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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose .

I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, so I'm here, giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the captivating part of it, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance and have their first impression on a piece.

The title of your piece is good for me, it is intriguing, it hooked me, I liked how you personify the moon as a friend., maybe it may also symbol as a loyal friend.

Imagery - A well crafted words when it was properly used can create a subtle or vivid in the imagery.The proper chosen of words to express or to show intentionally meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, I liked how you properly combined your words which creates an imagery and evokes emotion like sadness, mystery, and loyalty.


Rhyme and Rhythm: when it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that was intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create.,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm that was created. It blends with the created tone.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
I just have doubt and wonder why you didn't capitalized some letter on the given title ,
And not using some punctuation marks,
using Punctuation marks are one of the important tools or equipment of a piece,
It helps the piece to slow, to stop and be fast while reading.
I've noticed also that you don't used any punctuation marks on the body of the piece.
Like on the third line, this is a kind of questioning but you don't used any punctuation.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Moon is beautiful, it looks deep and full of mystery, like friendship.
A good friendship always go deeper like the moon at night.
The more you looked it , the more deeper and the more you want to know what's behind it, like friendship.

Thanks for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing on it.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.


Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*


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Review of I Still Love You  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm a friend here Samberine Everose

I stumbled on your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance, so the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure or attract a reader.

The title of your piece is so enticing to me, but its just simple. I always find this lines through lyrics in a song so my first impression is a kind of lyrical piece. That's how it enticed me to read it, because I liked lyrics in songs and also in poetry, and I didn't disappointed to have a read on it.


Imagery - A well crafted words and when it was properly used can create and stimulate emotions and tone, it can create a vivid picture of imagery to the reader. It can take the reader to the imagination of the creator without any blur of lines or words, to make a subtle flow of the piece.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, easy to understand and lyrical in format. I've found it as an expression of emotion. I feel the emotion like longings, pain, sorry, missing and love certainty.


Rhyme and Rhythm: One of the most important element of a piece, when it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create, and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set a perfect of the imagery as it is presented.

This is a free verse, and I liked how you made it,
It blends with the created emotions.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

I just have doubt on some lines.
This are just only my thought it may varies to others.

When we first met
I just think there is a missing word here, it didn't satisfy me.
I also think - The first time we met.


You loved me so much already.
The word so much - when I go through the next line.
It doesn't link already.
You might mean

that you love me.- simple but I think its firm.

You grew on me.
I just don't understanding what you are saying here.-
You mean develop, through companionship, friendship..?
Or the way you feel so that it will link to the first two lines before this line.
How about
I already felt you.- simple but its firm.

The line
Sometimes I'd cry just for you to hug me,

Do you mean, so that he would hug you, you must first have to cry?
That's the way how I understand it.
Or
Sometimes I'd cry,then you hug me,
So that it will link to the next line
And say it's alright.

The line
Sometimes I still wish you were alive.
The thought here is weak
Just only sometimes that you are wishing that he still alive

How about
Sometimes I wish you were still alive.
Or if you want to be more certain its thought
Don't add the word sometimes.

How I should have told you the truth
Why you add the word how
Do you mean how can a way you told him the truth..?

To make it more certain and firm
Maybe you can omit some of the words on it.
To tell you the truth.

Breaking of lines and spacing makes a piece more deeper in meaning and more firm and strong its thought.


*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
But when you left,
You stole my heart
And took it with you.

This is my favorite part
the best way when we truly pour ourselves and emotions to paper is when we are in a deep feeling of something, and you expressed it well here in your piece.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time. *Heart*


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Review of Blood Lords  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Pat *Smile*


A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm a friend here Samberine Everose

I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the "Invalid Item" .

and I hope I can bring you a smile.*Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:
Title: Every title of piece is so important, it is the capturing part of a piece, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece.

The title of your piece is so enticing to me, The combination of the two words Blood and Lords create a some kind of heroic to me. It reminds me of those warriors from olden times who fight for their honor and rights, and as I go along to the lines, I've found out that truly the piece is related to the given title.

Imagery - A well crafted words and if properly used and created can stimulate emotions and tone, and create a vivid picture of imagery to the reader. It can take the reader to the imagination of the creator.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, the perfect and properly combination you used on words can stir emotions and stimulate it.It took me also to be a part of that piece.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create.,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you made it,
It blends with the created emotions.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
I see that two authors created this piece, and it blends on how they both created and used the words.
This is how I see the word team work, like the teamwork I've seen in your piece of all the warriors long time ago.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of Exasper  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Dan Sturn *Smile*

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 


I'm your friend here Samberine Everose .

I've found your piece while visiting your portfolio, so I'm here, giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:
Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the captivating part of a piece, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece.

The title of your piece is good to me, it is intriguing, it hooked me, and trying to know what's about it..

Imagery - A well crafted words and if properly used can create a subtly or vivid in the imagery.
The proper chosen of words to express or to show the intentionally meaning of the piece can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, the perfect and properly combination you used on words, and its moving, like the imagery you've want to show it.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.
This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you made the breaking of its line.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Everything we think will reflect in us, and we always see our reflection in a clear water.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of Live Through This  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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 Live Through This  (E)
A short, to the point poem about living my life that way I feel most comfortable.
#1971934 by Keaton Foster: Know My Hell!
that I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio .

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Reading**Thought* MY REFLECTION :
We can learn to taste and to live the sweetness of every bitterness even in times of pain by accepting it.

*Heart* MY FAVORITes:
Title - The title of a piece is important, this should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which every reader have their first peek.

*Star*The title of your piece is intriguing to me, and hook me to know what's behind it

Imagery - A well crafted and chosen words can create a vivid imagery, stimulate and evokes emotions where in the piece would take the reader to be a part and to feel what the writer wants to show.

*Star*The words you weaved is vivid, and took me to know and learn beyond your words and ideas that was on the piece.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE PART :
I am just a pebble in the deepest pond
To every depth I am prepared to go

I see determination here.

*Question*MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:

I didn't find any words that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Living through bitterness can build a good character that we can use if not for now, but for the future.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You potrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of Stand Strong  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
So I'm here giving you a review as my gift to you.


Please remember that I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*



*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
The best time to create a piece of poetry is when we are having an strong emotional feeling, because that is the time that our emotions are too strong and full and the one of the best thing that can satisfy it is by pouring it into paper.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - Every title of a piece must have a magnetic charm that allures a reader, because the title is the first thing in which the reader notice and have its first glance.
The given title for me is just simple, but the combination of the word strong entice me, somehow it lift the word stand.

Imagery - Every crafted words if its well chosen and properly arranged will create a vivid imagery, and enhance the created emotion that intently showed by the author so that the reader would feel and taste it.
The weaved words, are also simple, but it evokes emotions, because they are relate and linked to each other. It only seems that you just made it in a light reflection,

Rhyme and Rhythm -A well chosen Rhyme and Rhythm of a piece will help and make also to stimulate- to evokes the tone of the piece. This is a free verse, and I like how the lines was broken,it blends with the created emotions.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

I have doubt on the first line.
Why did you hurt me,
Maybe you forgot to add a question mark at the end of this line, because it begins with the word why - it ask something.

The second line:
I just only think that there's something missing on that line:
Make me cry and feel,
I think about the word "and",
So that it will link on the first line.
and make me cry and feel

And the third line,
I think that there should be a link between the two word feel,

On the third stanza.

I said I love you too.
Even through I knew I'd lied

The word through
It seems that it does not link to the given statement,

You might mean though
To intensify the given statement.

You have turn my down.
You might mean -turn me down?
Made feel low and
There's something that are missing again in this line,

My thought is who's that who "made feel low?"

You might mean
Made me feel low

and the word and,
it doesn't link to the next line
maybe instead of, you can use but

So that it will create a more strong and concrete statement, like the given line

at the end to make it much deeper and really reflect the word strong make it all as capital letter - STRONG.
I will stand STRONG.
it will create an impact on it.

These are just only my thought as a reader, and I have also these in my writing, it also varies in another perspective.


 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Emotions are truly strong, and it is been best written into a piece.
This is just my rate for now, I'd be willing to change it if you would like to re review on me on the future.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 3.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.*Heart*


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Review of Witches Brew  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Mistressofthewest *Smile*


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I'm your friend:Samberine Everose
And I want to give a gift for you by reviewing one of your piece.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or a writing expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *SMile*


*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Witches are no different than girls, dreamy, observer, trying , curiosing in every thing, they think or way to follow and fulfill their dreams.

*Thought*WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Title - The first thing in which a reader glance in every piece is the title,
So a title should be enticing to read.The given title captivates me, but the most thing that I got interested is the form or the shape of the poem.

Imagery- A well chosen crafted words which is properly combine with correct and creative form of words can create a vivid imagery, and can make the piece smooth while reading it. The crafted words of yours is vivid, which create a good relationship each of the words, within the words.

Rhyme and Rhythm - The correct use of the rhyming of every poetry is important, to stimulate the intended tone. This is not a rhyming poetry but I like how the rhythm was formed.

Form and Structure- Every created form and structure of a piece should be properly applied to create an impact to the reader, your piece for me is enticing and interesting to read, the created form and shape is perfect for me.

*Thought2*MY FINAL THOUGHT:
Like the word witch you used in your piece,
Magical brewing, whispering spells of the witch,
You're poem is just like it,
Bewitching someone to read.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Thomas Sottomayor *Smile*


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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
And I’d like to give you a gift review on your piece I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio.


Please remember that I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
just chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Heart*

*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Everyone has its own purpose, and that purpose is always something unique and certainty in every human role in this world.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Title –Every title should have a character that hook a reader, because title is the captivating part of a piece, it is the first thing that every reader look on it. If it create a deep impact on them, or a stimulate a curiosing effect, then it means that you did pulling them on the given title of your piece.
The title of your piece is enticing to read for me.

Imagery – A well chosen words that were creatively crafted and link to other words can make the piece vivid, and can stimulate emotions in which the author want to show, it will make the reader to remind something and the piece can take them into a different perspective in which the auhor would like to share.
The words that you weaved is so in depth for me, I read it not only twice, but many times, but the more I read it, somehow it always make and see its own shine and appreciate it.

Rhyme and Rhythm- A proper chosen and use of Rhyme and Rhythm of a piece can make the piece more enticing and enhancing the created emotion.
I usually appreciate a free verse piece which is best in an emotional piece or in serious tone.
This is not a rhyming piece and it blends with the created tone.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINES :
In the kind world of mirrors
In the sunshine feel of sad

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*

I have only a doubt on the word “back” you used o the first line.

Most of all the lines except the first line are really in depth for me.
The used of that word ” back “ seems simple from those other lines.
And it pulls me at first impression as just a simple piece.

Maybe if you would like to change it to something more deeper than it.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece.
A little word from the world is singing softly to you, in the sunshine feel of sand,
in the kind world of mirrors.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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and this is one of my surprise gifts for you, reviewing one of your piece I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.
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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Each of us have its own path in journeying life, every path we have is not how smooth as how we think.I would say that there is no perfect/smooth path so that we could always have a rest and have a perfect journey, but every rough path that we have, God knew and believe in us, that we can stand and cope all these things, because He is our creator.
Every creator on his masterpiece knew the ability and weakness of his piece, because it was his piece and a part of him. The first one that affected if a piece would have a problem is the creator.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Plot and Format – Every format of a story should be properly arrange and situation should be in correct order so that the reader will follow it smoothly until it reach the end part.
The format of your story is good, every paragraph consist a compact phase or situation in which it really needs as a part of the story.
The plot here is about our problems and trials that we have, and how we strongly face it, and every purpose that we have has its own reason, every incidence whether we like it or not can create something that can uplift us.
Setting- A balance and well crafted words,will make you feel that you were in the story and a part of it, and no abruptly while reading it.The setting of the story is good and the paragraph are not redundant.
Length - Just because I don't have enough time, so I always look for a short story that is not too long,
Long story can make the reader think its boring, specially if its always the same its topic, the story of yours is not too long and not too short.
Grammar and Punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.
Dialogue – A dialogue makes the story appealing, I didn't find any dialogue here but still I like.
Flow - The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, it holds me, until I didn't notice that I already reach the ending part.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
I see this an inspirational piece.
In every experience we have it reflects us, and a good character was build in every trials that we face.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of The Seasons  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Dandelion Man
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and I'm here to give you a review on your piece.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose .

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is a beautiful meaning of the different seasons. I always like to use season also in my poetry, and relate or link it to emotions, because somehow the season reflect emotions. I mostly like to used the summer and autumn, I also like spring, but I just only thought that spring attach to rain, and rain here in our country is storm.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece, should be enticing to read to attract a reader to look for that piece.
The title of your piece hook me, because seasons is one of my favorite things to read.
Imagery - Every crafted words should be well chosen, and properly in organized so that we can achieve the smooth flowing and imagery of a piece, to evokes also the emotions and the different senses that were used.
The piece has a smoothly flowing as I read it, and the imagery is vivid. You relate well the different stage of a relationship to the season.
Rhyme and Rhythm- This is in free verse and it blended in the created emotion.


*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
Just only on the last part.
'Will spring come again'
I just think that there's a punctuation mark on the end part?
Because the tone created are something longing for the coming of spring.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a Great piece.
Well done, the Awardicon deserves well.
Every time in every season have its own beauty and stage, just like relationship.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*

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I'm Samberine Everose your friend here in Wdc. { e:smile}


Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it,if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Air is one of the most important to every living things here on earth. Air links to life, because air sustain life. We still live even if we don't eat foods for so many days, we still live even if we don't drink a water for a day, but air without just only a few seconds, our life's ended.

*Thought*What CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title - A title is the one that hook a reader, because its the first thing which every reader first see it, this should be enticing, the given title captivates me, using the word life, life is something mysterious to me and I like how you link it to air, air is life.
Imagery - Every crafted word should be properly well chosen to reach or create an effective flow and subtle flow of imagery, taking the reader to smell, to see, to feel those that in the piece.Your piece is short and your crafted word is simple and well balance, which create a certain idea. It reminds me like the air that is light, freely floating, pure and natural.
Rhyme and Rhythm - This is not a rhyming poetry, and state in free verse.
Flow and Structure. - The flow is like its subject, freely it flows like the air.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINE:
No air, no life

This is certain..

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
And no doubt arise.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Air like life is in and out. Sometimes we are lucky and sometimes we are not luck, consist both of negative and positive to make it balance like the air, when it comes to us, we smell the fresh air, and exhale the air and that cleans us. Just like life.
If there's no air, our life end.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5 .

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*


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Review of A Blitheful Sight  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings from "The Poet's Place " 
I've just spotted your piece while roaming around in your Portfolio.
It appeals to me, so I read, and here I'd like to give you a review.

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose


Please remember that I‘m not a professional or expert in writing, anything I say here, is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :

Nature is really wonderful, a scenic view, can uplift one's spirit, can inspired someone, when we are in our dull moments, the best way to go is a place surrounded by wonderful view of nature.

*Thought* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - The title is the captivating part of a piece, when I am searching something to read the title Is the one I look first. Your title is simple for me - its good when this is in the acrostic form, but as I can see, it was already determined that this is about nature , but other than that, its good.
Imagery- The words that you crafted creates their own description that is vivid, and have the ability to took me in those views you've showed. I liked also how you properly formed in an organize and well sequence until it reach the end part.
Rhyme and Rhythm - I didn't see any rhyming pattern here, but the rhythm is fine for me.



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :

I didn't see any word that can distract its flow.

But I just only have a thought on the word "drop" you used on the first line
It just didn't satisfied me,
I just thought that rays of sunshine scattered when the sun rises.
drop for me - is just only in one place, there's a limited.
Although sometimes sunshine has a time limiting in scattering its rays like a cloudy morning, but when it talks about nature, we always described and showed the best of its views.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece.
And nature as its best.I can't compare it even a nature view on a masterpiece created by hand, because nature is original, and one of the wondrously created by our loving God.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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 Your Love is Like....  (E)
A description of love.
#1973673 by Sammie Rose
that I've found in your Portfolio, sorry if just been sent now.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is different about description of love. We have different views of love, and yours is true.
The more you know that person, the more you had been through for years, the more you will love him. Love always develop and grows everyday.

*Heart**Thought* What I think about the:

Title: The one that enticed a reader to read a piece, I was captivated by the given title.
Imagery -A crafted words of a piece should be properly arrange, so that the flow will be smoothly ad no distraction while reading it. The weaved words are vivid, and easily been reach.
Rhyme and Rhythm - free verse and it blends with the created emotion.

 MY FAVORITE STANZA:

Your love is like the best dream I could never have,
Hours I spend with dreamy eyes.
Thinking of our love as vast as the sky.

Very romantic, and lovely.

*Thought*DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :

I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

I just have a thought on the word "coffee" you used.
I don't know but sometimes coffee if there is no added sugar, its not sweet, and sometimes it makes us nervous because of the caffeine as one of its ingredient.
But my mom like coffee and even if i told her to limit it, because its not good to her heart.
She said that she's already addicted and its hard to stop already.
Maybe that's the love you also see, you became addicted on his love everyday. *Smile*

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A very romantic piece,
I liked the inspiration you used here.
Maybe for me, just because- hot chocolate is my every morning's favorite drink.. Love would be like a cup of chocolate,the more you taste, the sweeter is it. *Smile*
You portrayed it well.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
Its my pleasure to read ad to give a review. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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Review of The Mirror  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Shawlyn *Smile*

A Greetings from "The Poet's Place " 

I'm your friend Samberine Everose .
This is one of the gifts that was in the package you've won on the Raffle Game Contest "Invalid Item" 

Please, remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
I relate this to confidence - confidence sometimes depends on how we grow, the experienced we've been through.

MY FAVORITES:
Title - I liked the given title,simple but intrigues me, mirror is something mystery to me, we always see the reflection of our selves, but I always wonder why mirror have different reflection perceived in us.

Imagery - I liked the crafted words, it took me to think also and reflect myself.
Sometimes, it reminds me on the past, and the emotions we always see through the mirror, it is the one we hold it.

Rhyme and Rhythm - a free verse, and I know you freely showed and delivered it because it blends with the created emotion.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A Great piece.
A mirror is only a thing but we always see the truth in us. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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Review of Time Travel  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Shawlyn *Smile*

A Greetings from the "The Poet's Place " 

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
This is one of the gifts that was in the package you've won on the "Invalid Item"  Raffle Game Contest.

Please remember that , I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
As we live here on earth, we are in time travel.Travelling every hours, every minute, we have our own journey in every time, and through that time we always find wisdom in every experience that we have.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title: I always intrigue about time, its wonder and its deep every time, so its the one that enticed me to choose your piece.
Imagery : I feel that time, took and hold me, and let me to travel from to the past till the present in your crafted words, somehow I see that every line is certain and its true.
Rhyme and Rhythm : You did well in choosing the free verse form, it blends with the created emotion, something mystery and sentimental.
Form and structure:well done using the acrostic form.

MY FAVORITE LINE:

Time is infinite.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
This is a great piece.
Travelling in our time, we always have our own journey, but we can't bring back time once we lost it.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm your friend:Samberine Everose
And I want to give a gift for you by reviewing one of your piece,

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or a writing expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Sometimes it depends in us, how we hold and nurture to grow the love in a relationship.
But not always, because we can't hold time and its circumstances, the best way is to do always the best we can to our love, without forgetting our selves.


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THe

The title- I like the word you used: paving - Hardening..? our new map pertains to the relationship. Good title. We all know that every title is the enticing part of a piece, it allures the reader to read.
Imagery- I liked how you weaved your words, some are description of the one you love,so you let the reader create an image of her, and then the description of the relationship that you've both through and will going through.
Rhyme and Rhythm - A free verse, in narrative , it just blend with the created tone.


*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.


MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Although, a piece of every legal paper has always been important to bind the love of every couple, but the most important is the feeling that will always on them, that no one can ever separate them.

Thanks for sharing your piece, its my pleasure to read and give my review.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
And thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" 
And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece
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Purpose of Whole Mankind  (E)
What is your purpose on the Earth?
#1985768 by ~Minja~
I've found in your portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Earth is a place created by God so that we can have a place to live, therefore earth is our home. Its really hard to think that nowadays because technology is improving and human were upgrading, they forgot their original home and come to think they are still standing on its face.
Its good to have changes specially improving, but we should not forgot the place where we came from.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title - the title is the one that hook a reader, it is the first thing where in we first stumbled before the body of a piece, the title gives me something to think, it makes me intrigue, so it enticed me to read.
Imagery - your crafted words has a tone of informative type, questioning but there is already the answer there, it gives the reader to really think about it and analyze carefully.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*

I just have doubt on the word "created" that you used on line 7th, you already
have that on line 6th, it makes the line reiterate.
Maybe you can use another word.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
a nice piece.
Our mother earth is a gift, we should protect and treasure it.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
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And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece
 The Creative Outlet (Chapters 1-3)  (13+)
What would you do if you couldn't be, well, you?
#1986107 by diffidentDemon
I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Our passion- individuality that's what make us unique.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title - just because of lack of time, so as of now I don't usually like to read novels and chapters, but just because of the word creative that you given as the title, it enticed me to read it.
The title is the one that hook a reader to a piece to read.

Plot and Format- honestly my first impression is just too long, but when I begin to read, it holds my attention that I didn't noticed that I already reached the ended part and craving some more of its continuation.
The plot here is about a world in which they didn't already consider the creativity of every person, where in the main character was searching and craving to that world and place, and when she found it out, she was amazed for the beauty and the loved she found and choosing to stay it there.

Setting: the setting of the story is good, the crafted words was well written to show the different adventure, action and emotion of the story per chapter, it looks like that I am a part of the story and I've felt the emotion of the main character.
Length- as I've said, I usually don't read now a days a long novel or story, because of lack of time, but just because your novel holds my attention just on the beginning, so I've finished it without noticing it.
Grammar and Punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
a very nice piece.
I relate this also to our wonderful site - writing.com in which it has a lot of rooms for creativity and improvement, with all the wonderful people living in here, and we have that one in common Creativity.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.
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I'm your friend Samberine Everose

Thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" 
And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece
 In Play With The Storm  (E)
the song of a bird in the rain
#1984858 by Storm Writer
that I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Birds - one of the creatures that really need a shade in times of storm, because as we may see, they are helpless, small and weak in that time. But some birds are strong and brave, just like the character of that bird in your piece, struggling, but he dance and play with the storm.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title - it hook me, I can relate the storm to problems and trials, so in play with the storm, for me struggling but facing every problems with faith, courage and hope.
Imagery - just like the given title, playing - your crafted words is clever, you play with it, short lines and vivid, reminds me of a bird, struggling to problems but dancing to cope on it.
I liked the character that you build on that bird.
Rhyme and Rhythm- I liked the rhythm, but I've just noticed that there are two lines that are not rhyming.
Found on the third stanza, it maybe perfect if you can rhyme the two lines

*Question*My Doubts and Suggestions

I didn't see any word that can distract the flow.
I just wonder why you didn't use any capital letters, even only on the first letter of every stanza.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A nice piece.
We experienced rainy season here in our country after summer, and I've noticed that some of the birds when rain is falling, they waited the rain to stop, they try to have a shade on every roof ceilings on houses here, then after the rain, that's the time they will fly to go in their nest.
But, I like the character of the bird on your piece, it didn't quit even a terrible storm can knock him down, until it reach his/her nest home.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

Samberine - The Garden Fairy
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 Building On Minecraft  (E)
Acrostic poem, 19 lines, 94 words
#1984860 by Red Rose
that I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste *Smile* .

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Minecraft- Every craft is an Art, its a passion, if we liked and loved our work, then its already our passion, because thru involving on it, we acquired knowledge or wisdom in which school, academics didn't teach, its just only through our experience.
Experience is the best teacher.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title - it hook me, title is the enticing part of a piece, I am intrigue on the word mine craft.
Imagery - Very vivid, I easily grasp because its light, and it creates a friendly tone, it reminds me of a nursery rhyme.
Rhyme and Rhythm -well done in using acrostic form

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow,
And no doubt arise.
Just only spacing, maybe you can use the pattern on how the title was spaced on your piece, to easily distinguish that it is an acrostic, or you can also bolded the first letter of every line.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A nice piece. A light piece but you portrayed it well.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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 Flowers' Night Tears  (E)
What dreams do flowers dreamt at night?
#1752346 by GERVIC 🐉 WDC Dragon Vale
I've found in your Portfolio.
I’m your friend Samberine Everose

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Flowers have different beauty and we also see different characters in them, but flowers are flowers-the beauty of every plant, they have weakness, and with a harsh hold, will make them fall in their throne.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

Title - it hook me, its a part of the beauty of nature-plants, as I've said, I liked to read nature.
Imagery -in depth, I just see this as weakness and characters of flowers, and the possibility that scares them in every nightmares.
Rhyme and Rhythm - free verse and it blends with the tone.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINES:

Why had their faces become wet
After teardrops fell from their places?

Flowers as we can see in their character, they are compassionate.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
And no doubt arise.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A very nice piece.
Flowers are the blossom of every plants, having their own beauty and character,
But they are all the same as soft and sympathetic.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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Review of Glimpse to Nature  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A pleasant hour Gervic !, *Smile*

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so I want to shower you, by giving you reviews this month of April.
I’ve spotted one of your piece
 Glimpse to Nature  (E)
Imagine the beauty of nature...
#1780903 by GERVIC 🐉 WDC Dragon Vale
that I've found in your Portfolio.
I’m your friend Samberine Everose

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Beauty of nature, one of our pleasure, to behold the wondrously creation by our loving God. There’s nothing can compare in every joy we felt, upon mesmerizing His creation .

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

Title–The title hook me, I always liked nature to read, one of my favorite and the closest thing in my heart.
Imagery - its vivid, and clear, the weaved words which pertain to nature took me in a magnificent imagery of yours.
Rhyme and Rhythm –A free verse and it blends with the flow.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE STANZA:

Dandelions followed the wind
Blow mountains, o’er streams.
So light and free, as free as it seemed,
And no one knew to where it destined.

Lovely- the verse took me in a sudden floating,
Because, the imagery is good and light like a warm breeze.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I just have thought on some words,
These are just my opinion and impression
It may varies to others.

On the third line
The stagnant lake, like blanket laid.
The word “stagnant”
A stagnant water can be a favorite hangout/place by mosquitoes.
They usually used that word – stagnant and they always linked to mosquitoes,
Maybe you want to change it.
How about “still” or “peaceful”
Have the same meaning on the word stagnant but, this will appeal more in depth and firm.

On the fifth line
The clean river at my sight,
The word “clean” it just seems wordy and not satisfy me,
maybe you want to add more adjective word to be more clarifying in the imagery.
how clean is it? That's what I think,

The line
Those big trees, over my head
I think this that “those trees are just above your head,”
Maybe you want to change the line“over my head.”
How about
Those big trees, where my sightful reach

And the line
On their emerald crowns, there sing the birds
The line“there sing the birds”

Where, those birds sing.


 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A nice piece.
There are some words to be polished to shine its real beauty, like nature, the more we glimpse on it, the more we see its beauty to understand.
Nature is one of the gifts from God, one of His blessings to us.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future
Until next time.

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Review of Would We Feel?  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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so I want to shower you, by giving you reviews in this month of April.
I’ve spotted one of your piece
 Glimpse to Nature  (E)
Imagine the beauty of nature...
#1780903 by GERVIC 🐉 WDC Dragon Vale
I've found in your Portfolio.
I’m your friend Samberine Everose

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
You’re right, we don’t feel the sweetness in all His goodness if we don’t experience the negative or uncertainty of life.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

Title - The captivating part of a piece, it’s the one that every reader determined first before they enter to the piece, and the given title allures me.
Imagery - its vivid, and clear, every line creates a deeper meaning and there's an attached wisdom, in-depth.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINE:

All are my favorite, all have given me something that I would think and have a reflection.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
And no doubt arise.
Just only the two last line that doesn’t rhyme.
And spacing to every two lines, that emphasize an idea, to give and to add more impact to every stated wisdom.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
An inspiring piece.
A simple prayer, in which everyline tells that God loved every one of us, and His always fair,and had perfectly planned everything.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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Review of Freefall  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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It's my pleasure for requesting me to give a review on your piece
Freefall  (13+)
On the other side of the world is the perfect place for me to skydive.
#1985374 by Moarzjasac

I'm your friend Samberine Everose .

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Love for me is giving all we can, for the benefit of our love one, without denying our selves, because how can we give our love, if we don't have even a few love in our self, there should always have a balance.
But when I think our Lord, who died and sacrificed Himself for the benefit of mankind-to forgive us in our sin, this is indeed true and the greatness of all. For me, this is so unfair to the one who sacrificed.
But if ever Dolores would never have that kind of thinking to their problem, is his decision would change?
Maybe it depends also on the character/personality of the girl and the depth of her love to the man, because if Dolores have different perspective on circumstances, and if he really love the man, then she would accept him whoever he is or whatever storm they were going through.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

Plot and Format - My first impression in your story at first glance is enticing, because I know it’s easily to reach, and I liked also the title. It pertains to the emotion that stand on the main character.
A trial of every couple to test their love if its true.
Setting - the setting is good, you hold me and let me in your story, and I felt the emotions which the main character gone through.
Length - I don't usually like long story specially if every paragraph tells the same, it will seems redundant. Your story is not too long and not too short, but even if its too long, I didn’t noticed it because you hold my attention until I end, and it creates an impact.
Grammar and punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
Dialogue - I love the dialogue, and the slowly emotional drama attached in every crafted word.

*Heart* LINE THAT STICK ON MY MIND :

"her happiness is more important to me than everything else in the world."

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A Great piece.
Love is sacrificing our own happiness for the sake of our love one, Love indeed is not selfish, but we should also think if he/she is worthy for our sacrifices.
Every decision that we make, should be our choice.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Thanks for sharing your piece. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing
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Review of Chapter 3  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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 Chapter 3  (18+)
Whats goin on with Regina now?
#1963259 by 32Queen
I've found in your Portfolio.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose


I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This was about life we journey in everyday.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

Plot and format - my first impression in your story at first glance is enticing, because the first paragraph was easily to understand, although I just have doubt in the proper pharagraphing but still its appeal to me.
Setting - the setting is good, you hold me and let me in and a part of your story, and I felt emotions which Regina's going through.

Length - I don't usually like long story specially if every paragraphs tells the same, it will seems redundant. Your story is not too long and not too short.

Grammar and Punctuation -
First paragraph - I'm standing at my bus stop waiting for the bus so I can go to work.
The word "my" there beside the bus stop, if there is the word my in there, I just think that you are the owner of the bus stop. You might mean standing at this bus stop.
Sixth paragraph - theres always something with you.
Theres- there's

Dialogue - I love dialogue, it makes the piece more enticing to read.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A nice piece. That needs to be continued.

We are the one who Walks in our Life's Journey.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Thanks for sharing your piece.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing on it.
Until next time.

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