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Oh, this was fun and brings back memories of surviving that Down the Rabbit Hole Adventure.
would give it a bit of flair! 
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I did not see why a semi colon was needed in line 3 as it naturally continues to the next idea. I think a period after line 5 would give emphasis to the I in the next line. It is a complete thought on its own. A period in line 13 for the same reason and perhaps a semi colon or period after "meaning". Just some thoughts..picky picky! LOL
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I felt the word choices were effective with minimum wasted words. Reading the paragraph was pleasant too as you had some repeated letter sounds that added to the soundscape appeal! Well done! 
Wow! You really put a shocking twist to this episode in Peter Pan! Dark! 
I think it really fit the prompt which I assume was something about changing up a fairy tale.
I wondered why you did not use the article "a" before "Young boy" and "the" before "Children" near the end.
This was a great distraction for bed rest and brought back memories of our time in the rabbit hole! 
I found it a challenge so great word choices. I noticed a lot of spaces in the puzzle itself, likely as you put spaces between phrases or words in your list. I usually put them all as one word in case it gives clues.
Wow! This poem really touched me as I thought about all the lost children. I could hear the sadness in the parental voice and the idea that she felt the child was waiting for her. How tragic. It sounds like she is not free of it. Not knowing must be hard.
The voice is consistent as I read aloud. The poet pondering about the events is a clear image. The flow and soundscape was effective in a free style way. The rhyme scheme was well planned. Repeating the "waiting" is emphatic and your use of some repeating letter sounds add to the soundscape.
The last line had an definite impact and changed the vibe with the but...like reality set in as the poet returns from his pondering and memory. I like how the night sky spoke to him and hoped he believed that the lost one was still present in some etheric way. So the last line broke that idea in a way. The sadness of the reality of loss struck home. Well done!
I felt sad for his loss and sadder at the end. What a waste. Yet, it felt like he gave the gift he was meant to give..to his mother and you! 
Thanks so much for sharing this inspiring story. I was touched.
The style suits the theme and tone. Your rhymes are well chosen and assist the flow. I thought the repetition of certain phrases were very effective, especially the "seeking the gate" phrase. It ties the two verses together, emphasizing one has to seek. The last verse gives more detail as to what is beyond the gate. The image is light and it contrasts the first verse image well. I liked the reference to the limited sight of the physical. 
Hey, hey! How did I miss reviewing this poem? I enjoy always the whimsical positive vision and voice of your poems. You make winter sound magical and delightful by describing the wonders of the season. It could make one forget the down sides! 
Thanks for sharing your cheery vision that inspired me to enter into the good vibes of winter. I appreciate your sense of joy and wonder. 
I enjoyed the flow our your free style with rhyme that rocks. I could sense the thrill and movement of the ride in the way you use evocative action words and the pace of the flow. The first line engaged me with its direct invitation. Well done. It sounds fun.
A few puzzlements on punctuation: I wondered if you need a comma after "down the street" in line three and should there be a period after "cries" and "gas" as the next line begins a new idea on its own. 
Hello Big Bad Wolf! It was a stay in bed day so I was checking out activities to pass the time. I like word searches and came across your folder filled with activities. It was a great idea to list all the fun in one place. 
The structure of this was appealing too. I liked how you changed around the order of the elements heading each verse as you repeat to emphasize the topic. The summative couplet at the end is effective too and brings us full circle to the beginning of the poem. 
The vocabulary fits the theme and your rhymes are awesome. Use of repeating sounds also add to the potency of reading aloud. I love the line "perfecting the lotus, petal by petal". Brilliant.
Thank you for sharing this inspiring expression and your gift. I loved it!