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Review of Morning Brew  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jenny,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Morning Brew

First Impression: Yes, I will take a cup with you, I am lucky I can drink coffee whenever and it does not keep me awake. When I saw morning brew I just knew it had to be coffee, I couldn't pass on reading this one.

What needs your attention: I was glad to see the explanation of this style the American Cinquain because it is different than what I learned. It does make me think of a Haiku. The syllable count is correct in the five line format. It looks interesting, visually makes me think of a holiday tree. I can see where the simplicity of the form is that each line has a specific number of syllables.

What part I liked best: Coffee naturally, one sip brings me satisfaction. I prefer my coffee black so the triple white chocolate would be al yours. I definitely agree sweet bliss beginning our day.

Overall impression: The image of a steaming cup of coffee with its delightful aroma teased the reader as she read about the poem's voice preferred coffee flavor beginning her day in sweet bliss. I think I will be giving the American Cinquain a try myself, I love trying new styles.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Another ally raid for House Florent with our competitors.
Lyn


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Review of Up and Down  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jenny,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Up and Down

First Impression: Sounds like a lot of work to conquer the weight battle, unfortunately it affects more of us than not. I felt tired just reading what you had in mind in this double etheree. This poem I did not have read before I could review, this is one of my favorite styles so I am familiar.

What needs your attention: Not a thing the etheree consists of ten lines with matching syllable count for each line, in the double you simply match the middle lines with ten syllables back down to one syllable with a twenty line count. This was done correctly and flows smoothly.

What part I liked best: The subject matter amused me with the images of all the gym equipment and the poems voice on a yo-yo up and down weight cycle that wants to get off the merry-go-round. It is a frustrating cycle that haunts most adults their whole life..

Overall impression: Excellent imagery, and a smooth flowing poem that addresses weight issues. Visually, the double etheree makes you think of a waist that starts small and then expands and then shrinks again like the yo-yo cycle of dieting.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? another ally raid with our competition.
Lyn


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Review of Time's Value  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jenny,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Time's Value

First Impression: I chuckled because I leave the task of coupon seeking to my husband, he finds them and prints them out. I plan the meals and what coupons we need ahead of time so we work as a team. I think that if we thought about all the time lost in every activity we do, we would be sorely depressed.

What needs your attention: Thank you for posting the nonet explanation so the reader understands what she is looking at before she reviews, this helps immensely. There are nine lines and the syllable count is correct for each line.

What part I liked best: Coupon shop to save money and the balance between time spent and money saved. Reality is the time spent seeking the coupons may not show huge savings unless you are really aggressively finding coupons but over time the savings add up. Plus coupons encourage you try food, you may not usually eat with the enticing saving.

Overall impression: It just goes to show a poet can write about everything under the sun, the options are limitless as shown with this topic of coupon clipping in a specific format of nine lines and matching syllable count for each line.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? This is part of an ally raid with our competitor houses in the "Game of Thrones" 
Lyn
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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Jenny,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Is There A Balance

First Impression: I am really glad you explained the form underneath, it made reviewing the poem much easier. It looks like a lot of fun to do. I do enjoy working confined lines and testing myself.

What needs your attention: Nothing the syllable count is correct and meets the criteria required in the Tetractys with the narrow compass of twenty syllables and a five line count.

What part I liked best: I actually found the poem amusing with this restrictions because the author asked a question and was able to answer the question with more issues of all the things she wants to get done with the narrow compass of twenty syllables. That looks like so much fun to do, I am definitely going to give this style a try.

Overall impression: Interesting concept created by Ray Stebbing, a mathematician that viewed the numbers one thru four with a mystical significance. The author chose sleep as her topic of balance, a time that some view as mystical tying the poem together with a complete thought.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? This is part of an ally raid hitting your port with my competitors.
Lyn


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Review of I Can't Believe  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Jenny,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: I Can't Believe

First Impression: Initially, I thought they were talking on the phone until I saw prompt explanation at the bottom. I've never had anyone read over my shoulder, guess I am lucky or may be not.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the dialogue works very well in this situation. The punctuation and grammar appear correct.

What part I liked best: Tim asking Marge to have their son come home immediately. I took that to assume the gun in their home was missing. Guns are dangerous and leaving one in a nightstand is far from a safe situation. Guns should be locked up and the bullets stored in a completely different place. I had to chuckle that Marge immediately took not my kid mentality, the reality is you have to assume the worst and thank God for the best.

Overall impression: A simple awareness story of the risks of having a gun within your child's reach. The story was told in dialogue by a father and mother reading an article in the newspaper about a gun issue that happened at their son's school. Then the discovery by the father that his own gun was also missing and their son was not home.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Your port is being raided in an ally raid.
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jim,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Flags of Arlington

First Impression: I've been there myself when they placed the flags, it is definitely a memorial moment that I will never forget either. I didn't think the young man minded placing the flags either.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the rhyme and rhythm work very well, the poem flows very smoothly out loud. The stanzas build upon each other guiding us through the tradition that is honorably done every May in time for Memorial Day.

What part I liked best: I thank you for the picture, the image made each word chosen more powerful to me as I read. I firmly believe in traditions, and this is one I hope never ends. Traditions like these are important, reminding us that some one gave their life so I could live free in our beloved country. The soldiers in that field have earned the tradition of placing a flag and a salute, it is the least that we can do to honor them with respect.

Overall impression: The white crosses in Arlington leaves an impression in your mind that lasts forever, seeing the soldier respectfully placing the flags was the inspiration for this tribute poem of seeing the task done. Thank you for sharing your visit with us and for the gentle reminder that our freedom came with a very high price tag.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Ken, I have returned again on my raid mission.

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Spring Break At The Zoo

First Impression: Tulu, the porcupine helping Jocelyn and Werner with his interesting invention that had alien intervention made for an interesting story.

What needs your attention: I am sure there is a reason you have throughout the story see next note but it is distracting to the reader. Are they the atm notes Jocelyn is reading? In the end it made sense but was still distracting while reading

What part I liked best: I liked the image of Chong a precious cheetah with her stick and her deep screech at the aliens. She was taking things into her paws and helping Jocelyn resolve the mystery around the cleaning machine that shouldn't be working according to Werner. I chuckled when Jocelyn tried to sound like a teacher while talking with the alien students while they explained themselves.
Tulu, Chong and Jocelyn made new friends from another planet but also knew they were going to be stuck hearing Werner's complaints about the alien menaces.

Overall impression: Interesting story that I am sure with good illustrations would make an excellent children's book.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Ken you are my 10th raid of House Stark on my reviewing mission.
Lyn


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Review of Sea of Humanity  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Princess Pepper House of Stark,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Sea of Humanity,

First Impression: I can feel the voices sadness as it treads alone in this world of technology consumed population. I am always amazed when I walk in NYC how many people are so absorbed in their phones texting or talking that they see nothing around them.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the free style works very well in this piece. Each line contributes to the melancholy tone of the poems voice.

What part I liked best: Their souls consumed, I remember so many incidents that I have seen personally my mind was filled with numerous images that the next line flowing around me felt perfect. I don't feel comfortable walking anywhere talking or texting, I prefer to be aware of my surroundings so like you I feel like I am drowning at times in this technology focused world.

Overall impression: I felt this was a compelling reminder of the differences in the older generations and the young tech generation that aren't aware of anything but that wifi connection. It so lonely to be lost in a world that does not know you exist.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Princess Pepper this is my eight raid of House Stark on my reviewing quest. I am glad I visited.
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Headless Hooves Stark

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Hotel Cowlifornia

First Impression: Oddest coincidence, I am listening to music on my computer while I am reviewing. I just opened your port and Hotel California was playing and there too my surprise was your featured song parody to the Eagles. Naturally, I had to review it.

What needs your attention: Nothing, this parody is awesome, it flows smoothly when read out loud, if I could sing it would probably be just as lovely.

What part I liked best: Wake me from this nightmare, you flies on my tail. I hate flies, can't stand the buzzing and way they hover so it would be a nightmare to me. I chuckled when she told him you're a bull I could go for, I could make you wail. Great mental image there!

Overall impression: Amusing and engaging to read this parody of the Eagles song Hotel California. I laughed as I read and then read it again to my husband, it was simply to awesome not to share.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Hooves, you are the fourth raid I have made this evening on House Stark on my reviewing mission.
Lyn


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Review of Amazon  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | N/A (Unratable.)
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Hi Teresa,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Amazon

First Impression: A powerful tribute to a mum that had breast cancer! If this is about your Mum, I hope all is well in her world. It is a devastating disease that with today's technology should no longer steal women's lives.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the etheree works very well in this instance. The single word beginning and gaining increases the momentum to the proud ending congratulating Mum.

What part I liked best: The narrator assuring the woman how strong and courageous Amazon warrior women and that she was in honorable company. As a survivor myself I understand the importance of support from our loved ones in the battle against cancer. It is difficult to see ourselves as beautiful after the procedures are done.

Overall impression: I am honored to read this celebration of a woman's battle with breast cancer from someone that loves her dearly. The tribute is lovely expressed and visually appealing in the etheree.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my IMMENSE pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Hi Teresa, you are my third raid of House Stark on my reviewing quest this evening.
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi Megan,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Teddy Bear Poem

First Impression: Every child should own a teddy bear to call their very own. There is nothing more enjoyable to me than to snuggle with a teddy bear on a bad day. As a child, I never had a stuffed animal, my first teddy bear I bought when I bought my oldest son his when I was pregnant. My ex thought it was so stupid but I didn't agree.

What needs your attention: The rhyme and rhythm work very well, the poems flows smoothly when it is read out loud.

What part I liked best: You can tell your secrets to your teddy bear. For me that would be a problem now, Vic has spoiled me rotten I have over a hundred teddy bears now, most of them are inside a curio cabinet with glass doors so they don't get dusty but two are on my nightstand watching over me and available for the occasional conversation. We would need a bigger bed for them to sleep with us too, because all three cats already join Vic and I. My favorite story about teddy bears is Corduroy, what is yours?

Overall impression: I love the simplicity of the poem, I could easily see it in a children's book with colorful illustrations.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Yay, Megan is one of the sly foxes of House Florent!
Lyn


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Review of Night Vision  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Joy, fancy meeting you *Smile*

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: night Vision

First Impression: I could not resist the interesting title on the folder and then I saw the moon. I knew this is where I needed to be. I am reviewing everyone on my team this evening. I enjoyed the imagery in the opening stanza unlike you I love the darkness and this was appealing to me.

What needs your attention: Nothing, punctuation and grammar work well in this free style poem. It flows smoothly when read out loud.

What part I liked best: I was amused with the Venus fly trap attacking you as you fled the ominous room that frightened you. What's wrong with a werewolf or maybe a witch, they enjoy company too? Poor fairies they even got a bad rap on this dark night. Poor kitty, in the wrong place too. I love the darkness, there is something about it that I find soothing,I always have. Lucky for you, your neighbor was home to rescue you.

Overall impression: The voice of the story has a vivid imagination that gets carried away in the darkness, creating so many spooky images she flees her home into the street and to her misfortune the neighbor's black kitty even crosses her path before her neighbor discovers. The stanzas build upon each other escalating the fear the voice feels inviting the reader into the spooky adventure that requires night vision.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Yay, Joy is one of the awesome foxes of House Florent!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Cheri,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: My Newbie Is Showing

First Impression: Love the cover art, Snoopy is one of my favorite cartoon characters. I love how he celebrates life with dance and good eating with his little bud Woodstock.

What needs your attention: Nothing, your blog is a reflection of your personality direct and to the point, something I truly value in a person. The great thing about a blog you can have it anyway you want.

What part I liked best: The different entries are engaging to read, I chuckled reading about Trouble with a Capital T because we had a similar situation helping one of my son's classmates because he was being assaulted by his step-father, seven months into it I seriously was thinking hitting the kid myself. He was high-maintenance and a major hit on our budget but the straw that broke the camel's back was catching him in my purse stealing money. I delivered his body with belongings to the police department and made it quite clear that if they returned him to my home I would be pressing charges for theft. They need to contact his parents or take him some where else but my home was not it. You are right good deeds do get punished!

Overall impression: Each entry is different and I am glad you blog with us when you can in Blog City, your contributions truly matter.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Cheri is an awesome fox on our team!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Bumblegrum

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title:Home is Where The Heart Is

First Impression: An interesting story with twists and turns about two young people just before high school graduation. One boy manipulates the situation with a blatted lie destroying a friendship between John and Carol. Jealousy, manipulation and sexual betrayal by a young man that later needs John's help.

What needs your attention: There is one line where Lorena is at the hospital with Wayne needing surgery and you have this (Lyn looked again and her hand went to her mouth in shock) when Lorena realizes that it is their classmate John, now a surgeon. I chuckled wondering if this was some strange twist of fate or the writer has a wicked sense of humor. My name is Lyn and to this point in the story and to the conclusion there isn't a Lyn in the story. I'm going with the theory, I was meant to read this!

What part I liked best: John never married, he never let anyone replace Carol in his heart. That kind of love will find a way to happen, and it did when Carol was hired for a job in John's medical practice by his office manager. Fate is a great thing in my opinion.

Overall impression: I'm a hopeless romantic, always have been and this story gave me what I needed and more. It was a pleasure to read.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Lyn was here *Bigsmile*
Lyn


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Review of Ali and Mitch  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Ali and Mitch

First Impression: A perfect short love story that made this reader smile especially knowing how much love the second time around can really be.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the story flowed smoothly, engaged the reader from the beginning to the end delighting her sentimental soul.

What part I liked best: When Allie has Mitch if he had a prehensile dick and then checking his canines. This section showed the reader the author's sense of humor and his joy of life. I was pleased to read that as the evening developed so did the passion between the couple. Sometimes in life you are given the opportunity to relive the memory of your first kiss and the feeling sweeps you away. There is something magical, that never leaves the hidden places in your mind of that time.

Overall impression: A captivating read from beginning to end about two meeting after 40 years in a retirement place. Both had been married to others, both were now widows with nothing to keep them from finding out if the magic still existed.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Yay, for Mitch and Allie *Heart*
Lyn


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Review of Home Less  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Home Less

First Impression: I couldn't decide if this was about a woman with Alzheimer's or Dementia than I decided that it truly didn't matter. What mattered was this dear woman was ignored instead of some one taking a moment to care enough to assure her safety. It infuriates me.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I don't believe a label or a style is necessary for this poem to raise awareness to another wrong in our society. Lack of concern for out fellow humanity whether it be sheer selfishness or fear neither are acceptable to me.

What part I liked best: Sadly, true no one really listens to a four child whose heart has not been hardened. She knew the lady next door was missing and she wanted to know why. Sarah cared about Marguerite. It is heart breaking that this happens to our elderly, living one moment and then having all their memories stolen. My father-in-law sits in a chair in a nursing home captive in his body with all his memories stolen. He has been a vegetable now for 8 years, while the nursing home drains his life savings. It is a deplorable state of affairs.

Overall impression: Excellent work! I was deeply moved by Marguerite's story as I read, tears streamed down my face as I read. This subject is just to close to home.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Nothing, Fyn said it all!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: A Brilliant Writer

First Impression: This is the first time I have crossed a poem about transgender and I was excited to read your interpretation. WDC is going to need a transgender genre in the future, times are changing and it is no longer a taboo subject.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is perfect like it is in free style sharing with us about a human being existing in difficult times in the wrong body.

What part I liked best: She had another name, the male name she was born with. This simple sentence opens the door to a educational retrospect about a man who does not feel as man should, instead inside was really a woman waiting to exist. The journey is not easy, nor are people receptive to the changes and society has a long way to go even now.
This topic is something I am very familiar with, a dear friend of mine was born as David and is now Davida. She is blessed that her wife stood by her through the whole process, many marriages don't. They are good friends co-existing in the home that once raised their daughter Holly. My eyes don't need the outside appearance of my friend all that matters is what I loved all along, the spirit inside. Our world is handicapped by the labels, and the visual expectations it forgets to appreciate the unique diversity we all have.

Overall impression: Thank you for raising awareness before it came out in to the open because of the medias focus/circus on Bruce/ Caitlyn Jenner. I feel so bad for the people who are trapped in their bodies and do not have the financial means to change because of all the insurance restrictions whereas it is easy for Jenner.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review of Prayermantis  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Fyn, yup I am here again doing my Group Raids for House Florent

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Prayer Mantis

First Impression: This is awesome, what a creative use of something your Grandmother used to say. I am going to pay more attention for praying mantis, hoping it will be as fruitful for me.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the poem flows smoothly with the rhyme pattern and natural rhythm of the story. Each stanza contributes to the next beginning with something considered silly to an awesome mantis day.

What part I liked best: The discovery of the praying mantis in all the different random places that contributed to the awesome day for the author. Either I am noticing my surroundings enough or we aren't blessed to have many in our location but I will try harder to see. I have to admit it has been some time since I have seen one and it was back in Maine before I moved to Jersey. I rejoiced with you, Robin, in the last stanza, sounds like the perfect day to me.

Overall impression: An engaging poem that reminds the reader that unexplained occurrences whether it be random or the myth is true that being more observant has its benefits.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Praying Mantis, I really would love to see you today!
Lyn
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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Kiya,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Celebrating Diversity in Writing, an Entry in Kiya's Big Book of Writing Guidelines.

First Impression: First of all the selections in this book are awesome, I chose Diversity because it is an important topic to me. I have actively supported diversity in my life, the importance of celebrating diversity needs more voices than ever.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the subject is discussed very openly with excellent examples of learning more about the importance of diversity.

What part I liked best: The author chose books that influenced her education and discussed the strong contributions they made in their writing. I read Mine Boy, it is an excellent example for this discussion. Like you I had no idea about apartheid/segregation, they were only words to me until I read about more about it. I had more knowledge of segregation because of Martin Luther King and my involvement in protest marches in my youth. I was pleased to see writers on WDC highlighted as well that I was not aware of. It made for very interesting reading this morning.

Overall impression: Education is important, our history is so important for our youth to understand so history does not repeat itself.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Kiya rocks!
Lyn


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Review of Trayvon Martin  
Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Kiya

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Trayvon Martin

First Impression: It is a very sad state of affairs to see the direction our culture is heading, where violence is the norm. Just this very week, shootings inside the church in SC, this morning in the news two different block parties were randomly shot for sport. Three innocent children in that senseless violence. I don't understand either.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the particular chosen form works very well to enhance the authors point of view, it flows smoothly, and the random italized words strengthen the poem.

What part I liked best: All of the poem, I truly cannot pick one part over another, the words chosen remind the reader of an horrific act of violence against a young man because of prejudice not fear. There is no excusable answer for Zimmerman's behavior or as you note his smug satisfaction that he did something right. It amazes me how frequently he has been in the media since and still they have not thrown him in jail and misplaced the keys or someone has not taken it upon themselves to take him out.

Overall impression: A very well done tribute to Trayvon Martin and recognition of his family's sorrow.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Steve,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes of House Florent.

Title: Rhonda, a Christmas Collab/Acrostic

First Impression: This is quite the tribute to your beloved Rhonda, Happy Anniversary to you both. I am very happy that you have found joy in each other.

What needs your attention: Nothing, that I would change, it clearly shows the love of your wife and poetry in a creative fashion.

What part I liked best: Where do I begin, Peace on Earth is where I choose, that we in our life time see the possibilities. Christmas is a lovely time to share joyful verse and our love for our fellow humans, which I think you expressed very well. Then there was the amusing addition of peppermint candy and cheese for the mice. I chuckled because when you look for homeopathic ways to remove mice they recommend peppermint oil and here you are offering them something they hate and something they love. Definitely something an Ebeneezer would do!

Overall impression: I agree with you about Patrick that review really rocked. I wish I had the time to be m ore creative but I have committed myself to 40 reviews this weekend for the games. Okay back to your creative endeavor, it was very well done. I enjoyed your acrostic tribute to Rhonda and feel blessed that you shared it with us.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Steve and Rhonda, may your love last forever *Heart*
Lyn


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Review of I Stand Amazed  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Steve

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: I Stand Amazed

First Impression: Yes, the power of belief and prayer in God's ability to make a difference in our lives is what makes life bearable. People find strength by joining with others that share the same belief and love of God.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I don't note a specific style but I am still learning them myself. I never realized how many styles, variations existed until I began writing and learning myself. The stanzas each contribute to the next one creating a tribute to God.

What part I liked best: You need only ask, I think this particular stanza summarizes the point you are making in your poetic expression how important it is to communicate your needs in prayer. And to demonstrate your worthiness in this universe by your actions.

Overall impression: The poem read very well out loud and flowed smoothly from beginning to end easily. I feel the content demonstrated the author's personal belief to the reader without feeling forced upon which some authors do.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Hi Steve, I'll be hanging out for a while.
Lyn


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Bumblegrum

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Sometimes You Can Go Back

First Impression: We are very capable of saying the stupidest things aren't we? Life has a way of taking people on paths they don't expect and some times we are given second chances.

What needs your attention: This particular sentence I think you forgot the s for she not he. "She became secretive and Jamie knew he was having detailed conversations with Sal"

What part I liked best: Jamie himself, I really enjoyed reading about his life and how it evolved and the circle he made coming back home again, establishing himself in the town he grew up in. Sometimes, we can come home again. I liked that his parents and his sister Mandy did not try to discourage his involvement with Angel.

Overall impression: The story evolved through Jamie's rejection initially from the girl he loved, to his moving away and beginning in a new town, several women later and needing to find a new job after being laid off he came back to where he began. Things in town were different, the girl he loved had drastically changed but he saw past that and wanted to be her friend and help.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? Sweet story!
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Bumblegrum,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Big Boys Don't Cry

First Impression: I absolutely abhor that statement when people say it, everyone regardless of gender should be encouraged to cry and to show their emotions.

What needs your attention: Not a thing, the story flows very well, I felt like I was inside Jerry's head, feeling what he was denied to feel.

What part I liked best: His comparison to his sister Julie's boyfriend when he left, she got to cry and he wasn't even dead. It's not fair, Jerry's right he should have been able to say goodbye to Rumble, it was wrong of this parents to handle that way.
My cat had got killed a squirrel but she was seriously injured and I didn't find her until she was really bad, cats hid when they are hurt. I took her to the vet, he couldn't save her. I brought her home to bury her but found I could not put her in the ground. She had been with me 17 years faithfully. My son buried her for me, I cried and cried.

Overall impression: A familiar look at childhood and one of the dilemmas of having a family pet. The sad part is boys are still encouraged to not show emotion, big boys don't cry. Everyone, male or female should never be denied the right to mourn their pets lost with tears.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I truly hate how quickly people replace pets instantly like the other one wasn't a part of the family.
Lyn


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Review by Lyn's a Wit...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Bumblegrum

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Send Not To Know For Whom The Bell Knows

First Impression: You have a knack for poetry, this is really good. I am surprised it is not sporting an awardicon it should be.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the rhythm and rhyme are excellent, the flow is smooth when read out loud.

What part I liked best: My failing heart and stubborn mind that could be anyone of us at any point in our life. Unfortunately, we are guilty of looking for silver linings when it is too late. During the time we should have focused on our health, our families and friends we to often get carried away with material things that in the end don't matter.

Overall impression: I could feel time ticking away as I approached each stanza, I really didn't want to go forward but the image of a clock ticking in my mind kept me going with the momentum of the poem until the very end and the dawning realization its over. This poem rocks, what a great reminder about living in the moment and not letting that clock rule your life.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say????? I am really enjoying my visit in your port!
Lyn


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