I would have given a 5.0, but you need to correct "decrease your territories" to "increase". I did love how you chose the prayer of Jabez, which I feel is often overlooked in the Old Testament. I also enjoyed the biblical message overall. It is indeed "turned right side in."
I enjoyed it. These are definitely difficult questions to ponder, but the bottom line is life is what we make of it. Both feelings and events in life will come and go. Life can be very finicky without any certainty. Your poem expressed this well in my opinion.
I thoroughly enjoyed this! Not only was there a great theme, but you went about it an an unusual way that I loved! The idea of using an angels perspective to name people was a great choice. I also enjoyed how it was split into two parts, each with it's own perspective. I think my favorite part was the conversation between the angel and God.
This was pretty good! The wording was quite decisive and the ending nicely fit the title while self fulfilling the poem's topic. I found it to be a bit short for my taste, but I also understand the length was intentional. Overall, I enjoyed it a lot.
Interesting three poems. I'm not sure, but shouldn't the third title start with the word "If", not "Id"? Also, was the second poem's second line supposed to read as "mell" instead of using the word "smell" again? In the first poem, I loved the cheekiness of the last line.
It's tough to lose a friendship or maybe something more regardless of the reason. This especially hits home for me as it has been about 15 years since I lost my closest friend I ever had and in some ways it still hurts. The poem was decent with feeling.
Beautiful! I enjoyed the prose, poetry, wordplay, and the word coloring on selected words. I loved the theme of being an author on writing.com. I can't help but wonder though why you put a 13+ on what I see as an E rated work. Otherwise, a 5.0 rating work.
I am always touched by Haiku. Yours was definitely different from most others I've seen. There is just something about the fog from the kids eyes that grabs my attention. Just like other Haiku, yours was beautiful in it's own unique way. I enjoyed it!
This was a very interesting read. I liked this unique perspective on hope. I loved how you went from bigger than life, fictitious heroes to pointing out that we can be just as courageous by making the decision to improve ourselves in little ways in daily, routine, and more mundane real life.
Nice, catchy rhyming! I'd feel the same way even if I was in appropriate attire! I never saw the show and I never want to, but I knew the premise. I can't help but wonder how they avoid lawsuits and couldn't they at least provide loincloths? *shudder*
So many great things to say about this! First, the silly nonsense was infectious. Second the humor was impeccable, especially the end (both the matches and adding to the resume). Last, but not least, it had a dragon in it doing it's own thing. I get so tired of the monster and human/dragon bond stereotypes.
Wow... This was pointless and includes decidedly unhelpful tips. I LOVE IT!!! It tickled my funny bone in such a weird way. I especially loved #2 (farting). Was that order intentional because it'll make a heck of a coincidence! I am somewhat puzzled by #10 though. I'd normally associate the phrase with romance, but it doesn't seem to fit the context here.
I don't know why, but after over 100 random "read and review" this is the first writing I've seen that is historical, but not about an event. It was very interesting to read about how paints were made in the ancient times. I knew some of the things like charcoal and dirt, but onion peels?! I learned a lot. Thanks for the class!
I'm rating this as really average. First, I'm not even sure what the subject is. A good poem should either tell a story, express feelings, or at least have a core theme. It did have a character, setting, and something happening, but I felt it didn't deliver anything with a point to it.
I loved the detailed imagery you used at the beginning. The names of the place and character felt authentic. I liked how in the end the name Rose became a symbolic motto. I did have an issue with how you completely glossed over the obstacles, magic, etc.
Absolutely wonderful! A great story. I loved how you brought the conflict in right away while fully explaining your character in just three lines. I loved how she used her painting talent to create a symbol that was meant to give courage, but then it saved everyone when it was taken literally. All around satisfying.
It started out really great, but after a few lines it turned into something else. It might be just me, but it seems like you went from the subject of lies to random lines that didn't seem to make sense. If I had understood it, I would be rating higher.
This was rather average, but still good. I like the message that what was once patriotism has become a destructive human desire for glory. It especially hits home after Russia invaded Ukraine with no provocation or reason other than wanting more even if it means war.
I adored it! There's childhood Christmas nostalgia of a simpler time (before the holiday commercialization), but I loved how it was a cherished memory of a child with their Dad. the rhyming was really good too. Everyone needs to sit down with smores watching Bugs Bunny on a white Christmas! I'm just surprised there was no mention of hot coco with marshmallows.
Part chiller and part science fiction, I found a fascinating love for this poem. While completely coincidental, I happen to know of a creature from outer space that does just this. As I'm a Whovian this probably doesn't mean much though. I also thought it was interesting how the Metroid fit the feeding description so well (huge Metroid fan).
To sum it up, *shiver*. I've goosebumps on my goosebumps. It was a delightful short thriller. I thought the vagueness surrounding the "almost people" really lent to the "spook" and "chill" factor. I'll fondly remember this as an honorary "Goosebumps" short story.
A loving rendition of the pure animal love and spirit we can find around us. Just like Dr. Doolittle (original) I believe we can learn a lot from our animal friends when it comes to not even acknowledging such trivial things like one is a horse and the other is a dog. We are all wonderfully made living creatures that share the same feelings of despair, loneliness, friendship, love, contentment, etc. If a horse and dog can be friends, why do we humans display such hatred and destruction among our own kind?
Great poem with a great message! It rings true and feels just right. I'm a little surprised this was in traditional rhyme, but that might be just me after randomly reviewing many other types of poems and prose. It just goes to show that with any skill, practice makes perfect!
We all need to be thankful for those that support us. Back when Discord was possible I had true blue friends who really cared about my well being. I understand how controlling people can be frustrating. My parents are so controlling, that they literally made every site/app impossible for me to access. Writing.com is all I have left since it's the only site that works properly on my non-smart phone's Opera Mini browser. Enough about my troubles though. Let's be thankful to WDC together!
Interesting item. I'm a perfectionist so I get the need to top every hill/mountain in my life. I loved the line you used "in the days of our Fathers" as a central, repeating verse. Nothing very special to the average reader, but I could tell it was to you and that's what counts.
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