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Poetry and short stories.
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Historical fiction and fantasy. I also love any type of poetry, especially form poetry.
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Sci-fi.
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Short story, poetry, chapter.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like the symbolism of the roses and their petals. It's interesting though that you didn't mention their thorns. I do like how you use the different colors of the roses and what they represent. The story you tell is captivating, about how the new love was given only moments before secrets were exposed and the whole thing fell apart, but the speaker held it together in the end and didn't bestow the "symbolic black rose" to the treacherous lover. That takes character. This was a picture beautifully painted with words. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!

April
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Review of Anger  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really like the contrast between the first two stanzas and the third. I particularly liked the first stanza, and when you said "no exit," it made me think of Jean-Paul Sartre's play "No Exit," or "Huis-Clos" in French to be proper, which is about being in hell, and the words you used in the first stanza, the dark, yawning pit, plunging downward and disappearing act all reminded me of that. It probably wasn't your intention, but poetry is magical sometimes in that it surprises even the very poet who wrote it. In the third stanza, I liked the feeling of being pumped up with helium and being light as a feather. Those were cool images. There was rich imagery all throughout. The short lines seem almost too short, however, and at times sound too fragmented. But for the most part it flowed well. I like how we started out with "Anger" and end with "To be is bliss." Nice progression. No spelling/grammar mistakes. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!

April
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Review of Forever I trust  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm of the firm belief that unconditional love truly is the one, true love. "No one owns a man" is my favorite line. It's evident that the speaker is trying to convince the significant other that it's okay to love, and that the significant other is wary of love because he/she isn't used to the unconditional kind of love. The short lines and short stanzas made it flow really well. No spelling/grammar mistakes. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!

April
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Review of A Quiet Mourn  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like the storytelling nature of this poem. It is indeed a sad tale of a girl who has passed on to the other side, but who has found no peace there, and who yearns to be back on earth with her loved ones even if she can't communicate with them. There is beautiful, rich imagery with wonderful colors and more. I like the role the angels play in this poem. I like the ending too, how she goes back down to the world below and and finds a calming peace in her spirit. The one long stanza was appropriate as the story was linear. No spelling/grammar mistakes. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!

April
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Review of Rhododendron  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I've never heard of this form of poetry, so thank you for introducing me to it! You've inspired me. I like how we're cold and folding into ourselves in the first stanza, but quickly we're coming out of it with the aid of the warm spring that "beckons." I really like the line "Buds spill color," but "Until summer's wane, until fall does fade" is my favorite," because it's a smooth transition, and sort of a sad statement since no one likes to see summer go. I like the repetition of the first stanza as the last. It brings it all full circle. The one-word or two-word lines made it easy to follow, and then the fifth line of each stanza was like a treat since we got more words to work with. This was a captivating piece, and I think I'll try my hand at my own Tetractys since you've inspired me. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!

April
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Review of Silent Soliloquy  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This poem tells an interesting story. I'm not sure if I understood it correctly, but what I've gathered is that the speaker has somehow gone from sipping mint tea (a normal thing to do on a normal day) to being sprawled over the grass and black stone -- which makes me think of some sort of ritual a foreign tribe is about to perform on him/her? Forgive me if I'm way off! That's where my mind took me, and I actually like it. It's exciting in a scary sort of way. I like the "foul trees." The poem is full of rich imagery sprinkled throughout. The short lines make it easy to follow, and the short stanzas make it flow well. No spelling/grammar mistakes. There's a constant sort of suspense that grips the reader throughout the poem that keeps him/her reading more. Nice job. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!

April
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Review of Pen To Paper  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love poems about writing poetry. I have a few of them myself. The first line sets the mood right with "My mind circles, searching." The line "All while lost to a deeper respect of life" is my favorite. I feel the need of the author to "mesmerize" the reader with his work, and his possible frustration in doing so. It's a risky business, but it's so worth it when we get those good reviews :) I like the short lines, it made it easy to read, and the one long stanza was appropriate because it's a very linear poem. The need to please the reader is felt throughout the poem. The title is fitting to the content. No spelling/grammar mistakes. This was a very pleasant read. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! And happy WDC account birthday!
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Review of Nyctophobia I  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like the rich imagery used in this poem, of the dark, shadows, knives, guns, axes, faces, blood, etc. The scary tone is set from the beginning and is constant throughout the poem. I really like the line "Black and white wings take to the skies." I really like the notion of them walking around with human faces; that's really creepy to me! I wouldn't go out in the dark either. No spelling/grammar mistakes. The repetition of "and the dark" became a bit tiresome after the third time, but I understand the need for its reinforcement. The short stanzas made the poem flow smoothly. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!

April

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Review of CHOCOLATE  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm with you on that! Lol. Once again I like the length, clever rhymes, and I can see the conflict involved with loving chocolate so much and how it's not fair that so many people are size zero. I also liked how you could write a poem about chocolate and it was interesting! I totally relate.
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Review of Rock Bottom  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very powerful lines. I especially liked "slipping through splits" and "rocky roads leave my bare feet bleeding."

It seemed a little short, I felt like you could've written more and I would've kept reading.

The victim and bottom at the end don't rhyme like the other pairs of words do, but maybe you meant for it to be that way.

Overall a great work!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I felt like you were writing from inside my head. So real, and I was with you at every word, in your shoes. Or you in mine...lol. If you're interested, my poem Compressed is about dealing with bipolar, but really only the depressed side. It got too long. Also, Old Man is dealing with a bipolar father. Yep, runs in the family - on both sides! Woo-hoo!

Great rhyming, great writing. Keep at it.
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Review of Untitled  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
So powerful, such strong hatred and spite. It seemed like a confident anger, not a weak "oh poor me" anger, of which I'm oftentimes guilty lol :) The speaker seems to not care what happens in the future, but has strong opinions of the past. Then the speaker seems to want to show to the whole world their suffering, and to make a point. Some lines are very vague and incomprehensible, but maybe that's what you intended, I know I do sometimes. Very touching, and yes, well-written! Be proud.
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hot damn! Wow is all I can say. I love the part, "Dying with crap music in the background." That was classic! And the part of her sitting on the bathroom floor with the razor and the smell of chlorine, that gave a great visual with smells, very touching. I like how she doesn't feel sorry for herself, but still feels emotions very strongly. She knows the consequences of her actions but can't help but do what she's got to do, and boy I can relate to that. I really felt her on a personal level, and I'm definitely going to read more! A great prologue. The only thing that got confusing was the lyrics of the song she was listening to, because it was kind of long. Other than that, it's fab. If you find the time, check out my prologue, I'd like some feedback on it from fellow writers.
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