This is a nice story. I felt sorry for the bunnies that got eaten by the alligator, however, I was happy for the one that survived; he/she wasn't as eager to cross the river to get the carrots; it was a good thing because he survived. The alligator thought that the turtle was stupid for not knowing this. I don't think that the turtle was stupid, just a little slow.
This is an interesting story. It's true, Big Joe really does help out his friends. In the story, being that Eddie had faith in his friend Big Joe, he really got blessed in the end by getting a car with insurance on it for life, a five bedroom house with a lady that came with it. The house also had three bathrooms. What more could you ask for! It's true, this was another book of Job story. Nice work.
I like the way you have expressed yourself in "My Weakened Heart". You used your words from the heart. I noticed the pattern that you used in your poem; it looks like a person. At the ending of your poem, you mentioned that you will always stay true to the beating of your heart and all that it comes to mean; this is a spark that will continue on, and then, one day, you just may have the answer, and it should be a good one. Thank You for sharing.
I wanted to enter a contest that wanted 100 lines of a story or poem. I entered, "A Proper Welcome". It would be helpful if your directions on how to enter was made clearer. My entry was disqualified and they could not locate the contest. I looked the contest up again and found that it was an older contest. Could you help me pick one that is currently. I would like to try and enter the contest entitled, "Knowledge Is Power". I was disappointed to find out that I made a mistake in my entry; I apologize for that.
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