The first & ninth words are misspelled and the type of contest is misspelled (Cinquain). I'm not sure of what to make of it all, It sounds like nonsense.
I like the subject of your poem. It seems that on this side of eternity in comparison to eternity; life is but a blink.
I really think there is somuch more you could add to this poem. To ask the questions opens many possibilities.
Good poem. It makes me think of my world as my reality. And that the reality of another may not resemble my own at all. My bliss may be my experiance while in reality someone elses may be in misery.
Great poem! Your description of your confines are vivid and they express your inability to leave where you are. But wait your mind is free, free to ride the wind with the Gulls.
I enjoyed your poem, especially the I was milked like a cow Line. I'm not sure about the next line though. "And left with nothing too chow" Its your poem but it sounds better like this (And lift with nothing to chew).
Chuck
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