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Review of delusions  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newby newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: We are the most dominant force on the planet and no one knows why

Grammatical and spelling errors Four-way with a hyphen. Clutch has two meanings. It can be a grab or small purse.

What I liked?*Smile* We are primates in clothing. If ancient ancestors could see us, they would laugh. Our attire would really puzzle them. Our jungle is pretty weird too

What I disliked*Idea* I always like punctuation. It helps me read how you meant to say it. Is 4-way meteor shower a bit much for a stop light? Perhaps.

How the piece made me feel Did we spark the collision or are we just not too attentive?. Write something down as to who you are. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Review of Paceless Flame  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I guess I have never considered flame as passion. You do have an evocative image.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Almost kind of a long the lines of "Do not go softly into that good night. Sometimes my ambition is "Not so hot." Rhyme seems to work reasonably well

What I disliked*Idea* Most of this is kind of treating the flame of ambition as out there and apart from yourself. I think the more visceral elements is how you experience it yourself

How the piece made me feel Can ambition have pain? I wondered about that. It can cause pain in your life as you give things up to fuel the fire. Pain fuels ambition? Maybe if you are a weightlifter?

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Review of To Save a Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I have worked in the transplant arena, and know a fair amount of what goes on

Overall impression of piece: You write what you know and have done it fairly well

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* I can look at this through a parent's eye and think of what a marvellous story this is. I worked in Pathology analysing transplants and I know a lot of what is involved. I like how you handled a negative response to donation. These things are very deep seeded.

What I disliked*Idea* Tyrosenemia is never really defined so we don't really get why a liver transplant was necessary. Most of the states an indication on your driver's license is not enough and you need to have next of kin decide what is to be done. In most cases they will go along--but not always. They can say no. Also, with babies, sometimes a living donation is possible. A living person can give up part of their liver.

How the piece made me feel You should know your disease well. It could be genetic.

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Review of Home  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece> Home isn't perfect. It was never designed to be.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of good description here. It makes use of a variety of sensory means. It is not just one aspect. It is all of them put together. As you get older, you have a tendency to think bigger picture. Thi8s seems to flow well

What I disliked*Idea* Home is where the heart is a cliche. I am pretty sure you are a don't deter your poetry with punctuation, but some of your lines are joined together and need to be read properly. She heads off to surgery is kind of up in the air. I would either be more specific or more descriptive.

How the piece made me feel I have been there and done many of these things.

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Review of Above the law  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is in articles and like nonfiction

Overall impression of piece You have hit on a nerve here. You are not the only one who sees this.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* Last sentence really sums this all up. You didn't mention Mrs Clinton, but you didn't need to.

What I disliked*Idea* You consider yourself above the law if you rob a bank and the security guard holds the door open for you. The bank guard's complicity is kind of extraneous to robbing the bank in the first place. Even the pilot and copilot giving up parachutes doesn't seem to have any historical background/ Reloading a gun seems kind of stupid. Give him a bus ticket?

How the piece made me feel Our legal system is based on what the system wants and not on ethical standards. It would have been politically incorrect to indite a political candidate. I think the real crime is people saying they have had a bad life and should be let off. Back on the street after a capital offence should be a capital offence.

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Review of Pain with in  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through articles and saw this one. You have hit on something here that is honest and forthright.

Grammatical and spelling errors: They yell... is a run on sentence. You could deal with this with a colon and listing things like yelling. Between act like a fool and to berate you have a sentence error. At the least you need a capital

What I liked?*Smile* You obviously know of what you speak. This kind of comes out as stream of consciousness and grammar kind of takes a hit. Could this be your personal stream of consciousness and you could talk about your own personal dialogue?

What I disliked*Idea* First and second sentences need a tie together. I think it is easier to yell and scream than deal with your own pain. When you talk of pain festering, you speak in a general sense and not personal. I sense you really know this and could help someone.

How the piece made me feel I kind of know what this is too. I am not a big fan of rants, but this is very honest.

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Review of Mirror Lake  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter. I read your bio. I can identify with where you are at.

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty well crafted except for the one spelling issue. To have a secret place be a place of wonder is the essence needed for recreation.

Grammatical and spelling errors. Nina not ninia. Nina means girl. Heart-shaped with a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* You have described this well. It is one thing to say how it looked but you have gone well beyond that saying how you felt about it.

What I disliked*Idea* Why the monks would build something that looks like an old Spanish ship seems odd.
We need some tie in to build the wonder of the place you are visiting. Early to bed early to rise doesn't appear to tie in with your mystical theme

How the piece made me feel I wish I had a place like this. Sometimes I go to my back yard with 75 year old trees and wonder what they have seen

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as of interest

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty well crafted. I am not sure of its universal appeal

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* There is adventure involved in every new thing. We also do need to do things together

What I disliked*Idea* Cycling means suffering. Cycling means spandex. It is hard to get anyone to sign up for either of those two things. I don't think they even make big enough spandex to cover this frame of mine. You start out on riding your bike and in a blink of an eye, you are pitching 100 miles races. There needs to be some progression here

How the piece made me feel The big trouble in our society is to get people to move at all, anywhere. I take it your are a competitive biker. I admire that

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Review of Haikus  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the Newbies Newsletter

Overall impression of piece You have the essence here. Haiku is not an easy form

Grammatical and spelling errors All read well

What I liked?*Smile* Hoow do we see things? How do we take immense journeys to far off places? I think we do this in our minds and spirits. You have big enough topics for each one of these haikus

What I disliked*Idea* Christ fed for a lifetime, but the reality is that He changed men's souls and made them different. You can't give what you don't have.

How the piece made me feel We are children of the universe and have a very special bond with it. The moon is so close to us based on astronomical distance. We literally are stardust but most importantly we have the spirit of the universe's creator. I don't think I would put these in a nonsense part of your port.

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Review of The Flow  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I have studied "flow."

Overall impression of piece: Sometimes flow just happens. That is a pretty cool thing. I generally find it comes from dong what is the right thing at the right time

Grammatical and spelling errors the woman, the female of the species, I don't know how to punctuate an emoji. My point being is missing a verb and is not a sentence.

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of a personal journey into the wide world of flow. It is personal and heartfelt. It is kind of written in blog style and easy to read

What I disliked*Idea* You never really define what flow is. I think it is something that really helps to organise our thoughts and actions. There have been books written about Flow. Googol flow and you'll get one written by a Czech "Czmenski?" that really is a classic. I am sure Amazon would come up with the book. I know the name is misspelled

How the piece made me feel I never really thought about the spirit of "Flow." I feel that you are kind of dealing with this on a feeling basis.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. I kind of hang out there.

Overall impression of piece: I think we are all on a journey. When we are young, we rarely recognise it as such

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well.

What I liked?*Smile* In terms of development and maturity, the whole idea of keeping track of our own personal shelf is powerful. When we were young, we thought we could think about everything. We can, maybe. Often it is not very well. An astounding number have unkept resolutions. A lot won't make them anymore and then wonder why they stay the same. This is an elegant poem with good rhyme and meter. I found it very personal

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel You have a fascinating history . I was forced to retire from the medical field and am now finding my way in writing and teaching

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I always look at ports. It helps me see more than just words.

Overall impression of piece: I pretty much get this. I am married to a true introvert. She doesn't waste any words. Sometimes I need to realise that nothing can say volumes.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Simon and Garfunkel made the "Sounds of Silence" famous. Garfunkel was in the spelling dictionary--remarkable. I think most of our heart-to-heart conversations have very few words. I like the last line of gift me love's assurance.

What I disliked*Idea* Corners of my mind is borderline cliche

How the piece made me feel We all need to be loved in our own particular way. I wish there was a magic formula and it dealt with everyone.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. My grandson has been taking Japanese so I have had a sudden interest to

Overall impression of piece: This is much better than no ratings

Grammatical and spelling errors Quotes start with a capital as you did. Second word does not need a capital. I get it for perhaps poetic license.

What I liked?*Smile* I knew there was something that kept out Western culture but was unaware of the specifics. Telling your stories kind of makes the point between the two cultures

What I disliked*Idea* The important thing is not the quote. The important thing is that we are different. Third paragraph kind of stands out on its own and isn't tied well to the others.

How the piece made me feel Personal experience is always the best teacher. You have obviously had some

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. Like you I too give a lot of reviews. I like to give points to deserving people. I don't generally give points to those I review. A few complain, but I feel they should give me points for reviewing. Most do not and that is ok. I give points for even bad reviews.

Overall impression of piece This is pretty valuable in its contribution. It is informal and fun like most of your contributions

Grammatical and spelling errors Last paragraph two periods are after happen

What I liked?*Smile* Your conversational style makes this work. You really do have a lot of good points. I have given some great reviews that have been rewarded 1500 points by people other than the author. What is up with that? Give everything to your reviews regardless. I kind of like short reviews, but by all means, say something.

What I disliked*Idea* This is really about, in my mind, why are we on WDC. I like to think that we can have positive relationships with people and help them grow. Some are kind of far gone and are full of *crickets*. I have met them too. This kind of looks like a blog that turned into an essay. It is kind of missing an organising thought

How the piece made me feel This is a very valid piece. A reviewer in the top 50 gives one review a day. I have a piece called the reviewing revolution. There are not enough reviews of our work. Have you done one yourself?

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Review of My Inner Mare  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting.

Overall impression of piece: You definitely do have a unique perspective. I guess I've never thought of dogs chasing horses. I know they are annoying to me

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot here. It intuitively does make sense to me, but I tend to put things together pretty well. We are not very good at taking care of our physical selfs. I think there is a desire to think we aren't physical

What I disliked*Idea* This is an analogy. I don't think you have grown a horse mane or the like. You kind of jump from horse issues in paragraph two two people problems in paragraph 3. As a reader, I need more depth to know how these two parts go together. There is a suggestion that a therapist might have guided you. We don't need to know what they said. We need your reaction

How the piece made me feel Horses need to think and so do we. Pogo would say, "We have met the enemy and he is us

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Review of After Mass  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this of interest and bookmarked it for later review

Overall impression of pieceL I have a Catholic background although I am something else now. (A Quaker) I actually was an alter boy some five to six decades ago. This did bring back memories. I knew latin pretty well,

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You have definitely done the sights and sounds of a Catholic mass. Most never see this. It is expressed with love and admiration.

What I disliked*Idea* Christians felt the Holy Spirit kind of takes this out of the personal category. It would be better to say, "God was here. I can see it on their faces

How the piece made me feel True Christians have to be mystics of some sort or another. The Lord of the Universe loves you. That is pretty fanciful. We are to be open to the great things of God

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I have been going through a video series called the truth project as this type of thing is heavily talked about

Overall impression of piece: Your right...to a point. Of course, the Christian faith has a tendency to see itself as a relationship with the God of the universe and not a set of rules. Jesus went so far as to say the rules of the old testament were not important. Jesus himself is the focus

Grammatical and spelling errors Professor grammarly says you did this pretty well. I have the program as a download on my computer. The only hit was mass suicide as being two words, not hyphenated.

What I liked?*Smile*You have a very interesting approach. You have kind of taken your personal view and biases out of this. You have your premise right in the first paragraph. You have supporting material in a logical and progressive manner. Footnotes are extraordinary.

What I disliked*Idea* You are really asking the wrong question. Morality is more the consensus of the people at a given time. Look at things like premarital sex. That has certainly changed over time in the eyes of most people. The real question is whether our behavior as a society is tied to ethical consideration. This is a statement of what ought to be done. It is based on a guiding principle and not consensus. Most of our court rooms used to have the 10 commandments. They are becoming passe

How the piece made me feel Morality comes from the hearts of men. Are those hearts changed? If they are then society will be changed. I think the original country was formed on biblical values. In 1908, the supreme court rules that America is a Christian country by history and tradition. I doubt if they would rule the same way today.

Obviously, I have thought about this a lot. I am teaching about this on Sunday. Hope I wasn't too over the top

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through essays and I saw this. I am looking at essays as I have two new ones in the highlighted section of my port

Overall impression of piece This kind of is more fiction than an essay. Story's are good but essays generally try to put across a theme and develop it

Grammatical and spelling errors: aggressively tortured (past tense). Probably pallid man should be in quotes as that is what he was called. After anonymously, a comma. Choosing without a capital. It does not start a sentence. Last Burrows is a name and needs a capital

What I liked?*Smile* I felt that you felt this with real emotions and a lot of detail

What I disliked*Idea* The block formatting I think you are trying has paragraphs generally separated by a line. If anything, it makes it hard to read on the screen

How the piece made me feel Tell us something of yourself. If really helps us as evaluators

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Review of Get back up  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the newbie newsletter.. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: It is a tale as old as time. As people, we do remarkable things.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No periods, but they are implied. They are kind of our directions on how to read this

What I liked?*Smile* Simple story as old as time. We do get beat up, no matter how much we deny it.

What I disliked*Idea* This kind of appears to be rhyme drive and not image driven. Up and pup are especially a little too obvious

How the piece made me feel I have no idea what your prompt was. Some include it in a footnote. It is really helpful to know. Your port picture looks a little catty.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the author's newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You aren't telling us things in this piece. You are showing them to us. Life definitely is very difficult.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I am sure there is a backstory here. There is always a backstory. It can be a universal one. Nobody has this all worked out

What I disliked*Idea*

How the piece made me feel I am not sure what this means, and I am pretty sure that is ok. Life is complex and if you know what is coming next, you are probably wrong. I think we are all these moments rustling in the wind. The only true change is in the next life

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Faceless Moon  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece A romantic interlude on are fanfiction raids. As the designated frog prince of our organisation, I know about romances and the perils there of

Overall impression of piece Apparently, you do too. I am not familiar with the genre we are talking here, but this is graphic enough and well written, it is pretty easy to follow

Grammatical and spelling errors: Some of your sentences end up with a capital in the middle. Odd, but poets are like that. I like the italics for the song title.

What I liked?*Smile* I appreciate the appropriate rating on this piece. This has imagery that comes from both dreams and hard reality. It kind of has a visceral feel to it and seems real. This is kind of a love's labor lost kind of piece.

What I disliked*Idea* You can't really see your eyes. You can only have feelings of conflict or have them reflected back to you.

How the piece made me feel I did feel all of this. This is complicated. I have been married 43 years. It is complicated.

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Review of I am Data  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Fanfiction I can relate to. At last. I had to have something I could go back to in my generation

Overall impression of piece: I have seen every episode of just about every series

Grammatical and spelling errors It's is missing an apostrophe which he wouldn't have used anyway.

What I liked?*Smile* You were careful not to use contractions. Data always had a big view and perspective on things so this does fit pretty well. I like your stardate as part of the personal memo.

What I disliked*Idea* Ode is a lyrical poem in a greek style (Wikipedia). Data would have known this. This actually was one of the episodes when he created Lol so it does lack a little originality

How the piece made me feel This is definitely a trip down memory lane. He was pretty philosophic in this piece. Lol had a fatal flaw. I kind of like your meaning of life. It pretty much works for humans too.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the fan fiction raid for power reviewers. do Mermaids talks to enchanted frog princes? Time will tell

Overall impression of piece: I actually do know a mermaid--really. We have one dress up at our aquarium. She is quite a hit. She uses shell phones to communicate.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I love the picture that goes with this. The piece is largely about mermaid dreams. There are a lot of varied images to drive that home. What you say is really quite common to the human existence. It was an enjoyable read.

What I disliked*Idea* See below. Maybe we all need to dream a little more and leave a place for those dreams

How the piece made me feel Love is the universal need through all of creation. It is supposed to basis for Christianity--not doctrine. Jesus loved. It is the whole proposition for him coming to earth. We are to be like him. I get the frustration. Maybe I would like to be a merman?

We all have a chemical between our fingers that is supposed to be resorbed into the body. Perhaps there is an inner merperson within us all

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the fanfiction raid for Power reviewers

Overall impression of piece: I have to admit, that I missed this one. Some of them like the black oil slick monster seemed nearly as silly

Grammatical and spelling errors"This is the edge is missing a capital for this.

What I liked?*Smile* Q did seem to have a sense of humor. A lot of his reactions were iconic if not a bit, ironic.

What I disliked*Idea* Kirk didn't make mistakes. He was Captain Kirk. Edge of the Universe seems a little odd. I know the issue here is humor, but this comes off kind of slapsticky

How the piece made me feel We are surprised by Q many times in the show. This is pushing believability but why not? It is science fiction.

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Review of Never be the Same  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC. We are supposed to read fanfiction in our reviews this time period. I am not sure what that is but I do no Lassie. I go back to that era.

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Generally, block format has a line in between paragraphs. It would make it much easier to read on screen

What I liked?*Smile* I felt you were looking at this through 4-year-old eyes and felt some of the same emotions. Some of the interactions we have with 4-year-olds are wondrous and mysterious.

What I disliked*Idea* This puts a psychological edge to her dreams that seems a little above a 4-year-old intellect. I doubt if she could put this together. The terror is there.

How the piece made me feel When the going gets tough, we go to Breakfast. That kind of works for me. The emotions of four are pretty demonstrative and intense. They seem to work here.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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