| Hey Tinker! I am happy to review your item from our "I Write in 2019" forum! I do enjoy your poems and this form looks like a challenging one.
The title really appeals to me as I thought of how old some of our favourite poems are and it seems philosophical so it does suit your content as I read the poem.
This was pleasant to read aloud as I liked what you did with word choice to create some alliteration, the repeating er sound in the mid line, the "d" sounds, "tang" and "yangtze" and the word "drowned" echoed the "wo" in the mid line as well. Well done and I imagine tricky to do with some of the factual content of the piece.
I wondered at the awkwardness of the word "drunkenly" and "attempted" and yet they tell the tale.
I was not familiar with the form, so thank you for the notes! It is so cool to do a poem about the founder of the form. The word count is sound and the pauses are effective. I noted the parallel in the first line, and the second with two breaks, shared a response to his genius as a writer even paralleled as a drinker. The imagery in the last line rocks...and it made me smile though it had a sad action in the beginning of the line. It was so poetic! Brilliant.
Thanks for continuing to share your love of poetry and wonderful crafting.