|Please accept my words as well meant and written in the spirit of encouragement for a good writer.
Thanks for sharing this sermon. In my experience sermons are created more often to be read aloud to a gathering than to be read silently on the page. I cannot comment on the strength of your assertions, I have no credentials as a theologian or logician. I can say, speaking as a writer, your sermon is powerful in its language. A part of language is the common usages of writing the thoughts onto the page. A powerful argument, an otherwise persuasive thought, can be diminished by unconventional use of the language. Your well intentioned and perhaps inspired words lose credibility and divert the reader’s attention by casual spelling, capitalization, disuse of the apostrophe. Your written sermon could be more effective with strict proofreading. I have picked out some instances of eye stopping language usage and listed them here in the order they appear in the sermon. This list covers about half the published sermon.
Words needing apostrophes to create possessives or complete contractions:
Mens, Gods,, worlds, masters, Weve, Masters, im, theres, one thing ive, its, its, wheres, wheres,hes,
Words of unconventional spelling:
Weomen, Noone, Rabbai, not everknown, earth, if u, u, breakin, friends, iam, obcession, carriagesas,there, there, Iam, symabolyzes, Iam, shor, capiualate, Pilgrom’s, idealis,
,,,sometimes, friends, vacuously,
Words with unconventional capitalizing or requiring capitals:
Life, Hope, Carrriages, us Get, one thing ive, :” what if?”, ask him, Questoned, The, Grub
Again, thanks for sharing your fine thoughts.