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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great Word Search!!
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Review of Oh Music Oh Music  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Schnujo, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: A poetic exploration of the principal components of music;

"Music is the use, Of sound and of silence"

I used to begin my first lecture in Music Theory 1 with a statement very akin to this.

Characters: There are no characters. The poem covers the various facets that form the basis of Western Music.

Mechanics: I liked your use of a refrain or chorus as we would term it in music, that mimicked closely the standard song form. Your rhyme scheme was steady and well planned out. The poem flowed very rhythmically and was an easy read.


Presentation Thank You for the larger font size! The poem's layout was consistent.


Final Thoughts Usually I have a favorite line, but in this case, it turns out I have a favorite stanza;

"Greek for mousike
Means "art of the muses"
From nine lovely goddesses
Of their inspiration infuses"


These were very astute and well-thought-out analogies for musical concepts!

Grumpy What Makes This Little Guy So Grumpy? is pleased!!

Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Review of Dandelion  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi PiriPica, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: A Cinquino about a common weed.


Characters: The dandelion is our main character here, described to a Tee with economical use of words.


Mechanics: For those like me who need coaching in the poetical forms;

Line 1: One word (a noun, the subject of the poem) *Check*
Line 2: Two words (adjectives that describe the subject in line 1)
Line 3: Three words (-ing action verbs–participles–that relate to the subject in line 1)
Line 4: Four words (a phrase or sentence that relates feelings about the subject in line 1) *Check*
Line 5: One word (a synonym for the subject in line 1 or a word that sums it up) Almost *Check*
Alternative Line 5 for older poets: Five words (a phrase or sentence that further relates feelings about the subject in line 1)


So, not quite following the rules that were laid down by who knows who?

But! It Works! And Works Well. Rules are made to be broken!

Presentation The layout, font and font size are excellent.


Final Thoughts I really don't consider the dandelion a weed, it's the first flower that honey bees feast on and a plant that's far more native than the grass most try to force to grow. It is edible and in reality prettier than grass.

My favorite line is your play on a lion's mane —

"Proud mane shining against the green"

Thank You!

Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Rhymer Reisen, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: There's magic afoot in rural Oklahoma!


Characters: Trey Willabee is a mild-mannered English teacher about to be surprised by new realizations. There are several other mystical/mythical characters, but exploring them might give too much of the story away.


Mechanics: No mechanical problems. I like the voooiiiiceeeees you gave your characters, they worked well.


Presentation Thank you for the larger font!! The spacing and the layout are consistent and lend themselves to an easy read.


Final Thoughts Trey's new world seems like a gold mine, with plenty of room to build and explore. You have created a world with much room to grow. All of the characters are likable in their own way. I hope their adventures continue! Write On!


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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for entry "A Trip to Athora
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Lurie , this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: A young girl moves through an unusual jungle world.


Characters: Our protagonist is young Olivia Berns, who is accompanied by her friends Jack and Anne. We haven't met an antagonist yet.


Mechanics: While there are no glaring errors that detract from the chapter, there are a few small ones that gave me pause.

Moreover, the calm breezes caress one's skin like a mother giving his son, a gentle pat on his forehead.
         The red his seems to be referring back to the mother in this sentence, should this be hers, or is this purposeful ambiguity? If so, work to make it clearer that you did this on purpose.

"Don't you think that it's not her first time here.?
The period should be a question mark.


Presentation Thank You for using a larger font, it makes for easier reading for those with older eyes. Try to stay consistent with your spacing — in most places you treated each new speaker as a new paragraph, except for here;

"Look at Olivia ! Where is she going?" Anne exclaimed.
"Let's follow her", said Jack.



Final Thoughts So far I like Olivia's story, you have a great start. Expand on the descriptions by including all the senses including smells, sounds, and taste, not just what she sees.

         What did Athora Smell Like? What did the cave smell like?
         What noises did the Chihuahuas make when they greeted the students?
         What sounds were in the background of Athora.
         What did Olivia hear or not hear as she entered the cave?

Draw me in Olivia's world with descriptions!


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi SilverMoon🌌, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: A poem of a love destroyed by malice, sad and dark in tone.


Characters: Two star-crossed lovers as the protagonists, a less than loyal friend as the antagonist.


Mechanics: There were no errors or typos that detracted from the flow of the poem. I did stumble a bit over the changes in point of view. That may be more my problem than the authors


Presentation Well-spaced and punctuated. The rhyme stays consistent. A nice flow.

Sorry; another WriteML hint —

If you use {dropnote:"Text Here"}Note Here{/dropnote}

This way —

{{dropnote:"Author's Note:"}Reference to Isis.
Isis is a Moon Goddess in Egyptian mythology. She was known as the goddess of the moon and of life and magic, Isis protected women and children, and surely men She healed the sick.
{/dropnote}}

It yields this —

Author's Note:


Final Thoughts This poem made me sad, so it achieved its purpose, unrequited, stolen love is a saddening thing. Thank You! I need some cookies now.


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi ♥tHiNg♥, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: Plot? It's a song parody — does it need a plot? Well, actually it does have a plot, a Lonely Bull (wait – that was Herb Alpert) spots a lovely Milk Cow and becomes infatuated. I think the Eagles would approve!


Characters: All unnamed, the poem features a Bull, a Milk Cow, and a Farmer/Milkman.


Mechanics: No distractions or errors to detract from the flow of the poem. The rhythm varied a bit at times from the original song, but that is unavoidable.


Presentation Well laid out, great font size and choice and very appropriate art work!


Final Thoughts This is a well-written song parody, that for the most part follows the rhythm and rhyme of the original song, not always an easy task. Thank You!


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Review of Key of Joy  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: Very Important Advice!! Find happiness in the small, impromptu moments that can bring joy to you.


Characters: The main voice appears to be the author, who implores us to live life to the fullest by actively pursuing the simple joys around us.


Mechanics: Nothing was amiss, there were no distractions and the poem flowed well.

If I had to quibble a bit, as a musician I would have to point out that dancers have no real idea of the key of the music they're dancing in. BUT! I agree, dance in the key of joy. has a better poetic flow than "sing in the key of joy"


Presentation Thank You for the larger font!!


Final Thoughts A lovely poem, extolling the virtues of the small, happy (and free moments) that provide happiness to us! Thank You For Reminding Us To Celebrate Them!


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Review of Christmas Rescue  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Elle - on hiatus, this review is part of the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers GroupSummer Fun Review Raid. I hope you don't mind being raided!

I'll be looking at these main points;

Plot: Christmas on a beach in the Southern Hemisphere. The protagonist, an unnamed female is lamenting the loss of her significant other, David. She spots another character in distress and takes action.


Characters: Only one character is named, the departed David. David's personality is well laid out and we feel the protagonist's poignant sorrow at his loss. A significant role is played by nature in the form of heat and sun, nature here appears to be the antagonist.


Mechanics: I do not see any typos or errors that detracted from the flow of the story. There were a few word choices that gave me pause, they appear to be normal regional uses and names that I was unfamiliar with. However, in context, I was able to easily discern the meanings and intents.


Presentation My older eyes would have appreciated a larger font. The paragraphs and spacing were well done and easy to follow.


Final Thoughts This was a touching story of loss and a form of redemption. Thank you for sharing it with us. Write On!


Like all reviews, this is based on one reader's opinion. The review is meant to be helpful and constructive. My opinion is not the end-all, be-all of the literary world and you should view that as such. Please use what works and disregard what doesn't. If anything I said needs further explanation or clarification please feel free to contact me Richard ~ October Prepping!?!

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Review of Finding Flies  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I am reviewing your entry in the March "Writing 4 Kids Contest


A whimsical delight! A nicely planned rhyme scheme and a flowing rhythm would make this a wonderful poem to read to early learners and an excellent poem for middle readers.

I found no mechanical stumbling blocks that would distract a reader from the poem. Punctuation was consistent and served to accent the flow of the poem and rhythmic structure.

One small comment about vocabulary; the word "aghast" is a bit advanced, But it would provide a teachable moment! So it's the teacher's problem!

These two lines;

So if you didn't know it, friend, take heart, for now you do:
flies will always gather 'round a pile of froggy poo!


Bless the teacher who reads them with a straight face!

Thank you for your entry, please bear in mind that this review is solely my opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt. It is also a contest review and as such has been held to a higher standard. Please use what helps and disregard the rest!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I am reviewing your entry in the March "Writing 4 Kids Contest


Short, sweet, and to the point! I liked the premise of your story, from a teaching standpoint, it would have set up a "call and response" structure. The prose asks a question, the readers/listeners respond.

I would have loved it if you had kept the structure consistent throughout the story. A question followed by your response, when reading it aloud the reader would pause for students to respond!

To illustrate my comment;

Do you have a favorite character?

I doMe too! His name is Kermit the Frog.

Do you know what Kermit says?

“Time’s fun when you’re eating flies.”

Do you like eating flies? Perfect!


And So On

I really appreciated that you "illustrated" your story, children love pictures!!

This line of your story is great, and is placed wonderfully;

"Time is fun when you are eating your favorite food."

The line creates a fable-like feel to your story

Structured with more "call and response" questions and answers, this would make a great read-aloud for early learners!

Thank you for your entry, please bear in mind that this review is solely my opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt. It is also a contest review and as such has been held to a higher standard. Please use what helps and disregard the rest!


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi! I am reviewing your entry in the March "Writing 4 Kids Contest


A story about a day in the life of Kermit the Frog told through Kermit's eyes. I really loved this line of your story;

"Kermit is my name and catching flies is my game."

As an editor, I might have done this;

"Kermit's is my name, catching flies is my game."

Then used that as either the opening "hook" or the title or both!

Your target audience was intended to be 7th. or 8th. graders, the problem I see with that grade level is a bit beyond The Muppets, they've outgrown them, and won't appreciate the whimsicality of them again for several more years.

I liked that your story included facts about frogs, for the grade level you intended, more facts would have been better.

         Do frogs eat anything besides flies?
         Does anything eat frogs?

Mechanically I found a few things, that need mention.

I'll use this sentence to illustrate;

"My tongue is extra long and I can catch a lot of flies."

My tongue is extra(-)long and(,) I can catch a lot of flies.

         "extra-long" is generally hyphenated.

         "and" is separating clauses and should have a comma. This occurs in nine other places in your story.

         "a lot of" is a phrase we tend to discourage the use of in favor of other words. Perhaps "many"?

Thank you for your entry, please bear in mind that this review is solely my opinion and should be taken with a grain of salt. It is also a contest/judging review and as such has been held to a higher standard mechanically. Please use what helps and disregard the rest!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Some Great Cat Facts, Thank You! I liked the little story also! Though I never had that problem with Cutie-Pie, I can sympathize with Tinker's owner. Even so, I would have felt for Tinker, most cats don't like to leave messes, Cutie-Pie used to try to hide his occasional hairballs.

Thank You For Sharing!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Teargen, I am reviewing this as part of "Super Power Reviewer March Mayhem Raid.!

I found this little gem while I was searching for tales of elusive Leprechauns.

You almost made me snort green beer, your poem is quite funny!

I enjoyed its rhythmic lilt and the rhyme scheme you set up, this could easily be transformed into a "pubbish" ​drinking song, which is what I heard in my head as I read it. The first stanza would make a fabulous chorus, as each following verse added to the song's humorous conclusion.

Mechanically, I didn't see any major problems. If I were composer to your lyricist I might negotiate a few very minor word changes to fit the rhythm I hear flowing through the poem.

The only thing I spotted was in this line;

I drink too much, O’Reilly thought,
and now inpatients I do in.


I think you mean impatiens, as in the flower?

Thank You For The Laugh and the lovely poem!

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Review of LEPRECHAUNS  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Monty, I am reviewing this as part of "Super Power Reviewer March Mayhem Raid.!

Oh, but I do believe! Your poem makes me wish I could spend an evening in a comfortable old pub, plying story after story out of your Uncle Pat, and quite possibly the rest of your family, with libations of their choice!

Leprechauns are of course very real and live among us. Their gold isn't actually kept in pots at the end of rainbows, and you don't really have to chase them or catch them to find it.

Nope, The gold is in their hearts, minds, and heritage. The rich histories that they'll gladly part with to all those willing to listen. It's in the songs they sing and the poems and stories they write.

‘Tho I know this sounds fictitious,

No, embellished perhaps. Enhanced by generations of storytelling Bards surely, but the grain of truth runs through all the tales, connecting us all to times long past.

I saw no mechanical points to comment on, if I were the composer to your lyricist we might negotiate a few words on rhythm. But simply said this is a wonderful poem filled with vivid imagery, and great storytelling!

Uncle Pat and Da are not the only ones gifted with the Art of Blarney! Thank You!!



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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, I am reviewing this as part of "Super Power Reviewer March Mayhem Raid.!

I found this poem while I was searching for Leprechaun Gold!!

The story/poem clearly catches the essence of Leprechauns, their crafty and mischievous nature, their love of storytelling (blarney), and their zest for good times.

It is well written, with very descriptive text and rich imagery. For the most part, it has a pleasant and an AABB rhyme scheme. There are five stanzas bracketed by the opening stanza, very reminiscent of songwriting style.

The opening stanza sets an almost mystical tone, evoking the sound of "tiny violins" leading seldom seen dancers until late into the evening. I like that, although "tiny fiddles" might have been more apropos. A little bit of a non-sequitur here, as we're led to believe that at sunset their retire for the evening, yet later in the poem/story we find them out at night creating mayhem and mischief.

I was particularly moved, this was the work of a "White Case" member. It makes me happy that, to some small extent, I can honor COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME's memory by doing this review. I don't know how these White Cases are maintained or if any of the mechanical aspects are editable, of which there are only two that I saw.

The only mechanical aspects I would note are missing spaces in the first line of both the first and last stanza;

In the fields beyond the moors,(add space)the sound of music drifted.

And a misplaced space in this line of the fourth stanza;

Although they have fun doing their mischief(misplaced space).I declare

I truly enjoyed this poem, the imagery, and emotions that it evoked.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well Done! Thank YOU!!
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Review of Turkeys' Revenge  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I laughed out loud at these limericks! Splendid job!!

One quick note should Dinners be Diners?

Otherwise PERFECT!! Brava


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It's great to see someone see the positives of a situation, rather than dwelling on the negatives!

So much has been made of the inconveniences Covid has caused, but we tend to ignore the benefits. Like the time to do things we don't normally do. It's a great thing that Covid has adversely affect you or me and that we have stayed healthy.

It's good to here you have adapted to Zoom classes, some students struggle with that, as do some teachers. I find that I am spending more time on classes, I have had to limit my time. I was answering kids questions twenty-four hours a day! *Rolling*

Again, thanks for reminding us to look for the positives and to not always dwell in the negative aspects!


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Review of CCRD  
Rated: E | (5.0)
'Rubbing Peter to pay Paul' ~ I think you mean Robbing?


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Review of JOY IN CHRIST  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Favour and welcome to WdC — again!

I enjoyed and appreciated reading your first offering on WdC. Thank You for Sharing!!

I found your use of storms as an analogy for life's tribulations fitting, particularly now when the storm waters are coming from so many directions. So many are having difficulty dealing with their personal storms.

Your words work equally well as free verse poetry, hymn lyric, or simply a prayer.

A question of punctuation;

It doesn't matter how tumultuous the storm may look like

It might even seem as if it's going to blow one down

We are not going to fill our own boat with the waters of wearisome thoughts.


Do you wish those lines to be one long sentence, with no stops or pauses?

I suggest you read this aloud and add punctuation to match what you read.

I also noticed you added a Copywrite disclaimer, while you can certainly do that, every item you post on WdC is Copywrite protected as per the Terms of Service Agreement. Just so you Know!!

© Copyright 2020 Favour (favour1 at Writing.Com). All rights reserved.
Writing.Com, its affiliates, and syndicates have been granted non-exclusive rights to display this work.


Again, Welcome, and Thank You!!


P.S. One of the "things" on WdC are groups dedicated to specific topics and subjects, this is a group that might interest you {emdash "Open Door To Grace ♥


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Review of Autumn as a Child  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A lovely poem that brings back happy thoughts of Autumn's past. I miss the "Old Autumns". To me they seemed to have lasted longer, with their brisk yet comfortable temperatures. We had many maple trees, that were always a glory of color.

I particularly liked the creation of your new word "Autumnly" — I always enjoy the artistic creation of new words or the use of older words in their archaic form.

I didn't stumble over any of your poem, the writing was clear and easy to read.

One small comment for possible edit;

In this line –

kickball and softball witch the three trees would be used for the bases

Did you intentionally switch which to witch? If this had been an October or Halloween Poem, I wouldn't even ask, thinking you might have added an "Easter Egg" for us to find.

I really enjoyed reading this poem, and to make up for your "missing" CR from the Merit Badge, I will be awarding it an awardicon! Thank You for sharing your talent with us!!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice Word Search! Thank You for Celebrating our Veterans!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, that was certainly unexpected! That was quite a bit of very fine writing packed into a compact and concise package. I enjoyed reading it very much! There were no errors or things that jarred my reading pace, everything moved along quite well.

Now for a bit of business. Had I NOT (foolishly) entered the Coffee Calamity Competition your entry would have placed first. Personally I think it should have been first, if for nothing else other then the brilliant twist at the end.

So, I am discounting my entry and assuming you placed first which means —

I owe you some points (sending them with this review), an Awardicon and a Merit Badge, which I'll add to the list for when you get CR for them.

Thanks for the great story!


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Review of Divorce  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello and welcome to WdC! I hope you don't mind, I poked around in your portfolio and found this flash fiction you wrote fro a contest entry.

I liked the tight language you used to portray the ending of the marriage, you got quite a bit of impact from very few words. I would have liked to see a bit more description of their emotional state, this must-have been a very charged discussion, yet it came off dry and somewhat emotionless.

A few nitpicky points, mainly proofreading items;

After two years of marriage[COMMA] I thought everything was great.

60 race horses in fact. Generally, numbers, except for very large numbers should be written out. Racehorses is one word.

“what do you talk about all day?” what should be capitalized.

“Well, what do you talk about all day? Your together so long what do you even have to talk about?” "Your" is a possessive pronoun used to show ownership. "You're" is a contraction for the two words “you are.” You are either looking for You're or You are here.

"I cant deal with that. cant needs an apostrophe, can't

"OK." I answered quietly Sentence is missing punctuation.

In several places "it's" the contraction of "it is" was used without an apostrophe.

Please realize this review is written to be helpful. Your writing has a great deal of promise and I think you will be a great addition to our community. This isn't meant to discourage you, you shouldn't let any review or reviewer discourage you!

Thank You for sharing your talent with us, and keep on writing!




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