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Review of THE NEWBIE  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number # 2 of week Feb.18/24

HiSandra Lynn

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Newbie

First Impression: Derrald could easily be our CJ, he counts every thing he does. It gives him comfort and the connection he needs for each activity. He is only 12 right now but I dread the day he does enter into the work force.

What I liked: Derrald was someone I easily connect with and understand. You did an excellent job of portraying an individual with a handicap in a compassionate manner that did not belittle him.

What needs your attention: personally, I think spacing between the dialogue parts would make it easier for the reader.

Favorite Parts: His reaction to the girl in the ending, his impression of showing her respect was the whistle, he believed it was acceptable because of his peers reaction. Her screaming at him with his supervisor went over his head because no one took the time to explain what he did wrong so he would know the differences. If only she had taken the time to simply say you make me feel uncomfortable when you do that, giving him the opportunity to learn and adapt the whole uncomfortable situation could have been avoided. It is all about the reaction and counter reaction in life. Communication is vital regardless of our ability.

Overall Impression: Excellent job, Sandra.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Logo for The Dark Society's Valentine's Day Review Massacre


It's Valentine's Day
You welcome to take this any way.
If you thought I would bring roses, or something kind
*Laugh* one of us is clearly out of our mind.
I am a writer of poetic verses and sarcasm too!
Lucky you, I've come to torment with a review.
for the Dark Society annual Valentine Massacre
who else but Jeff would dream of something of this caliber.

*BlockR* Initial Feeling: Just my kind of poetry, the imagery totally worked for my warped. I savored each line and stanza.

*Block* Struck me odd or needs work: I found nothing to suggest, the rhyme abab worked perfectly. Each stanza contributed to give the reader a delightful poetic story with just the right flow.

*BlockR* Favorite Part: I particularly liked the last closing stanza the best. The gate swings wide where death has stood. That image in mind really stood out and then to be followed souls swallowed by the embrace of hell. Powerful ending with exactly the right show stopper an image of hell.


Until the next massacre, enjoy your writing on WDC!
We look forward to getting to know you. *Heart*

Lyn



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Review of Rise Above  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Review number # 6 of week 2/4-2/10

Hi Jen

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and as a judge in Love Shouldn't Hurt

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Rise Above

First Impression: Survival feels glorious when we do.

What I liked: The encouragement you offer to other women that they are stronger than they think.

What needs your attention: Not a thing

Favorite Parts: Evil words spew from your lips, made me think of my ex husband and how I used to envision him choking on his tongue. He used to infuriate him that I would smile as his hurtful words spewed at me. He had no idea what I was picturing in my mind.

Overall Impression: Thank you for giving victims a voice and encouragement to find their way. Silence Enables. We all need to raise awareness that abuse exists and it will not happen on our watch.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Tired  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Review number # 3 of week 2/4-2/10

Hi Norb,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and as a judge for Love Shouldn't Hurt. Thank you for your entry!.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Tired

First Impression: Images of the Boogie man in my life came alive in your poem.

What I liked: There are tire tracks and we both are to blame. Interesting thought there because not all domestic situations are one sided, some are a combination of tempers flying and events escalating to the explosion.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the free style works well with the imagery and word selections.

Favorite Parts: They bear your name and my scars, and we don't get very far. No we don't get it at all. Choices are truly hard to justify looking at a picture that you feel trapped inside. So many times, if only.

Overall Impression: Excellent job, thank you for helping me raise awareness that violence exists and for promoting Love Shouldn't Hurt in the newsfeed Your friendship and support means a lot tom.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 2 of week Jan.28-Feb. 3

Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title What I Have Come To Understand:

First Impression: How easily the poem flowed for this prompt.

What I liked: Our muses smile, I agree they did seem to throughout the challenge. It was so good to see you writing everyday, I have missed that immensely. I hope you continue.

What needs your attention:Nothing, it rocks as it is.

Favorite Parts: Deriving inspiration from the required word and then feeling pain having to remove the forbidden words. I felt the same way, and but I did notice as you did some of pieces were actually much better once I did.

Overall Impression: You are a very talented writer and this contest allowed you the opportunity to shine.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of at the end  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 1 of week Jan.28-Feb 3

Hi Rhyssa,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: at the end

First Impression: "proof of my insanity" A writer is supposed to be sane, who would have guessed. I've enjoyed every insane moment with you this month.

What I liked:The desperate ache waiting for the prompt to be posted, I could so relate. I couldn't wait to see it each day so my mind could mull while I went about the day.

What needs your attention: I am curious why you chose to do it all in lowercase and no capitalization. It doesn't take away from the flow, it just struck me odd.

Favorite Parts: I found it enjoyable to explore this journey with new friends too. That's the stanza that I connect with the most. Although, I did chuckle with the word vindictive.

Overall Impression: It fulfilled the prompt with Rhyssa's unique charm and showed her joy in doing the Winter Construct with all of us in poetic finesse.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my Immense pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number #6 of week Jan.21-27

Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Spun Out on the Carousel

First Impression: The momentum was just like I was on a carousel with you.

What I liked: The emotions that began on the first line carrying all the way to end in a steady pace.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you are rocking this contest in grand style. I am so very happy for you.

Favorite Parts: Sweet justice in the form of my lunch, it would be great if we could summon those powers on the demand wouldn't it. I felt the frustration and anger intensely in this section of the poem more than envy. Strong imagery all the way.

Overall Impression: Great job Carly, this poem fulfilled the prompt with a steady momentum from beginning to end.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of cables and lace  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your love of knitting comes across in this delightful poem about your hobby. I have never mastered knitting, I find crocheting much easier to do.

Thank you for sharing your enthusiasm.
Lyn
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Review of Missing: One Muse  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number #8 of week Jan.14-20

Hi Rhyssa,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Missing: One Muse

First Impression: The images created a comical complexity to the story of the missing muse I was entertained from beginning to end.

What I liked: The maple syrup that didn't help and the wad of chewing gum was the icing on the cake. Stuck, covered very well!

What needs your attention: Not a thing!

Favorite Parts: I enjoyed how you covered the missing muse prompt with a delightful tale of woe, sticky interaction and diarrhea of the keyboard with out losing a beat.

Overall Impression: Great minds do think a like, dragon intervention.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 4 of week Jan.14-21

Hi Carly,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: What Goes Around Comes Around

First Impression: A very overused cliché indeed which you addressed for the prompt.

What I liked: I felt the positive take you took on the poem gave good advice and should be drilled into everyone's head, Life would be so much nicer for all.

What needs your attention: It flowed smoothly to me except for the two lines that opened with and, there it felt forced.

Favorite Parts:Embrace all that you face, this line brought a smile, positivity rocks and really does make life easier. We do have to look at the situation not as a glass half empty but half full. I know another over used cliché but how we look at things is half the battle in living a rich life.

Overall Impression: Very well done Carly, I am so glad to see you writing again. We miss reading your blogs over in Blog City. I've read your entries in Winter Construct this far and feel you are rocking the challenge in style.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of cliché alert  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Review number # 1 of week January 14th-21st

Hi Rhyssa

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Cliché Alert

First Impression: I connected with your poem immediately, I have drama queens like that in my life who can't wait to share every detail of their life.

What I liked: You opened the poem with It's my cross to bear, I immediately took in a breath that expression drives me over the edge whenever I hear it.

What needs your attention: I am curious as to why you chose not use punctuation. I believe it would make your poem stand out more in the readers mind.

Favorite Parts: She wasn't one to talk about her problems unless some one hinted....across a room. It was her scene and she was going to star in her role. I cringe when I cannot avoid scenes like that with several women I know.

Overall Impression: It rocked with so much truth and covered the cliché requirement needed in the prompt. Good job, Rhyssa. Thank you for all you do in WDC.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Actaeon's Hounds  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Your powerful tale of the hounds was gripping to the very end ringing with so much truth, animals respond as taught and sadly get swept into the heat of the moment. I felt so bad for the dogs at the conclusion of your story, well done Rhyssa.


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautifully done, Carly, I enjoyed the visual imagery as I read.
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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number #6 of week ending Nov. 4th

Hi Crow

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Looking At A Place I Knew

First Impression: We share similar memories. Things change when we aren't looking but in our mind they freeze in place.

What I liked: The grass is paved and the fence is gone. Where I used to swing as a child is now a Rite-Aid Pharmacy, it was difficult to see it destroyed.

What needs your attention: Nothing, fee style works very well in this poem. The author wisely chose to tell the story in a strong voice with a hint of sadness that carries it from the beginning to the end.

Favorite Parts: I remember things just as they were, but a mist often cause the image to blur. This made a connection with me.

Overall Impression: The author reminded the reader about childhood memories that many of us share in common in a poignant tribute to the past. Beautifully done!

Those who do not believe in magic, never find it.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 4 of week ending Nov. 4th

Hi Old Warrior

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: My Pretty Irish Lass

First Impression: To be loved as this lass is a blessing. A delightful tribute that was lovely to read.

What I liked: I need a host of fairies with stardust on their wings and a score of leprechauns with all their magic things. I think the author wants to be sure of success.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the rhyme works very well and it flows smoothly. You do have some html code showing at the end of the poem that is distracting.

Favorite Parts: Following rainbows to me where ever they go is visually appealing to this Irish lass.

Overall Impression: The verses flow smoothly creating a lovely image to the reader's minds eye. The word choices did not feel forced. Good job.

Those who do not believe in magic, will never find it.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Review number # 2 of week ending 11/4

Hi Kitkat

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Just like the sun.

First Impression: As I read, I wondered what it would be like when the sun did finally burn out. Will all the people so fixated on themselves really notice how dark the world became.

What I liked: The comparisons to the sun and moon each covering the other's back. It is truly exhausting to find genuine people in our lives that we always know will be there.

What needs your attention: I think breaking it down into paragraphs with spacing and organizing your thoughts a bit will help your opinion flow smoother to the reader.

Favorite Parts: It's okay to be in the dark dealing with your own issues because it gives you the opportunity to re-evaluate what is important in your life. We all should do that from time to time, it is good for our mental stability.

Overall Impression: It seems lately to many shining stars in my life have gone on to other galaxies. I miss the sparkle in their personalities and the kindness that radiated around them.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
People who don't believe in magic, will never find it. Believe....
Lyn


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Review of Fall  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 1 of week ending 11/4

Hi Chris, as I promised I would do.

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Fall

First Impression: A glorious time of year to pay tribute.

What I liked: In thirteen words, you created a lovely fall experience for readers to enjoy.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the haiku works very well.

Favorite Parts: Blazing fires now, I love the fiery colors of the trees in the autumn especially when there is a vivid mixture of colors on a hillside. I can never take enough pictures, I always feel I might miss that one perfect shot.

Overall Impression: It was direct, visually appealing in the readers eye. Thank you for taking me to one of my favorite places and seasons. Keep writing. Those who don't believe in magic will never find it.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Critical Reviews  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 5 of week Aug. 6th-12th

Hi Esprit,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Critical Reviews

First Impression: I was curious if you felt as I did about being overly critical when reviewing. However, as I read I realized that I needed to develop a different perspective about reviewing.

What I liked: All writers find it difficult to put their work out there, and that the reviewer has a responsibility to help the writer reach literary excellence. I never looked at reviewing like that but it feels right now that I think about what you wrote for our consideration.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I didn't notice anything jumping out at me but grammar is not my strength truthfully, that is my weakness. I love writing but I am very aware of what areas I need work on and I do find reading other writers work helps immensely. I will tell you that many of the recommended reading section at the end of your article needs attention, many are not available anymore.

Favorite Parts: Keeping in mind that doing your best in the areas you can is helpful too! I thought adding Storymaster's point of view to your article was very helpful to me.

Overall Impression: This article suggests a different perspective to all writers on WDC when it comes to writing reviews. Critical does not mean being judgmental, it means offering insight in an encouraging manner so the writer and the reviewer both learn together. Great addition to the newsletter this week for authors.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Torment  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number # 1 of week Aug. 6-12th

Hi Geoff

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Torment

First Impression: I felt like I was spiraling in despair with the fragile girl, the images emphasized with repetitiveness made them even more real. Like for instance blood rolling down her thighs in channels, channels through the grime, channels of her pale skin glimpsing making the burgundy of blood more apparent in the channels of white in the grime. Powerfully written.

What I liked: Some windows look on beauty, beauty behind the bars, just out of reach making her suffering all the more intense. I connected with the un-answering God, been there too often myself when I felt God was cruelly watching me suffer.

What needs your attention: Nothing, each paragraph carries you to the next, the sadness compels you like a mouse in a maze there has to be a solution, you read knowing the sadness and suffering but you read again hoping the girl will find peace.

Favorite Parts: Her brief memory of a time without dirt and slime, and no fear. I really wanted it to end that way... but I know how painful it can be when you know both sides. Life's sweet moments and then slapped in the face with harsh reality. It can easier not to think or remember the difference, the temptation makes every thing around you harder to handle, to exist in the situation. At times your mind can be your best friend and others your worse enemy.

Overall Impression: I hate the bars, I hate them for her, I hate the despair she knows. No child should ever know this but unfortunately our world's leaders think otherwise. I cried reading this, not once but both times, it hit my square in the gut and my heart. I was with the girl every moment, every anguishing moment, screaming at God to set her free from this horrible existence.

The author did an excellent job of making the story feel intensely real, heart wrenching from beginning to end. The images, the repetitive word usage and the brief reminders of her age and fragility added to the sad tale of torment.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Do you think Cassandra felt threatened by Jane's writing success and didn't want her to succeed? Or was it more about Mr. Darcy? Usually, people are driven by something when they destroy things.
Lyn
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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review number # 5 of week July 24-30

Hi Ken, you were missed in the spam garden party earlier this month.

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Music of the Spheres

First Impression: The poem was so inviting and the imagery was enjoyable to my mind's eye.

What I liked: How smoothly you made the villanelle flow, it did not feel forced at all.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the imagery is delightful, the word choices by the author enhance the flow of the poem. It could easily be a melody in a song.

Favorite Parts: Each theme unique, yes I do agree. I stand and look at the heavens in awe every time. It is such a powerful masterpiece, we are truly blessed that we can enjoy it.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed this immensely, the melody of the night to me is something I will never tire of enjoying. I frequently get up at night and sit in the darkness enjoying the stars and the silence of the night.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review number # 1 of week July 24-30th, 2015

Hi Thing,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Othello's Adjustment

First Impression: That was heart breaking to read, a great perspective from a cat's point of view.

What I liked: Othello adjusting to the changes without becoming finicky, he's a cat, he could have.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you did a great job telling about a horrible time in history.

Favorite Parts: The library lady taking Othello to a nice place, though Nuremburg would emotionally exhausting to all that went to see justice. Justice to me is an interesting word, because it is unattainable. Those who were tortured and killed can't come back, those who suffered will never be the same and laws are twisted to suit the need. Guess you can tell I have no faith at all in the legal systems.

Overall Impression: Very engaging to hear about a horrible time in history through the eyes of a black and white cat that once had a family and then had to survive during an invasion.
I can't imagine why the judge found objection to this, it is very well written. I don't connect positive things with smoke stacks either.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Violet Eyes  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 16 of week July 16-22nd

Hi Shadow Ghost, You are my 1000th review on WDC!

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Violet Eyes

First Impression: My curiosity was peaked with the title and the genre listing.

What I liked: Heroes know old magic lives, I'm not anyone's hero but I do believe in magic.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the free flow works well here and the stanzas build upon each other creating a mystical tale of the unknown.

Favorite Parts: Sprinkling dust and laughter in the trees that stanza brings a big smile to my face envisioning fairies fluttering around. I spend a lot of time in my garden, and I created several fairy homes hoping the magic is always in my garden. There is nothing more beautiful to me than seeing the fireflies flitter around the garden.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed visiting your magical adventure in to the world unknown. The imagery was perfect and the flow when reading out loud totally works.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure! Thank you for helping me celebrate my 1000th review!
Lyn


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Review of Beauty of Age  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Review number # 14 of week July 16-22

Hi Druid Moon Cat

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Beauty of Age

First Impression: Yay, someone thinks as I do, beauty is inside not outside. I really hate seeing all the advertisements focusing on external beauty.

What I liked: I've lines on my face from smiling and wrinkles from crying. It tells me the author lived well.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the poem is done is free style and moves on its own.

Favorite Parts: All of the poem, I can't pick one part over another, the message to me touches my core beliefs about recognizing the importance of inner beauty versus external. I have many scars in addition to my wrinkles and they show I experienced life. I was not a mere spectator.

Overall Impression: A great reminder to embrace every sign of a life lived.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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Review of Baby lost  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Review number # 13 of week July 16-22

Hi Ravalyn

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Baby Lost

First Impression: First of all, I am so sorry for your loss. I thought the intro line was inspirational comparing the loss to a butterfly migration. I think the author could easily use a butterfly migration more and less of the details to accomplish a lovely poem about her loss when she is ready.

What I liked: The mother's ring including the loss child, that recognizes the missing child which never leaves your heart.

What needs your attention: This is poetic expression of grief and should be left as is, I don't feel comfortable making suggestions or giving it a rating but the review insists.

Favorite Parts: I liked Mom explaining to the lost baby about his siblings and her commitment to them.

Overall Impression: There is a lot of guilt expressed in this piece that I love the author finds a way to resolve. It is not good for her health. A very poignant tale of a miscarriage and the pain that lingers after. I hope you find your way to peace.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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