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Review of Shirley Homes  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hmm. This was a very interesting story and it was rather humorous. However, I feel like there is a disconnect between the first and second half of the story. I cannot say exactly what, but the talk about the trash and what the kid is going to be when grown up did not seem to have much to do with the first half.


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Review of Little Boy Blues  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
That was a pretty funny twist at the end!


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Review of Sun  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hmm. This was both very interesting and very lovely! I really loved your haiku. Sunrise & sunset are both indeed very beautiful and very lovely. They made great subjects for your haiku. This particular haiku actually made more sense than any other I read too.


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Review of The Crossing  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hmm. This was both very interesting and very deep. Regardless, I actually understood it to some degree! I thought you did an awesome job with the prose and a great job on the word choice. This reminded me somewhat of a hybrid of something written by C.S. Lewis and J.K.R. Tolkein.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great idea for a raffle!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. You can really feel the torment, pain, and suffering of the main character. The nightmare was well done. So much so that you caught me off guard when you revealed that it was a dream. You were really detailed and it felt like I was really there.


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Review of Second Thoughts  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hmm. I thought this was both a very interesting and informative read. You gave a good background for context and you were both extremely detailed as well as very thorough. I think your writing would benefit by stating the second amendment at the very top of the item.


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Review of Somewhere Else  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hmm. This was an interesting read. Unfortunately, I have no idea what to make of any of it story wise. On the technical side, you had really great detail and I found no spelling or grammar issues. Some explanation as to how he got there & what is going on would be appreciated.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I thought this was a very interesting short story. It was definitely a horrifying scary thriller. There is one thing that doesn't make sense though. If Jonah sacrificed her to get his father back, then why is he still there? Also, this implies someone else went back when his pop was exchanged.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a very interesting read. The prose and topic reminded me of the classic country I always listen to. I could swear I could hear a banjo and a cowboy/girl singing. This was totally made for a countrymom and I loved it. All it needs is someone jumping off a bridge (get the reference?).


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Review of See What It Is  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting read and I love the topic choice! I found some of the rhyming iffy because it felt like you were forcing it. This caused some lines to just not "fit" in the poem very well. Other than that, you wrote a fine poem that caught my interest.


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Review of On Alice Chu...  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Two things are going on here. First, I have no idea what is going on here or what this is supposed to be. I suspect a prompt is involved, but you need to clarify what that prompt is. Second, the use of the word "whore" makes this at least a "13+" rating, not an "E" rating.


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Review of JUDGING PEOPLE  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found this to be an interesting read. There are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors that need to be corrected. In some ways I agree with you. Judging is just how our minds categorize others to try to predict risks. However, treating others based on judgments is not ok.


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Review of That book  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting read. I also found it to be aptly timed because I just saw this earlier today as I'm doing the same challenge. I found it to be a bit sad as the book has been forgotten and abandoned. I can't think of many more sad things than a lonely, unread book.


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. However, while some parts I get, others I do not. I get the, be careful what you wish for moral, but as for how it ended up happening, I'm afraid that it made the story feel underwhelming. Nothing personal you understand.


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Review of The Jabberwocky  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting read and definitely a nonsense poem inspired by the Jabberwocky. I think there might have been one or two proper nouns that were not capitalized, such as "manderake", but I recognize I could be wrong due to the nonsensical nature of the poem.


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Review of Lucky  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Man this was a good story. The way it was written made it feel as if we were truly there to witness the shooting of the prisoners, then shifting to the personal account of the Ukrainian's story. If I didn't know it was fiction I would swear this must have been the story written by "Lucky" himself as an autobiography.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was an extremely interesting story. I loved the premise you used. There were two contradictions I caught though. First, if Eden was there when the humans left, wouldn't it recognize them and their "ships" coming back? Second, if they left so long ago and the tree produced acorns, why isn't there at least one other sapling by the time they came back? Don't get me wrong, the story was pretty awesome!


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Ooh! This sounds so interesting! As a Trekkie, I totally believe the new trilogy needs to be expanded and this is quite a biggie! If you need any help, let me know and I'll gladly run a few ideas past you. One thing I feel like I should say now is there shouldn't be any singular Vulcan leaders. This conflicts on three basis. First, Star Trek the movie showed Vulcan as being run by a senate like structure or at least like a company board. Second, it wouldn't be very logical for Vulcan's to have a crowning ceremony. They have many spiritual ceremonies, but that's totally different. Third, the only case of one Vulcan being treated as the highest authority was in Star Trek 4 and she war both a spiritual leader (not a law maker or decision maker) as well as an unusual exception according to both the Vulcans and the Federation.


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Rated: E | (3.0)
I honestly don't know what to make of this item. While everything you wrote is understandable as sentences, I don't quite get the meanings behind some things. Why are the first three things bad and why do you use the the word "Duh"? Who is the guy you mentioned at the end and why is his life hard?


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Review of Planted love  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This needs a little work in my opinion. There are definitely some capitalization errors to be fixed for starters. Next, the poem is a bit too short to properly express the concept and emotions that you are trying to convey. I do think you have a good start, it just needs some refining.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hmm. This was an interesting read. I understand the concept itself as far as knowing when to step up or down and who to go to for help, but I don't get the context. At the beginning you talked about "the process". What is this process? It needs some clarification.


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh wow! This acrostic poem is so very much the best and is just absolutely awesome! I love your idea with the aliens as not being petty by sharing technology rather than competing to have the best. The fact that this was done as an acrostic is impressive. Why can't we be more like that?!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was not only an interesting read, but a very interesting way of putting things. For the typical reader, it's a pretty high levels worth of reading. That said, I completely understood it and agree wholeheartedly. What's so hard about loving your neighbor as Mr. Rogers showed?


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Review of Super Hero  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was an interesting read. Was this a true story? If it is, I hope the part about the lost kitten was made up. I liked how you played off the expression in the last line. The scene with the towel was rather cute as well as the idea of the transformer toys guarding the money. Not an excellent story, but pretty decent.


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