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Helloooo fellow white pawn! Congratulations on your 
! You raced in "
Here I am racing for the crown myself. 
I thought it was a cool idea to include your love of chess by adding as many chess references as you could...and actually kept track! 
It gave another layer of your challenge.
Each chapter fulfilled on the prompts in original ways and I laughed at the story of avoiding punishment. Good one! The Thimble poem was brilliant. I was convinced it would make a cool prize. {for some) LOL The alliterative work in the H tale was effective and fun to read aloud. You had wonderful detail about your jury members and I could see why they would be helpful to your cause. And yay, you managed to get a poem about chess in the chapter task: a game of chess! 
I liked the cool ending of Talking with Time and your poem in the "haddock eyes" prompt had an original theme. Yummy! Well done. Your closing entry was sincere and helpful to future fellow pawns. Gifting a trinket in some of your public prompts was a generous and lovely gesture too. 
I wondered about adding some colour and Wonderland flair to your brief introduction to the book. It deserves to be shown off! 
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and if you still have some tarts that I heard you stole, enjoy them too...or save some for the rest of us poor pawns if we make it there without losing our heads! 
I am happy to review you item in "I Write in 2021" forum.
Oh wow! I see this is for the Cupid slam contest which seeks ratings of 1 star or less! LOL I think this is tough call.
The darkness of this form of love is well illustrated and the idea of cupid being not such a good love symbol is awesome. The painful results of his work is potent here.
You might have messed up the punctuation to have the poem be less easy to follow. LOL The poem has no form as even the free verse is broken up.
I enjoyed reading your flash piece and how you set it up with the present and a flashback. Your opening line made me curious as to why the building was important and I had to keep reading to find out what the character who felt triumphant was up to. He could have had dastardly plans. So it was a good mislead. LOL
I wondered about the word "rose quickly" in the first line. Or maybe if you say "had risen quickly" it might sound better. And you need a comma after "over the city, over Pearson." I think the "I" is missing in "“Sir please, am sure you ." Niggling typos! 
I like how you begin with the gravestone script centered and then follow with a free verse reflection. It has a personal voice and aura. The image of the rose that will not be put on the grave is vivid. Using Father's Day is evocative too as our minds do think of our dad's then.
It is so moving that the poet has knowing and faith that prayer reaches its destination regardless of distance. The image of sitting at the computer and praying is a wonderful one. I think my dad is buried with his parents back in a village near Quebec. We never did go there. 
Your limerick is well written with lively rhymes and rhythm. It was fun to read and the second line is suggestive of a moving horse. Cool to use that long word "thoroughbred".
I had fun entering your vision with my imagination. I like how we could all have our own picture of the kind of show the horse might do...strutting his stuff! 
The free style suits the theme and content. The repeating in the last two lines is effective too. I was drawn to the first two lines..appealing images to begin with. "breathing the sky" is expansive idea.
Wow! In this short verse you capture what anxiety feels like in a vivid way. I could imagine the speaker sitting there hiding within and the inner termoil of the mind. It has an intense tone and the punctuation assists the read.
The free verse style suits the theme and emotional content. The one inner rhyme with "head" and "dead" is perfect for emphasis. Your use of some assonance also adds to the soundscape when I read it aloud. {eg. repeating long e, long a, ing,} Good job.
I had fun entering into your vision here and I am sure Carly appreciated it as well! Thanks for sharing your gift.
I have never heard of this form before so thank you for the link about it. Your rendition is well constructed with correct syllables and emotional tension. I love the video highlighting your poem. 
Wow! What a great idea for a theme: expressing exaltation in a psalm like the ancients. I enjoyed reading it aloud and it covers the important aspects of what God is to you.
Your first lines are brilliant images to begin with and I like how you use past tense and then switch to present...setting up a timelessness to the relationship with the divine. The end notion is evocative too as it illustrates how much we receive. if we open..even gratitude returned. 
That could continue a snowball fight. I laughed at the robber snowman and the DOH!. His face is priceless.
I would have liked more details about the characters and some description of the action between the knight and the troll. I wanted to hear more about this passage and where it was and who locked up the princess and why. It would make it more exciting and fill out the story line. 
Also, just a note. I found it a bit distracting to read as you capitalize every word and are missing punctuation so I could tell when one sentence ended and a new began. It gives the reader time to pause to take in what you said when punctuation is consistent.
Your genre choices are well chosen and tag line gives us the theme of the story. 
My review has been submitted for consideration in "
I couldn't resist peeking into this folder as I so admire your dedication to learning new forms and perfecting your craft! The title is relevant and your tag line gives a good clue as to content and your interest in daring to do the new! Form Poetry can be tricky. 
Your intro to the folder is perfect too as it is a poem regaling what you feel about poetry.
Happy Happy New year wishes. 
Only one typo glitch I saw, Missing quotation marks after "I don't think so," in the second line. 
Wow! I was really engaged with your imagery and deep thought in this short free style poem. It has a reality and felt a bit sad even though death is just a moving on. 
Wow! I like the idea of Space Kid adventure and the message about exploring to avoid boredom. Painting was a cool choice for them to try. It was interesting what they could watch on the planet. I smiled at "eating competitions." 
