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Review of Worthless Angel  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Angels in my Ear *Smile*


A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I’m Samberine Everose your friend here.
And Its my pleasure to give you a thought and impression on one of your nice piece.

Please remember that l'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader .
I hope that you can find something that can be useful.
Just leave it if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Heart* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE:

THE TITLE - When I am searching something to review in your Portfolio, the given title caught my attention. Worthless Angel. My beliefs and impression about angel is there are all guardian and capable and they are not worth to be called worthless Angel,and that hooks me to continue reading your poem.

THE BODY - As I go along and carefully read those beautiful crafted lines,
The first line already evokes emotion, I can feel the sadness, like depriving pride, as I've said angel always seems to be a guardian, but by admitting that the angel here are worthless is too degrading.As I go along to the next line, by lines. I begin to understand who is that angel was telling here.
yes - they are the armies, the soldiers who battles and fight for war to protect people, peace of nation, those are the angels that I begin to see in your poem.
And as already reach the end part, its so sad that most of the angels who fight and died for wars are been sometimes forgotten when years already passed.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION

I didn't see any thing or words here that are not fit.
The Awardicon deserves well. *Thumbsup*

MY FINAL COMMENT :
Battling in the fields are our heroes who protect us and considered as real angels.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*
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In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Survivor *Smile*

Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 
Its my pleasure to give you a review.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - I'm not already a new guest in your Portfolio, so when I enter and try to roam on it. This piece of yours caught my attention, not just because it is in the highlighted corner but the title is very much captivating, giving an impression of sorrow, and pain. I don't usually read dark items because I already know the emotions that attached on it, how every pain torn our hearts, but this item of yours pulled me to get closer.

THE BODY - As I begin to enter to the body of your item, voyaging the words in every lines and its thought. The first sentence captured me already on the first part about "media or about news" that you used. And then the next lines fasten me to continue until I reached in which I didn't noticed that its the end part, because the words you used are easy for me to reach, so the flow while I read it is continuous which makes the imagery in my minds vivid. The created words evokes emotion like pain, sorrowful and missing, so it means that my impression is true.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
And as I reach the ending part, All I can say is this is just a short expression, and a good item, it shows here the longing and love for to our sibling, and to our family.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Jennifer L. Rowlands *Smile*


Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 
and Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions" 
and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gifts.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - As I begin to enter and roam into your Portfolio searching for something to review, this item of yours caught my attention. First the title is very much intriguing - I found it, it was in a metaphorical phrase even if the words used are in the light manner. As Moon and Sun are always have a distance, they still love each other,
without any of them, we could not make a whole day, so each one of them need each other to
form a day, and that impression hook me to enter into your poem.

IMAGERY - As I enter and read carefully the words that you crafted into your poem, I found it has a good imagery, a nice and reachable combination of words can create a vivid imagery, and can evokes emotion. If I was still a kid and read this, my impression would be I'm amaze, because the words you poured drift me to enter and voyage to your piece. As I've said I find it in the metaphorical means.


RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - This is one of the important part of a poem also, the proper use and well balance rhythm of words can evokes emotions, when a poem follows a rhyming pattern it can be pleasing to hear when it read aloud.
I think This piece of yours have no rhyming pattern, but I liked how the piece create the rhyming and the rhythm formed.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
This is a great poetry, one need each other to create a whole.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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NEWBIES CONTEST"Pen me your Quote,and I'll send you Gifts" CLOSED-will resume on December
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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Ryan Monahan *Smile*

A Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army" 

Congratulations for being one of the Spotlight Author on "Angel Review Forum" 
And I’d like you to give a gift review for that.
Sorry it just late delivered. *Blush*

I’m Samberine Everose your friend here.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – As every title should have a captivating effect to capture a prospective reader, because this is the first part in which they give the first peek before entering to the body of the item. This part is where first impression was created and also the expectation.
As I browse for something to review in your Portfolio, this item of yours caught my attention, - The joys of Getting Ready for Prom. Well Prom is one of the exciting part of being teen, specially in highschool.
You are indeed right, that it consist of joys in the preparation, in the practice, in the choosing of what to wear and so on. That’s hook me, because it reminds me, when I was still having my first high school Prom.


IMAGERY – The imagery of an item which is found on the body of the item, can stimulate emotions specially when we used proper combination of words and will create a vivid imagery.
The words you crafted are vivid for me, I liked how they was formed, I liked also how they was written through lines and stanza, this evokes emotion like excitement, and doubtful to have a Prom.
I liked also the activity that was stated in there, it makes the item desirable to read.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM – This is a free verse, free narrating type, no rhyming pattern that follows.
And I liked how it was formed, the excitement is in there.


MY FINAL COMMENT :
Promenade is one of the activity that tells about the enjoyment of being a teen,
so we should do things that makes a good and give a treasured moment in us.


Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
It’s within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,*Pencil*
And always share this wonderful talent you have.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5


Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of Rita Rode Away  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Sunny Day *Smile*


*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


A Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army" 


Congratulations for being one of the Spotlight Author on "Angel Review Forum"  this July.
And I’d like you to give a gift review for that.
Sorry it just delivered late. *Blush*

I’m Samberine Everose your friend here.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE –The title is one of the important element of an item/story, this is where the reader give their first glance before reading an item, this is the part in which we determine if its an enticing to read,this is the part also wherein we create our first impression and expectation.
The given title of your story hook me, I just like the created name of your character Rita Rode, it’s just rhyme, like Bunny Bugs, Mickey Mouse, and other famous characters or if the word rode is a verb, it just made me curious why Rita Rode away, and that’s hook me to find out.

THE BODY – When I begin reading the body of your story, the first part pull me, and fasten me already to be closer, I liked the first word you used to begin- Once-, my impression is some kind of fairy tale. And I didn’t disappointed because the word you used on the story is vivid easy for me to reach, and it attached an adventurous or an action. Rita was a brave girl-that’s I concluded her.
Although for me the story is so short, but I understand that you just follow the rules of the contest and it fit its lenth.

THE ENDING PART – As I reach the last part, all I can say is the story is nice and the flow is good. And I didn’t find words or any doubt that distract the subtle flow of the story.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
Words even just a few, can create a sudden blow to a reader.


Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
It’s within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,*Pencil*
And always share this wonderful talent you have.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of The Need  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour candy *Smile*


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Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions" 
and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gifts.

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - When I begin my step to enter into your Portfolio and browse those static to search for something to review, this piece of yours caught my attention.As every title should have a magnetic element to hook a reader. The stated word is just simple _The Need- but it tells a lot already. My first impression is we have many needs, it depends on us if what we think is the most valuable that we really need. And that hook me to continue to read and to find out.

THE BODY - So from the first sentence that greets me on the body of your item, it draws me already, its good that you used a kind of an asking statement, that makes the reader intrigue what's next, until I didn't notice that my eyes already follow the next line and lines, which creates a vivid imagery in my mind, because the words you crafted are clear and easy for me to reach without any abrupt. Mostly I like those lines/sentence that you used which makes me to ask also- on my own perspective or opinion about what humans do or I as a person's really need.

END PART - As I reach the final part where in the essay have its subtle flow -
I like this sentence which makes me think:

The journey to find again the need which has been subtlety replaced by things we created.

and this sentence

The most important form on earth. A form which makes the earth alive, good and beautiful--people--persons--us--me.

I like how you used the dash on the end part, it gives an impact, and make me to read and comprehend carefully and slowly.


MY FINAL THOUGHT:
We always know what we really need.
Need means to me - being comfortable with, happiness and even fulfillment.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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Review of A musician's life  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Tabitha_G *Smile*


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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 


And thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions" 
Its my pleasure to give you a review as one of its gift.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - As I browse for something to review in your Portfolio, this item of yours caught my attention. As every title should have a magnetic charm that can lure a reader, the word musician hook me,I'm not a musician, I just like music but it intrigues me what is all about the musician's life you would like to tell here.

THE BODY - As I begin to enter to the body of your piece, and read carefully the words that you weaved, The first statement which is dialogue enticed me already,to continue my reading, I liked dialogue in a story, character was observed here and it makes the story moving as like you are watching a movie in mind,and also the words that you used are easily to reach which creates a vivid imagery that makes the flow subtle, until your item took me already to follow its way until I reach the end part.
I liked also some descriptive words you used- it seems harsh or sharp like monster, demon,makes my impression that the story is dark, but its good, because it combines some light words, making the story to be a bit of funny, or amusing.

END PART - As I reach the end part, The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, which made me enjoyed reading it.

MY FINAL THOUGHT:
This is an amusing story, And you did well showing a simple every day life's of most couple of today.Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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NEWBIES CONTEST"Pen me your Quote,and I'll send you Gifts" CLOSED-will resume on December
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Review of Heroes Of The Sky  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour MAGEORGE *Smile*


A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I’m Samberine Everose your friend here.
And this is the last item from my gift package that you've won from the Raffle Game Contest "Invalid Item"  Round 3 -The birthday and tributes.Sorry, if just delivered late. *Blush*

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:


TITLE - Title is one of the important part of a poem, this is the first thing that every first glance should be hook,so title should enticed a prospective reader to enter. I am captivated on the given title of this poem of yours while looking something to review in your Portfolio. As I've mentioned before, I always lure about sky, it gives a good imagery to me, and other things that attached to sky, whether if the clouds, blue sky, flying, birds. It just appealing and the imagery created and emotions that evokes gives a good feeling like peaceful, heaven, light, ethereal. So heroes of the sky, maybe it tells about conqueror, champion.

IMAGERY- When I slowly begin to try to catch every word beginning on the first line, First it was blur for me, I mean the words that you used are vivid, but I’m figuring out it means, as I continue to read, You begin creating slowly an imagery about something that were flying, by the word you used like speed, gravity, forces, engines roar, planes, then that’s the start that I begin to create a view in my mind about battle in the sky, and that’s how I link the given title. And the most thing that I like is the end part, because the tone before that line is formal and serious then when I reach the last part, the emotions created change to a bit of smile, by the word "popcorn" you used.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM- This is a free verse, and I liked the rhythm that was formed.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow. *Thumbsup*
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Battle in the sky is enjoyable to watch, fascinates the viewer, specially if the action was well as it shows.
That’s what I see in your piece. Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1992938 by Not Available.


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Review of A Fall Afternoon  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A pleasant hour riverbedwriter *Smile*

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

*Balloon3**Balloon3**Balloon3* Congratulations !!! for being one of the Member's Showcase on the "Invalid Item" in this month of July.*Balloon3**Balloon3* *Balloon3*

and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of my gifts to you.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - When I begin to look for an item to review on your Portfolio, this piece of yours captivates my attention. As every title should have a magnetic character that can lure a prospective reader. There are two things that I perceived when I glance on the given title, one is the autumn season in an afternoon, and the other is an afternoon that falls or drop down. But I most like the first one that comes to my mind, because as you stated the title, the two combination of words that you used are link, like falls or autumn describe the afternoon, maybe just because of its color, the rays of sun, and its given temperature,and that seems to me a good read.

THE BODY - As I entered to the body of your piece, and read carefully the words that you weaved, on the first paragraph, it entice me on the first line and catches my eyes, because we have the same favorite, but when I already go along the lines, I find it didn't link to the second line.

Fall is my favorite season. Saturday was a stunning day.

I didn't find any relation on this two, which makes me lost and confused.
I think there is a lacking word here, maybe you need a conjunction so that they may link or bind.
Fall is my favorite season and Saturday was a stunning day.

then begin to like the next part of it as I go along to the story, because its vivid, and you used adjective words that adds and help the clarity which uplift the imagery.
On the fourth paragraph,
Maybe you forgot to put a comma between the word space and I
Eager to get back to a more tranquil space - is a sentence already
Cantine - you might mean canteen.

Fifth paragraph.
The ice cream soothing my
Soothing you might mean soothes.

Six paragraph
I gazed down at the river moving slowly it was almost not moving at all.
I just noticed that you used twice the word moving -
You can describe moving or shows how the river was moving to avoid reiteration of words.

END PART - The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, and you used a narrating style.

MY FAVORITE PART :
The sun sparkled on the water creating dazzling white ripples like crystals dancing on the river.

I like how you showed here how the rays of sun - shine to the water.LOVELY

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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NEWBIES CONTEST"Pen me your Quote,and I'll send you Gifts" CLOSED-will resume on December
#1960298 by Samberine Everose





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Review of Remember When  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour BillieGail !, *Smile*

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

*Balloon3**Balloon3**Balloon3* Congratulations !!! for being one of the Newbies Member's Showcase on the "Invalid Item" in this month of July *Balloon3**Balloon3* *Balloon3*

and its my pleasure to give you a review on your piece.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose .

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :


TITLE - When I begin looking for an item to review in your Portfolio,this piece of yours hook me, first I found it as one of the highlighted items, second the title has a sense of intriguing effect. I just find it romantic, maybe because of the word remember- where in it was place on the column of sentiments like memories, thinking, then adding the word when. My impression is asking a time of that memory.

IMAGERY - As I begin to read slowly the lines, I concluded that my initial impression is true, this is about reminiscing the past, and its romantic for me, as I try to catch the words in every lines, I found it that it was easily reach, and that what it makes it vivid, and begins to create a subtle imagery, a scene in a story that creates, and I found its certainly, knowing also about love that last.

RHYME RHYTHM AND FORM - When it was a rhyming poetry, I usually read it aloud, because its true that the sound is fascinating to hear, and I like how it twist the tongue when it read and pronounced.
But when it's not a rhyming poetry, I still like it because I found more emotions attached, specially when it was properly created using the broken of lines, and proper spacing of stanza.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Reminding the past or the first time is what makes love to refresh again.Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.*Heart*

Samberine Sig.
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NEWBIES CONTEST"Pen me your Quote,and I'll send you Gifts" CLOSED-will resume on December
#1960298 by Samberine Everose



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In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour MAGEORGE *Smile*

A Greetings from the "The Poet's Place " 

I'm your friend Samberine Everose .
And this is one of the items from the package you’ve won on my contest "Invalid Item" 
Round 3.(Birthday and Tribute) Congratulations!! once again.


Please, remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. { e:smile}

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE

TITLE- As I stumble on the given title of your piece while searching something to review on your Portfolio, it hook my attention. I like clouds, and as I think of the white clouds surrounded by the blue sky it draws my attention to see what's behind on your piece. That captivates me to read and that is also my first impression, and white clouds in the blue sky is like its promises a good and a wonderful place.

IMAGERY – As I go along with my read about that certain clouds above, I didn't disappointed on my expectation and impression on what I think on the title. Because the word you used are vivid, and easy to reach as like the title what its telling.
It also evokes emotion like -I'm in a wonderful place- walking with the clouds and seeing what you are describing along the body.You're right clouds are fascinating. And all the imagery you used to described images behind those clouds are indeed true.
RHYME, RHYTHM & FORM- As they said a Rhyming form in a poetry can be an enticing also to read, specially when it was read aloud, which test the ingenuity of the author specially when following a form, this is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked its rhythm, it blends with the flow and the created tone.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Well this is a great piece, you created so many images on the cloud above, and your reflection on them are all great
while you describing them. Thanks for showing them to me.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1992938 by Not Available.

"A Great Value of Expressions" 



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Review of My Heart  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

And this is one of the item on my package you bid and purchased on "The Great G Fundraiser" .
I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*.


Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading**Thought* MY REFLECTION :
The Lord is good, He never forsake us.
He stayed in us if we let Him to enter in our hearts, and let Him to take charge of our life.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - Every title of a piece should have a magnetic character that can hook a reader, because it is the first thing in which the reader have its first glance .

The title of your piece is interesting to me, I like the word heart amd bind together with the possessive word "my" in another word it means My Love, that's what it means to me, because heart means love, and the word love have a lot of means and kind. That hooks me to read it.

IMAGERY - A well chosen word that creatively crafted can make the imagery vivid, and can take the reader to be a part in that piece, to see, to feel, to smell what is that imagery that was intently showed and created by the author.This will evokes also emotions and the reader can also reflect in another perspective in what the author wants to say on his/her creation.

The words that you weaved in your piece is vivid for me,the words are in the light manner, but as the title said and was describing it, its filled with emotions -love. The love of our Lord to us, you showed it clearly here.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - In every piece this is one of the important part, rhyming poetry can be enticing and fun to create, even in free verse, with the proper spacing in paragraphing and line breaks can stimulate emotions while reading it.

I see a rhyming pattern on the end of each line, some author state the rhyming pattern to easily distinguished it.I like also the rhythm and line breaks specially the formed image, I am thinking if it was done intentionally or just it flows while crafting the words. Lovely.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINE:
Plants a kiss on my tear stained cheek

This line reminds me - in times of our down while having our journey in life, the Lord is not just walking beside us, but He carrying us until we are again in our feet, until our journey's end.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of Coffee  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Christine *Smile*

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

'Header for The Gift Shop This review is one that you bought with the gift certificate from your "Invalid Item"  haunter.'

Please remember that I'm not an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and please ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:

PLOT AND FORMAT - The format of your essay/story is good, every paragraph consist a compact thought and idea which is really needs as a part of the story.
The plot here is a simple mug of coffee, but it tells more that what we think for and the author relate it to its experience. Nice thought.
SETTING- When you choose a balance and well crafted words, it will make you feel that you were in the story and a part of it. The setting of the story is good and every paragraph are not redundant.

LENGTH- A proper length of a written work is important, it creates on impression also on the part of the reader. But sometimes long story seems to be short if the thoughts and created words are well balance, and short length story are too long if the expressed words are redundant, or have the same thought, makes the reader think its bored.
The written piece of yours have a proper length, because the words you used are vivid, and smooth on how it was delivered, and specially the thought and ideas are in depth and true.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION - I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A cup of Coffee- why we almost tend to asked and sometimes gives us relief and somehow soften our hearts when we are in our joy, trouble and pain.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*.

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Review of The Game  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A pleasant hour Kai, *Smile*

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
So I'm here giving you a review as my gift to you.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
TITLE - The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and have their first impression to the piece, so title should have a magnetic charm to allure or enticed the reader.

The title of your piece is good for me, Its simple as its seen, but if I have a closer look, it tells many things, There are many kinds of games isn't it?, and that enticed me to read it. What kind of Game is this.

PLOT AND FORMAT - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.
The format of your story is good for me, There is a proper paragraphing, and every paragraph have its own idea or a thought, all the incidents are needed in the story. The plot here is different, I think about a ball games that you relate it to the world, its creation, the exist of mankind.

SETTING - if it's properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance in imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.

The setting of your story is good, somehow at the middle part I lost, maybe just because the incidents that links to what you are showing or the description on what you are relating here are just too fast how you showed, I just only understand when I already reach the end part.

LENGTH - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also to read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good and well balance it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if the words are not properly done which makes the reader bored.

My first impression when I saw the length of your story is too long, but when I begin reading it, I just found it that it just short and proper, because the thoughts are good.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION- On the first paragraph
It, a small ball of a matter that didn't matter
maybe you might mean- Its
MY FINAL THOUGHT
You are indeed right Everything are not always as they seem.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You potrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of Tea Time Talk  
for entry "Love: The Rose" 
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Edwina Carol*Smile*


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I'm your friend hereSamberine Everose
and its my pleasure to give you a gift by reviewing your piece that I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE :


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TITLE - This is one of the important part of a poem, because it is the one that readers have their first glance while looking the list of things to read and review in the table of contents. It create also the first impression of the prospective reader ad expectation what's in that piece. So title should be captivating and it really links to the body of the item or poem.

I liked the given title of your piece. Rose is a beautiful flower and its true that it signifies love and mystery. I said mystery also because as we look at the rose flower there is something that keeps us pulling to have it, maybe that's the beauty and charm of a rose flower. And that's how your piece hooked me.

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IMAGERY - This is one of the important part also of a poem, it serves as the lifeblood of a piece. This shows how the writer or poet paint or carve about the whole piece through words and a well chosen and crafted words can create a vivid imagery which evokes emotions. By the words crafted by the poet, he/she can choose to control, show, stimulate emotions that can take its reader to his/her own imagination about that certain piece.

The words you weaved is simple to me, but I liked it, I liked how you repeated the adjective, somehow its like a lyrical kind.

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RHYME, RHYTHM & FORM - If choosing the correct rhyme and creating the correct rhythm of a piece makes also to stimulate the tone and the emotion. The proper using of pattern of any rhyming form can be a pleasing to the ear specially when it read aloud, ad fun to create, testing the wit of the poet.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm, it blends with the created tone.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Love is like a rose, its beauty and fragrance is sweet, but it breaks your heart and left you in pain when you touch its thorn.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,*Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of IDEAS  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A pleasant hour SandraLynn *Smile*

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Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" 
And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece that I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio.

Please remember, I‘m not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it,if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*


*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE

Title: Every title of a piece should have a magnetic charm that can allure or hook a reader, because it is the first thing in which every reader have their first glance and first impression before entering to the piece.

The title of your piece is simple for me, but it hook me, ideas are very intrigue to know, because we always learn in every ideas that we share.

Imagery : a well chosen and creatively crafted words are important to create a well balance and vivid imagery.It will evokes emotion also specially if there is no distraction while reading.

The words you weaved are vivid to me, every line have and give a thought or an idea,
just like the title.

Rhyme, Rhythm and Form - The correct and well chosen of rhyme and rhythm in a poetry is important to help to lift the tone to express well the purpose or thought of the piece, that will not executing distortion of the language.
I find some rhyme in ends of lines but some are not, I think its better if there are all rhyming or have a rhyming pattern, because you begin the rhyming on the first two part in which the reader have already an impression that this is a rhyming poetry.
*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
Just only the rhyming pattern in lines 3 and 4
and in lines 14 and 15.

and I just have a thought on the word germ you used.

Are ideas are like germs?
I think about germ as we always tend to get rid of it because it can cause as a disease.
Is this mean that we tend to get rid of every ideas sometimes..?

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
This is a great piece.
You already stated there where ideas come from.
and they all indeed true.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0


Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of New Beginnings  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A pleasant hour Countrygirl322 *Smile*


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A Greetings from "Invalid Item" 

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" 
And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing a piece that I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title:The title of your piece is good for me, A great start of everything is its new beginning.
This reminds me of the beauty in every morning - and that enticed me to read and picked your piece.

Plot and Format - The format is good to me, it has proper paragraphing, incidents are in detailed and that makes reader somehow really understand it.

Setting - if its properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.The setting of your story is good, the words created are well.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also to read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered was good it will not seem to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the reader bored.The length of your story is just good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it,the words that you delivered makes me feel and see emotions of the characters.

Grammar and punctuation - I didn't see any word that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise.

just only the word amounts on the second paragraph.

..small amounts of time in his presence....

maybe you can eliminate the s there.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
 Decisions we made make us hurt sometimes,
but if this the only thing to have a new beginnings its worth to endure the pain.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You portrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm a friend here Samberine Everose
And thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions"  and this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:
Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the one that can entice a reader. The title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader,because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece.

I already have a clue about the given title- its about a long distance love affair- and that the one that hook me to read it.

Imagery - a well crafted words and if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.The proper chosen of words to express or to show the meaning of the piece can create a well and balance imagery that let the reader be a part of the piece and and can also evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved are good to me,in which it creates a vivid imagery and evokes emotions like longing and sweetness, just like I relate this to every dream of a princess waiting for her prince charming.
I think this as a combination of classic and modern days.
The use of places or modern places and words like princess from fairy tales,
it blends properly with the created theme or subject in between the two lovers.

Rhyme and Rhythm: This is one also of the important part of a piece. The Rhyme when it was properly used can be pleasing to the ear specially when it read aloud, it was fun to create, testing the wit of the writer, and the rhythm and even line breaks can stimulate emotions and will set well the imagery presented.

There are some rhyming on some lines and some are not, but for me its good because its blend with the created rhythm- like breaking of lines and form of the stanza.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
and no doubt arise.

I just have a thought about the title-using the word Love Story.
I just think there is no need to add already this, because it was seen there in the genre that this is about love or romance.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Modern days are -in as of now.
But I still believed in fairy tales of once upon a time, and they live happily ever after.That is the image I've seen here in you piece.
Ten thousand miles away will make abundance for the two hearts.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of Visual Poetry  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A pleasant hour The StoryMistress *SMile*
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I am reviewing your piece as one of the gift items from my package gift- tribute to you- from my Raffle Game Contest "Invalid Item"  Round 2.

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Please remember that I'm not an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble thoughts and opinion as a reader, please try to chew it and leave or ignore if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title:
I like the title, the combination of the two words Visual and Poetry
Art and Writing, because I think about Art - and link it to Visual, and Poetry is in Writing, and that is I found here in Writing.Com


Imagery:
All the words you used are true. One word but the idea is compact, it says and comprehend many meanings and many thoughts come up.


Form:
I really like the form and shape, its really amazing how you create it in that way, they are properly and well formatted.

MY FINAL THOUGHT

Writing and Reading the two first words that greets me and captivate my heart in your piece,
Through READING and WRITING we expressed our self bit by bit,here with the wonderful community of WRITERS which make us inspired,encouraged and grow in our wonderful site WRITING.COM, and that's what we make us to be at HOME here as what the end word said in your piece. Well done!

I am ENCOURAGED and INSPIRED upon looking and reading all the words that stated there, and especially the heart shape that compact on it.

Thank you so much for allowing me to review and the enjoyment on seeing and reading your piece.
Hoping to see again more works of yours as UNIQUE as this in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of 7-16-09  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A pleasant hour Carrie *Smile*

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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm a friend here Samberine Everose

I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here, giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of piece is so important, it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and first impression, so a title should have a magnetic charm to hook a reader, and a good title also should have a relation to the body of the piece, because the title is just like its head part.

The title of your piece is intriguing to me, why you used numbers, I just thought that this is when you created the item, isn't it..? but a good title in a poetry should really relate to its body, because the title is like the door, that serves the reader have their first impression, and expectation about the piece.


Imagery - a well crafted words if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.
The proper chosen of words to expressed or to showed the real meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that will evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, you used words that create a good thought and can inspired every one.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that was used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and it is also fun to create,even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you made the breaking of its line, specially its form


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

Maybe, you can add a period on the end of line 3, because that's already a one thought.

How they are possible or work
I have a doubt on the word "or",
it makes the word work out of place in that thought.
how about using the word "to"
so that it may link to be a one thought.


*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Our body is the temple of the Holy Spirit, so we must used it properly.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,*Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Rated: E | (3.5)
A pleasant hour hart *Smile*

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A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" 

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Its my pleasure to give you a review on your piece that I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and please ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. . *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and create their first impression to the piece, so title should have a magnetic charm to allure or enticed the reader.

The title of your piece is intriguing to me, but I just think that the stated line is incomplete.
But, somehow maybe that's the thought that hooks me.

 Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.
especially if there is a proper paragraphing, spacing, and line breaks.

The format of your story is just fair for me, but it seems that it needs more proper paragraphing,
The thoughts and ideas are good, It reminds me of a writing in a journal or diary, because like you, this is how I write, just follow how my thoughts/emotions brings me, and many opinions and ideas were showed that I didn't know that I think it in that way, I just only realize it until I've finished to write already.

Setting- This is also important, a well chosen word can create a nice and balance imagery, that will give and hold the reader to continuously read it until it reach its end.

The setting of your story is just fair for me, I liked how your thoughts, experience and memories take you. I liked the emotions that evokes in the piece. It holds me until I reach the end part.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also too read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the reader bored.

The length of your story is just good for me, somehow it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see that emotions that going through by the main character.

Grammar and punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
When writing we tend to follow our emotions, our thoughts, our muse specially when we are on fire in writing, That is what I see in your piece. But we should also think about editing.

Like in sketching a piece of art, Artist draw and sketch many lines until he is satisfied to the images that he was creating, but after then, artist tend to erase the unnecessary line, so that the viewer will really see and perceive the real thought and image in which he create.

And the more polishing to a piece, the more it will shine its real beauty.


Thank you for sharing your piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
I rate it 3.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
A pleasant hour Keaton Foster *Smile*


I'm your friend here Samberine Everose
and I'm giving you a review on one of your piece that I've found in your Portfolio.*Smile*


Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important,because it is the captivating part of it, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance and have their first impression on the piece.

The title of your piece hook me and intrigues me.
My first impression is weird if its in literal, but I know this is metaphorical.
I think about letting others to see what's on our mind, so we are letting our head to be open.
Or maybe we are open, or our head is open to any ideas or any opinions that will be share.

Imagery - A well crafted words when it was properly used can create a subtle or vivid in the imagery. The proper chosen of words to express or to show the meaning of the piece can create a better imagery that evokes tone and emotions.

I always like how you create words, every line have its own and create an idea.I always like how you mentioned in he body of the piece the given title.
Rhyme and Rhythm: This is important also, when it was properly done and well, it can be a pleasing to the ear and fun to create. Rhyme can draw attention,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm that was created. It blends with the created tone.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FAVORITE PART :

"That we must contend with
Life was given to each of us."

We can't feel the success in Life, if we don't struggle it.
Expect that every road are rough, while we walk in the path of Life.
But we should also think that we have an armor that our Creator clothe in us.
Thanks for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing on it.*Smile*

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So WRITE ON,*Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*


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Review of Happy Accidents  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
A pleasant hour Nixie *Smile*

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

This review was bought for you from "Invalid Item"  by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation with the message: "I know I owe you more reviews than anyone, but for starters this will have to do. *Wink* Don't worry I'll make sure to swing by your port myself and drop a word or two. *Bigsmile*"



Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and give their first impression about the piece.So title should have a magnetic charm to allure or enticed the reader.

The title of your piece is good for me, honestly my first impression is like a children story because of the word happy, I only discovered at the end that it was about a different kind of love story, and its good, and really intriguing.

Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.

The format is good for me, its appealing and there's a proper paragraphing, and all the incidents are needed in the story. The plot here is a different kind of romance or love story, destiny, it was planned but they were really destined.

Setting - if it's properly well written,with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.

The setting of your story is good, the words created are well, it doesn't seem to be mushy.
It's a romance , but it depends on the logical incidents that was planned by the main character.
And left the reader thinking at the end.


Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also to read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short, it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the readers bored.

The length of your story is just good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see the emotions of the two main characters.


Grammar and punctuation - I didn't see any words that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise.

Dialogue - dialogue can also allure a story, because through dialogue you can examine, or feel the character or personality of the main character.

I liked that you used some dialogue, it also makes the piece its breathing or space.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
Destinies even if impossible it finds its way.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Review of Kalamity  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A pleasant hour Kiya *Smile*

A Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army" 

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

It’s a great honor for asking me to review your piece. Thank you, but I’m sorry if just only now that I fulfilled it. Anyways here's my review, I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:


Title - The title is one of the most important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and get a first impression before reading a piece, so title should have a magnetic charm that can allure or enticed a reader.

The title of your piece is very intriguing to me. I looked in the dictionary about Kalamity- but the word that I found there is Calamity, we used that word Kalamity here in our country- or in our language it is Kalamidad or Kalamity. Calamity means storm isn’t it? and storm are really devastating to life. That’s what my first impression in your story.



Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.

The format is good to me, its appealing and there's a proper paragraphing, and all the incidents are needed. I liked how you combined the sound of the clock while the memories flows in the mind of the main character, it makes it as a nostalgic sound, like when we are listening to music, there is always something that stir in our mind. Maybe, just because the clock has a sentimental value to him. The plot is really a calamity, we really don’t know what will happen tomorrow, immediate accidents that even if we think we are ready, we planned for it, but we don't expect that the goal of our plan will be 100% succeed tomorrow. This is a kind of tragedy, it really happens,lucky to those who survived.


Setting - if it's properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.


The setting of your story is good, the words created are well, it doesn’t seems to be crowded, not redundant. And left the reader thinking at the end.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader to read a story, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seem to be long and boring, but even if its short, it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the readers bored.

The length of your story is just good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see the emotions of the main character.


Grammar and punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise.

The only thing I just wonder is why the main character forgot to pray.?
In times of calamity, in times when we are already in the midst of life and death,
We usually pray, and think also the one who create us.
Dialogue - dialogue can also allure a story, because through dialogue you can examine, or feel the character or personality of the main character.

I liked that you used some dialogue, it also makes the piece its breathing or space.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
As I’ve said tragedy, accident, even if we are already prepared on it, and plan to success for it, we don’t know what will really happen to us in the end. The creator is the only one who knows it.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of 2-6-11  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A pleasant hour Carrie *Smile*

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I'm a friend here Samberine Everose

I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile.*Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of piece is so important, it is the first part in which a prospective reader have their first glance, so a title should have a magnetic charm to hook a reader.

I just don't get the title of your piece, I think about a date..?
The brief description is the one that enticed me to read it.

Imagery - a well crafted words if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.
The proper chosen of words to expressed or to showed the intentionally meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, you used words that can stimulate some emotions like certainty,
a feeling to someone, and defining it here. I liked the combination of words like jumped- feet.
I think about 10 as a perfect.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and it is also fun to create,
even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you showed it using free verse.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.
And no doubt arise.

Just only some spacing.
spacing and breaking of lines can make the thought more firm and create an impact.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
A feeling or an emotion when it pour into paper can create a beautiful piece,
describing and showing its meaning.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*

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