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Review of Home  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, K.HBey!

The sixth stanza reads:

The family will leave their home for a while,
The home becomes just empty walls,
A dead place without a soul,

I can picture how all alone this home feels when the family leaves, empty, without no one in it. If a home could talk, I can see how it would feel that way.

The last stanza reads:

Getting a fun journey outside,
They will return to their home temple tonight,
The home will return to life again.

I can see how happy this home becomes when the home returns back to life again. It can once experience the joy, happiness, stories, etc. This home doesn't have to be lonely any more.

You have told a lot using 140 words. I enjoyed reading this; it brought back some memories.

I encourage you to keep on writing; you have done a good job.

Anna Marie Carlson

I am going to send you 100 Gift Points to show my appreciation in being able to read your story.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Max Griffin!

I was glad that I was able to read your story. It's interesting and I agree that you should be able to enjoy your life eating what you would like to eat. Having a cardiologist say you that you can't have something makes you feel like you're being robbed of the joy of food.

I appreciate the story about the young boy working at Dunkin Donuts who only was trying to do his job, even though he was a little different, and that you gave him some money for just keeping it simple without going into a lot of detail.

I tend to agree with you that God should be thanking us instead of us thanking him sometimes, but God never changes, and He is a forgiving God. You indicated that you were ready to go if God came now.

This reminded me of the time when I hit my rock bottom, and it wasn't because of smoking, alcohol, or drugs, but I prayed to the Lord that normally someone would end up taking their own life when they were at their lowest point. I said to God, but I want to live because I felt that their was a purpose for me being here. If you think my time is up here on Earth, then it's time. Immediately after I got done praying, my depression went away and I felt so much better. In this case, I thanked God for saving me.

I encourage you to keep on writing. You have done a great job and I'm hoping that you're having a great day.

I am going to award you 150 Gift Points for writing a nice story.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, AJwants U2 meet the CanMan!

I enjoyed reading this part of your book. I certainly can relate to having someone in the family being not accepting to someone you love, even though it happens to be something that they don't believe in.

I have a special boyfriend who is a bit different than most people, but I can relate to him because we have both been through the same thing, but have reacted to the situation in different ways. When I lost my mother, my whole family cut me off cold by not talking to me again, except for my sister, who has been both a positive and negative influence on me (mostly negative), and the family of my special boyfriend cut him off cold in spurts and then completely.

We have a man friend who likes guys and a lot of people choose not to be his friend because of who he chooses to be with. However, since I'm not one to approve of this kind of a lifestyle, doesn't mean that I can't be his friend. He is a nice guy.

I enjoyed the last sentence where it says:

I was his friend, his sweetheart, and the mother lioness for the little cub within him!!! This should mean a lot to him.

I felt sorry for your friend to have the hot water turned off because he didn't pay his bills on time. To jump into a warm shower and suddenly finding it to be cold would be a shock to the system.

Keep on writing. You have done a great job!

I am going to send you 100 Gift Points to show my appreciation for reading an excerpt from your book.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Peaceful Peace,

The first stanza reads:

How would a young adult keep confusing him or her self of what life entails? It's no more a secret that the only to meet up with others in this world is having a unique value other's don't have, then you would find it easy to go beyond a far...This would give you an upper hand to boast about yourself and finally while dying at old age, you would mutter to yourself, a life well spent with smile and comfort in the grave...

It's nice to know that you could go to the grave at peace knowing that your life was well spent with smile and comfort. That would be a good way to go.

The second stanza that reads:

the best thing you can achieve that worth your time is IMPACT, your own part that you take in others is the only achievement that worth your time... Loving others and showing care within your own capacity or better still beyond, is the only success that would speak for you after you might have passed away from this Earth...

IMPACT is nice to know that is worth your time on this Earth.

The third stanza reads:

Your time is the only element that places value on you, why? Because you own it all, therefore, you can either misuse it or use prudently, mind you, woe to any man that spends his time unwisely, if he doesn't change from his ways, he would be a waste and liabilities to the present an oncoming generation.

The last stanza reads:

Smiles, look into yourself by yourself and think of something reasonable you can do to help your generation not to increase population (procreation) alone, you are a young adult that has a lot to offer to others, a unique package is what you are, you are a special being some common people need to step up to be unique, when you fail believe that many would fail as well because many success are attached to yours, imagine you now failing your creator.

Excellent writing. Keep it up.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! First of all, Congratulations on your 20 year birthday celebration. It's so much fun to have so many prizes in honor of your day.

Your article is well written. I'm glad to be a participant in these contests.

Keep up the good work. I hope that you continue to have contests like this.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Paybacks....  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Fyn!

I enjoyed reading "Paybacks". I liked the beginning where you wrote:

The moon, fat and yellow as a summer squash rose languidly in a late August sky. Summer squashes have a pretty color to them. I can picture the moon having this color and being fat just lying back enjoying the beauty.

It was interesting that the castle was made of sand and the walls fell back into the sea as the scuttling hermit crab greeted the waters rushing food within his clawed grasp as he went sideways, traveling about wondering at the small creature that was caught up in his pincher. The moon smiled at this.

Keep on writing; you did a great job!
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Review of How Toys Are Made  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Beck!

I surely enjoyed your story. This story is a fantasy of something like I would write. It didn't say at the end if Daniel got the contract or not, but I'm thinking that it did.

It was so sweet of Cindy to say that regardless of whether he had gotten a contract for the Robot Minder or not, that she still loved him. Her encouragement of even if he didn't make the contract, that there was always next year.

Thank You for writing this wonderful story. This story sure did make my day.

I am going to give you 200 Gift Points for writing such a beautiful story.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Flipping Liam  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Foxtrot Victor!

Even though this story is about an assassin, which in not a favorite topic of mine, it was well written. I encourage you to keep writing.

It shows in the story that Andrea was so angry at Liam that she had orders to do away with Liam, along with three other interpol agents that followed him there, all because of the bad remarks made by Liam. It's too bad that she had killed four people altogether because of one night gone wrong.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank You for the links; they will be helpful.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of The Thunderbolt  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Beholden!

This was an interesting contest entry and the subject for the prompt was indeed interesting.

Teenage love can be a difficult one. You want to meet the right person (there are many possibilities out there), but the first thing to look for is friendship. Some people choose not to marry because they just haven't met the right match (this process could take a long time), however, sometimes you have to take a risk and just go for it, ask that special someone in your life if they would like to marry you. If you fail to do so, you may have missed the one person who is very much in love with you and that both of you could have found the happiness that you so richly deserve.

Take care of yourself and stay safe.

Don't let the opportunity of genuine love pass you by.

Keep on Writing; you've done a great job!

Anna Marie Carlson

I'm sending you 100 Gift Points for a job well done. I'm hoping that you've won the contest.
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Review of Old Friends  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, beetle!

This was a very moving love story. I'm glad that you had a friend who loved you no matter what; he only wanted you to be happy. I know that you were scared to see Steven, but I'm very glad that it turned out to be a happy ending.

I know someone who is gay that, even though we think differently on this kind of lifestyle, we are still friends. I am sorry that you had to go through all the pain and suffering that you had to go through.

Keep on writing; you have a nice flow with words.

I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will encourage you to write.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of If I  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Elisa-Stik Stuck Inside!
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You have put a lot of thought into this story. I can relate so much to what you have said.

I grew up in a Quaker church where I have learned so much. Our values have been torn up by those who don't have faith or think that the Bible was just a book that someone has written. The morals that I was taught helped to live a better life. There are times when it's hard to live up to everything that the Lord wants us to do, but I try to live as close to God and Jesus as possible. I have made some mistakes, but I do the best that I can to correct them.

It can be a lonely place out there when so many people refuse to believe in a loving God.

You have done a good job in writing this story and I encourage you to keep on writing.

I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will give you some encouragement.

Keep yourself safe and well.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was interesting; I had fun. I got 3 right out of ten.
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Review of Battlefield  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I scored 2 out of 8; I pretty much lost the battle, but that doesn't mean that I've given up; I'll get up and try again some other time. This was an interesting quiz. Keep up the good work.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I haven't looked into the history yet, but yes, I did pretty bad. I will not give up. I will try again some other time. It was nice to have a quiz about it though.
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Review of Leap In The Light  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a beautiful poem. Sometimes you need to take a leap of faith. I can fully understand why both of the characters in the poem were afraid to take that leap of faith after being hurt. Sometimes you just need to take that leap of faith; perhaps if they both took that leap, they both may have found each other.

This is the first time that I have reviewed a newbie; you did a very good job; it sounded professional to me.

Keep on writing; you're doing great!
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Review of Generations  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jacky!

Your article on, "Generations" reflected on the days that I remembered as well. I remember picking up the phone and hearing others' conversations. I grew up in Port Angeles, Washington and went to school in Sequim, Washington. The distance wasn't that far, but I can remember when their was a charge for calling long distance.

There was also a time when they had switch board operators to manage phone calls.

It makes me wonder how we all survived during those times.

I wish you well in the Fiction contest.

I'm hoping that you're keeping yourself safe and well during this coronavirus thing and beyond.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Gunya!

My name is Anna Marie Carlson and I totally enjoyed reading 📖 your poem entitled, "Conscience for sold!'
I agree that your conscience can 🥫 get lost and your innocence crushed when you don't take time ⌚ to listen 👂 to that inner voice that tells you that you shouldn't do something. There's a reason that you weren't meant to be at a certain place; you could have been an innocent victim of something that had occured.

I liked the last paragraph that read: You need to set yourself free
From all the existential world's worry
That's how you will get the Lord's adjacency
And become in list whom the Lord's agree.

I want to encourage you to keep on writing. You're doing great!
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Review of Pumpkin Fever  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Carly!

The part that reads:

October chills have filled the air
The scent of pumpkin is everywhere
Spiced lattes warm the coldest ❤ hearts
Making tingling happen in all their parts

I think of lattes because they are so good. When the October chills hit, having a nice warm latte would make me feel good. My whole body would tingle all over with joy.

The part that reads:

Smiling faces greet them all
Bring out the treasures and sample fall
Pancakes, soups, stews and crackers
It's all about to drive us bonkers.

This would bring a smile to my face for sure. It would drive me bonkers to try all this out because there would be so much to sample.

I enjoyed reading 📖 this. It was very descriptive. Keep on writing. This took me back a few years.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Dr. Gupta,

The part that reads:

Empty screen, no emotions,
But there's a painted smile,
Which truly hides what's inside;
Selfishness, greed and guile.

This shows that behind a painted ☺ is someone who is ❄, with not a care in the world, but only thinks of themselves, and the only thing on their mind is money. It shows a blank picture of their life on a screen; it must have been a sad life.

The part that reads:

If my cunning thoughts were to
Be displayed on my face,
I'll lose reputation
And my beauty and grace!

This would show a very mean person who was beautiful, but because of hard thoughts 💭, even though they were of good status in the community, they would lose their reputation and would look ugly on the outside and their mannerism's would fall by the wayside.

This is a good portrait of someone who would want to take their life and turn it from something beautiful into something ugly.

I thought that this was very well written and descriptive.

Keep on Writing.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Clouds in the Sky  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tim!

The first part that reads:

A cherished awakening
Crystal blue skies and the shimmering sun
Towering above the brisly cool, enchanted morning;
A pleasant and glorious day beckons with its
triumphant scenes and miraculous wonders.
High in the heavens resides the scattered and billowy
clouds
Whose gratifying appearance can excite the fondest of
imaginations; Uniquely puffy and well-formed shapes
Moving lazily in some dream-like direction,
Reminding us so of many fantastic creatures and things.

It's so wonderful that someone has the same interest in cloud formations as I do. This takes me back to the year 2006, in the month of July, when I lost my mother. For a whole year after that, perhaps a bit longer, I would see a cloud 🌥 formation of my dad and mom lying down with their heads together looking down on me with a ☺. This showed me that they were approving of what I was doing down here on earth.

I have noticed a lot of different animal shapes in the clouds as well.

Clouds can also get to the point of breaking, sending a lot of water in a short time, which can be depressing sometimes.

I enjoyed the prose. Keep up with your writing, as I'm sure that it will enjoyed by others.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I was almost hesitant to take this quiz, yet, I decided to go for it, and I'm glad that I did.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim!

This is a sad poem, yet it ends up being forgiving. The part that reads: Ensnared by the adjacent streets and roads to life's innocence and often vacated resolve the dam bursts so quickly as our inconsolable grasp fails to withstand the pressure of these mighty lakes and rivers.

When a dam breaks, a lot of innocent lives get lost. Lakes and rivers have a lot of pressure behind them and there's no way to escape once that happens.

The last part reads: Leading to the highly sought-after and uniquely treasured love we seek offering its forgiving and saintly path to freedom, light, and hope, into the future and beyond.

It's sad to see loved ones go when a tragedy such as this happens, yet it's nice to know that there is a heaven where they are forgiven, and their lives can lead on into the future, never to be forgotten. They are eternally loved in heaven.

This must have been hard to write, but I'm glad that there is freedom, light, and hope in that.

Keep on writing; it's good to get thoughts out on paper that you're willing to share with others.
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Review of Poetry Forms  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Not bad; I scored 3 out of 5. Thank You for setting up this quiz. This is a way for me to learn something new; it exercises my brain.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I scored 4 out of ten. I almost got half right. I enjoyed taking this quiz on geography.
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