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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Talaena,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Fight of the Dorms'

Title:Your title fits your piece very nicely.

Description: You've told the readership that this is a continuation of Fading of Colour', I hope that entices them to read both pieces.

Contents:When I read your poem, I was transported back. Way back, I might add. The pranks, fun, fellowship, and the pissiness that goes with dorm life. Thank you for the memories...

Thumbs up: Loved this section...

"We wait for the dawn when the jailors knock on our cells
Questioning questioning questioning
The know it was us but they can never prove"

Conventions:I didn't notice any major errors, just wondering... jailers? or jailors? I think 'er'.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of My Monster  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Audrey Dillinger,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'My Monster.'

Title:I think the title works well with your poem. Everyone has their own demons to face.


Description: Your description works well with your title, and it is so very true!

Contents:When I read this poem, I thought about my life, dealing with my own monsters. It's facing those fears, and moving forward that is the hard part. The first step is the hardest and you can't make anyone take that first step either. They have to want it, and be willing to fight for it.

Thumbs up:With strength and perseverance the demons can be defeated. Recognizing them, is the first step.

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi T. J. De Wahl,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Wonderful Friend'

Title:Lovely title

Description: That's pretty cool, that your wife would give you a creative challenge like that.

Contents:As simple as it sounds, I bet there are many 'friends' that have met in this wonderful cyber world. I know for a fact, there are many miles between my best friend and I, but we talk every day, just like you shared (but we're not sisterly at all).


Thumbs up:It was really a great gift for your wife and her friend to have you take time and write this poem for them.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

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Amay

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Review of Celebrate  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Seabreeze,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Celebrate"

Title:This is the perfect time to read this poem.

Description: I'm thrilled that you warm and fuzzy feelings about Writing.Com. I have them, too!

Contents:What a sweet little ditty that heralds the joys of Writing.Com. I know you wrote it a couple of years ago. You could update the year, and have a poem that gives back as the years roll along.

Thumbs up:I love how you wove in how easy it is to set up an account. It really was that easy. I've not regretted setting mine up at all.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of No Easter Bunny  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jellyfish- Keep Calm and Party, Hey, hey hey! It's party time!

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "No Easter Bunny"

Title:Your title piqued my interest. I was curious if it was a transition of child moving to that dreaded age of not believing.

Description: Past to present children grow up too fast, things change and traditions change.

Contents:"They" say, things change, change is good. But, the traditions we hold dear to our hearts are painful to lose. Your poem is a perfect example of things changing, and they bring up painful emotions that we have to deal with. Like tomorrow... it would have been my father's 80 birthday. I know, I'll have to deal with that and that my mom, won't remember at all. Maybe that's her blessing.

Thumbs up:There is something that calls to me when a writer uses a glazed looking glass. I'm not sure why, but I love the images that it brings to my mind.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

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Amay

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Review of Step  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi S. M. Spencer,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Step"

Title:Your simple title starts the images flowing.

Description: Your description with your title create a perfect duo, enticing a reader to come in and enjoy your poem.

Contents:I started reading your poem and noticed it has its own beat. I can envision our high school steppers, out on the basketball floor, strutting their stuff. They had quite an impressive show.

In such a brief poem, you've conjured images of the past that still take place with great joy and enthusiasm to this day. The wonder of music and dance fill the heart with great memories!

Thumbs up:"Music clears your head, soothes your soul and feeds your imagination." So true! So true!

Conventions:Sound pludders, blundders Pludders... plodders, sputters, I got stuck trying to figure out what word you were trying to say. Blunders has only one D. Easy typos to fix.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Barry O !  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Huskermoon,

Happy Second WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Barry O!"

Title:I think your title works well with your poem. It doesn't give away where you're going.

Description: Your description works well with your title to entice people to come in and take a look at your work.

Contents:I have to say that your poem made me laugh. It was totally unexpected and I really got a kick out of it. Seems like being in debt is the way to go these days. Sooner or later, somebody is going to have to pay for all of these debts. I sigh thinking it could be my children and grandchildren that will have to suffer the irresponsibility of the current generation.

Thumbs up:For a new and improved version of Mary, Mary quite contrary.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of ....  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Katie,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review your piece.

Title:I had to look at this because, it had no title. You've created a curious Amay...

Description: "Don't judge"... > Because it's not finished? Because of the message? Or, because it's too personal and really don't want judgemental reviews? You've created a tease, that calls for someone to peek into your port, to see.

Contents:Your poem hit a chord in me. I know about those folks with razor blade tongues. Those that put you down, even when you haven't done anything wrong. I lived in a situation where I was put down, just to make him feel better about himself.

I found someone that loves me for who I am, who believes in me no matter what. I hope that you'll find someone that will put you on a pedestal and value you for you!

Thumbs up:"My skin is stained with a trail of blood dripping down
my fingertips, and the light begins to fade into darkness." Very powerful.

Conventions:There is a typo > wrist

pull me out of the dark abyss.>> pull me out of? or Pull me into? When I read this line, I wondered if into would be a better word choice, but only you know the intent of your short poem.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Animus Lupa,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Isshokenmei, Never Give Up'

Title:Your title drew me in to read your work.

Description: You have enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. I'm very glad that you explained what Isshokenmei means since it is so important to your poem.

Contents:I'm so glad I took the time to open and read this poem. It reminded me of my dad. He always said to do your best, accept nothing less. No matter what challenges have been put before me, I've always kept that mantra in my heart, challenging me to keep going.

I was thrilled to see the English translation. Thank you for sharing!

Thumbs up:Thank you for reminding me to always strive to do my best.

Conventions:I don't know if it is possible, but could you put a little white space between the Japanese lines and the English lines? I wish we had columns, that way it wouldn't looks so run together.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Empire  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Lauric,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Empire.'

Title:Your title works well with your brief piece.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Make sure you use appropriate grammatical conventions (capitalizing the pronoun I) Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I was a teen when the original Star Wars erupted onto the big screens. Three of us 'pals' would hang out and go see each one as they came out.

You've brought back some pleasant memories, of the old days. It's hard to watch the new ones, that are supposed to be chronologically older than the old ones, and realize how much our technology has improved over the years.

Thumbs up:Thank you for bringing a smile to my face... May the force be with you!

Conventions:I am far from the right person to tell you this. I either use commas too much or not enough, but you need some additional punctuation. There are places where you have natural pauses, there needs to be some way to let the reader know what to do. Check with Grammarbook.com they have 10 lessons on commas. That might be a great place to start.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Spring Cadence  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Word Whisperer,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Spring Cadence."

Title:Your title works well with your poem.

Description: Your description works well with your poem.

Contents:Your poem creatively expresses the beauty of the full moon, those special nights when the senses, and emotions spark the artistic nature of the poet.

Thank you so much for increasing the size of your font. It really helps the reader be able to sit back and enjoy the words.

I read your poem silently (which, I know, you're not supposed to do with poetry) at first. My first impression was dang, there are a lot of what my dad would have called $.50 words. I didn't stop there. I sat back, I read it aloud. I paused where it felt right, and the difference was amazing.

There was a flow and ease of those 'big words', they came together to form the images in my mind's eye. That, to me anyway, is what makes poetry beautiful.

Thumbs up:I absolutely love the last stanza.

Conventions:Poetry has two camps, the you must punctuate as in all writing rules, and then the poetry is free from those pesky writing conventions... I find myself in the latter camp the majority of the time. I bow to the wishes of the poet, and try to remind them that someone else may review and not have that same opinion.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Thinking Alike  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Aden Trego,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Thinking Alike."

Title:

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:You've packed some powerful thoughts into one slim paragraph. A lot of time has passed since you've written this letter. I wonder if you'll come back to WDC and read what I'm about to suggest to you.

Anyway, here goes. Aden, this is a piece that was written with passion. Sometimes when I write in such an impassioned state, it comes out in, for lack of a better word, blurts of thoughts.

I know that when I'm emotional while writing, I have to go back and edit. I have to slow down, go back sentence by sentence to see if it even makes sense.

You have some really good thoughts that need to be broken into several paragraphs. Some sentences, could use a little tweaking, easy fixes really.

I'd suggest that you start reading other member's writings. Take time to leave a review. As you read, and implement what you learn with practice you'll see your writing improve.

This is really a supportive community. Sometimes, reviews can make you want to throw in the towel. That's when you have to stay strong and believe in yourself. Keep practicing, keep writing!

Thumbs up:" I listen to you every chance I get and I watch you even more often then that. You have caught me watching you and turned away to keep me from the embarssment that follows. I'm not ashamed though, I'm not embarssed to want to know you more deeply. I can't be true to who I am and still apologize for wanting to know you mind, body and soul." (embarrassment, embarrassed,

Conventions:What sent does take you home.What scenttakes you home?

I will be honest with you sometimes I think I have had a thought you haven't considered. You need a comma after you... this sentence is awkward,maybe something like... I'll be honest with you, I don't think you've eve considered _______. then fill in the blank with what they haven't considered.





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Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Listen Not  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi T. P. Schultz,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Listen Not'

Title:Interesting title, it does seem a little awkward

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Poetry speaks from the heart. It moves the reader as much as it moves the author. Don't try to get lost in the flowery language of yesteryears, it will only confuse and confound your reader.

Thumbs up:"How I ache to totally submerse
myself
In your arms that have held me
in my crying nightmares and
memories alike.
Those which have accepted what
I cannot let go."

Conventions:I would suggest that you write until the line naturally breaks, let this be free verse it seems to want to be.


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Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Keeper of Secrets  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fancy,

I’m honored to read and review 'Keeper of Secrets"

Title:Wonderful title

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:What a charming story! One of the best things about children's stories is being able to see the action taking place right before your eyes. Giving that gift of taking words and painting a beautiful picture in the imagination is so important for instilling the love of reading and writing in children.

I can't think of anything that would help your story be stronger, especially with the word limit. If word counts weren't important, I'd explain a little more about bone marrow transplants.

There are so many reasons children close themselves off. What a great way of starting the healing process!


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Mamee  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Eeyore,

I’m honored to read and review "Mamee" for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:I think your title works well with your piece.

Description: This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Have you given them enough to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work?

Contents:What you have written has poured from your heart. Wouldn't it be a more peaceful world if everyone had a strong woman in their life to be such an influence. Think of the power of love that would be multiplied exponentially.

Thumbs up:For honoring someone that was obviously very special to you.

Conventions:Capital letters should be at the beginning of lines. I think some of the longer lines can be made into two and it would help the reader's flow.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi J.A.Buxton,

I’m honored to read and review "hysterosalpingo-oophorectomy" for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:Well, I had part of it figured out... I guess that was a good start.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I chose to read your piece today because my mother was a medical records supervisor. She did transcription and ran a doctors office before she worked at the hospital.

You're so right, medical terminology is just like learning a new language. My favorite person in mom's office was a blind transcriptionist. She was amazing! Not only did she listen, and figure out what some of those doctors were saying, but she did it by touch typing. I still have days when my fingers just can't seem to find the right keys and she did it every day! Spot on too!


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)
Hi Sherri McFadden,

I’m honored to read and review 'Cock-a-doodle-doo' for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:Perfect fit.

Description: Nice description

Contents:You've had some interesting camping experiences. Somehow I think I've been to the same or very similar campgrounds.

I can just see you sitting by a campfire telling your stories. I'm sure you have the whole site in stitches.

Thumbs up:For writing down these precious memories. As we age, things we think we would never forget get forgotten.

Conventions:This piece has similar issues as the other piece that I reviewed. Each person speaking in a dialog starts a new paragraph. This isn't too hard to fix, just shifting some stuff around.

Be careful about run on sentences.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sherri McFadden,

I’m honored to read and review 'Where's the Flusher?' for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:I can't think of a better title.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Okay, I chose to review this piece because of the title, but I'll get to that later.

Your piece had me in stitches. I can just see the whole situation unfolding right before my eyes. I can also see the neighboring sites all in your business too.

This will be a memory you'll pull up to laugh at for years to come. Thank goodness you wrote it down, because as we age, those things we think we'll never forget... get forgotten!

Thumbs up:Thank you for sharing your moment in time with the WDC community! I really appreciate the camping experience (as a former Boy Scout Mom).

Conventions:Check your formating, I know when I copy and paste from microsoft word the line spacing isn't always the same. If you're going to type in block form, when you save your document here, check and make sure the space between paragraphs is still there. Or you can check double space paragraphs on the create a static item page.

So I go out to my husband and yelled “honey, where is the toilet flusher in the bathroom, I can’t find it anywhere.” yell, "Honey... The H in honey needs to be capital because it is actually the beginning of the sentence you said.

He replies “it’s those two little peddles below the toilet,...This should start a new paragraph because it is what your husband is saying. He replies, "It's those two little pedals below the toilet. You push those with your feet.

I said “you are kidding!!!New paragraph, a different person talking

Each time dialog switches, you have to start a new paragraph.

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Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

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Review of Timelines  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi lutz,

I’m honored to read and review 'Timelines' for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:When I looked at the title, I knew I wanted to see what this was all about. (I taught in a Montessori School for years, we use timelines extensively).

Description: Your description accurately describes your work.

Contents:You have created a massive amount of work. It's hard to believe that so much has happened in so short a period of time.

In the Montessori Lower Elementary, we spend a lot of time on the histories. From the First Great Lesson (God with no Hands) we provide experiences with the foundation physic experiments and how everything has to follow certain laws. This moves from the big bang, through the formation of the planets.

After that, we have the Timeline of Life- Your geologic timeline. From that point, we touch on early humans and what makes hominids special. Our final two great lessons introduce the histories of writing and math.

The upper elementary classes follow with civilizations and migrations. It's a rich and extremely personalized way to integrate learning in the early years.

Your timelines have brought back a lot of memories. I can still hear some of my smarty pants little boys saying, 'You know, when you were a kid and the dinosaurs were walking around.'

I'd love to know what this work was a part of, you've really taken a lot of information and put it into a brief and systematic format.

Thumbs up:You've packed a whole lot of prehistory and history into one brief document.

Conventions:Check for capitals in your proper names. (ex. McKinley)

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

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Review of Hello  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mya,

I’m honored to read and review 'Hello' for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:Hello, a nice way to start a conversation with the community!

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I think it's wonderful that you've decided to work on your writing and joined us here at WDC.

I'm sure you'll find a lot of cool applications that you can add to a smart phone (I still have a dumb phone).

Absolutely nothing will improve your writing more than writing and reading. There are a lot of wonderful people that will review and critique your work. I personally appreciate all the help I can get!

Be sure to thank those kind people that send you reviews. Check out their port and see what they have to offer. Offer your helping hand to them. Everybody loves to hear that you appreciate what they've written.

Get involved, set up your bio and check out the newsletters. There are contest and activities going on all the time. Join in and have some fun!

Now, as a retired teacher, I could make your ears burn. If you have the desire and the fire to really take on education in this day and age, more power to you! I don't know if I would even think about going into a public classroom, and private schools don't pay enough to make ends meet. But, someone has to stand up for the child. Someone has to fight against what's wrong in education. Like I said, you have to have that fire, that persistence if you're going to make it in that field. What ever you decided to do, do it with passion!

What is a spoonie? I kind of got lost there.

Thumbs up:God bless you with patience, determination and the willingness to put the children in your charge first and foremost in your heart and mind every day.

Conventions:Minor errors. I was once told to go back and read a piece out loud just as you've typed it. Many times when you read silently you read what you think you've written, not what you've actually typed. When you read it aloud, you can hear the little errors in syntax much easier.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of THE EMPTY HOUSE  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Glory,

I’m honored to read and review "The Empty House" for the 'Nonfiction Review Weekend Raid'

Title:I think your title fits perfectly with your work. It's hard to go back home!

Description: When I read your description, my mind wasn't thinking about parents' home, but my own home. You might want to think about that, it could just be where I am in life, crossing my fingers for an empty nest soon.

Contents:Your tale is poignant. It touches my heart. I went 'home' last week. Unfortunately, my husband drove, so it was to our appointment and back, no time for visiting the old home place, or cemeteries.

Looking back and remembering is just as important as looking forward. Those memories are what makes the gray hair worth it.

Thumbs up:You've put your heart out for everyone to see, a sensitive soul!

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of our miracle  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Rhyssa,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Our Miracle'.

Title:The title is perfect for your piece.

Description: Your description explains so much, without giving anything away. After reading your piece, I'd say it's probably the most appropriate description.

Contents:Your story wrenched my heart right out of my chest. The loss of a child is such a painful thing. But the ending sums up the attitude of someone that knows true love.

Thumbs up: Your piece packs so much emotion, and depth of characters in such a short piece! Well done!

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*Candlev*


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Review by Amay
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautifully haunting! I'm sure I'll be thinking about this for a long time.
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Review of Bumblebee Kid  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann,

I’m honored to view, read and review 'Bumblebee Kid'.

Title:A perfect fit for your illustration.

Description:A Bumblebee for Halloween, what an interesting idea. My kids were easier, I think Dumbo was the most interesting costume we did.

Thoughts:What an inspired idea for a costume. I saw the picture and thought of the old TV show, Romper Room, and the Do Bee Song. Boy, I just dated myself. Your picture is so cute and the expression on the child's face just makes me want to kiss those little cheeks. From the date of the picture, I'm pretty sure I'd embarrass someone to death if I did that.

Thumbs up:Your picture is lovely and it really brought back some wonderful memories of when my kids were all excited about dressing up for Halloween. Those days pass way too soon!


Please remember, always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kings,

I’m honored to view, read and review 'Alexa's Baby Illustration'

Title:Perfect

Description: I wish you would have added one little detail about the illustration, now this is the grandma in me talking, Boy? Girl? How old in the picture?

Thoughts:With so many people carrying around cameras on their phones now a days, so many precious moments are captured. Some people (not my son too much) even share the pictures. I love to see sketches of little ones asleep. They have a peacefulness that we can only long for as we get older.

Thumbs up: The quotes you've added to the piece say it all. Grandpa always said, "Good things come in small packages." Little ones are so precious and change so much in that first year.

You've captured and shared a moment that will never pass this way again. Thank you. You've made me smile, and miss my own grandson all in one picture and a few words.

Please remember, always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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