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I liked this and usually, I am not in favor of folks using only a quarter of the allotted words, but in this case, you made it work, and work well. I liked the way to didn't give squiggle room to squirm out of the goal-istic hurdles.
What I thought was particularly well done.
The voice and attitude in this were encouraging but no nonsense, as in you know your inner self and know exactly just how to approach the one who avoids goals like the plague!
Final Thoughts
I'm using this in this week's Drama newsletter for I think it deserves the feature as well as serving as inspiration for others! Bravo!
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I loved, loved, LOVED this!!! I loved the 'me, myself and I confab (along with the other characters) and it showcased the varying parts of you exceedingly well! It was fun to read, had a great sense of humor about it, and best, let 'combined you' shine through! Well done!
What I thought was particularly well done.
I enjoyed the 'bickering' back and forth, the varied voices agreeing, disagreeing and mounting attacks as decisions were made. The voice of each was distinct and well crafted. Te goals were excellent and attainable and the whole letter was a blast to read. And after reading some fifty entries, that says a LOT!
Final Thoughts
I'm using this as both a source of inspiration to others and as a fun read in this week's Drama Newsletter!!
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I liked that there was backbone in this letter. You allowed the reader to truly see why and how the goals were important to you and then proceeded to let us know exactly how you were going to steamroll through the opposition and do what you are meant to do:which is write! Bravo!
What I thought was particularly well done.
I particularly liked the voice that was evident throughout as well as the attitude and determination that flowed through the piece. You felt these things, you believe them and it shows in your writing. This was more than a contest for you; it was an epiphany, a moment, an awakening and the resulting resolve.
Final Thoughts
I'm using this in this week's Drama Newsletter as i think it offers a healthy dose of optimism and inspiration and should be seen! Well done!
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This was great, fun and original! I loved the excitement pervading it and getting to experience the thrill along with you! You got me excited!! (My thrill like that will come in June!)
What I thought was particularly well done.
The entire letter, beginning to end was well though out, fun and encouraging.
I also enjoyed the sense of humor and the self-appreciation for both good and not so good characteristics. Bravo
Final Thoughts
Tho it may seem strange, I'm using this in this week's Horror Newsie. Why? Because i am featuring a bunch of the Dear Me entries in the three newsies I'm writing this week because i think they are well written and deserve to be featured!
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I should have liked this to be longer (given the available word count) and a bit more in-depth.
What I thought was particularly well done.
I liked the positive attitude. It is a good one to have.
What I thought could use some improvement.
Length. While longer doesn't mean more goals, it would have shown a thorough, deeper look at what you want to do, how you will do it and why it is important to you to accomplish it.
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While this was a well written letter, it was not primarily concerned with your writing goals.
What I thought was particularly well done.
It was organized and well written. The goals, while not focused on writing goals were well laid out and attainable.
What I thought could use some improvement.
I should have liked more focus on writing goals.
This was a gripping story that pulls the reader in and refuses to let go until the very last word. Exceedingly well written, and edited. No errors to mess up the trend of thought as I read along...well there was a tiny one about halfway through, but I was far too busy reading. The characters are real, layered and might be your best friend. The dialog was realistic, believable and true.
Thinking back, there was a minute bit of confusion in the following paragraph:
The McCormick, Granier, and Shepherd building was a modern architectural behemoth on the outskirts of town. It was the den of Mitch’s opposition and an incongruous place for him to be. I’d have to ask him why he worked for the firm that opposed him so directly, when I had a chance. I stood in front of the revolving doors, putting on my confident face in the reflection, before pushing through them into the echoing marble lobby.
The confusion was because I wasn't clear that there had been issues for him at that point.
Stil and all, excellent story and very well crafted. Kudos!
I had a lot of fun reading this and it fits well with my newsletter this week (Drama) I particularly enjoyed the concept of the in-coming storm being likened to a somewhat unwelcome visitor! Great idea! That and the changing (accepting) of the visitor! Well written too :) No errors or typos.
I really enjoyed this perspective and the glimpse into another world where snow doesn't fly. Both the tone and the voice of this piece were well crafted and consistent. Filled with fresh image-ings...such as cloudy bosoms and clouds holding weather in the folds of their garments. Well done!
I enjoyed the last dance of autumn and got a particular kick out of it being set in Michigan as that's my state. *smile*
I do have some suggestions tho that would give this piece a bit more umph!
1.Still, having been away from northern climes for twenty-five years, those few remaining leaves of golden hues were enough to remind me of what I had missed all those years.<----A different word for 'years' here...time, perhaps? The repetition takes away from what is being said.
2.cold winds blew around my sister’s home. I watched from the warmth of her home <---same idea here...finding a different, more expressive word for 'home.'
3.That leaf swirled, twirled, and danced as I watched. What a performance! How sad that I was the only one around to see the leaf dance.<-- Consider removing the 1st dance, leaving the swirled and twirled. That gives the line that follows much more punch.
4.In her place was winter’s glistening snow.<---Consider having the glistening snow becoming an encore or something :) With perhaps that leaf, having freed itself from the porch, skittering across the snow. :)
Just thoughts for your consideration. As is, is good, but it has the potential to be great!
I'm using this in this week's Drama Newsletter. *smile*
Let me preface this by stating, I am NOT a fan of horror anything! But this was good, a really good start to something that is making me very glad I live in a cozy neighborhood! Another reason this piqued my attention was because my daughter was stationed at ROTA for a couple of years. :) Dialog is realistic, the scene, very well set, and it is jut getting started and it gave me the creeps! Well done!
I'll be using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter!!!
As this is a new year, I am featuring all newbies in my Drama newsletter coming out this coming week! And, I am including yours!
Excellent story of Christmas, redemption and the emotions we experience. My only suggestion is one that applies more to writing online than anything else. It is far easier on the eyes to put a line between each paragraph. This helps when reading pieces online and will garner you more reads!
And, as this is a piece that bears reading by lots of folks, this will help!
If you have any questions about WDC and finding your way around, feel free to email me *smile* And, again, welcome!
After a morning spent writing a newsletter (Drama--this'll be in it) and reading bunches of stuff to find things for the editor's picks, I stumbled upon this absolutely perfect, wonderful, 'shivery', teary (sniff) happy story. Thanking you for writing this...you have made my day and (for lots of other reasons that i shant bore you with) I think I was supposed to find this read on this particular day.What an unexpected and absolutely perfectly timed Christmas Gift!
Interesting and intriguing enough that i want to know more! I'll be back to read all when I'm not in the middle of writing a newsletter...which I'm doing right now...and, including this as an editor's pick for the Love/Romance newsletter for this week. Swamped with work, but i will be back to read :)
This is an illuminating essay into the varying themes behind the comic book morphed movies and television depicting Wonder Woman. Role model, woman, Amazon, female themes are discussed intelligently with the research to back up the points discussed. I'll admit I never really thought of her in quite the way presented here; however; the writer states valid points and makes equally valid conclusions. (Then again, I was more of a Superboy fan, myself!)
I'm not sure I agree with all of them, but then, I don't have to and it does not detract from the thesis involved. It is well written and thought provoking.
Two teeny errors:
In the origin story<---original
to go back to America <--accompany him when he returned to America...she's never been; cannot go back *smile*
If you are a comic book fanatic or just read them as a child, this too, is well worth the read!
Sniff. EXCELLENT! The only thing missing was her seeing that 10 point stand at the far edge when she opened her eyes. I THOROUGHLY enjoyed this. You had this reader 100%. Would love to read more of these two...I'm thinking there are a lot of stories there.....
I'm using this in this week's Love/Romance newsletter.
I liked this poem because of the inherent honesty within. It questions of one, yet the questions are of the writer as well. And, expressing what we all seek to know and perhaps, never truly do. Well crafted, enjoyable and a worthwhile read!
I'm using this in this week's Love/Romance Newsletter. :)
Awesome short story, I really, REALLY enjoyed it. Not to give away the ending, but I figured where this was headed about a third of the way through...and yet happily followed along! Great descriptions, bringing the scenes into clear focus. I almost think you could leave out some of the repetitions (ie; the are you listening parts....alllmost gives it away to early and have it be even more of a jolt.. Cannot figure HOW anyone would NOT 'get it.' unless they simply were not reading, skimming perhaps.
I loved the 'pun,' which I figure is a clue (although it was not necessary for me) and I loved that it was ongoing and that he needed to get it together and 'solve' the mystery so she could go on as well. I appreciate your asking for my opinion on this, nice to be asked, especially when it is such a good read!
Again, well crafted tale!
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