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Review of Spanking  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions.




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Hello bob county ,

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This was one of the most unusual things that I've ever stumbled across on this site.

The tale is very personal, a little bit uncomfortable, with just the faintest edge of disturbing, but it was well written and very gripping.

It's the sort of thing that I'm sure a lot of people can relate to in one way or another, but it's seldom that one seems someone writing about the roots of fetishes, particularly so far back into childhood. Still, it was an interesting concept and you went about it very vividly to leave a distinct impression in the minds of readers, myself included.



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This isn't a suggestion so much as a note, but the formatting for this piece was very unusual. In fact, I thought it was a poem before I actually started reading it because of the way that it's laid out. I'm not sure if that's intentional or not, but it is a little strange.

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I hope that you enjoyed the review, and I thank you for sharing your work with the site. This is definitely the strangest piece that I've read tonight and it's one I don't think I'll be forgetting any time soon.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Tea and Blossoms  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello Kotaro ,

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What a pleasure to be reviewing you again.

I really liked how quickly you got to the action in this piece, you're able to go very quickly into the thick of things from the beginning of your story and there really isn't a dull moment to follow. This is packed with exciting moments all the way through, and that's something that not a lot of stories can claim.

I also liked the existential nature of the ending, it was a little abstract and very poetic. It wrapped everything up while still leaving the reader with questions, and I really like how it made me think.

Great job!


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The only thing I think this story was missing was character development. I like that we get to see the character dynamics more than we're told about them, but I am someone who prefers just a tad more exposition than what this had, especially early on in the story.

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Aside from wanting to see more insight into your characters, I thought the story was great and I enjoyed it. I hope that I get to read some more of your work soon, and that you don't mind getting all these reviews from me.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of The Beast  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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This was impressive.

I did a similar challenge once and it was an absolute nightmare trying to weed out all of the multiple syllable words - and by the time I was done my story barely even made any sense, and every single sentence felt forced.

I am incredibly impressed by how natural this story reads and I know first hand just how difficult that must have been to accomplish - not to mention how engaging the premise is.

You have done an excellent job in completing this challenge, and this is a piece that definitely deserves to be praised.


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I really don't have any suggestions. I am a bit in awe of this piece, actually, and I wouldn't change a thing. The rhythm is a bit strange, but I think that's what happens when you only use one syllable words, and like I said before it flows so much more naturally that I would have expected.

Very, very well done.


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This piece has been a pleasure to read and review. I am impressed by your ability to complete difficult challenges, and I look forward to the next time I get to review you.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Please, Not Alone  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Shadowspawn ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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I thought this was an interesting story. It had a unique tone that made it feel like it was an amalgamation of many different genres, which was quite memorable.

The work ethic of the main character (along with his history and moral compass) make him easy to empathize with, especially in his current plight. His desire not to die alone touches on a universal fear I think, and it was yet another thing that made it easy for the audience to connect and become further invested in his experiences.


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My only suggestion would be a little bit of editing. I noticed that words get sort of clumped up together where they get used many times in a short space. In the earlier paragraphs the word "side" is used many times together and further down the word "coffee" seems to be very bunched up.

That's nitpicking, I know, but it was just a small thing that could be fixed quickly.


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I hope that this review has been helpful. I enjoyed the story and I thank you for sharing. I wish you all the best with this and any future writing endeavors.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Riina ,

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I like the premise, and I like that you carry on the story to include an internet cafe, which seems like a logical next direction for the story to take.

What I found most impressive about the piece was how you were able to match the tone of the writing in the section you were given, it reads very fluently almost as if the entire thing was written by the same person from the first section to the next, and the fact that you were able to mirror that style so well is awesome.

Great work!



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I do have a couple quick suggestions. The first is a little bit of editing, re-formatting. There were just a couple of typos and the new paragraphs would look a little cleaner if they were indented or had lines of space between them.

My other suggestion is in regards to the end, which I didn't like. The "to be continued" just didn't work well for me, especially considering that this is an assignment - wrapping the story up might have been better (at least in my opinion.)

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I hope that this review was somewhat helpful. Although I would have liked to see an end, I was very impressed with the style of writing, and this was a pleasure to read.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Ghost Train  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Wenston ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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I liked the pacing of this story a lot. The slow build up really lets the reader feel every bit of tension throughout the story as the sound of the train draws ever closer.

It had good characters, a strong plot, and it was so filled with unease - I loved it. Being a big fan of the horror genre, the way that you were able to stretch out Jesse's feelings of fright throughout the story is just something that really appealed to me, and I was very impressed by your ability to do so.

I was surprised to find something this spooky with an action/adventure tag, but it was definitely a good surprise.


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I really don't have any suggestions for this one. Every word contributed something to the story, it's well-written and it seems to have been nicely polished. Great job!


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I hope that you enjoyed the review, as I enjoyed your story. This concept was well executed and it's a tale that I'm sure will be sticking with me for some time. It has been a pleasure reading your work, and I wish you all the best in all of your writing endeavors.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of TALL TALE  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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You definitely seem to have good grasp of the sailing language - that's for sure. I feel like you did a really great job getting into the mind of your character and you gave a very authentic, sea-story vibe to the audience. I almost felt like I was there listening to someone brag as I was reading this, and it does seem like a very tall tale indeed.



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The one thing that I wasn't sure about was the talk of feminine conquests at the beginning of the story. On the one hand, it said a lot about your character and the boasting definitely seems congruent with the "boasting fisherman" persona. On the other hand, it wasn't really relevant to the story, and there was a lot of it in there. It made me like the character less, which I suppose could go either way depending on what exactly you're going for here.

In any case, I thought it would be worth mentioning.

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This was an interesting tale, and you did a good job writing it like it was being told to your audience. I had fun reviewing it, and I thank you for sharing your work here with the site.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Desert Sands  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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I was impressed by how well you seem to have the tone of a western. Not being a big fan of westerns, that's something that I have never quite been able to accomplish, but I can recognize that skill when I see it.

The character, setting, and action all have that distinct, western feel. The tone helps put the reader into the environment and it felt very consistent all the way through your story.



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The only thing I'd really suggest is that you try to edit out a few instances of saying that you're on your way to help a friend. That's something that was laid out pretty well in the exposition, and then it becomes a bit redundant because the phrase is used numerous times throughout the rest of the story. It's even in the description, and it just seemed a bit too repetitive after that, at least that's what I thought.


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I hope that this review was at least a little helpful, although I don't possess your prowess with the genre. You've done a good job telling a western tale here and it was a pleasure to review this story.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello beherebrook ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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I liked the subject matter, and that you wrote about something that you really experienced. As much as I like fiction, there is something really cool about reading a story and knowing that the narrator has actually done those things - it just feels so authentic.

It was also interesting to read about the trip, it sounds like it was such an amazing experience. I can definitely see the appeal, and I bet it was worth all the hassle that it took to get there.


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My only suggestion would be that you break the last paragraph up into two paragraphs. Although they'll both be relatively small paragraphs, I think it would bring better emphasis to a great line in your story:

We all laughed, knowing that this experience needed no explanation


I really liked that line and think it would make a good end of the paragraph.


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I hope that this review has been somewhat helpful. Thank you so much for sharing your work, it was very neat reading about your experience at the feet of giants!

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of The Scary Mystery  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello terry609 ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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What I liked best about the piece is that it's clear you have a vivid image for what's happening, and an exciting plot for the story.


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I do have a couple of suggestions, the main one being that you edit the piece a little more closely. It's not formatted or punctuated, and there are a number of typos.

Here are just a couple quick tips/examples:

In the description you've written "sacry things" instead of "scary things"

You haven't used quotation marks around any of the dialogues.

There are no paragraph/section breaks.

You've written "fablous heros" instead of "fabulous heroes."

These are just a couple examples and things to look for, but I hope that they've helped some. I really think that a good once-over on the piece would help to polish it up, and with practice editing will become easier and not seem like such a chore.


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I hope that the tips have been helpful. You seem to have such a clear image for your story, and I really hope that I've been able to help you clear that vision up for your potential readers as well.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Kelly Still ,

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I thought this was a beautiful piece. Although I didn't quite grasp the narrative side of what was happening, there were distinct bits of imagery woven throughout, a consistent tone for the poem, and the words strung together beautifully.

There was one line that really caught my fancy:

So from far away, I’ll drink secretly from her hands
To quiet the strong rhythms of those far Eastern lands.


The meter and rhyme scheme were also exceptional, particularly in the excerpt. Well done!




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As I mentioned briefly up above, I didn't quite follow what was happening in terms of the story. I'm not sure if that was your intention or not, but if you are trying to tell a story my one suggestion is that you give the reader a few more hints toward the details of the situation being described.

Other than that, I think you've done a great job with this piece.

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All in all it was an enjoyable read, even if I didn't quite understand all the details. I hope that this review has been helpful, and I wish you all the best!

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of My Saviour  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello eobo ,

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I've never read your rhyming work, so I don't have much to compare it to, but on its own I think this is a great piece. Although rhyming can be a great thing in poetry, the focus of this piece is definitely on emotion, which in my opinion is the more important aspect of prose. So I'd say you've done a good job.

There was also a personal feeling to this piece, and it felt very deep in addition to emotional. I enjoyed it thoroughly, and I think it's always a good thing when the reader can feel that sort of connection to the writer of a piece.

All in all it's a good poem.



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Constructively I didn't notice anything wrong with the piece, and it hit on the important aspects of a free-form poem. My only suggestion is that you continue pushing the boundaries of your comfort zone and experimenting with new poetic/creative forms.

That's one of the best ways to grow and improve.


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I hope that this review has been somewhat helpful, and I wish you all this best in this and any future writing endeavors. It has been a pleasure reviewing you.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Mock Epic  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Fate ,

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I loved the premise of this.

When I saw how short it was, I wasn't quite sure what to expect, but you so quickly have set up a scenario between two people that has me intrigued in the entire concept of the story, and the Mock Epic that you may or may not be writing.

The idea of reality being questioned seriously is the basis for many of my favorite stories, and I see a tremendous amount of potential for this project, especially if it's approached in the same surreal manner that this excerpt was.


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My only suggestion to you is that you change "may or may not be writing" to "am definitely writing." I'm serious, I thin this is a concept that would make a great basis for a longer project, and I feel as though I simply cannot encourage you enough to pursue that.

It would be a great story.


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I hope that this review has been encouraging, if not the most helpful/constructive. My interest was piqued by this little piece and I hope something I've said inspires you to work on this, on confirms that you should be.

It was a pleasure to review you.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of The Cry  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello linkin_park_goth ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" .


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I really liked the simplicity and concise nature of this poem. You manage to communicate some very deep feelings in not a lot of words and while you avoid specifics, there's enough of an idea here that the reader feels a bit of empathy evoked.

I also like the dark tone, though a good portion of that is personal preference and my inclination toward dark things.



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My one suggestion is that you add an annotation. You mentioned in the description that this was published in an anthology, and that's something I'd be interested to know more about as your reader. Perhaps you could mention at the bottom of the piece which anthology it was published in, or even link out. Then you could use your description space to write more about the poem and draw in a wider audience.


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I hope that the review gave you a little something to consider, since your poem gave me a lot to contemplate it. I really enjoyed reading this piece of your work, and I hope that I get to see more by you in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat



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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Artifax ,

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I love how this poem looks.

This structure combined with the formatting gives your poem a distinct look, and aesthetically it makes a strong impression before one even begins reading it, which is great. It's only fitting that a piece this strange makes a unique first impression.

The piece was a little vague, but that helped make it a little more mysterious and unsettling, which overall worked in its favor.

There was one line in particular that I really enjoyed:

"A powerful idea
destroying my mind."

Not only did this fit into the great poem's format, but it was a powerful line that really made me, as the reader, think.




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The only suggestion I have is that you consider changing the penultimate line of the poem. Although I didn't have a problem with the content per say the "..." at the end of the sentence draws the eye to an otherwise very symmetrical piece and detracts from the strength projected in the previous line.


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Aside from the one nitpicky suggestion, I thought the poem was great. I'm glad I got to read it and I hope that I get to see more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Journey  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello silverknight ,

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I really loved this poem.

Although I've seen a lot of prose that tackles the idea of the afterlife and the grief that comes with losing someone, this one sticks out to me - particularly the ending. The final stanza was so beautiful:

So love her now in memory
But pity not her state--
She's in a new dimension now
And such is all men's fate.


It concludes the topic of the poem, the meter is great, the message is universal, and it's just very beautifully written. It's without a doubt my favorite section of the poem, and something that I truly enjoyed.

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The only thing I'd suggest is that you re-work the description for the piece, which is a little bit misleading. I was expecting it to be much more about the afterlife you believe in and less of a narrative, just based off of the Title/description combination that you currently have.


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I hope that you enjoyed my review, as I certainly enjoyed your poem (particularly the end, which I'll say again was fantastic.) It was a pleasure reading your work and I hope I get the chance to do so again soon.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Eliot ,

This review is written on behalf of House Stark for "Game of Thrones" . Looks like I get to review you again after all *Smile*


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This was a really interesting situation, and I can definitely see how this could be stressful. What a strange string of coincidences. I'm glad you decided to share because this is exactly the sort of account that really gets me thinking, and I like knowing that other people have these strange sort of encounters with the randomness of the universe.

I liked that you spelled out the situation in a way that was personable and easy to understand.



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The only thing I would suggest is adding either an introduction or a conclusion to sort of tie the piece together. Although it was interesting, I might have liked to see it presented a bit more like a story so that the craziness of the experiences are a little bit more plain to see, strange though they are.


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I hope that the suggestion was a little bit helpful, and that I get to see more of your work in this event. It was a pleasure reading Mama, Me and the FBI and I thank you for sharing this piece of your work.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Not Alone  
Review by Cat Voleur
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello D. Wayne ,

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I liked the set up. This seemed to be going in a very different direction than where it actually went, and that's exactly the sort of clever misdirection that I like seeing used in mystery pieces - especially shorter ones such as this. You were able to mislead your audience for a rather long time considering the length of the story.

The beginning poses quite the interesting quandary for the detectives, protagonist, and readers alike. Very well done.



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The only thing that I'd suggest is that you try to work in a few mentions of Uncle Joe in earlier to the piece. Obviously bringing him up too often would spoil the ending, but as the piece stands now that's the one bit of wrap up that just seems to strike the audience as out of the blue, and perhaps a little rushed.

Other than that, I thought the piece was well executed from start to finish.


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I hope that my suggestion has given you something to think about in regards to continuing this project, and hope that I get to read some more of your work soon as this was a fun mystery piece to review.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Whispers  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Eliot ,

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My favorite thing about this piece was the formatting, which I found to be quite striking. I like how the penultimate line of the last stanza is indented with a word that repeats the final word from the line above it, bringing both verbal and visual emphasis to important aspects of the piece. It was a unique structure I hadn't seen before that I found to be quite effective for me as the reader.

As far as content goes, I like that the subject is described and while the nature of the relationship between the subject and the narrator is hinted at, it isn't explicitly spelled out. The subtlety counteracts the emphasis of certain details, and makes the poem feel very balanced as a whole.

Great job.


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I really don't have any suggestions for this piece, though it may be worth noting that the phrase "cranberry muffin crumbs" sticks out to me, I think because it's the most specific thing in the stanza.

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I hope that this has brought a fresh perspective to the piece, and that I get to read more of your work in the future. It has been a pleasure reviewing you.

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review of Malice Intended  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Joy ,

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I liked how you built up to a twist ending without being overly obvious. This was an expert example of ommitting information and averting attention, and I have to admit that I really didn't see the end coming until it was already happening - you did a great job.

I also thought you did a pretty good job with the foreshadowing early on when you mention that the hotel could thrive under new management. It made me a little suspicious, but then after the murder I didn't think about it again until right after the reveal. Very clever.




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My only problem with the story is how many flaws there were in Elsa's plan. It says that in the description (and I suppose that it's part of the point) but it just seems like she should have been a little bit smarter, and more careful.

Aside from that, I thought that it was great.


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This was a very entertaining read, and I'm glad to have found it for this event. I hope that the review was somewhat helpful, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review of Death Wink  
Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Kotaro ,

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I thought this was really interesting.

I like that you didn't take too much time explaining the rules of the game, so it at no point became tedious. You let the scene play out very naturally, and it added a lot of tension without becoming confusing.

It's also a good illustrations of how being that close to death, being forced to play a game like that, is sometimes more motivating than just the flat out threat of death or injury, and how being faced with that kind of pressure can make a person really reconsider their life.



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The only thing that I would have really liked to see more of in the story is character development - especially in the narrator. Although the pacing was great and the tension is built very well, I would have felt a little more invested if I had gotten just a little more insight into the mind of the person laying this all out.

Other than that, I thought it was perfect.


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This was an intriguing concept with a brilliant execution, and I can see why it won those contests. I am very glad to have read this!

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello ,

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I liked the slow build up to the piece, it made the ending much more surprising.

I also thought that the title/premise were a clever combination. You took a common saying that most people are familiar with, and you gave an unusual (and detailed) story around that premise. It drew me right into the story and kept me guessing all the way through.

Even though I could sort of guess where it was going, the tale was engaging and you really did make the ending your own. This was well done and enjoyable overall as a story.



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My only suggestion would be that you try to edit down the beginning a bit. Although I liked the piece overall and I thought the end was great, it does get off to a bit of a slow start - though I supposed the end does make it worth it. It is something to consider, though.

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Thank you so much for sharing your writing here, this is something that I'm glad to have read. I hope the review was somewhat helpful to you, and that I get to read more of your work somewhere down the line.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello {suserpatrice:} ,

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This isn't normally what I think of when I see the "mystery" tag but it was so interesting. I liked that instead f being a narrative sort of mystery, it was more of an existential mystery.

Additionally, I thought that many of the specific points you made were interesting as well. I had actually found myself wondering about a few of the points.

There was a good balance of more serious questions, and light-hearted questions. The piece carried both reflection and a touch of humor, which I enjoyed.



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Normally I would suggest a bit more structure, but since this isn't intended as an article or prose, I think it works well.

It gives off the impression of being a little wandering, but unless I'm mistaken, that's part of the point, isn't it?

In any case, I think the piece is just fine as is.


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Thank you for sharing some of your thoughts with the audience. I enjoyed reading through this and I imagine that I'll enjoy thinking about some of the questions raised for a good while, yet. I hope that the review has been somewhat helpful and that I get to read more from you in the future

Sincerely,

Cat

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Review by Cat Voleur
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Judy ,

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I enjoyed your topic quite a bit. Although it's not the sort of thing that would usually hold my interest, it's something you're obviously well-versed in and it always shows when the writer has done their research.

I felt like I learned something about a piece of history that I had no prior knowledge of.

Best of all, I liked that there was a source included in the annotation. It not only brings credit to the great piece that you've written, but it encourages others to go and learn more - something I always appreciate.



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My only suggestion would be to add a further annotation. The tale of Ridgway Glover is mysterious enough that I can see the appeal in studying him, but it would be cool to know how you first learned about him or what inspired you to write the piece. Writer insights like that are just really neat tidbits, and they can help put the piece into some context.


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Thank you so much for sharing this and enlightening me. I feel a bit wiser for having read this, and I hope that the review was at least somewhat helpful.

Sincerely,

Cat


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Review by Cat Voleur
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Hungryblob ,

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I like that this was based off of a true story. Sometimes it takes a lot of bravery to talk about paranormal experiences, so I thank you for sharing your experience.

It was an interesting tale, and it left me with something to think about in regards to my own beliefs - which is why I find myself so drawn to these stories. You did a good job sharing what happened to you.



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I do have a couple quick suggestions:

The first is that you consider changing the name of the piece. "Horrifying Moments" didn't fit the impression that I got from the piece - especially since it's only the one moment that was horrifying and the focus of the piece isn't on the scare so much as what it was on being saved. I would try to find a name that reflects how this one moment impacted you.

The second is that you try to add just a little bit more information on yourself in the story. It can be easy to overshare when writing nonfiction accounts, but telling the audience a little bit about yourself and how events like these have changes you can make for a more gripping tale.


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Thanks again for posting this, it was a good read and an interesting encounter with ghost. I hope that my review has been helpful and that I get to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,

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