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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Heart* Hiya Princess Megan Rose! Happy February. Look what I found!*Delight*

*Heartp*I love the vibrant pictures in this newsletter, that shares about Victorian Christmas. I had no idea of the where some of the traditions began and others I forgot about. LOL Victoria certainly ruled long enough for many things to become set as tradition and Christmas trees,roast turkey, Father Christmas and mistletoe are staples for sure. Wow.

*Heartt*This newsletter is nicely laid out and I like how you use colour to denote the different writers. Great collaboration. It sounds like you had fun creating this and wow you have been doing newsletters a long time, even longer at this date! I am familiar with your Jane Austen newsletters, which share your love for her works.

*Star*This letter has a similar vibe, the joy of sharing something you appreciate is evident and drew me in. Thanks for sharing this bit of history. *Thumbsup*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Heart* Happy February Power Raid, Richard! Sorry to see you locked up again. You sure know how to get on cupid's bad side!*Shock* Maybe this song will be your ticket out!

*Key* Wow. This is so inventive and entertaining a song that fits your persona over at Cupids' Arrows. I can imagine one sitting on cloud Nine jail banging on the bars to the blues number. The lyrics fit the style and I like the dropped letters as in "eatin' and "dat" etc. They add another bit of drama.

I wondered about the spelling of Aphrodite (it could be a theatrical thing when you sing) it,and also if you need a comma after if it is Aphrodite on a roll. *Wink* I notice you have commas at odd places....is this for pause as you sing. eg Cupid's, a...." etc. *Confused*

*Key* I had a good laugh at the idea of Cranky Cupid and a "Scammer". *Laugh* You did well to get Freya and the boar into the song too.

*Delight* Yes I can see it being sung slow and mournful and I guess if you don't catterwal it, Cupid might give you some extra *Choco*!

Thanks for sharing your talent and sense of humour in a song! It was fun! *Heart*

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Review of Red Roses  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight**Heart*Hi Maryann! I just came across this gorgeous image made by Amanda! I had not seen you use it before.
The magic of simulation and movement makes these roses come alive and seem real.

*Heart* The realism is helped by the vibrant colours of the red roses, green leaves and brown stems.
I like how they pop to show a bigger size to advantage. It certainly suits your Libra nature of love and beauty.

*Heart* I wondered when you would use this pretty glyph. Was it made for a purpose or as a gift?
It would be cool to create a poem using it as a prompt to show it off in February heart month. Maybe in the heart-throb contest! *Wink*

Sharing the love! Happy 2020!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Heart*Hiya Intuey! I am back with your third review for your winning package in "Winter Fun Auction! This was the one I put a ribbon on as part of the package and because it is just a wonderfully woven picture. *Heart*


*Snowman* This free verse was a delight to read aloud and envision, a fine response to the prompt photograph. It appeals to my senses as I imagine the scene. Your descriptions are vivid, the vocabulary thematic and well chosen to create the marvel of the picture. Cool to find so many words to describe orange! *Thumbsup*

*Snowman* The image of eyes dancing reflect the movement of skyline and water and the verb "zigzagging" is active. With that I am drawn into the reverie. It was so awesome to read this aloud, the words flowing in a vibrant soundscape. Lots of "m" and "l" and "s" and "c" repeating are effective. Your use of assonance and consonance overall adds to the flow and coherence of the read. some of my favourites are; "luminescent, meringue moon", rolling mahogany mountaintops", "creamy strip of sand" and "Lavender ripples lap" and the image of "snuggly wrapping" is neat. Such a delight to read and imagine.

*Quill* I think a comma or semi-colon after "tangerine" might be good to connect to the next phrase on the poem. Also, a comma after "Illumination" in the last verse as the that lines follow on that one..your use of gerunds keep a flowing imagery, which I like, but it makes no direct verb and subject as a complete sentence.

*Snowman*I wonder about the use of adverbs Like "softly" and "slightly". The latter one slows the flow and I think "rolling' gives us the idea. I learned that direct clarity is more potent. I would know that if the ripples "lap" they would be gentle or softly. I take it that "it" after "wrapping" refers to the illumination or light?

*Snowman*I enjoyed the notion of lost souls and other worlds as this twilight time is a bit magical and evokes imagination. Soon time for fairies to play too.

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your soft mystical vision of the lake and shore at sunset.I can breath it in as it is so relaxing and enchanting.

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Heart**Angel*Hiya Ruwth! I am back with a second review in your winning raffle package in "Angels Adventures Fundraiser ~ Closed. *Delight* I could not resist a peek into your blog and glad I did as you have some awesome poetic expressions within!*Smile*


*Angelic* I was impressed with this Kloang poem. I have never heard of it and wow, it is a bit complex to get the rhyme scheme and make a coherent message. I am not sure I could get one so admire that you did it! *Thumbsup*

*Angel*The title clues us in to the main theme clearly and has a pleasing flow to read aloud.

*Angelic*The tone is reflective and one can feel the willingness and ache almost of the person to fulfill her vow.

*Angel*You really have done well with the rhyme in the format and the syllable count is intact. I like how you used the unique word "dun".Wow! The soundscape is appealing too especially the "ur""er" sounds like "murmur" as it gives me the idea of a quietness. Nice use of the "f" "d" and the repetition of "Hunger" is emphatic. The two notions of hunger because of fasting and hunger for the Son is a vivid comparison. *Star*

*Star* Your message is clear in this short poem and I enjoyed entering into the vision and form. Thanks for sharing your gift.

Write on and all the best in 2020! Thanks again for your generosity in the Fundraiser. *Smile*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*AngeL**Delight* Hi ruwth! I am thrilled you own my raffle package in "Angels Adventures Fundraiser ~ Closed. Here is one of two reviews! *Angelic*

*Delight*Wow! What a wonderful experience to share. It is amazing what comes being quiet inside with the divine, when we listen. It is so inspiring to hear that you could make that choice during the tough moments. I like the apart about how at first it felt bad not feeling like "crap" when others had problems. I know that is a hard one to get: that us feeling bad too is not really helping to raise any vibe. *Smile* Transcending suffering is the call.

*Delight*I enjoyed how you share this truth by revealing your experiences especially in that once you felt the truth about choice form your heart, not just words in mind, it became stronger in you to choose a more positive approach when stuff happens. The way you tell the tale shows it too. Stuff will always happen..as nothing stays still.

*Bigsmile* The writing is coherent and easy to follow and the coloured or bolded parts are effective for emphasis. The big pink letter words are even poetic.

*Smile* It really feels like you are speaking to us and inviting us to interact. The mix of personal narrative and the way you ask questions makes it interesting and sounds like how we talk to ourselves. So real. Your faith and trust shines through and gives a ray of hope to others.*Heart*

One little query I had was about the word "staid". I know "stayed" is a verb and "staid" an adjective. I have seen the phrase "whose mind is stayed on him" but not with "staid" so it stuck out to me.*Confused*

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your wonderful revelation in this personal experience. It is a good message for our time as so many get over involved emotionally with other's dramas, when a calm approach could have one see better what is really going on and allow the others to perhaps find their own solutions if they choose. Like you said, does joining in their pain really help...and I know from life, it can wear you out. When one is calm and not into the drama, it is like trusting that they can also deal with their issues as one can listen with a peaceful heart. We are all bigger than our emotions. *Angelic*

Keep on Being you and write on!

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Review of The Dragon Awake  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Beholden, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon lore! *Fire*


*Dragon* Wow! I really got inside the head of this dragon and his voice is consistent to the end. It was humourous how he wished for a knight to come and put him out of his misery. An astute observation of how the times are so different now. "rescuing clod" made me laugh.

*Fire*Quite original notion, I loved the transformation at the end...reflective of the theme of new beginnings as well. A great surprise and upsurge of energy in comparison to his down ward spiral of boredom before.

*Dragon*Your description of the town at New year's is bright in contrast to the feelings of the dragon. I think the inner thought "fine for them" could be in italics. I like how you weave description as part of the story telling. I had to smile at "an eternal round, a coin here, a crown there,. His emptiness is potently shown until the surprise at the end.

*Dragon* Tightly woven and well conceived with thematic word choices that kept me reading and entering into the vision. in lines like "proceeds to discard faded, ancient carapace " use of assonance and consonance add to the flow and soundscape. *Star* The style really suited the medieval aura. It has a story feel to it.
I enjoyed the read and the use of the present tense. The use of "but, wait," served well as a dramatic indicator of shift. *Thumbsup*

*Quill*I think you are missing a few commas in longer lines or where words like "until, at last" etc have phrasings.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing this epic vision using our prompt words and theme. Ankhmar will live in my memory. *Dragon*

Good luck in the contest! Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review of A Child is Born  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Angel* Hi Richard! Yay! You won one of the extra prizes in our "Winter Fun Raffle! A review from me! *Laugh*


*Angelic* I saw you have two entries in the Angels Fundraiser and what a great theme of angels: the birth of a child! *Heart* I think the delicate Lady's slipper form is perfect for the topic as well.

*Angelic*The gentle tone is potent and the idea of "sacred breath" flowing is charming and a wonderful description. I feel earth does rejoice in new life and we are part of the earth. I like the wish for blessing at the end. Good use of the angelic theme.

*Angel* The form of Lady Slipper is well composed with its inner rhyme in line 2 and close rhyme in line 3. "linger " is a lovely gentle word.
It was pleasing to read out loud with is rhyme and flow as well as the instances of assonance and consonance {repeating sounds like "th", 'L", and "a"! *Thumbsup*

*Quill*I wondered about having a punctuation in the first line, maybe a comma. *Think*

*Starstruck* I felt the sacredness of the moment and it reminded me of an old saying by Meister Eckhart in the 12 c. :
"On the day you were born, all of creation stodd up and said, "Behold, there is God!"

Thanks for sharing this precious experience of joy! *Sun* Well deserving of its accolades.

Write on!

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Review of Lost In A Cyclone  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya Intuey! I am happy you won my package in "Winter Fun Auction!
Here is one of your two reviews. *Smile* Thanks for your generous support.


*Snowman*Wow! This is an evocative poem and the first line drew me in. Repeating the turn of phrase "it wasn't about" at the beginning of each verse was very effective. The weather metaphor was brilliant and well woven into each verse.

*Snowman* The imagery in each verse was vivid as you relate it to how the poet is feeling. The intensity rises as you get to the last verse..and the aloneness of death. *Thumbsup* Using the title line at the end brings it home. I liked the flow of "left lost...cyclone" as it echos an emptiness of a space. I could feel the stark directness in the first line of the last verse..as you change to what it is about and "horrid death". Again the repeated o adds to the soundscape and feel of the ending.

*Snowman* The format has a consistent rhyme and was easy to read aloud. I could see her curled up and asking the question as it is such a common thing to do in those times. Your use of some alliterative phrases, assonance and consonance created a pleasing soundscape and flow as well. eg. The hard "d" in the second verse mimicked the thunder, "the wind whipping". "sun, stunned" etc. Awesome.

*Quill*I am not sure of "craze" is grammatically correct but it fits the rhyme and I get the message!
I wondered about using a comma after "alone" as it is a phrase. I see why you might want a period after "death' for a pause. *Wink*

*Star* The poem has a sad tone as the poet is trying to figure out why, and how the elements of weather are not as bad as the loss. The impact is powerful.

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft! *Star* Happy 2020!

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Review of Dust  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Hiya Jody! Here I am back again with a second review from your winning package in "Winter Fun Auction! *Wink*


*Snowman*Your port is full of poetic delights and I was drawn to this simple title with its original theme. What can one say about dust? *Wink* Cool that you were in a poetry class and contest. What fun!

*Snowman*Wow! The flow and form of this poem charmed me. The repetition of "doesn't care" creates an echo effect that helps create the atmosphere and the last lines made me sad. *Salute*

*Snowman* The images in your two line verses were vivid and your choice of each animal for each image really fit. I am not sure which is my favourite as they are all potent. I was drawn in by the first image as I see herons all the time and imagine the still heron allowing the drips to drip. The connection of fire to firefly is fun and I can see the starfish just lazing there as the water and sand flow.

*Snowman* The last line with its more vital concerns made me aware of how many may not care about the broken people. Interesting line about the "breeze dying" and I have to ponder on its significance.*Think*

*Snowman*It was delicious to read this aloud too with its effective soundscape showing use of assonance and consonance and the repetition that adds to the flow. I loved it right to the last hollow line. I could feel the query float into the empty space...waiting for a listener. Very potent way to invite us in. *Star*

*Starstruck* Wow! This is a powerful expression and one could meditate on it longer, spending moments on each image to capture more hidden nuances. The title is evocative and symbolic. *Idea* Brilliant notion. Lovely work.

Thanks for sharing your gift and vision with WDC! Keep on writing your heart! *Heart*

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Review of WAR  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Snowman* Yay! Thank you for your support in the "Winter Fun Auction! Your generous bid won you some Super Power Winter Blast Goodies! Here is one of you review prizes. *Delight*

*Snowman* I enjoy diamante the diamante form and have not read one with the theme of war. I was curious as to what descriptions you would use.

*Snowman*Oh you nailed the contrast vividly as you use the antonym of war at the end. I like how you use the word "changing" in both and change "unforgiving' to "forgiving" as it emphasizes the difference and adds a bit of repetition. You did a great job with the 4th line. I always find that one can be challenging. You did it justice with the four nouns contrasting. *Thumbsup* "battle and talks' make sense.

*Snowman* I can so imagine the messiness of war on so many levels. Good choice. "Refreshing" is an interesting word as well as I am sure it is freeing and light when you get out of the mess. *Smile* It feels relaxing.

*Snowman* It was pleasing to read aloud and the instances of repeating sounds like short "e", "t", 'f" in words really added to the soundscape. eg. "turbulent testing," "messy, refreshing, quiet". etc.

*Quill* I wondered why each word was capitalized, yet I know in poetry there are various ways to go. Perhaps it is for emphasis as you use all caps in the first and last line. It does not throw me out of the work. I have seen it where each line has capital letters. It was just a ponder. I must go check it out and see if there is a set rule...likely not. It does make each word count and be noticed, which is an effect. *Smile*

*Quill* This is something I think would make it pop even more: center it on the page so it resembles the diamond, thus its name. *Wink*

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your vision and craft that made me ponder and feel like I really do prefer Peace. Each half of the poem had a definite vibe. Your first diamante rocked!

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Review of Lonely The Dragon  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Dragon* Hi rinsoxy, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon lore! *Fire*


*Dragon*Aw! I could so imagine this thoughtful dragon. The image in the first line gave me the impression of home and calm. I think the words "floated lazily" helped with that and it invited me in.

*Fire*The message that money and time are not everything is clear as you show he has those things and sits alone. The last phrase is rather sad especially if he is immortal. That is a lot of sleep. I infer there are no others as he has no companions. I had to smile at the idea of having lots of coin but only more time. Nice line.

*Dragon* You make good use of the prompt words and I liked the idea of his mind opening as though this will be the time he will somehow change his lot.

*Fire* The poem seems to be a free verse with a consistent voice telling the tale. I wondered what his new possibilities would be and hope there is more to the story. I can imagine he might get some determination . *Smile*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision and good luck in the contest.

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Dragon*Hi Angelica, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon lore! *Fire*


*Dragon*Cool! This is a fascinating piece. I like the idea of the boy turning into a dragon as it reflects new beginnings. The title is evocative and made me curious. *Smile*

*Fire* The poem seems to be a free verse with some rhyme and a varied rhythm in line length and beat. The tale blends human and dragon in a unique way. The first verse had a vivid scene and I liked the turtle shell bucket! I wondered what the coin was for as he does not do anything with it.

*Dragon* I take in the second verse his parent live in the cave and I infer that they are dragons who were once humans or can do both forms. *Think* The last line I had to reread the first time as it was confusing with "turned to fish to eat" At first I thought you meant they turned to fish. *Wink* Maybe tweak this a bit. It does explain why the boy brought fish.

*Fire* The third verse the same idea is repeated: turning to dragon. The idea that he was excited for the lesson might fit in the previous verse. In line one, I think "rises" should be past tense.

*Dragon*The last verse has a positive vibe and I am not sure what the first two lines refer to. It does not seem to flow from the verse before. I feel like something is missing. He got his first goal of turning to a dragon. *Think* Maybe I am missing something. *Smile* I was looking for the metaphor of "munching" in your title.

*Star* Your poem has a cool premise and uses the prompt words in a coherent way. A few tweaks could give more details.

Keep the quill scribing! Good luck in the contest.*Star*
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Review of The Crack  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Dragon*Hi Kittiara, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon lore! *Fire*


The title was evocative and made me curious.

*Dragon*Oh, I enjoyed reading your free verse and I felt the pondering of this lone dragon and the event at the end turned the mood for us and the dragon. Precious. *Heart* It defines the shiny new year and new beginnings prompt! *Star*

*Fire*The imagery is vivid. I loved the connection of "coin" and "sunrise". Brilliant surprise. That first verse really set a lovely scene in my mind. The idea of her heart being cold without love, even in the warmth is an effective contrast.

*Dragon* I enjoyed reading this aloud as it has some stellar uses of alliteration. assonance consonance and instances of inner rhyme. Delightful. The verse with the queries brings me more into the dragon's mind and feelings and the flow here assists the drama. *Thumbsup*

*Quill* A few glitches/typos:
"indiscriminately" sounds unpoetic. Would the simpler "on rich and poor alike?" work?

Should "will this be the one?''have a capital letter as your other lines do?

I wondered if the extra long line in verse two might be broken into two. ?

I puzzled over why it "hardly seems possible" for yearning to arise? *Think*

I thought "on my own" might read stronger added to the line above.

*Starstruck*I was enchanted into this dragon's world and the last verse was a happy surprise. That first line there is so effective in sound and in raising our curiosity.

Thanks for sharing your unique vision and craft. Good luck in the contest.

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy 2020 Busman Poet!
I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!
*Glass**Tiara*


*Fishb* Oh my gosh! You have painted a very sorrowful hopeless picture of our oceans as they are affected by pollution. *Cry* The sadder part is that some of your images are so true and others while they seem predictive may not be far from the truth is we keep on going on the way we are.

*Seahorser* The first line sets the tone and idea that somehow, while obviously there is a reason, without our influence, there would not be. Point taken.

*Turtle1* I was really impressed with your Blitz poem that I could read very quickly without a hitch in flow. The phrases made sense and the repetitions really do add to the flow and soundscape of the poem. The two ending lines say it all and is such a relevant element as we see in the news the effect of plastic on sea life like turtles and how there are groups and technologies now trying to turn back the plastic tide effect. The blitz is very well thought out to get this fact to the end. *Salute*

*Crab* I wondered if "Existing" should be "exist" as in the line before it you use "exist".
That line hits home too...fishermen don't exist" .Wow.

*Turtle2* "Rivers are trashbins" and "Death is coming" struck me as well. So many vital ideas you have woven so neatly into this blitz.

*Fisho* It was a delight to read for its form and your extra instances of alliteration, as well as assonance and consonance really rocked the soundscape as I read aloud. eg. "c" in "can't be consumed", "creatures, cry, etc. "poison, plastic" the "s" sounds, hard sounds like "d" in "dying by destroying" Wonderful! I felt the reproach in the prophetic aura as well and the passion about the topic. *Thumbsup*

*Wave3* You wake us up to the issue in a potent expression, the short phrases and images we cannot miss as if they drown us till we cannot help but see and feel your vision. It has a dark tone with little hope in sight. Perhaps the truth so vivid will inspire change. *Star*

Thanks for sharing this stellar expression that touches the soul and calls forth...a response.
*Starstruck* I am struck. I appreciate the time and thought this must have taken. *Smile* I have not even attempted one yet!

Write on and all the best in the new year! *Quill*



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Review of The Book Worm  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy 2020 Angus. I couldn't resist your mystery! *Wink* I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*


*Bookstack2* The title is intriguing and really relates to the character and the ending of the tale. I so enjoyed reading it and the mystery for him and then for the people the next day, like an ongoing unsolvable mystery. I like that the wise librarian smiled, knowing what the book meant. Brilliant notion about his book too. *Starstruck*. Wonderful twist!

*Bookstack* The first line sets the character and the second line is potent to read aloud!
"hard-core book worm" made me smile too! I could so relate to not knowing which book to read too. The fact of him liking to be locked in the library made perfect sense to his passion and how he sees himself. I liked how you take the potential fear away by adding he had a phone.

*Bookstack3* You really showed who Chad was through narration and his inner thoughts and actions. It was easy to read and follow the story in a coherent manner and it was like entering a book where you want to know what would happen.*Smile* Your use of italics was useful in the read as well.

I don't think you need the word "immediately" with get up. We know he is excited and would run.

*Delight*Having the authors of horror present and conversing with Chad was effective in adding drama and enhance the mystery. And of course, it is one of your beloved genres so it is cool that your mystery story would include them. Teens like horror as well so Chad's reaction is right on! Adding a touch of the paranormal was genius.

I liked the bit of mysterious magic too in the new book on the shelf! It was a great ending for Chad but perhaps not for his parents. Good twist.

*Star*Thanks for sharing your entertaining story and entering the contest too. I had fun!
Write on and all the best in the new year.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC NorahMae!
I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!
*Glass**Tiara*


*Heart* Wow! This poem touches my heart. The title is evocative and gives a clue to what lies within. The image is potent and evoked dark meanings.

*Heartg* The use of anaphora here is brilliant choice and serves to emphasize that "he" is a person, the child is the subject and rather gives a shout out to us to LOOK at him. It adds a flow to the free verse. *Thumbsup* I loved the the flow of lines 2,3,4 "beyond where the.." It gives me the idea of boundlessness, and made me think of the inner child in all of us who can be so hidden inside, that we may not even see it ourselves. *Sad*

*Heartb* The notion of "somewhere" makes me think that this experience of the child is happening everywhere, more often than we know. The images where the child may be are vivid and I liked the adding what I think are positive alone places like "under the willow" or even "sleeping in grass". That he could be a "mirage" and "deep...forever ....water" are potent conceptions. Wow.

*Heartbl* The last line made me even sadder and he seems to give up and be passive as after awhile of being not seen, hope dies. *Sad*

I wondered about using "can" in "could penetrate". *Think* And that phrase is not quite as poetically sounding. *Wink* though the idea that no light would ever be there is scary.

*Heartp* The free verse suits the emotional content and theme so you could expand and let the words go where they needed to build the picture to illicit awareness and response. Well done! It was pleasing to read aloud with the anaphora and effective use of some assonance and consonance for the soundscape. I enjoyed pondering the vision.

*Star*Thanks for sharing your well crafted and powerful expression. Write on and have fun at WDC.

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Review of Without Peer  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Jace! Look at this little goodie I found!!{e:delight I am celebrating you with a review for "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*


*Quill* I enjoy limericks so I scoured yourprot as I recalled youhad a folder! LOL And the gem popped out. What a great celebration of WDC to regale a bit of its history and invention in rhyme!

*Quill* It is a happy set of limericks on the topic and they tie together well including SM and SMS and the name change. I smiled at old words like "parlay". "balm " and how the site became divine. *Laugh*

*Quill* The limerick format is intact though I did notice little glitches in the 9, 9, 6, 6, 9 pattern. *Wink* It did not take me out of the flow, message and fun of the expression but just a matter of technical format. Lines 2,5,7, 8,9, 10 are off keel. LOL
The last verse is mostly on key but for the first line. Your could drop "great" but that would take away the compliment. LOL And the off rhyme with idea..is a wee bit off. m. Still, a wonderful tribute.

*Fairy*Some notions that occurred to me:
Line seven might sound better as, "with her magic, this..." and fixes the count. *Wink*
You could add "where" to the last line of the second verse to fix the count too.

*Bursty* It was fun to read it aloud as your word choices created a wonderful soundscape.
eg.the flow of "writers and readers sincere", repeated "w", long "i" words, and the effective rhymes.

*Starb* The last 3 lines say it all and the positive light tone of the poem reflects the atmosphere of our site. This is a brilliant concept and I appreciate the effort to get these key ideas into this format. Limericks are challenging I think.

I enjoyed reading and playing with your creation. (thanks for letting me) *Smile* The message is potent and relevant, the energy of appreciation and tribute in a fanciful way is awesome. *Starstruck* Without Peer is a super title. So much more true now than when you wrote this piece. 19 years is magical!

Thanks for sharing your gift and for all you do here to make WDC sparkle and shine ever brighter. *Salute*




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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Tinker! Yay !I get to review your 'I Write in 2020" item! I am celebrating in "Talent Pond New Year Review Dinner Party!*Glass**Tiara*


Wow! I usually see your poetry gifts so it is fun to find something different. *Smile* Good for you for entering the Blogging contest! *Thumbsup*

I could feel the pride of a mother as you share this vivid and detailed entry about your son. It is an amazing biographical journey and it is so inspiring to know there are these fine men out there. Integrity is an art. The poem at the end is a perfect micro metaphor for your son. *Salute*

As I read I felt like he knew what he was destined for and his character in playing with the neighbour lady was illustrated even back then. Wow! The stories you share about his life paint this picture of a person of integrity and I can see why others would honour him and why you are proud.

I was fascinated by the story you share about his dilemma as young cop as I have a friend who trains young guys now and he says in his time there were those "mean" cops. I guess there are bad apples in every organization. I felt for you son and glad when he could make changes later. Sometimes one needs to bide time for the grater good. Sadly.

I hand to laugh when you ask the question at the end.... can imagine teen boys and he was already a cowboy so oh the risks he would want to play! It sounds like he was always ready for the future, while he still had to wait. LOL

The entry was interesting to read and flowed in a sequential way, winding through a life, keeping in mind your thesis, that you fully conclude at the end. I enjoyed the read.

*Quill*One thought that came was to just watch where you have really long sentences with lots of commas or where a new sentence would work as in "... the age of 3, he would ..". A period after 3 and begin a new line with "He" *Wink*

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing so personally about your amazing son. Four kids? Yikes. A handful. It will be cool for you to watch them for their gifted selves.

Keep writing with flair and genius in 2020! *Quill*
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New 2020 Maryann! *Balloonp*
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*Tree* I love trees so your title appealed to me and it gave me the vibrational character of this Oak tree. I adore the picture and the lovely little design at the top! The look of the page and centering is attractive. Also I don't know much about the Triquint form... so this is doubly cool to check out. *Delight*

*Tree2* I was charmed by your descriptions of the tree as it goes through its life journey. In the first verse I could feel the yearning. What a vivid word and way to personify the youngster. Repeating the 'Y' sound here works well too.

*Tree3* The third verse has a romantic air, which works for the mature age.
"Beauty" might be a generic word but I like the repeated "b" sound in that line. The word "sprawl" is effective as the long sound mimics the spreading of the tree in space. Good choice.

*Treefall* In the third verse suing the time of day to reflect the aging tree is cool and using decay and insects makes natural sense. I could imagine the old wood, holes, and rotting. The images are those we can all relate to so we can easily enter the vision in such a short poem.

*Burstg* The form is well composed and you did a great job finding rhymes for three verses. It can be challenge to make sense when you have a set ending rhyme for several verses. The refrain endings are emphatic and I felt the last word of each verse made sense for the age of the tree. It took me a minute to get "Gold" but then I saw the tree hoping for that golden time. The syllable count was spot on and again well done on having it make sense. I find it hard when the last line has to be one syllable and have to rhyme. *Salute*.

*Quill* I notice in verse one, you did not capitalize "Mighty" as you did in the other verses. Likely a typo as it make sense to have it as its Name. *Smile*

*Smile* I am glad I found this again. LOL It was sitting in my template and I never got to it.... like it was to be done for our cupcake challenge. *Shock*
I loved it and appreciate the effort it took to get this right! *Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your gift and vision of this Mighty oak!

Keep writing on with your creative brilliance on into 2020! Looking forward to more good vibes.



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Review of Mesmerized  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Happy New year Rhychus.
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*Bursty* Wow! You did a fabulous job with only 24 syllables! I could sense the enchantment.

*Burstg*The metaphor is brilliant. I can imagine the "she" as a spider and the image in the first line is so evocative. Ick! The last line shows the conflict effectively.

*Delight*It was a delight to read these few lines aloud and I was enchanted by the first line. *Laugh* Your soundscape in so few words is amazing. The repeated Lone "I"s and "e" in and out of the neat rhymes and the "w"s tie the piece tightly as I read it out loud. Such pathos is expressed at the end.

I am not sure you need the comma after "heart's" as the next word completes the thought. *Think*

You really get across an idea that he is split about the relationship... a trap and yet... I would get away!!

*Starstruck*Brilliant concept and composition. I admire how you can encapsulate form and dramatic poetry in so few syllables. *Salute* Thanks for sharing your gift.

Write on with flair in the new year! *Fairy2*{e;wand}

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Review of Nature's kiss  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC Onenessinall!
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*Snailb* What a lovely vision! I could feel the sentimental tone of loss as well as the appreciation for the expanse of sky and jungle. Using the natural elements as touch stone for the memory of a lost love was a brilliant and effective notion. The little snail charmed me. When the water just washed it away...it reflected the memory of lost love in the last verse. *Heart*"Haunting" is a perfect description.

*Snailo*In the first line, I think "seemed" should be "seem" to stay in the present tense of the poem.

*Quill* I think the 'i" need to be capital letters, especially at the beginning of your verses. Also "little: could have a capital as the other verses all begin with capital letters. Consistency is the key to form. *Wink*

*Snailr* The free verse in two line verse suits the emotion and topic. It is cool how you used the prompt words in this way. I liked the reverie as you sit in the jungle.

*Confused* The last line is a bit confusing. "let go for it"?

*Star* I could imagine one sitting in the vivid scene under the stars, feeling the cool, hearing the insects and the splash, and the touch of the snail. Wonderful!
Thanks for sharing your craft and vision. I enjoyed the read.

Write on and have fun at WDC! *Delight*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC SpookyySpirit!
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*Tree* I love trees so I could not resist peeking in on your poem. I have never heard of this ghaf tree. It is cool. You could do a little author's note or link to some info on it. *Wink*

The notion that trees have stories I so get. I am a tree hugger and like to sit and listen to the magic of trees. They receive us without judgement and really help me just let go and expand. I have been inspire by trees in my writing as they can stir my imagination when I see odd shapes etc. *Laugh*

*Treecypress*I enjoyed your unique expression with its short lines in 4 line verse. It is a free style that fits the creative ideas and the repeated lines are emphatic about the more specific tree and effects on travellers. It added drama to the piece. *Thumbsup*

You had some interesting use of rhyme as well that assisted the flow. I like the idea of trees being personified.. to have stories dark or vast. Very neat! Relating trees to us at the end gives us something to ponder and seems true to me! *Delight* There is a lot of magic in tree communication underground too. *Smile*

*Tree3* I wondered about the use of commas after the end of line 1 and 3 in verse 2 and 3. Is it basically for pause? It seems that the lines following just naturally flow from those lines. I especially noticed in the second verse. Just a matter of choice I believe. *Wink*

*Treepine*I had a great time reading this and connecting with the appreciation of trees. I wondered if the ghaf has a special significance in the desert.

Thanks for sharing this cool poem. I loved it! *Starstruck* Have fun here at WDC and write on!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy 2020 Anna Marie!
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*Bursty*I was drawn to the neat idea in your title. The image is unique. *Smile*

*Burstgr*This piece expresses your notion of friendship with a appreciative tone as you focus on the blessings of having a good friend through thick and thin. I enjoyed the positive voice and how you speak directly to the reader. It sparks us all to consider what friendship means to us. I like pieces that make me ponder. *Thumbsup*

*Wave2* The use of the wave metaphor is brilliant as waters can be calm or stormy and the idea that a friend can be an anchor. I like the friendships where you can talk things through even if it involves them too. I liked words like "soothing". "confidence of a conquerer" (nice use of repeated "c" too.), "ripples" LIke "ripples" of support. Cool.
Images of the "mountain" of negativity, "storm" and "skipping stones ripples..are effective images as well to illustrate your vision of friendship. *Thumbsup*

*Wave3*The first paragraph gives us good details on the meanings of friendships. I wondered if you need to use both words "spots" and "patches" as they mean kind of the same thing. I like patches. *Wink* One might be redundant.

*Quill*I think you can drop the comma after "care" in sentence two as the two phrase go together as one thought in my mind.

*Quill* I notice in the last line one little glitch: "waves...is blessed" might read better as "are blessed" as "waves " is plural. *Wink* Same with "it">>>"they". I like the bit of rhyme here as it is like a meme to remember.

*Quill*The line beginning "After skipping... you, is the ...way" is a bit awkward and I had trouble seeing what you mean about after skipping and rock and the waves come back...how is supports? I think I get the idea but the languaging is a bit unclear. *Wink*

*Quill*In the second paragraph, which I had to read twice to get it, I wanted to put the second phrase "waves...the quality" in front of "soothing tensions..." for a more meaningful flow.
eg" waves have the quality of soothing..." *Wink*

*Butterfly2b*It was a calming, inspiring expression and it flowed in a coherent way. I agree with your concepts about friendship here..they are a blessing. I also think honesty is a great quality for a friend too. Sometimes we need some clarity where we cannot see our own flaw in something, *Wink*

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing this wonderful tribute to friendship. Write on with flair in 2020!



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Review of Jettison  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Rocket* Oh my gosh! This is so sad and realistic as a theme. I do not think I would to be an astronaut. I recall watching Apollo 13! It takes some courage to do what they do, much like the early ocean explorers I suppose.

*Rocket* Having the mother as the main character seems to make it even more sorrowful and it was unexpected, which was natural though you show your characters knowing the risk.

*Rocket*The first paragraph had me curious as you begin with something being a possibility without specifying. *Thumbsup*

*Rocket* I liked the dad getting the child a building kit to pass the time and connect with his mom while she is away, and it makes a perfect toy for the ending. The good bye scene was heart felt and vivid. I really felt the everyone's sorrow. I loved the idea of the shooting star! *Thumbsup*

*Rocket* The rationale for the lack of launch was a sad statement too. It figures!! No back up plan.

*Rocket* Would the capsule still be functional at a later date?

*Rocket* The story flowed in a coherent way, easy to follow with a nice mix of narrative and dialogue. Filled with details and language that fit the science theme and the warmth and pride of a family. The emotional intensity was vivid and the practicality of Tara was well illustrated. I can't imagine doing what she had to do. Wow!

Thanks for sharing your unique and evocative response to the prompt. I enjoyed the read even with the sad ending. *Starstruck* Life happens.

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