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Review of Sky Sign  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy days Normajean. I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Fairy*{e;delight}I was drawn in by the alluring title that made me curious about signs in the sky and I appreciate fantasy themes too. the cover picture is suggestive and the character could be lonely or peaceful.

I take it from the shortness of this piece that the contest theme may have been about story ideas and the writing suits the cover picture. I could really see this boy waiting. I was charmed as the way you set up the short summary. You suggest so many mysteries and I could feel the hope in the last line.

You leave us with a lot of questions from which an entire story could be created. eg. Like how long had he been in hiding, from what, and who are They who will come back and what if they do not, what will happen? Wow! Brilliant prompt. *Salute*

Congratulations on your win. It is well deserved. *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing your vision and imagination and for all you be and do to make WDC shine bright. May you have many more fun and fulfilling years here. *Heart*


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Steve! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Delight* I always enjoy a good wordsearch and Have completed some of yours and now I find you have a folder full of them. Great idea to organize them in a folder which contains topical folders! *Laugh* like a puzzle in a puzzle!

*Confettir* Thank you for including an introduction at the top of the folder as I encounter many folders with no invite. *Wink* Your love for words and puzzles is vivid and I like how you explain that you can do the same puzzle again with different formatting. I am sure many folks do not know this! *Smile*

*Star*Your three main folders make logical sense and each tag line explains what type of puzzle each one contains. I like the name "Articulous" and I have done a few in your travel the open road category! Excellent way to show some of the sights of far off places.

*Candy1* Thanks for sharing your fascination with word puzzles and providing a load of entertainment for those times when we want to noodle around! *Thumbsup* Cool contribution.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Earthset  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy Days Tanith! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Delight* I could not resist this evocative title as I scrolled your port. You engaged my interest in the first line with the dialogue question and I liked how you described the setting of the scene to keep me waiting to see what the man had! Well done. Using a simile about the earth as promise was wonderful too. Feels poetic in the midst of a sci fi background. *Smile*

I had to smile at the answer and it was really cool to have the physical book as a theme and symbol in the sci fi world. Spalding has wisdom to share with the young and he makes a good point about systems crashing. What would we do without physical books? *Shock* I liked the idea that he and the book were like part of the base. The description "the fire of joy" is vivid.

The conversation was well written and useful in moving the story along and showing opinion/reaction of the characters. Interweaving the 'I' as observer voice narration was effective as well. I like how you reveal Patterson's questioning nature and then show that he was open to new ideas. Spalding was quite convincing. I like the message of blending old with the new that seems to be indicated here.

*Quill*Should there be a period after "book"? as it is a complete sentence as is the next.

This was interesting to read and I felt happy that Patterson may learn to appreciate the real thing! *Bookstack* LOL Thanks for sharing your gift and vision. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of I Write In 2020  
for entry "Catharsis
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun**Owl* Hi Carly! I am happy to review your poem from the "I Write 2020" forum.


Wow! Your vision using the prompt word is amazing. I love the reference to "sage" as a shamanic cleanser. Brilliant idea! *Salute*

The twenty four syllables creates a vivid image of the meaning of the word and has a powerful theme. It was pleasant to read aloud especially with your use of consonance and rhyme. The pause in the second line is perfect, adding impact.

I see you use caps on each line and a period on the end. I wondered why you did not use regular punctuation after "sage" to be consistent. Or instead, You could leave off the period at the end..it would add to the notion of freedom..no bounds of the cage. *Wink*

I think it might be more personal if you used "me" and "my" instead of "our". *Think*

I so appreciated this expression and hope it does well in the contest! Thanks for sharing your gift. *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Hi Odessa! I am happy to review your story in the "I Write in 2020" forum.*Balloonr*

The title made me smile and caught my curiosity! I really liked how you took the US event home to England. I had read on the news that pubs were opening there so your topic is timely and it does seem like a celebration, given the restrictions of our times! *Thumbsup*

I could so imagine the trials and rules they followed trying to get to the pub. The twist at the end was priceless. Even though they may have been disappointed, her ingenuity was brilliant and made me laugh!

Your first lines set the tone or excitement and the plan clearly. I appreciated the lively dialogue between the man and his wife. I assumed the man spoke first as the reference to not wanting to spend time in the pub all day would be Her line! LOL I could feel his frustration too with the gloves and her practicality through the dialogue. *Star*

I wondered if " all day sat in the pub." should be "sitting in.."?*Think*

The conversation was easy to follow as they wove their way through the town, following the protocols. You did a good job showing the distancing on the bus and the overcrowded place as everyone had the same idea to go out. *Smile* I like the vivid word "dodgems" and the rationale for being "puffed" after walking. lol

Thanks for sharing this entertaining scenario about Super Saturday! I had fun. *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya J.L. O"Dell! I am happy to review your yummy item for "I Write in 2020!" *Pepperred*

*Garlic*What a great treat as a topic for a cinquain! The first section follows the form well and I like the emoticons you used as part of the poem and prompt. I wonder if the word "beautiful" was a bit weak as a descriptive for a food...seems generic. I am wondering what a synonym for the first line could be. Or even the word like "mouthwatering' would fit with more vivid appeal. (though you used it already.)

*Tomato* I like how the chicken emoticon provides the noun for the second cinquain and the descriptions are vivid. *Smile*

*Peppergreen* The recipe is well written and easy to follow. It sounds easy to make! Thanks for sharing! *Delight*

Good luck in the contest and write on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Hi Odessa! I am happy to review your entry in "I Write in 2020!" forum.

*Badge*What an exciting tale of how this hero lives twice and an original response to the prompt too! The idea of a fake death and spy identity is cool! I loved the setting in the first paragraph and could imagine the honouring ceremony thanks to your vivid description. I liked the surprise when yo had the apparently dead officer speak from hiding. Effective use of dialogue where you have the vicar speak a bit. You set up the mystery of this "jumper" well too as it caught my curiousity.

*Badge* I enjoyed the change in the character's speech and dress as he preps for a new life and you still kept me guessing when he asks about fighting. Good flow as you reveal the plan. I felt sorry for Jase and did smile at the quip at the end of the chapter. *Smile*

*Badge* The plot was good and Jacob's speech, actions and observations built his character so he could pretend to fit in with this group. "erks" is an interesting word. *Think*

*Quill*This complete thought " the fear was the watcher was still watching." could be a sentence on its own, or made into a phrase for better flow: " in case the watcher..." or "fearing the watcher.." connects with the action of the speaker better. *Wink*

Should there be a comma after "gathered" in "As a crowd gathered the bloke was .." *Questiongr* And I wanted to say "boot in what?" at the end of that line. Maybe a tweak would clarify a stronger detail. *Wink*

*Quill*The line beginning with "he wasn't surprised when.." feels awkward and unclear. Did he see them go into the room and then the guy in the suit went in, or was the guy in the suit already in the room. The use of "to be joined" Maybe used "followed by a guy...." would be more clear. *Think*

*Badge* You really set up a dramatic scene and I like how you show the heart of the undercover cop...in that he did not like beating up a mate but would do his duty as a hero...
I wonder what will happen next! Thanks for sharing your craft and creative vision. It was easy to enter into the scene and believe that he indeed, was a hero. *Star*

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Review of RED  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Strawberry**Delight* Happy Kitchen Klutzes Day Tinker! We are reviewing Food items in our Raid and look what I found! *Tomato*

Delicious! I love ripe fresh tomatoes and your description is so vivid that it appeals to all the senses. Using the present tense brings the reader into the experience immediately. *Delight*

The free verse was pleasant to read aloud with its effective alliteration, assonance and consonance. I especially liked "orange odorless orbs" and "slice, succulent, spills, licked" with the "l" sounds and "accent the sweet acidic tang"! *Thumbsup* The rhyme at the end is a fine effect.

The punctuation assists the read and it is awesome how little you had to use in the flow of the piece. Yummy read! *Strawberry*

*Star* Thanks for sharing your brilliant vision that makes me impatient for the new tomatoes to grow. There is no comparison... new tomatoes in a toasted tomato sandwich! Yum. *Laugh*

Write on! Happy Summer.

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy Strawberry Shortcake Raid! I am so glad you added this to our list! *Strawberry*

*Strawberry*The title makes cooking seem a delightful and fun activity so it has appeal! It is a great idea to put recipes and experiences in a folder. *Thumbsup* Your introduction is short and invites readers in, giving a glimpse of the topic. I wondered about adding some colour or food emoticons for vibrancy...though I know this would not be a priority job. LOL

The items in the folder are well titled and taglined so readers can immediately see what each one is at a glance. The cover pictures are yummy and useful as well, making for a colourful vision.

The chicken spaghetti recipe is awesome. I like how you add the note about experience with gluten free cooking. It is definitely a different taste sensation and cooking trial. Sharing your best recipes...that actually work and taste ok ...can help others. In fact, in your introduction you could even highlight that you will post some gluten free stuff

I think I will skip the Reese's recipe and I never liked the taste of peanut butter with chocolate. LOL What a way to ruin chocolate! *Laugh* Now I KNOW many will disagree! Glad we can all have a POV! *Rolling*

The Hallowe'en dip looks yummy! The picture of the bowl says it all. Uck in a good way! Thematic for sure. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your love of cooking! *Strawberries**Star*

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WdC Superpower Strawberry Shortcake Review Raid
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Strawberry* Happy 10th JIM! It's raid time and here I am with a review for you! *Delight*

The picture you paint about a PotLuck is vivid, clear and comical too. It was appealing how you contrasted the goodness of each part of the meal with a not so good quality about it. eg. the taste of the wine, the dry crust and buying the bread! LOL I really had to laugh. I liked the wavy gravy! *Laugh*

I enjoyed reading the balanced verses aloud with the fine rhyme scheme and style of using phrases with a mix of longer and shorter lines. the rhythm was not exact and yet it did not detract from the fun of the read.

In verse 5, I would change 'It" in the second line to "that was baked.." as it follows the comma line before. A period after "bed" would be good too. As the after is a complete sentence, I wondered about the comma especially as the next line is a complete thought on its own. Maybe period and then a colon after paid...could indicate the price in the next line.
Also you need a period at the end. *Wink*

The last line was a great twist that changed the tone a bit and gave extra meaning to the gathering. Brilliant! *Thumbsup* I had fun entering your vision.

Thanks to continuing to share your gift, humour and contributions with WDC! You rock! *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya Ruwth! I am happy to review your blog entry for "I Write In 2020!" I am sorry to hear you are not feeling well and it does make it hard to write in the midst of it all. I had a week of fatigue last month and did not do much. The body was saying rest! I hope this will soon pass for you. We are all in the midst of big shifts in the world and maybe we tune in to it.

I appreciate your openness in sharing and making the effort. I see from the prompt that only ten entries are required so you have time yet to get back to your creative flair. *Heart*

The theme of your piece is personal and thus fits a daily blog of what is going on with you. It shares reality with your readers. It is easy to follow. I felt that you were apologetic and wanted to assure you not to be. *Smile* Now you have inspired me to go over there and give it a go. I am not sure I have time for every day blog but might manage ten. It is a busy month as I was not at my best last month.

Thanks for pushing through and participating with the bards!...now go get some rest. *Heart*
See you when you are feeling better. *Sun*

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Review of The Book of Jeff  
for entry "30DBC Road Trip
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Sun**Delight* Happy Spring Jeff! I am happy to review your blog entry for the "I Write in 2020!" Good to see you here!

*Quill* *Laugh* What a great response to the fun prompt! Glad you could get up to Canada! *Heart* I had to laugh at meeting someone to just read with them. LOL
It would be fun to hear your tv experiences! I loved how you picked up on Gem's dogs too. That would be fun. I am really learning a lot bout these members included in your trip. I see a star trek fan! *Thumbsup* Your ending made me laugh too..it certainly would be magical on road trip to get overseas. Good point! *Laugh*

*Heart*I appreciate the research you did for this piece and the detail of mileage to travel. Wow! I wondered if there would have been any fun foods or drinks along the way. This piece could open up a dialogue with fellow members for more potential information. *Smile* and I see that in the comments, it did. They were fun too!

The entry was organized and easy to follow. In the paragraph 7, the first instance of "hopefully" needs a capital letter and maybe a comma after Carly..as there are a number of phrases there. I would try for a different word than "hopefully" near the end just for variety. Like 'it would be grand" or something like that.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing this entertaining journey. It was fun to learn about some of our members. You did a great job sparking conversation! *Salute*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya Intuey! I am happy to review your poem from the "I Write in 2020" forum. The title and topic was appealing and topical for our time. I was also curious about the poem form mentioned in the tag line. I had not heard of it, so thanks for the author's note! *Smile*

*Heartv* The poem form is well constructed according to its rules and it is really impressive that you could find thematic words with the three syllable rhymes. I loved "covetous" and "gluttonous" and the expression "lacking in labours". *Thumbsup*
It must have taken some time to dream up and map it out to create this vivid message to inspire us to re kindle kindness.

*Fire*I like how you begin and end with a positive note and reveal the negative aspects of people in the middle two verses. I could sense the puzzlement and sadness about how "self-centred" or selfish some can be, even though it may be unconscious survival behaviour. It makes me wonder when we will all wake up.

*Smile* I smiled at your contrast of the behaviour of pets to the "smart-mouths"! Wow! *Shock* That really makes a statement. Good one!

*Heartt* The poem was a pleasant read with its patterned rhyme and flow. It is quite unique in form. The use of some consonance and bit of alliteration adds to the overall flow and pace. The punctuation assisted the read. I liked the dash as effect. I do think a period could be useful after "respect" and perhaps a comma after "kindhearted" in the last verse.*Wink*
I wonder about a dash after "discarded" or some pause..so the imperative "watch" gets some emphasis.

*Heartb* I really enjoyed the imagery in the last line.. what an inspirational vision of how Love can heal. The voice is clear and invitational. I like how it is not judgemental...as the use of the word "we" represents how it takes all of us.. and that all of us have over time added to the issues of today! *Thumbsup* As we awaken, we take our responsibility... and lead the way for others.

*Star* Thanks for sharing your vision and well crafted Ae Freslighe! *Salute*

Write on in the light!

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for entry "Ride Upon My Unicorn
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hiya Panda Paws. I am happy to offer your last review you for your late auction win. *Wink*


*Unicorn* I love unicorns so I was happy to find this playful little child's poem about one. You could add "Children's" and "Fantasy" to your genre choices. *Wink*

*Unicorn2* It was pleasing to read your lyrical verses out loud. The easy flow and consistent rhyme and your use of fairy lore made it so delightful. I liked the variety of sentence types: exclamations, questions etc. helped us engage with the tale. Repeated first line in each verse was effective as a refrain and emphasized the fanciful ride. I guess the pink words are prompts perhaps. Interesting they have the long o sound and you have added more instances as well as alliteration which create a lovely soundscape.

*Unicorn* Thanks for sharing this charming vision which took me away! Children would love it too. Well done!

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Review of The factory  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Hiya Odessa Molinari! I am happy to review your item for "I Write in 2020!


This was a fascinating flash story. I was intrigued from the first line as it made me curious as to where the person was having a first day. I liked the cool way you lead us to discover where he was by describing clothing and things in the environment all in the first few lines.
I did notice the line beginning with "petrie..." and the next one are not complete sentences, just phrases. Is this a style? I realize that word count might matter. It does sound like he is observing in his mind though as he passes. *Wink*

The whole concept of the quality control and how it is done is kind of creepy and has a sci fi vibe. The question at the end is evocative and I can see why he would be afraid to ask. The department and its rules make sense and I like how you use the colour references. The chute notion is original and the whole procedure here is so clinical! Well done and not very comfortable to think about. *Thumbsup* Interesting they did not consider brain damage or physical looks! I liked the contrast of the clinical observation, conveyor belt with the words "precious cargo". That the newbie was careful is a warm part of the tale.

You certainly drew me in and have me wondering about the black chute as well. You really engage the reader's imagination to complete the story. Good job leading us with clues.

Thanks for sharing your vision with its dark theme. Do you have an answer for the last question? *Laugh*

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Review of SILENT INTENTIONS  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Sun* Hiya J.L. O'Dell ! I am happy to review your item from the "I Write in 2020! *Delight*

I enjoy haiku and have spent time studying its secrets so it is appealing to read your haiku. The title is interesting..and I know usually Haiku are not titled as it gives away the poem, but we do name them for ease of recalling what we wrote. LOL

*Moon* I could really visualize your natural scene where you contrast two images: the moon light and the shadowy figures. They happen at the same moment in time. The last line indicates a mystery and you give the reader the idea that the intention is unknown.
In haiku the reader is to be left to discover something as opposed to being told what to think or interpret. I like that I am able to add my own pondering to the scene you share... which is the point of haiku...to leave a surprise and aha for the reader to delve in with their own interpretation.

*Quill* As the the form, a few things occur to me:
Haiku are not made of sentences exactly, but more like phrases. NO punctuation is used and usually they are centered on the page.

Something I learned: In the early days of English Haiku we tended to use too many words to mirror the Japanese expression. *Wink* They believed less is more. We now know that the syllable counts are not the same in the language translation. I think this contest calls for the 5-7-5 so I see why so many words and images are used here.*Smile*


*Star* Still I was drawn into the vivid picture and am left to add what I think the figures are. I love the vision. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your vision and haiku. It is a challenging form and fun to play with. *Delight*

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Review of A life  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy April Sumojo! I am happy to review your item from the "I Write in 2020" forum!

Wow! I don't think it is easy to write about oneself when there is such an abundance of life to share in a short piece. *Think* You have done a wonderful job highlighting key turning points of interest. *Thumbsup*

I was able to hear the heart of your voice as I read each segment and the last paragraph was an effective summation of the theme of leaving the country. It was awesome that your parents came over for awhile. I assume your mom was better with her heart to travel.

It was so sad about your Grandfather at his end and it is cool he knew GB Shaw!

I noticed a few spacing issues that could be fixed up. *Wink*

In the line "seven, moving twice more in my childhood." I think it would be clearer to end on
"seven'. Then make a new sentence about moving twice more, maybe saying where if you want to add details.

Your mother sounds like a strong person who felt she had to manage everything. Must have been to have a baby alone. Her heart attack makes sense and it must have been scary for you all and still had to go on business as usual. Wow!

I like how you describe your love for your hubby and your gumption in going for what you want. I thought you had some of your mother's courage in you! *Laugh* It is amazing as you were only 16 meeting a true love that lasted! *Heart* *Shock* I am glad your parents came around.

Each paragraph shared a different aspect of your experience, in order. I had the notion that you could really expand the last two paragraphs and the theme of leaving into its own episode.
Maybe even tie in the events of the other moves in your life and how that influenced you and family. You mention the moves but not how it changed anything.

These highlights of your life merit even more detail in further writings. I see a memoir of your time.*Heart*

I really enjoyed hearing about your amazing life and could hear the pride and love you have for it, in all its ups and downs. The key to take away is that love can get us through! *Smile*

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing so authentically in this heart felt essay.

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy Spring! Here is another review from your Winter Auction package! *Heart*

*Swordl*Oh, I like the title of this poem as it made me curious to know why the sword was on a shelf.

*Swordr* I had fun entering into this wonderful vision with its magical time travel theme and the description of Jack's actions as a hero. I think everyone would dream of being a hero in those days. I noted you had some words bolded so I imagine they were prompt words. It is so cool how your muse was inspired to this imaginative tale. *Delight*

*Swordl* The verses were balanced in 4 line stanzas with a steady rhyme scheme that made it fine to read with an even flow even though each line did not have the same syllables. I was not thrown out of the tale. Rhymes like "castle" and "hassle" and "giant" and "defiant" are interesting. *Smile*

*Swordr* I could imagine his amusement at the joker in tights and the talk in rhyme.

*Quill*I wonder if it would flow easier if "and caused" was changed to "causing" and it would be one less "and". Also I would drop "seemed" and keep a direct certainly that he enjoyed it."seemed" is not descriptive.

*Starstruck*I like how you draw us in to the fact he kept the secret...and now we know it too. I would add "Children's" genre to your choices and I think kids would enjoy this. *Delight* Thanks for sharing your gift. Hope you get a chance to add to this portfolio so I can enjoy more recent pieces. *Wink*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hiya pandaPaws! Thanks for purchasing my package in the Winter Auction! Here is another review for you. *Delight*

*Leafr* This poem has a vivid picture of the fall. I liked the use of the ground, leave and geese as images. The use of rhyme and repeated consonant sounds creates a pleasing soundscape.

*Leafr* I am not familiar with the form abhanga, so thanks for the link to its details. It is quite lovely in its form and you have composed it with effectiveness. I felt sad for the last leaf and liked the old fashion word "unto". It has the feel of a haiku with its contrasting images occurring at the same moment in time. The world now brings attention to the present moment. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your brilliant vision. *Star*

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Review of Penguin Poem  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun* Hi Pandapaws. It was good to see you back! I am happy to review this as part of your package for our Power Winter Auction. *Delight*

*Penguin* Oh wow! What a perfect topic for a shape poem and what a fabulous job of making the words in the shape of a penguin. The orange fonted words really added to the visual hint of the picture. *Thumbsup* Impressive.

*Penguin*Having the penguin speak in the poem as narrator is really appealing and it was easy to enter into your vision. I could feel the pride as he describes his life with detail. You weave the features, and action of the flightless bird.

*Penguin* Your words fit the theme and it was pleasant to read. It has a free style and your use of assonance and consonance was effective. eg.long i, w, b,o. etc. I liked the effect of
"below, No". *Smile*

*Penguin*I wondered about "We are...."with "bird" as we is plural. Yet it does work.
eg. you could say "I proudly....and "I am a.." and "I am a Penguin" and keep the voice consistent. AND yet, I see you did use the your "and mine" suggesting he now speaks of all penguins so the last lines to do work in that case and "bird " can refer to species. LOL

*Penguin**Starstruck* I find the penguin quite charming and was impressed with the composition and shape. *Cool*

Light on the a path as you write on!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloony*Wow!Princess Megan Snow Queen Rose ! *Delight* What another fabulous fan fiction creation! *Thumbsup*


I think I may have seen one episode of Downton Abbey somewhere along its long line but did not have access to it myself. I have heard lots about it from fans and so it figures it is about time for its own place here at WDC! *Heart* I love Maggie Smith and have heard her interviews about her part.

*Star* Your introduction is inviting and filled with enthusiasm about the group and the show! I had a sense it was a while in the dream stage and could feel the thrill of a grand opening complete with an MB! Fabulous, darling! *Wand*

*Star* The added creation of a free verse poem to celebrate and summarize keys of the show is marvellous too! It gives us the sense that you know your topic and will be a knowledgeable leader of this undertaking! *Tiara* It has a fun and light vibe with lots of details of place and people.

*Tophat*The pictures add style and grace to the page. I still wonder why you don't center them! LOL But everyone has a different perspective. LOL The little castle glyph is lovely and might look nice centered at the top. *Wink*

*Star* It looks like you have a few fans in the club already! Yay! I will pass it around as I am sure there are more folks who are fans, or at least know more than I do about it. LOL

Thanks for sharing your vision and appreciation for Downton Abbey and giving us something else to consider here as we are going through a different world event. *Heart* Inspiring.

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of Dragon Lullaby  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Silverwindrose! Thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your child's dragon poem! *Fire*

*Dragon*Oh, This is so sweet and has the calming vibe of a lullaby! I could picture the little dragon and the dream flight! It makes sense a dragon would dream of this. *Delight*

*Moon*The repeating verse at the beginning and the end make a lovely refrain and the image is so vivid. The middle verse is fun to read with its descriptive word pictures too. I really enjoyed the form as you repeat the last word of one line in the next! Wonderful composition.
I could see the picture in my mind.

*Dragon**Star* I enjoyed the reverie and thank you for entering though I know you were busy. I would have liked to see more rhyme as the prompt mentioned. *Wink*

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review of Purple Plush  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Beholden, Thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your child's poem! *Fire*

*Dragon*The title is charming and sends warm fuzzy feeling about dragons. I liked the quote from Pooh! *Laugh*

*Dragon*The concept of the dual nature of this plushie dragon is so appealing and unique and made me think of him dreaming of great exploits in other dimensions. *Wink*

*Dragon*The descriptions are vivid and the flavour of medieval times is evident with lively action is reflected in the vocabulary. The four line stanzas have an effective rhyme scheme. I did not notice a steady dynamic rhythm. I like the word "wend"..had to look it up. LOL Lovely use of assonance and consonance adds to the drama of the read.

*Dragon* I wanted to add "are" to "enemies smited" as it felt stilted. I wondered about the word "the" in "to the bed". First read it took me out of the a flow, but it does work if I read with a different speed. LOL The word "readying" was a bit awkward. *Wink*

*Dragon* Thanks for sharing this dream vision that speaks to a child's fantasy.

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Shopgirl! Thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your wonderful children's poem! *Fire*

*Dragon* Wow! I was so charmed by this legend in poetic form. I loved the names and the lesson about being different. I think children could identify with feeling at odds with others, and this tale gives hope that their life can turn out well in spite of what others thought in the beginning.*Heart*

*Dragon**Shamrock* The four line verses tell a detailed tale making effective use of bits of dialogue. The rhyme scheme is intact and while there seems to be no specific rhythm, it was pleasant to read aloud. If ever editing, it would be cool to see if you could get a balanced rhythm in each verse. *Wink* I could imagine the story scenes and the emotional content. Very touching.

*Starstruck*I had so much fun entering your vision. Good luck in the contest. *Shamrock*

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "March 11, 2020
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Shamrock* Happy March and thanks for your wonderful entry into the "I Write in 2020! *Delight*

*Shamrock*Wow! I enjoyed the vivid imagery and vibe of this short flash piece. Your descriptions like her being dark with a rasp gave me the feeling that she would leave a darker note. So the twist at the end was a surprise. Well done!! *Salute*

*Shamrock*The first line drew me in as you personify the pond. I was curious why we needed to know it was a "retention pond". That phrase seemed out of nowhere unless it has a symbolic significance. It did make me get the idea that the Lake was a lesser thing. *Wink*
The muddy hand is vivid and using the present tense was dramatic and took me into the event.

*Shamrock*It was pleasant to read aloud for its word choice and soundscape. I like the mysterious aura and using the mermaid archetype.

Thanks for sharing your vision. *Heart*

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