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#4158888

Review of The Real Santa

Review by Samberine Everose

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi luvleepoet

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I'm Samberine Everose

your little garden fairy friend here in this wonderful and colorful world of WDC.

and I'm here to give you a review as part of the Rising Star Member to Member Reviews.

I'm not expert in reviewing, These are just only my humble opinions who just like to read pieces and bits of everyone.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

THE TITLE-
While I'm flapping my little wings into your beautiful home-folio,and scrolling items in your garden of poems, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-

its a poetry- I love poetry, I'm a poetry addict.

its about Santa, and it reminds me about Santa Claus

I like Santa Claus, not just because he give gifts but one of the symbol of Christmas, and Christmas is the wonderful day of the year, where lots of fun and excitement.

The title is an eye catching, and it gives a good and fun imagery, and giving the reader an eager to know who is the real Santa
Good job in hooking a reader.

THE BODY-
This is a good example, that Santa symbolizes of the one we love, and its good that your Santa is your best friend-doggie.
I like how the lines are being rhyme at the end, even if there are smooth less reading when you stay closer to the lines, it doesn't affect the fluently, because the given imagery is good.

FAVORITE LINE-
The spirit of Christmas is ours to keep -

Over all you did a good job in this one.
Thank you for sharing and for the enjoyment in reading it.

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4158885

Review of Night of Halloween

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi *Jenny*

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I'm Samberine Everose

your little garden fairy friend here in this wonderful and colorful world of WDC.

and I'm here to give you a review as part of the Rising Star Member to Member Reviews.

I'm not expert in reviewing, These are just only my humble opinions who just like to read pieces and bits of everyone.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

THE TITLE-
While I'm flapping my little wings into your beautiful home-folio, and scrolling items in your poemfoldo, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-

its a poetry- I love poetry.

The title is an eye catching, and it gives a good and fun imagery, especially now that the month of Halloween is approaching. My mind begin to imagined the night of spooky and hunterous and ghostrous.
Good job in hooking a reader.

THE BODY-
I can say that the captivating part of the given body of this piece is the given or created imagery on it.
Words are fluently, and they are fit in each other. The witch, zombies, graveyard, goblins, ghouls and ghost are always a part of Halloween. I am not disappointed on my expectation from the given title. It talks about the fun, during the Halloween season.

Congratulations! the Awardicon deserves well!!!

COMMENTS AND SUGGESTION-

I am not expert in Grammar, but I can say that I can't find words that can distract the flow and emotion.
By the way,did you intend to add the letter a in the word graveyard?
It's just ok, it makes the piece to be more fun, and playful, like the word spooktacular.

Over all you did a good job in this one.
Thank you for sharing and for the enjoyment in reading it.

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4156244

Review of God Knows and Sees All.

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi jackneigut

Greetings!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your little garden fairy friend here in WDC, and I'm here to give you a review.

I came across to your Home-folio, while I'm flapping my little wings into the review section searching for something to review and find out this piece of yours.

I'm not expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble thoughts and opinions, who just like to read pieces and bits of everyone. Please try to chew and just ignore, if doesn't fit to your taste.

THE TITLE-
Most items that enticed me to read is poetry because I'm a poetry addict, but the given title of your piece hooked me. Why because it stated about God here, and the given statement is true.
that God knows and sees all, because He is the Creator of all.
The Creator knows and sees even the tiniest part of his/her creation and knows its unique purpose why he/she created that thing.
Every creation is unique on the sight of a Creator.

Good job in hooking a reader.

THE BODY -
Honestly, my first impression is long, but when I begin to read it, I don't know what keeps me intact to it, until suddenly I already reach the end part.
That means that its entertaining to read.
Every part or situation that was given in the story is need until I understand what the whole piece means, and its reflection in me as a reader.
Good description of character in the story, I like also that you added some things that are seems to be miracles. Miracles can attract reader and give the reader eager to know, what is it, specially on the last part.
Good job.

Comments and Suggestion.
I don't have any comment, I think the story is vivid, the written words are easily understand and its for everyone.

I have just only one doubt, maybe you just forgot.
When we addressed to our God it should be in capital letter, like

be broken for he is our Father in spirit
Sea for his chosen people....

As other piece that is about the goodness and how God manifest to our lives, this piece is truly a blessing and inspirational to every reader.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and looking forward to read again more of your inspirational writings.

Regards and Have a Great day!!!!

Samberine Sig.

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#4155091

Review of What is considered success?

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Survivor48

First of all I would like to greet you a Happy WDC Month!, and I'm Samberine Everose

your little fairy friend and fans here in WDC, and I'm here to give you a review to your one of your items.
It happens that my little wings brought me into your Portfolio, and found this piece of yours.

I'm not an expert in reviewing, this are just only my personal thoughts and humble opinion, who likes to read writings of other specially poetry, please try to chew, and ignore it if doesn't fit to your taste.

THE TITLE
I can say that the title is interesting, because you used an inquiring tone, anyone would like to know what will be considered as a success?
You did job in hooking me as a reader.

THE BODY
I like the meaning on this piece of yours.
You stated all, where can we find success, or different views of success.
But the main meaning of success as the last stanza stated is responsibility with self respect.

I will not comment any grammar issues, because I see that there are no words that can distract the flow, and even a thought on any of the lines.
I like how it was created.

Overall, Thanks again for sharing this piece of yours,
you are always giving an inspiring piece.

Just always remember, to keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards

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#4155024

Review of Happy Birthday

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi Juliet Faith

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

HAPPY WDC Month!

I'm Samberine Everose

your little fairy friend here in WDC.

and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC Month!.

By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being a registered Author here in the wonderful world of Writing Dot Com.

I'm not an expert reviewer, this is just only my humble opinion and thoughts, who just like to read poetry.
Please try to chew and disregard it if doesn't fit to your taste.

The TITLE-
While I'm flapping my little wings into your homefolio, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-

its a poetry- I love poetry, I'm a poetry addict.

the title seems to be fit on this WDC month affair,
because its WDC birthday.

I like the color of the font, it fits to the word.

Good job, because the title hooked me.

A title in poetry should be captivating to attract or pulls a reader, because a title serve as the door before going to the main body.

The BODY-
The given body is quite simple, but the messages are all in there. Glitters, sparkles, smiles, fun, grown, celebration, year.
Those are the words we see and be in times of birthdays.
I think and say that you expressed and described well a birthday here. Full of fun.

I think also that this can be a nice greetings, attached to a card.

The only thing that I think you missed is using Punctuation marks.
Punctuation makes word to be moving, they are need in poetry, sometimes they help to stimulate emotions.

Over all, this piece is good, the only thing you missed is using puntuation.

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4153695

Review of The Trouble With Listening

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Dan Sturn

HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSAY!

I'm Samberine Everose

your little fairy friend and one of your fans here in WDC.

.
and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC Anniversary!.

I'm not expert in reviewing, please forgive me if I do some mess.

The TITLE-
While I'm flapping my tiny wings into your beautiful home-folio, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-

its a poetry- I love poetry.

and have a captivating title, the word trouble and listening pulls my attention, the title have an interesting effect, made me eager to know, what's the trouble in listening, because I'm the person who always likes to listen.
Good job in hooking a reader.

The BODY-
I think you just reflect and stated there in your piece the way our thoughts went on while we listen.

I like how the words was written and how they was in their form, I can say that they are moving and not boring and this can make you think a lot of deep.
The given emotion is good also, that's the way we feel while we are listening,

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4153678

Review of RAINING IN THE GARDEN

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSAY!

I'm Samberine Everose

your little fairy friend here in WDC.

and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC Anniversary!.

By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being one of the Newbies Showcased this September., that's where I found your portfolio.

I'm not expert in reviewing, please forgive me if I do some mess.

The TITLE-
While I'm spreading my little wings into your beautiful home-folio, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-

its a poetry- I love poetry.

its about nature- I'm a nature lover.

and have a captivating title in which the given imagery is refreshing. I imagined a garden drenched by the rain.
Good job in attracting a reader.

The BODY-
I can say its beautiful, the given emotion is good. Lively and you did well in describing a garden where rain is falling.
I've been like a fairy playing with the rain in the garden with those daisy flowers closing their buds upon reading your piece.

"But after rain there's a rainbow's in sight"

Do we need to add s their in the rainbow word, it just distract the rhythm while reading it
and Sometimes the need of punctuation can make and entice a poem to be more lively and moving.

Over all, this piece is good, I liked it. Very Clever.

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4153175

Review of I NEED A DIVORCE FROM U

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Donkey Hoetay

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSAY!

I'm Samberine Everose

your little fairy friend here in WDC.

and I'm here to give you review as my

to you on this awesome WDC Anniversary!.

By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being one of the Newbies Showcased this September., that's where I found your portfolio.

The title seems to be interesting, frank, vulgar, comical, using the letter U, but more importantly this is most of today's main topic. Good job

in attracting a reader.

The BODY-
My first impression is- too long, but when I begin to read it, the mood is light, yes its a comedy, and made me

.
Very clever in using letters Q and U to divorce..?

Over all, this piece is good, I liked it. Very Clever.
I'm not good in Grammar searching but I can say that I didn't find any words that can distract the flow.

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.

Regards,

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#4152788

Review of Poetsvision

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi fyn

Happy WDC Anniversary!!

I'm Samberine Everose

one of your friends and fans here in Writing Dot Com.
and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you this awesome WDC Anniversary.

The TITLE-
The first thing that did hook me when I visited your poetfolio to look for something to review is the given title of this piece of yours.
Poetsvision- I liked the combination of these two words, every poet have different visions, the way they see things or reflect things.
I just curious if you intently wrote it in that way, no space between the two words Poets and vision.
Anyway it hook me, it's a kind of interesting.
I liked also the word doodle on the short description there, in arts/architecture, for me doodle are simple or circular and moving.
That made me look on it as interesting.

Good job

in alluring a reader.

The BODY-
Wow! All lines are true about a poet.
You hit every line on what I(we) feel.
Maybe you can add more lines using others senses like the touch, the smell etc.
But anyway, the way how it was crafted- short makes this piece extremely beautiful, because you make/let the reader get (I) into deep thoughts.

Until next reviewing, and keep smiling

while stay in Writing and Reviewing.

Regards
Samberine Sig.

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#4152139

Review of The Seed

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Beautiful Candy

Happy 15 WDC Anniversary my friend. !!

How are you?.

I'm Samberine Everose

one of your friends and fans here in WDC and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC celebration.

The TITLE-
The first thing that did hook me while visiting your port-home and looking for something new to review is the given title of your piece.
Simple and one word but it creates a lot of meanings, and that hook me to find out.

Second the given imagery while looking at the given title.
Seed at first are tiny and small but they could grow and can be a big thing.

The BODY-
The way you crafted the words attracted me, the way how the lines are created gives an impact, it can help to stimulate the emotions of the piece.

Maybe, this is about a word or a promise that didn't fulfilled.
or a character or a deeds that at first its hard to understand but just only reach the meaning at the end.

I'm not good in detecting Grammar error, but for me the words that are used are perfect.

maybe, you can just only adjust the size of the letters, for a clearer reading.
That's the only thing that distract the flow while I am looking on it.

Over all, I can say that I like and love this piece of yours.
Until next reviewing again!, and always keep on smiling while stay on writing/reviewing.

Regards

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#4152134

Review of A link to joy

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with Chatterbox Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac

Happy 15 WDC Anniversary my friend. !!

How are you?.

I'm Samberine Everose

one of your friends and fans here in WDC and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC celebration.

The Title-
The first thing that did hook me while visiting your port-home and looking for something to review is the given title of your piece.

Most of us looking for joy, and some don't know where we can find joy.
I just think that the given title creates a deep imagery about joy,
and as I read at the given simple description, it made me curious on the word peace of mind that was stated there because it links to the word joy on the given title.
Good job

in alluring a reader.

The Body-
I like the first stanza, They are all on the way of asking, it creates on emotion of weary ness.
While I go along the lines, the weary ness that I reflect on the first stanza turns to be hope and peace, being with family, on our home, it always creates a piece of mind in us.
I didn't find any word that can distract the good flow of the piece.

Over all, I can say that I like this piece of yours, it reminds me that we can find joy when we have piece of mind in our family specially unto the simple and little one.

Until next reviewing again!, and always keep on smiling while stay on writing/reviewing.

Regards

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#4152130

Review of Lazing with Butterflies

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi The prodigal son returns 2023.

Happy 15 WDC Anniversary my friend. !!
How are you?.

I'm Samberine Everose

one of your friends and fans here in WDC and I'm here to give you a review as my

to you on this awesome WDC celebration.

The first thing that did hook me while visiting your port-home and looking for something to review is the given title of your piece.
First its about nature, I love Nature.
Second the given imagination while looking at the given title, maybe the word Lazing, It reminds me of an autumn afternoon, they usually attached that word.
Lazy afternoon, because after-lunch that was afternoon usually at rest or at peace.
Lazing with the butterflies, maybe by looking at the butterflies we are at peace and at rest.
Nice choice of word.

The body - The mood is good, I can't find any word that can distract the good flow of emotions on the piece, it says and like the given title,
I think every line would described the given title but my favorite is-
"Drink from the morning dew"
I just imagined a morning having a breakfast before the sunrise.

Over all, I can say that I like this piece of yours, not only that creates a good mood, but it take me into a resting imagination.

Until next reviewing again!, and always keep on smiling while stay on writing/reviewing.

Regards

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#4152080

Review of The Cat With Ten Lives

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Alexi

First of all, HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSARY!!
I'm Samberine Everose

one of your friends and fans here in WDC,

and I'm here to give you a review as my

on this awesome WDC Anniversary

The first thing that allure me to this piece of yours as I visited in your home-Port is:

first is that a Poetry,

Well, I love poetry,

second it's about cat, my favorite pet, I like pussycat.

third the given title is on eye catching, we all know that cats have ten lives, and that always true and creates a mystery to me.
Good job

in attracting a reader.

The first that I noticed is the shape of the poem, I like how it was created short,simple, but when I begin reading it, it creates a sad mood.
There is a dramatic flow of words, from the start until it reach the end.

The only thing that makes me

and doubting when I reached the last part is the word "wink" you used.

the definition of wink for me is that "closing then opening the eye quickly",
a sign of trust, a good luck, or an approve.

I try to find a one word that would best describe "eye closed silently", or maybe "give his one last breath".
I just think that the word "wink" you used disturbed the mood of the poem while reaching the last word.

But over all you did a good job, just only the last part, that I gave a comment.

Until next reviewing again!, and always keep on smiling while staying on writing/reviewing.

Regards,

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#4058449

Review of Twinkling lights

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: E

| (3.5)

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Hi Nagisa

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
And its my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or an expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-
The one that hooks me to choose this piece of your in Portfolio is the word Twinkling lights,
It reminds me of stars at night and during Christmas, it always reflects in my eyes.

THE BODY
As I read the body, This is all about a memory of how the lights brought twinkle in her eyes one before. And I liked how you portrayed it, I liked the flow of emotions.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
There are some words that distract me while reading it.

somehow sooth this pain
you might mean soothe

Other then that waking up to that at 3:00 in the morning, not so great.
I can't figure out this line.
Try to re construct it,

"He used to always love Christmas lights.

You might mean
He always used to love Christmas lights.

Now, all warm and alone
painful memory of christmas decorating

decorating -decoration

and finally was able to back my dark void.

you might mean
and finally, I was able to return back to my dark void

MY FINAL QUOTE
Twinkling lights dancing in her eyes, create a sad tune that can be felt.

Thanks for sharing this piece of yours, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4058438

Review of Bittersweet Memories

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: E

| (3.5)

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Hi Nagisa

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

THE TITLE-
The given title creates already an imagery of Nostalgy, I imagined a memory with the blending of Joy and Sorrow in the word bittersweet you stated.
That makes the title to be attracted, this is not the first thing that I encounter the title, but as it was state there it creates a sad imagery or as I've said Nostalgy.

THE BODY
The first thing that attracts me is the way you delivered it in the correct rhythm and the breaking of lines, I link this to a lyrics of a song.
The words you weaved are good also, and it evokes emotions, like pain, wanting, or longing.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:

They said that every sentence begins a capital letter.
Why on the first line of the first stanza, you didn’t already start in capital letter?
Is this intended?
I’d like to know why.

In the most commencements.
You might mean commencement.

We only have only one commencement, specially using the adjective most, it relate this already to the most or great commencement.

Sweet blossomed loved- what do you mean in here?
The past experienced?
You might mean sweet blossom of love
And caring is my deep desire.

And I noticed that your used many such,
It seems to irritate for using many such.

MY FINAL QUOTE
Memories even if bittersweet, it still a part of us to treasure.

Well Done!

Thanks for sharing this piece of yours, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4058393

Review of Love Hue

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

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Hi VictoriaMcCullough

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the review as part of the Package gifted to you by writingbyjazzy .

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-

The title is good, I like the word hue that blend on the word love, hue means colors, not only colors, it say also the harmony of colors. And love consist of different hue or harmony that when it properly mix and blend can create a magnificent views and awesome feelings.

THE BODY

The words that you weaved creates a good imagery, and that evokes emotions, I feel pain, something a little bit of hatred, I also see jealous, but more in pain and acceptance.
This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked how you did the rhythm, its in free verse like narrating, and expressing emotions.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow
Just adding some spacing to make it clearer, spacing can help to stimulate the emotions also.
The breaking of lines are good.

MY FINAL QUOTE
Hues in love can be different, but they are still colors that added to someone to be alive.
Well Done!

Thanks for sharing this piece of yours, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4058388

Review of A Note To Pray

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hi VictoriaMcCullough

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the review as part of the Package gift to you by writingbyjazzy .

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-

What enchant me about the title is the word Pray, which creates a good impression, everything,a writing,a simple note that will be sending to Him are all great, pure, and blessed.
Because Pray is an act of communicating to the One who created us.

THE BODY
What a beautiful thanks giving Prayer, specifying all the Great things that each one of us received from Him. Every one have their own act of thanks giving, every country too, and as you did in your Thanks giving Prayer that stated all the bountiful gifts.
Nice imagery especially adding the beliefs and kind of thanks giving of our folk fathers.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow
I just have a thought on line
With the wind whistling in the back tree

There is a missing word between back tree.,
I cant’ figure it out this two words
You might mean
With the wind whistling in the back of trees
Wind whistle creates when many trees and leaves are there.

MY FINAL QUOTE
In every thanksgiving it all started with a Pray.
Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4056070

Review of A Special Piece of Pie

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is my last review from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
- The title is good, pies are sweet and it taste delicious, the title creates a good imagery, and any one would like to pick it, who would not like to have a piece of pie specially if that is special.

THE BODY

PLOT -
The plot of the story is about Journey and the good Samaritans in our Journey.
There is good and bad in traveling, we encountered many things, so a good Samaritans/friends, who are helpful, cheerful, hospitable are needs in our way to inspire us to continue the traveling.

IMAGERY -The well proper choose of words and how they blend them and link to the other words can create a good imagery, and will stimulate the emotions. This will make the piece to be enjoyable to read.
The story is an adventure and the Author took me to that venture, so I can say that this creates a good and vivid imagery, and evokes a pleasant emotions while journeying also to its adventure.
The first part did create an emotion like worriedness, waiting for the next thing to come because of the accident they met, but at the end, that accident came to be a blessing in disguise because they have the time to rest for a while and have that special piece of pie.

CHARACTERS and the POV-
– The Point of view is on the first person, and mostly the way that the main characters described and showed is about what they had or adventure in their travels. Even if it doesn’t talks about the characters personality, it shows up their through his thought and gesture.

DIALOGUE-
-The proper quantity of dialogue will makes the story to be good also, this is the part where in the characters are moving and exchanging their views through their dialogue, this is where we get to know also the characters.

LENGTH AND FLOW-
The length of the story is just fine. Honestly I liked short stories that are short or like a flash fiction specially if that story is compact and blew me at the end, what I mean It didn’t expect that’s its end, as I’ve said the story is fine, and the incidents are needed in the story and no abrupt that I met.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
In our journey, its still nice to know person who are friendly Samaritans who helps us in our venture.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.

Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time my friend.

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#4056063

Review of Image of a dry leaf blowing in the wind

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
The title seems to be poetic, this reminds me of the Autumn season, where in leaf were fall from boughs where the wind blows and carry the dry leaf, dusty, because of the coming winter.
Maybe you can already omit or not to include the word image, because the blending of words A dry leaf blowing in the wind it creates an imagery already, and it will stir different images to the readers.

THE BODY
This is a letter written in prose, and I liked how the way was written, the thing that I perceived about this letter-prose is about what legacy of life really means- and I liked the next words that defines this
That in our simple way we can touched each other’s life in our simple way, giving them inspiration, a pleasant memory and maybe unpleasant, but I will not recognize the unpleasant, just making a pleasant memory to them even if it’s that is tiny or in simple way.
The flow of paragraphs are good also, continuously and no abrupt and disrupt, because the weaved of words are fine and easy to understand, there some words that are hard but when it blends to light words it makes it balance.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

I just lost on this part
I sure as hell hope I won’t have to wait till them to know;

What do you mean by this?

are you feel like having frenzy like hell while waiting that day?
I just think there is a missing word here, or maybe comma, to make the statement clearly.

A QUOTE FROM THE PROSE AND MY FAVORITE

The legacy of life is the thousands of tiny places where we touched each other's lives,

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.

Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time.

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#4055549

Review of A single River Stone

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my Appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
The thing that I liked in this piece of yours is how the title gave me a thought and it creates good imagery. Most river stone are black and they are really shine and clean, maybe just because they always in the water, and the water have the capacity or ability to make them shine.
I liked that you described what is this kind of stone by using the word river, and the adjective single, it helps to direct on ones view and thought of that certain kind of stone.

THE BODY
The imagery is good, I can say that you crafted well and the words were properly blended. I liked how you showed here the single river stone, where it came from and how it was formed, its journey, until a little girl’s attention was hook on its hidden splendid beauty and shine.
This is metaphorical, and I liked how you delivered it in the manner of a light-literal.
The spacing, form and breaking of lines are in good and properly done also, the space gives the reader to pause for a while and a chance to imagine and think, it gives the item into a slow phase in motion to digest properly the hidden meaning.

MY THOUGHT
I just perceived this about life’s journey, we are all the same in His eye, we may face life’s struggle/ uncertainty but all this are part of His plan, to make us grow and polish as the way he planned, until we will return back to Him.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES
Time and miles

Have left their mark,

Changing just a rock

Into a precious stone.

very inspiring,
I just think that we are all precious stone.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4055530

Review of Morning

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
Morning always comes first before its said to be a day, Morning is always fresh and new.
The given title is simple, it is usual, but the thing that I liked is that it creates a good imagery, as well as it stir a good and inspiring feeling.

THE BODY
All the words that you used were blend and it creates a good image, every line links to the next line, one should finish the read to understand it.
While the beauty of the morning it shows here beyond the words that it did stimulate emotions making the reader experience to see the other face of a morning and appreciate too that part of a day.
I liked also the way it flow, just like the dawn when the sun slowly spreading it rays and the light begins to say it’s a beautiful morning.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

LINES THAT INSPIRED ME MOST
Now the forest sips
The morning slowly
Waiting for the sun’s
Gentle fingers

Well Done!

Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4055299

Review of Is That All THere Is

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you in return for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-
As I searching for something to review in your Portfolio,
I was caught up in this piece of yours, for me the title creates an intriguing effect, Asking or demanding of something, it is like the other words of Why?

THE BODY
First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the story.

PLOT -
The story is about a relationship, a long distance relationship/love affair that sadly at the end they didn't conquest mostly one of the problems encountered in a long distance love affair.

IMAGERY -The correct chosen of words, as well as proper blending can create a good imagery and can stir the emotion of the reader. The words you used are in general, I mean easy to understand, and without any abrupt, it was properly and softly showed even when the incident or the setting change.

CHARACTERS and the POV-
– The Point of View is in the first person, and that makes the story to be good, because when using the first point of view, the reader will be like in the shoes of the character’s view, to know the characters thought and to feel the character’s emotion, allowing to create a sympathy to the character created. That explain often that some reader will love the Character created because of how the Author shows and introduced it to the reader.

DIALOGUE-
- I liked dialogue in a story, this is where when the characters have the chance to talk or move, just like seeing a scene in a movie. For me this is also the breathing part of the story, but over use of dialogue can make the story choppy, so dialogue should be given enough and use it properly or just only add when it really needs.
The dialogue that were used on the story are good, it's in fine quantity, and it really needs in the story, it makes the story alive and moving.

LENGTH AND FLOW-
This is one also of the important part of a story, Sometimes a short story can be so boring if the imagery are too blur and words are not understandable and how the author delivered also the incident or sequence, but there are long story that the reader think that its short and they crave for more, because of how the Author's show it.
My first impression on the story is long, but when I begin to read it, it fasten me on my seat, until I didn't noticed that I already finished my reading, and that I concluded that its short, and wish to read more.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
We wouldn't know or appreciate the other shades, if we didn't feel its contrast.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time.

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#4053569

Review of Your here might as well say Hello.

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi Osyrus

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
Thanks for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

and its my pleasure to give my Gift Review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing.
Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-
A title always been said the one that every reader give their first glance, it serves as the door, before the reader will decide to enter or just ignore or pass it on to that item, so title should have an alluring effect, so that the reader would hook to read the body of the item.
The given title, is like a friendly statement or quote. The word Hello is the captivating word on the statement, as we can see if we say Hello, we are giving a friendly greetings that anyone will return that friendly approach also. So I can say that the title is nice.
I also think if you would like to tighten it,
Like
"You might say Hello"
"You might like to say Hello"

THE BODY
First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the item.

I think this is a friendly Welcome Greetings to visitors, the words that you crafted are very friendly, interesting, and I really feel your energy. I liked also the emoticons you include it makes the written work to be more light and friendly.
It would be better if you will intend this to be a Guest book. I liked the idea about sharing being still a Newbie, or newbie memories, many have a memory about being a newbie and it’s so fun and great.
You can transfer or make this to be in a Forum or the In and out, so that it may allow that one can share their newbie experience and add their names also any one that will visit your Portfolio.
I’m excited to share my experience if that so.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:

Second paragraph-
Osyrus is my hanler/screen- name

Osyrus is my handle/screen-name

I wish there was an interesting story to it,but it was

I wish there was an interesting story about it, but it was

But it was a nickname that came out of nowhere and just stuck.
But it was a nickname that came out of nowhere and just stick and stuck. (to make it comical)

Sixth paragraph
Making new friends and possibly mentor-ish friends that she help me improve and learn new things
Using the noun She- you should change and use in general or for every body.
Making new friends and possibly mentor-ish friends that would help me improve and learn new things.

FINAL THOUGHT
All in all this is a Great start here my friend,
Let me know if you would like to know how to transfer this to the in and out,
So that your reader may have the chance to answer that things you’ve ask.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4052195

Review of Whispering Walls

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with

Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Nixie

Greetings!!!!
This is the Rising Star Member to Member Reviews!!
and I chose this item of yours while roaming around in your Portfolio to give my gift review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore if doesn't fit.

First of all, I would like to concentrate most and discuss on the thoughts and feelings that gives the story.

THE TITLE -
While searching for something to review in your wonderful Storyfolio, I was just caught by this piece of yours to pick it and have a read a give my review.
It just fascinates me, and leads me to think what is all about the Whispering Walls, very intriguing, My first impression is this is a magical or fairy tale, that words speak or spoke, or a Ghost buried in the wall so they are whispering.

THE BODY

PLOT – The story is about an incident or accident happens in the Friday night the 13th, where in Flint with his friends were having fun and lounge in the stated room, but there is an accident happen that leads his friend to be buried to the said building or room, and only Flint survived, so every Friday the 13th on that date, Flint was always visited that room to try to retrieve the incident.

CHARACTERS/POV– The story was narrated in the third person, and Flint is the main character, where in the story was focus on it. I liked how you introduced Flint here, by including his personality in how he talked and move, His personality was explained not in the obvious manner. My impression on Flint is a kind of a happy go lucky and irresponsible person.

IMAGERY- When a story have a well-crafted of chosen form of words, it creates a good and vivid imagery that can stir emotions. I think the words that you used are all in general, because it’s easy to understand,
There are lines that are blur, but by combining words that are light, it can balance the thought given and leads to a better understanding.

LENGTH – The length of the story is fine, my first impression is long but as I begin to read it, I’ve been hook already to the story until I reach the final lines, and still crave for more, to continue.

DIALOGUE – Its good that there is a dialogue on the story. I liked dialogue, it can make the characters talk and move, just like watching a scene in mind.

GRAMMAR AND PUNTUATION-
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
I can say that this is a good story, and its a very nice tale for the Halloween.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4051020

Review of Terrifying night in Manchac Swamp

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Jeannie

Greetings!!!!
I chose this item of yours while roaming around in your Portfolio to give my gift review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE - When I return again to your Story folio to search for something to review, this piece of yours grab my attention. I think this is a kind of adventure again, because of the stated place -Swamp, or a Ghost on the swamp, What ever will be, it sounds thrill to me. Well,I would like to find it out.

THE BODY
As I did on my first review while ago, I would like to concentrate more most on my thoughts and feelings about the story.

PLOT - The plot of the story is an adventure,a vacation that leads to devastation. Two lovers or sweetheart having their vacation trip to celebrate Halloween in their friends place, but this vacation was brought them to their nightmares.

IMAGERY - For weaving words to create the sequence of the story, I think you did right in showing it all, it makes me feel that I am a part or one of the characters while reading it.

CHARACTERS- They are only four characters, but you did well in showing or introducing them one by one, through the way they act, their beliefs and their thought.
You introduced them not in vulgar or in the obvious manner, their personality were seen on how they act in the situation.

SETTINGS- just like the character, the setting is good also, they are not obvious too, they are normally been delivered through the activities of the characters.

DIALOGUE- One of the important part of the piece is this- I liked to read story when there is a dialogue, and the correct spacing too of the paragraph. Dialogue can make the story to be lively, and in moving, just like when we watch scene.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION
I just have doubts like in this paragraph-

Lisa, afraid to look away, continued staring through the fog, then blinked. Did she just see a shadow
But all in all thus it a great piece.

look away, continued staring... There is something missing between the word away and continued.
I think of adding a noun "She" there.

On this paragraph-

Pepper began barking like crazy, too. Is he seeing what I'm seeing? When everybody -

Maybe you can change the other verb that you used here,
it just doubles the word.
I think about looking or gaze.

LENGTH AND FLOW- The length of the story is just in proper, and all the incidents are needed and that what makes the flow to be consistent.

FINAL THOUGHT
This is a thrilling story, I liked how you did the incidents and shows the expressions of the characters.It did gave me a goosebumps.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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