected near as bad" I think you need an adverb here and keep it direct as in "affected as badly as.."

In "some water in some of the people", "in" should be "into" I think.

IN paragraph 6, you use "up there" twice in the first line. I would drop the first instance as it does not add anything at that point. You use it again later too.

In " if what I heard was correct, and they floated right into the domes,..." you need a comma and I was confused by the phrase about what you heard. It feels like you were there when they came and no on would have known much so who did you hear this from, especially as everyone was sick when they showed up. *Confused* And the narrator says he made up the story of where they came from.


*Rocket*I liked the journal like story telling as the narrator shared the events and then his own understandings, queries and feelings. The main character was potent as the central figure in the crisis and the ghostly skeletons were appealing..like happy ghosts...very imaginative creation!

*Star* Thanks for sharing your intense expression and vision. Good luck in the contest. *Shamrock*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Rocket* Hail Ice_Scroogess! I am happy to read your entry in "Blast Off!!*Delight*


*Rocket* Wow! You have created a crew list with such detail and the beginning felt like the beginning of a play script. The tension between the two main characters is well shown in dialogue and description and I was not really liking the Captain, she seemed not too concerned with safety of her crew first.

*Rocket*The narration is consistent and writing detailed with a tightly woven style. The background is told from the Security Officer's POV that provides insights into the relationship stress, the science and describes actions of the others. You used some strong descriptive phrases like the "cold molasses" and "light leaked".*Thumbsup* I liked the detail about the cavern and the light and what they found inside. I can totally get their shock!

*Rocket*You did a great job drawing us deeper into the cavern and the mystery as we are looking along with the characters. I wanted to see what would happen given the set up of the captain's aggressive action and the Officer's reluctance. I did not see how dust would get inside his suit especially as he makes it clear that everyone had intact suits, to show they were not hallucinating. Good show there.

*Rocket* The shocking conclusion was brilliant! You leave us hanging as now we wonder will they have the same fate or would the virus have dissipated. *Thumbsup*

*Quill*A few glitches I noted:

I was confused as to who was speaking at first and had to reread perhaps because of the structure on the page.

In the first paragraph... "Appearing...." needs a tweak and I could not get the connection between the first phrase and the second "inexplicably". Maybe just a simple fix like. It appeared....yet light showed..." *Wink*

"This is like coming on fluorescent" is missing something.

The lines beginning with "Unfortunately," could use a tweak as you use the word 'Unfortunate twice" You can likely drop the first instance as I am not sure why it would be unfortunate to be in a lab on earth. *Wink*

Watch for places where capital letters are not needed. "..Cavern deep inside a Volcano".

I don't get why you need an exclamation after "shouted" when a comma will connect to the actual exclaimed words.

*Rocket**Star*I enjoyed the intensity of this story. Maybe the prediction of the Secruity Officer early in the story just happened! *Sad*

Thanks for sharing your creative vision and good luck in the contest.*Wand*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy December! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Delight*I like the idea of giving ourselves advice or wisdom that comes to us from experience and inspiration. Using this style of two line verses gives it a feel of wisdom sayings. *Thumbsup*

The contrast of what to do and not do is clear in the first verses and your latter ones give positive ideas. It is coherent and gives me something to ponder about the power and responsibility of writers. *Smile* The invitation to be authentic and speak with a kind vibration and with an intent to assist and enlighten is clear. It sounds like kindness and love is key. *Heart*

A couple of places I wondered about:

In the second verse, the word "manly", I wonder if you meant "mainly"?

In the fifth verse, I thought maybe "incoherent" should be an adverb "incoherently". *Wink*

Should "word" in the second last verse be plural "words" or say " write a simple, soft....word" ?

*Star*Thanks for sharing this vision of a way to live as a writer to uplift the world and stay inspired. *Angelic*


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**Xmastree*Blessings of the Season! I am here with a review to celebrate you and catching up with reading the blogging newsletter! *Star*

*Ornament1b*I so enjoyed your editorial comment on Fiction or non fiction blogs because most of mine are of the creative kind...daily haiku, or reflections, or like you mention, pieces I may get back to later. *Smile* You really give good ideas as to how they can work for different purposes. It is interesting that some people may not know that they could use a blog for fictional expression.

*Ornament1v*In your tips section it was helpful to mention about designating a blog to F or Non-F to give folks a heads-up in case they have preference. I liked your selections that reveal some of the different blog type entries. *Salute*

*Star* Thanks for your dedication in creating this blog and keeping us in touch with what is going on in the blog world at WDC. Links are helpful and your page is appealing and well organized. *Salute*

Thanks for all you be and do to make this space sparkle and shine! Happy Happy anniversary wishes!*Wand**Balloonp*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Deep Space Death  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Rocket*Hail Jody! Thanks for writing this interesting story for Blast off Contest! I am here to offer comments as a reader! *Delight*


*Salute*Wow! You created a clear vision of this crew and their mission including the warmth and understanding between them, so the ending evoked a potent and realisitic sadness. The reaction of Sarah was real and Derek not sharing the possible reason for the quick loss of O2 was also something one would do in compassion. Nothing could be done anyway. The danger of this space walk was shown specifically and I got that it was needed to inspect everything before the trip home. I wondered if in real life, they would have known the effects of deep belly laughs.

*Globe2*The first line I felt was long, filled with many ideas and could be more interesting to draw me in. A comma after "space" would have helped in the read. I had to reread to figure out what was meant.

*Earth* You set up the characters and their background clearly in the second paragraph so I got a feel for them. A few of glitches occurred to me as I read.

In "Finally, Jerry was the Pilot." I think you could drop "finally" as it threw me out.

"Though he was always quick to ask for a photo to show his three children when opportunity to send them back allowed." The meaning of this is not clear to me, or its significance. The word "though" and what he wanted a picture of was not clear.*Wink*

*Quill* A few other places to tweak maybe:

In "but still maintaining a margin.." I think the word "while" might be a better fit than "but"..

I noticed a typo in "the sealed the bay". *Wink*

In "..moon, literally." The last word added nothing to the line.

In "working on his check list, working with" you used "working" twice. Maybe tweak for variety and conciseness.

*Burstr*Where you begin with "Brandon suddenly begins...you start to use the present tense from here on instead of third person "began to" etc. The voice changes. I think consistency is more effective. eg. Brandon began... Sarah ran..etc"

In the line "seemed to intensify". I wanted to drop "seemed" to keep it direct and certain that it was indeed intensifying.

Where you use "Derek's name in the last paragraph..the second time you could use "he".

*Rocket*I liked the dialogue and interplay between the characters as they work together as it gave a sense of comraderie and realism. I can believe they know each other well and try to relieve stress of the mission.

*Rocket* The story line was coherent and the crisis dramatic. It kept my attention to see what would happen. It was tragic and yet at the same time realistic as such things are possible. More sadness was evoked by the fact that Brandon was planning to retire and spend time with his family and now...! *Sad* Good job! I also felt for the rest of the crew!

*Star* I enjoyed reading your story and appreciate that you could end the tale sadly! Thanks for taking up this challenge and sharing your vision.



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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**Xmastree*HI Ken! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*
I could not resist checking out your short poems in this contest and couldn't wait to see what the misnomer was. *Wink*

I enjoyed the humour in it as I saw your use of "crescent" as you include two images for the meaning. I laughed at the "cheese" part as I got the referral to the moon being made of cheese.Beginning with a query was effective in setting us up! *Salute*

An appealing piece of entertainment in 24 syllables!{e:star|


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**Xmastree* HI David! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Delight* I love goats and always wanted one when I was a little girl. Now I visit my friend who has them and even got to goat sit! They are so smart and always open to eating! LOL I could not resist checking out this folder with you pictures. Your Baby is so sweet and that you are her toy is precious.
Seeing her with the dog is priceless too. I smiled at the caption for that one and laughed out loud at your campfire one. It was a brilliant idea to show that the ice storm was so bad, you had an impossible decision to make about what to eat. LOL yeah , right!! *Wink*

*Snow2*The photo of your truck is incredible too. Looks like a near miss and I remember living through a couple of ice storms and the damage was pretty freaky. Awesome that you could capture it in pics. It would make a good prompt for a story! *Shock2*

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing this precious memories and your love of goats! Keep on writing and Merry Christmas! *Ornament1r*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Hiya Dave! Happy Party Time! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Fairy* Oh gosh! I love fairies and so Tinkerbell appeals to me. LOL I was curious about her invitation too so here I am hooked by the title. *Laugh*

*Fairy* The lighthearted, gentle tone is alluring as her call to come to Neverland. The word "blossom" got my attention too. I enjoyed the flow and the language with its appealing soundscape was a joy to read aloud. All the soft alliterative "s' sounds suit the mystical aura and you ruse of alliteration and consonance is effective. Wonderful weave!*Thumbsup*

*Fairy2* The first verse is my favourite for its vivid images like "plumes" "stardust" and "wings" with their descriptions *Thumbsup* and soundscape and even without rhyme it sounds close to rhyme in some places. Bravo!

*Fairy3* In the second verse the last image is brilliant and the close sound of "unknown" and "moon" echoed well. I think the word "previously" is a bit heavy and not so poetic as in the first verse. It through me out of the piece a bit. I think "constellations unknown" says it all as it would mean they are still unknown til they get there, so why say "previously"? *Wink* I like the concept of an intersection between 'Now and Forever" and "washing dreams". Cool.

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. Tinkerbell fans salute you. *Fairyr*

Light on the path as you write on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy December Survivor48! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Xmastree*

*Snow2* I love music and as I do toning and singing bowls I am aware of the wonderful influences of sound! So I was drawn to your title and its evocative image. I like that you added animals in your poem as well. *Smile*

*Snow2* In you two line verses you capture some of the ways that music can calm or distract from stressors. I like how it moves from the beat, to words and listening and how you connect it to body sensations so vividly. I can imagine singing along bringing joy and the cat napping.

*Snow3* The last verse changes in voice to become an invitation to the reader as opposed to the narrative verses before. A nice touch. I like that you leave the choice to the reader as different music may effect individuals differently. *Wink*

*Star* You have some lovely sound combinations like the soft sounds in "tranquility" and "producing" and the alliterative "s' and 'P's sounds. Well done.

Thanks for sharing your observations and give us something to ponder and try when stress gets us. *Music1**Delight*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Star**Delight* Hiya Kiya! Happy WDC Anniversary month fellow December baby! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Santahat*

*Angelic* Wow! This experiencial expression is so moving and you capture in detail what you went through in the deportation for no reason experience. I so felt for the inmates and thought it was so unfair really, considering you were not criminals. You think a gentler approach would be applied. The handcuffing must have been humiliating enough and then all the rest. I can't imagine.

*Angelic* You write with heart and your observations are effectively written in a coherent manner. I could visualize each segment of the place and action clearly. I appreciate how you write about others there and your compassion shines through the work. I was so engaged in the story and had to keep reading. It was very emotionally evocative!

*Angel*I was glad you found a way to make it positive... in looking to the future rather than complaining and getting sucked into the dark. Like you mentioned, it could be suicide making experience. *Shock* We could all take a lesson here...and many of us have had less to go through that this. You are an inspiration. *Angel*

*Butterflyv* I could feel the devestation of not even being able to say goodbye to family. Again, for no good reason. I can see how Fear really runs the show and denies common sense and decency. You really reveal the dark side of this structure that is supposed to protect the innocent.

*Angel*The title suits the theme and I can only hope that a new dream has taken its place and that all you have learned and given will lead you to a more peaceful and generative space. Your last paragraph is a call to everyone as we are all in it together with every thought and action we send and vibrate. Thanks for sharing yourself and your light with us. *Starstruck* *Heart*

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
*Star**Snow2* Happy December Prosperous Snow! *Snow3* I am delighted to review your piece from 'I Write in 2018"! Congrats on making it to the end! *Salute*

*Snow2* I have not heard of this form til I read it in the Poet's Cafe recently so thanks for your stellar model of how it works. I am inspired to try it out. *Smile* I like the title and theme of the poem too and it is wonderful how elemental and widespread the concept of candle and light of the world is. Very universal.

*Snow2* Your poem has an inspiring tone and I can sense the appreciation and honour of Baha'u'llah in your words. It was pleasant to read aloud with its effective rhyme and rhythm schemes. I really like the word "starkness" for its sound and imagery and the long "i" sounds work throughout the piece. The idea "matter has sway" is brilliant! *Thumbsup*

*Snow2*I notice the word "trusts" may need to drop an "s". Typo! I also wanted to put a period there as the next line can stand potently on its own. *Wink*

*Star*Lovely reverant expression! *Heart* Thanks for sharing your vision, faith and inspiration.

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Review of The Winter King  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Snow2* Happy anniversary month Ken! I was happy to find this gem in your port! I love cardinals and they look so pretty against white snow. The title really fits its regal status and showy plummage. Good choice to evoke a vibrational image of this bird.

*Snow3* This is a lovely vibrant vision of the cardinal as he surveys his world in winter. It was a pleasure to read aloud with its flowy rhythm and expert rhyme. It kept me engaged with its imagery, and subtle personification. I liked the second verse image of he and his mate and the "song of oak and elm" make them seem magical.

*Snow3*Your composition of the form was effective and thanks for the notes about it. The repeated line useage you used to advantage and created a coherent picture that was appealing. You captured the creature's alertness, and boldness in your descriptions and the added human term of "master of his fate". You have a keen observation skill.

*Starstruck*I was drawn in and charmed by your mage's weave! Thanks for sharing your craft!

Best wishes for many more fulfilling years at WDC, sharing your magic!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Snow1*Happy 13th year fellow December baby! *Laugh* Gosh time travels. I will be 9 shortly. I am raiding today and found this gem in your port. *Delight* The cover picture is awesome.

*Snow2*Brr! You have captured the cursed nip of winter vividly. The cars in ice image nailed the point of view of curse for sure. Good one. It is a real pain to clear ice off cars! Words were well chosen for the theme. The image of "vise" is brilliant and really fits! I like the word "numb" too as it indicates that the cold is so bad it even effects the psyche...which, by February and even sooner, I have so had it with winter too. LOL

I wondered about "spirits" freezing.*Wink*

*Snow2* Thanks for sharing the notes on the form as it is a new one to me. You model it well using the rhyme, line and flow patterns. It is fun to read aloud. The point of view is convincing! *Snow4*

*Starstruck* I enjoyed reading and entering this vision...and lucky it was only imagined as I did not get cold at all! LOL Thanks for sharing your craft.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Snow2* Happy December Angus! *Xmastree* I could not resist reading this when I saw it on the newsfeed! I love trees and it is sad when trees are cut down for no good reason. (though I suppose with xmas tree farms, they are bred for the purpose.)

*Xmastree* I so enjoyed your story and your personification and voice of the tree was stellar! I really was drawn into its vision and vivid description of its treatment. It makes good points and makes the reader think a bit. It also made me laugh with images like the "makeup" and not the real me. and the "kill it" line near the end. Your tone is awesome.
You show the many ways of dealing with the dead trees and all the varied ornaments. Very real.

*Ornament1r*The pleading query at the end with its touch of anger was perfect! Brilliant composition. Serious yet humour filled, depending on whose view! The names of the author were so funny and the tag line at the end made me smile too.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your bit of Christmas cheer. *Laugh* Well conceived and potent in point of view. I feel for the tree. Pines are lovely as they are out my window here. *Heart*

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