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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I have entered the Whatever Contest and I am reminding you to put it into the Contest Challenge.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Turtle.

This last chapter was said because Larry had hung himself. I noticed that Larry was only 12 years old. The next question would be "What was the cause of his death? Death is hard to deal with no matter what the age of the individual; it's especially hard when the death was because of murder or due to an overdose of drugs.

Bowser Jr. was only five years old. Larry could have been someone he enjoyed playing with. The shock of everybody finding out that Larry was dead must have been a real blow to everyone.

I found out that on New Year's Eve, my second cousin, 33 years of age, was found dead in her apartment. I found out that when her father had gotten the autopsy report that they had found a massive dose of methamphetamines and fentanyl. This news was devasting to us, regardless if she had taken drugs. 33 years is such a young age for someone to lose their life.

Death from suicide and the death of someone so young, especially if you're a mother and you lose your baby is a real tragedy. There are a lot of people who like to say that you have to move on with your life when something like this happens. When you have someone close to you, this is easier said than done. We can always remember the happy times that we've spent with them; this will make it a little bit easier when a loss has occurred. We need to do our best to continue on with our lives; I'm sure that the person who died wouldn't want us to not continue on with our lives.

I encourage you to hang in there; time will heal. Even though it will be a bit rough as you move forward, there will be better days ahead.

When I lost my mother, I remember the good times that we've shared. She didn't let a day go by when she didn't tell me how much she loved me. Even though I miss her dearly, because she had said these things, it eased the pain somewhat.

I hope that what I have said helps you.

Anna Marie Carlson

I am going to send you 50 Gift Points to let you know that I care. I am hoping that this will make your day just a little bit brighter.
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Review of Black  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am doing a review for you on your writing "Black". You chose very descriptive words that explained how you felt. I could feel the pain and emotion in all of this.

I encourage you to keep on writing; the more you write, the better you get and the better you get, the better you feel.

I am going to send you 100 Gift Points to show how much I have appreciated reading your story.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Frost and fire  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, B. Lee Leger Thug-Angel!

This poem sounds chilling; a Permanente frost would do that. This poem was short and descriptive. I feel shivers when I read it. Keep on writing, you're doing a good job.

I am going to send you 75 Gift Points for sharing your poem with me. I hope that you are having some good days and that you will continue to have some.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Blueyez!

The first stanza of your poem reads:

It seemed he owned eternity
for he hung around so long,
so through those endless empty months
I would dream of winter's end.

My impression of this reminded me of myself. Winter seems like months to go through because of it being so cold. I can't wait until springtime when the weather begins to warm up a bit. I love the way that you wrote this.

The second stanza of your poem reads:

Just this morning, over coffee,
I witnessed his defeat,
and secretly I snickered
at old man winter's fate.

My impression of this was the sense of humor that I felt when winter was defeated.

The last stanza reads:

I smiled beneath the warming rays
as winter silently departed,
and I basked amidst the rising steam;
'til I realized 'twas my coffee!

My impression of this was my friend coffee had a part in silently departing winter by its rising steam.

My overall impression was an enjoyable one. It's nice to know that something can evaporate winter.

Keep on writing; you're doing a great job!

To show my appreciation, I am going to send you 120 Gift Points. Enjoy!

Anna Marie Carlson

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I had fun writing for the "What A Character!: Official WDC Contest. It was interesting how I came up with the name of this character as well as the other two. I hope that you will have fun reading this as well. I believe that I have improved on my writing in this story. This was a challenge for me to write.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Christy!

I enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story (Sample of your unnamed novel). It was interesting that Christy was the eldest of three triplets, the only girl, and didn't resemble her brothers Luke and Axle. Her brothers were extroverted while Christy was introverted. The fact that the whole family, friends, and everyone in the house were werewolves.

Cristy and her dad sat for hours on a boulder reading books. I can relate to that as I enjoy reading.

It will be interesting to know if Christy will turn on her 18th birthday. Also, it was interesting that if they didn't turn when they were 30, they couldn't be a werewolf no matter how hard they wished for it. I wonder how many didn't turn.

I encourage you to continue on with your writing; you have an excellent style.

To show my appreciation, I am going to send you 300 Gift Points.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jeff-o-lantern!

I thought that the rewriting looked great! I'm not sure what they look for in the rewriting, but I do a lot of rewriting. First, I do free writing, then I go back and look it over to make it better reading. After I once get it written, there are times when I get a different thought to my story and then I write it all over again.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Bob!

You have given some thoughts to think over in your writing. I believe in the Our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ. There is one issue that I feel is questionable, and that is in the case of rape. I can feel a woman's pain when this happens. Carrying a child for nine months when it was forced upon them can be quite an ordeal. I believe that it would be murder to take the life of that baby, but if it was a matter between life and death, then I feel that abortion would be appropriate. I feel that a woman should be taken care of to help get her through a pregnancy, and then, because of the trauma that she had to go through, she could decide to adopt it out if she chose to do so. I admire the women who choose to love that baby and raise it; it wasn't the child's fault that they were conceived that way.

As far as having good hygiene during teenage sexual encounters is very important to know. If they are involved in sex, it's important to protect themselves as much as possible.

I am going to send you 100 Gift Points for being the writer of this story to show my appreciation. There are so many things to consider in different situations.

Anna Marie Carlson

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Review of Home  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, K.HBey!

The sixth stanza reads:

The family will leave their home for a while,
The home becomes just empty walls,
A dead place without a soul,

I can picture how all alone this home feels when the family leaves, empty, without no one in it. If a home could talk, I can see how it would feel that way.

The last stanza reads:

Getting a fun journey outside,
They will return to their home temple tonight,
The home will return to life again.

I can see how happy this home becomes when the home returns back to life again. It can once experience the joy, happiness, stories, etc. This home doesn't have to be lonely any more.

You have told a lot using 140 words. I enjoyed reading this; it brought back some memories.

I encourage you to keep on writing; you have done a good job.

Anna Marie Carlson

I am going to send you 100 Gift Points to show my appreciation in being able to read your story.
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Max Griffin!

I was glad that I was able to read your story. It's interesting and I agree that you should be able to enjoy your life eating what you would like to eat. Having a cardiologist say you that you can't have something makes you feel like you're being robbed of the joy of food.

I appreciate the story about the young boy working at Dunkin Donuts who only was trying to do his job, even though he was a little different, and that you gave him some money for just keeping it simple without going into a lot of detail.

I tend to agree with you that God should be thanking us instead of us thanking him sometimes, but God never changes, and He is a forgiving God. You indicated that you were ready to go if God came now.

This reminded me of the time when I hit my rock bottom, and it wasn't because of smoking, alcohol, or drugs, but I prayed to the Lord that normally someone would end up taking their own life when they were at their lowest point. I said to God, but I want to live because I felt that their was a purpose for me being here. If you think my time is up here on Earth, then it's time. Immediately after I got done praying, my depression went away and I felt so much better. In this case, I thanked God for saving me.

I encourage you to keep on writing. You have done a great job and I'm hoping that you're having a great day.

I am going to award you 150 Gift Points for writing a nice story.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Peaceful Peace,

The first stanza reads:

How would a young adult keep confusing him or her self of what life entails? It's no more a secret that the only to meet up with others in this world is having a unique value other's don't have, then you would find it easy to go beyond a far...This would give you an upper hand to boast about yourself and finally while dying at old age, you would mutter to yourself, a life well spent with smile and comfort in the grave...

It's nice to know that you could go to the grave at peace knowing that your life was well spent with smile and comfort. That would be a good way to go.

The second stanza that reads:

the best thing you can achieve that worth your time is IMPACT, your own part that you take in others is the only achievement that worth your time... Loving others and showing care within your own capacity or better still beyond, is the only success that would speak for you after you might have passed away from this Earth...

IMPACT is nice to know that is worth your time on this Earth.

The third stanza reads:

Your time is the only element that places value on you, why? Because you own it all, therefore, you can either misuse it or use prudently, mind you, woe to any man that spends his time unwisely, if he doesn't change from his ways, he would be a waste and liabilities to the present an oncoming generation.

The last stanza reads:

Smiles, look into yourself by yourself and think of something reasonable you can do to help your generation not to increase population (procreation) alone, you are a young adult that has a lot to offer to others, a unique package is what you are, you are a special being some common people need to step up to be unique, when you fail believe that many would fail as well because many success are attached to yours, imagine you now failing your creator.

Excellent writing. Keep it up.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! First of all, Congratulations on your 20 year birthday celebration. It's so much fun to have so many prizes in honor of your day.

Your article is well written. I'm glad to be a participant in these contests.

Keep up the good work. I hope that you continue to have contests like this.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Paybacks....  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Fyn!

I enjoyed reading "Paybacks". I liked the beginning where you wrote:

The moon, fat and yellow as a summer squash rose languidly in a late August sky. Summer squashes have a pretty color to them. I can picture the moon having this color and being fat just lying back enjoying the beauty.

It was interesting that the castle was made of sand and the walls fell back into the sea as the scuttling hermit crab greeted the waters rushing food within his clawed grasp as he went sideways, traveling about wondering at the small creature that was caught up in his pincher. The moon smiled at this.

Keep on writing; you did a great job!
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Review of How Toys Are Made  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Beck!

I surely enjoyed your story. This story is a fantasy of something like I would write. It didn't say at the end if Daniel got the contract or not, but I'm thinking that it did.

It was so sweet of Cindy to say that regardless of whether he had gotten a contract for the Robot Minder or not, that she still loved him. Her encouragement of even if he didn't make the contract, that there was always next year.

Thank You for writing this wonderful story. This story sure did make my day.

I am going to give you 200 Gift Points for writing such a beautiful story.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Flipping Liam  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Foxtrot Victor!

Even though this story is about an assassin, which in not a favorite topic of mine, it was well written. I encourage you to keep writing.

It shows in the story that Andrea was so angry at Liam that she had orders to do away with Liam, along with three other interpol agents that followed him there, all because of the bad remarks made by Liam. It's too bad that she had killed four people altogether because of one night gone wrong.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank You for the links; they will be helpful.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of The Thunderbolt  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Beholden!

This was an interesting contest entry and the subject for the prompt was indeed interesting.

Teenage love can be a difficult one. You want to meet the right person (there are many possibilities out there), but the first thing to look for is friendship. Some people choose not to marry because they just haven't met the right match (this process could take a long time), however, sometimes you have to take a risk and just go for it, ask that special someone in your life if they would like to marry you. If you fail to do so, you may have missed the one person who is very much in love with you and that both of you could have found the happiness that you so richly deserve.

Take care of yourself and stay safe.

Don't let the opportunity of genuine love pass you by.

Keep on Writing; you've done a great job!

Anna Marie Carlson

I'm sending you 100 Gift Points for a job well done. I'm hoping that you've won the contest.
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Review of Old Friends  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, beetle!

This was a very moving love story. I'm glad that you had a friend who loved you no matter what; he only wanted you to be happy. I know that you were scared to see Steven, but I'm very glad that it turned out to be a happy ending.

I know someone who is gay that, even though we think differently on this kind of lifestyle, we are still friends. I am sorry that you had to go through all the pain and suffering that you had to go through.

Keep on writing; you have a nice flow with words.

I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will encourage you to write.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of If I  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Elisa-Stik Stuck Inside!
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You have put a lot of thought into this story. I can relate so much to what you have said.

I grew up in a Quaker church where I have learned so much. Our values have been torn up by those who don't have faith or think that the Bible was just a book that someone has written. The morals that I was taught helped to live a better life. There are times when it's hard to live up to everything that the Lord wants us to do, but I try to live as close to God and Jesus as possible. I have made some mistakes, but I do the best that I can to correct them.

It can be a lonely place out there when so many people refuse to believe in a loving God.

You have done a good job in writing this story and I encourage you to keep on writing.

I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will give you some encouragement.

Keep yourself safe and well.

Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was interesting; I had fun. I got 3 right out of ten.
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Review of Battlefield  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I scored 2 out of 8; I pretty much lost the battle, but that doesn't mean that I've given up; I'll get up and try again some other time. This was an interesting quiz. Keep up the good work.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I haven't looked into the history yet, but yes, I did pretty bad. I will not give up. I will try again some other time. It was nice to have a quiz about it though.
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Review of Leap In The Light  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a beautiful poem. Sometimes you need to take a leap of faith. I can fully understand why both of the characters in the poem were afraid to take that leap of faith after being hurt. Sometimes you just need to take that leap of faith; perhaps if they both took that leap, they both may have found each other.

This is the first time that I have reviewed a newbie; you did a very good job; it sounded professional to me.

Keep on writing; you're doing great!
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Review of Generations  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Jacky!

Your article on, "Generations" reflected on the days that I remembered as well. I remember picking up the phone and hearing others' conversations. I grew up in Port Angeles, Washington and went to school in Sequim, Washington. The distance wasn't that far, but I can remember when their was a charge for calling long distance.

There was also a time when they had switch board operators to manage phone calls.

It makes me wonder how we all survived during those times.

I wish you well in the Fiction contest.

I'm hoping that you're keeping yourself safe and well during this coronavirus thing and beyond.

Anna Marie Carlson
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