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#3906892

Review of The Soccer Season's Now A-foot

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Hi there Jace!

This is a piece with extremely clear imagery. Every scene, every detail, the exhausted children kicking the foot ball aiming to goal, the shrieking crowds, the pelting rain, everything was just clear as crystal. I can hear the shouts, I can see them runing, kicking , tumbling, and struggling for a score, for a win.

I love the spirit -the fighting spirit those children have. They never mind the rain, the unbearable coldness. They never quit. They fight!

Everything is awesome. No flaws found. I enjoy my read here. Thanks Jace for the share. Write on!

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#3906889

Review of My Thoughts On Writing

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi there Jeannie!

You don't know how much you moved me by your thoughts here. The. narration from the day you're still a schoolchild until now that you got a child or two was just pleasant. Every word made me recall my early years. I too, was too shy. I don't talk to much. I don't even answer when my teacher asked me a question. I was too nervous and afraid that I am wrong. Oral was my great problem then, I never excelled in that part. On the other hand, I topped first in our class. I focus more on written exams and the like. I often write poems and slogans and brought to most school contests. My write once featured on our campus bulletin and schoolpapers. I was once a campus journalist throughout my high school years. I have lots of experience, maybe small, but I learned from it.

And my thoughts on writing? Well, it's my way of expressing words I can't dare to utter.

Thanks for sharing this Piece Jeannie!

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#3904462

Review of Wearing Team Clothes

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi there Tim Chiu!

I am reviewing randomly today, and my first haunt is yours. Well, I left nothing to but read review. The following are just my opinions and suggestions after reading your piece. If you find it useful, then take it. Otherwise, ignore.

Wearing Team Clothes has this magic pull. It lures me and tickles my curiosity. From this itself, my brain started to form thoughts behind that clothes. And that is what I need to discover.

After I read the piece, I realized how valuablue a uniform is. Be it expensive or the cheapest, the value it bears is too high, too significant. It doesn't matter how cheap that cloth maybe, but wiith the champion it dressed, it's pride is tenfold to that expensive one. Its value is hundredfolds in a way that fans too will dress the same. Its not the cloth that matters it's the bearing champion.

This is a great write. No errors detected. Imagery great! Very inspirational. I enjoyed my read. Thanks Tim for the share. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3903908

Review of A Ghostly Poem

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi there MarryAnn!

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The following are just my opinions and suggestions formed after reading your piece. Thus, it's up to you to either take them or not.

I especially visit your port to poetry hunt. A variety of items appeared on your busy port. As I scrolled down and opened your poetry folder, A Ghostly Poem draws my attention (as if I'm hypnotized). That's how powerful your title is. The word GHOST is what tickles my interest of horror genre, thus I can't escape the haunting spell without revealing how spooky this piece might be.

What I'm looking towards horror writes is the goosebumps it brings on me, I love pieces that will make my hair stand. And this doesn't disappoints me. As I sail through, I can feel goosebumps as my mind imagine the things you narrated.

I loved every detail, every scene of it. Imagery is too clear. Grammars, punctuation, spelling - all perfect. I can feel the extra care the mother gave to these two child ghost. She's brave enough to heed them as one of her family members, as one (or two) of her children. Inatead of living, the stayed on this haunted house living as happy big family with six children (including two ghost).

I left with nothing to suggest but keep it the way it is. This is a great write worthy for the awardicon it bears. A five star rating won't suffice to prove how excellent this is but maybe a hundred of them. I enjoyed reading this creepy piece you've shared. Thanks MarryAnn. Keep writing!

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Gervic

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#3903148

Review of Farewell

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi there kenzigirl7!

Farewell is always been a great title or say topic for most poetry especially to ones suffering from a heartbreak. Actually, this was my first thought
prior to reading your piece. Well, I was wrong. The title is fine though, however, for me it somehow doesn't fit the content, not to the extent. Maybe you could say, Life Cycle, Endless Cycle, New Hope, etc.

You have perfectly worded our life's or nature's endless cycle. This is a perfect read for the hopeless, desperate and those who find themselves unworthy and useless. There is hope in every way and you clearly word/emphasize it here - new life begins. Every word of it is true. Imagery is vivid.

I foung no grammatical flaws. I enjoyed reading. this inspiring piece. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3903137

Review of Anatomy of the Thoughts of a Dying Man

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Hi there iggyg85!

This is a piece of great sorrow, loneliness and how one fight for death. A man, country's hero as what they are called, a soldier trying to reminisce those tragic, unpleasant past amidst the war. I can feel the longing he felt for his wife.

I love the picture you are drawing. Clearly visible to every readers mind. The flashes of lightning ang roars of thumber is vivid. Those rivulets of water flowing across the panes, the petals, the frame, every detail is perfectly narrated.

You've exposed well your emotion with this free verse poem. I found no grammatical flaws. Punctuation is well done.

Overall, great write! Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3901195

Review of Bearing God

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi there Lobelia!

This is a poem expressing faith and how God changed and molded you in His own perfect way.
This is a poem worth to ponder and is perfect for a daily reading. You have clearly expressed how God transformed you each and every single day with utmost love. This poem is a perfect way of praising God for all great things He showers upon.

This is an excellent write. Everything is perfect. I found no grammatical flaws. I'll give five shining stars for this write well done. Thanks for sharing and enjoy your account anniversary here.

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Gervic

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#3899963

Review of Goodbye, My Love

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hi there Lightkeeper!

This is a poem expressing loneliness and longing. Goodbye, My Love would be the most painful words to utter but you just have to. You are still mourning for your lost love that can never be found again here in this world.

The title is a great choice. It captures reader's interest to delve in. The content is well crafted. Simple words but meaning too great. I love the imagery, clear as sparkling crystal. I can see the accident, hear the squalling tires and feel the emotion too grieveful as your love pass away. The abab rhyming is content and lines flow freely. No grammatical flaws detected.

Overall, great write worthy for five sparkling stars. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3899636

Review of To End A Nightmare

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

Hi there Mage Embers of the Elven Clan!

This is a poem of a tremendous struggles. A poem expressing the feeling when one seems lost and hopeless and exhaust. To end a Nightmare would be to hard to do. You need strength to wake up from unrealities. And if you fail, dorever you fail. And if you can't wake up, forever you won't wake up.

I enjoyed reading this poem. Simple but meaning that relates everyone's life. I actually found no errors with grammars. Its a great write! Thanks for sharing! Write on!

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#3899407

Review of Why should I live

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Hi there Last Devil!

Why Should I Live? Is a question that hopeless would surely ask. Each of us have different purpose as to why we are here. Our lives are coined with various struggles, challenges, hindrances, obstacles, odds, trials and tests. It is on us how we manage to conquer them all and fulfill oir assigned task. To end a life is not the remedy nor a solution to great problems. Just have faith and I'm sure God will help.

Your still alive maybe for great reason. Never quit but rather prove to everyone that you can endure it. Fulfill your task and it's Him who declare what. consolations we get. It's Him who decides when we have to rest in peace.

Anyway, This poem is worthy to read. Words are too sincere and the thoughts are worth to ponder. I didn't find any flaws. It's a great write.

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for the share. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3899393

Review of Empty wound

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi there Envi!

Empty Wound is a piece expressing your utmost pain, your heart was broken, wounds might have healed yet scars remained forever. That pain will actually lead you to hate that person. Our heart is to delicate, too fragile, that if someone break it, it can never ever be restored to its original piece. I can feel the emotions you felt upon writing this piece.

I like the concept of this poem. Simple words with meaning so deep. I found no grammatical flaw. Punctuation must be properly implemented.

Overall, great write. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3899354

Review of Fallen

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi there Ann!

This is a poem expressing hopelessness and being weak to fight against odds, trials. Your strength didn't suffice to endure challenges, thus you give up. Fight for what is yours and never ever let someone take it from you. Strengthen your faith and never release the rope of life's tug of war.

This made me think a part of Longfellow's Psalm of Life that goes: [my favorite poem though]

In this broad field of battle,
In the bivoac of life.
Be not like dumb driven cattle,
Be a hero in the strife.

I actually liked the piece. The way it is presented and the thought of it, I found no grammatical flaws.

All in all, great write! I enjoyed my read. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3899352

Review of The Abyss

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi there Talaena!

This is a poem where sadness is too extreme. The character is suffering from to much torment, pain for being hated, ignored. I once felt the same and yes, I felt the feeling so neglected. As if I murdered somebody to be the colossal reason for their extreme hate. You know, this poem made my tears to fall, my heaet seemes crampled.

This piece would surely make you recall those painful moments of your life. The failures, agonies, and cries.

Thanks for sharing!

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#3899246

Review of Writer's Sonnet

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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Hi there Ottosmagic13!

Happy Account Anniversary!

Writer's Sonnet is a great choice of title. At jut a glance in it, readers xan tell what your piece is all about. Your description explaine further the title, and you got 1 more star for it. The content is fine. Imagery is awesome. Grammars are all correct. And the rhyming, all is great except this:

Sonnet didn't rhyme with It.

Also, the last 2 stanzas were not properly organized. Correct spacing should be implemented. For that I give you 2 more stars.

Overall, great write..I give 4 stars for this one. Thanks for the share. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3898306

Review of Her.

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)

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Hi there XxX[WalkingZombie]XxX!

Happy Account Birthday!

This is a review on behalf of "Anniversary Reviews" and "The Power Reviewers Group" . May you find this helpful and inspiring.

INTRODUCTION:

This review is somehow intentional. I did visit your port just to dig item to review. And there I found this poem.

TITLE:

HER is fine. It tells something about your piece. Readers could easily determine what this is all about.

DESCRIPTION:

The description is great! It explained and helped the title to provide a quick overview on its content.

CONTENTS:

Here are some minor flaws I found:

Compare her to me.
Misplaced brown
fluff that goes everywhere.
While her black hair,
falls like a waterfall.
Each strand shines so strong [insert period here]
it [It] pains my eyes in more ways, [no need comma here]
than one. [one or mine?]
She looks him straight on; [. instead of ;]
her shape, [no need comma and continue next line]
so womanly.
I’m nothing compared.
I’m an animal
compared.
So as i [capital I] stand there [if there, next must be that goddess]
looking at this [previous ust be here] goddess head on [insert period here]
her face so beautiful,
even in her fury,
I feel so small.
I feel unwanted.
I feel unlovable.

Here is my updated one:

Compare her to me.
Misplaced brown
fluff that goes everywhere.
While her black hair,
falls like a waterfall.
Each strand shines so strong.
It pains my eyes in more ways than mine.
She looks him straight on.
Her shape so womanly.
I’m nothing compared.
I’m an animal compared.
So as I stand there
looking at that goddess head on.
Her face so beautiful, even in her fury,
I feel so small.
I feel unwanted.
I feel unlovable.

These are just my opinion. I'm not a good poet. Others have their opinions too. You make take my suggestions or leave it. It's still you who decides.

EMOTION | IMAGERY | STYLE:

I can feel your extreme feeling of envy, a feeling of being unsatisfied. Imagery is awesome. A little improvement with its style. And you have successfully exposed your feeling.

GRAMMAR COMPOSITION:
There's no problem with grammars. A little improvement in using punctuations.

FAVORITE LINES:

OVERALL:

This one is fine. I enjoyed my reading. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

Reviewing,
Gervic

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#3898181

Review of Empty

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Hi there Foxgopher!

Happy Account Anniversary!

This is a review on behalf of "Anniversary Reviews" and "The Power Reviewers Group" . May you find this helpful and inspiring.

Title: "Empty" is a great choice. A word that connotes a feeling of sorrow, nothingness, a life so dark and hopelessness.

Description: It's just dine. A dedication to a friend. You know how much honored it is to be dedicated, valued and being inspired through simple words that will forever remain in our hearts.

Content: Excellent! I love every word, every line, every figures of speech you've implemented. Imagery is vivid. I can feel the pain, the tremendous sorrow, your grief, being hopeless and a clamour to soothe, to heal.

Favorite Lines:

"Warm figures float in view"
"I cannot reach them, my barriers too great"

Overall: Excellent! Great write! Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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Gervic

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#3897804

Review of Death Walks On

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

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Hi there Hephaestus!

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This is a review on behalf of "Anniversary Reviews" and "The Power Reviewers Group" . May you find this helpful and inspiring.

I did visit your port to review some of your works and writing and this one captured my attention. "Death Walks On" is a best choice of title. It gives a snapshot as to what your piece is all about. Just keep it the way it appeared.

The content is well crafted. The picture you are trying to portray is so vivid. I can even feel the horror, goosebumbs were present as I read through every line.

I found no single grammatical flaws and you perfectly used punctuations. Font color adds emphasis to your item.

You truly are a great poet. I enjoyed reading this and I love to read mire of your creations. Keep your creative juices flowing. Write on!

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#3896594

Review of the light that brightens autumn trees

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi there Mage Embers!

I am Gervic, reviewing through Random Reviews. I found your poem and was captivated with its alluring title "the light that brightens autumn trees". You know, I really love nature poems. I'd love to explore the very beauty it possess. And with your piece, wow! I witness how gorgeous this nature is. This poem is a perfect scenery of a lonely day. No crowd, no noise, no riots. Everything is just peaceful. Silent that you can even hear the tiny and cold drop of dews. You can feel the breeze and glamour on the light that brightens autumn trees.

I love the words you've gathered. Simple yet having a meaning so deep. This is a great poem portraying the beauty of nature.

Excellent! Perfect in all means. Thanks for sharing. Write on!

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#3896458

Review of SWEET KISSES

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

Hi there Sherri!

I am reviewing through random ead and found your oh-so hot piece! God, I love every word you gathered. I found all a great poetry should eve have. From imagery to figures of speech to rhyming. All is just perfect! Grammar? No errors.

This why I love love and romance genres. I love to explore in the world of romance- so full of warmth, thrills and lovemaking. The rhyming is wonderful. Imagery is awesome! I can feel the heat, the passion they both share. This piece is worthy for five stars and the awardicon it has.

Thank you Sherri for this wonderful read. Excellent write! Keep writing!

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#3895753

Review of How the Penguins Saved Christmas

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi there Princess Cria!

Greets! I am Gervic, reviewing through Random Reads. I found your piece and was caught by it's title. You know, I am a kind who reads if the title catches my attention.

Well, How the Penguins Saved Christmas is terrific. I love everything in its content. The entire piece run flawlessly with a well done rhyming. Imagery is outstanding. Clear as crystal as if you are seeing penguin in sleigh bring gifts to children. Other than that, perfect. Worth a FIVE stars. Thanks for sharing! Write on!

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#3895421

Review of The Potions Curse

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi there Jezri!

I found your piece through random reads. The title is kind of aluring, so I never hesitate to take a read. I tell you, this one is well crafted. I love the consistent rhyming between second and last lines of every stanza. And the imagery? Wow, professional! I love every setting of it. Every word, everything of it is excellent. No flause, No grammatical errors and the way the characters portray is so vivid. Magnificent work of mind. Keep your creative juices flow. Write on!

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#3758562

Review of Blue Moon (haiku 5-7-5)

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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Overview:

I found your poem on "Invalid Item" . I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Title:

Blue Moon was a great title!

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

This s one of a kind Haiku. I love the hyberbole used, thus giving your piece and extreme impact. The emotion was sad and I can feel it as I was reading the piece.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:

Check and excellent.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

Extreme imagery!

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

None

Favorite Lines:

Night envelops sky.
Blue moon bright enough to wake;
our souls mourn on earth.

Suggestions:

None. Just give additional colors for fonts to give emphasis.

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#3758561

Review of Porcelain Hands

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

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Overview:

I found your poem on "Invalid Item" . I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Title:

Porcelain Hands was a great choice. Very catching! Keep it the way it appears.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

This is awesome! The emotions revealed was so romantic. I can feel the heat as I read through the stanzas.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:

Not Applicable.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

The imagery is clear. I can see how the characters portray their lovemaking.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

None found.

Favorite Lines:

Like porcelain hands that
look fragile to touch.
I reach in slowly
gently.
Afraid so much..

Suggestions:

Additional colors for emphasis. I mean font colors and styles.

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#3758558

Review of Feel the beauty of Nature.

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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Overview:

I found your poem through Port Visit. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Title:

Feel the beauty of Nature was a great choice. It foretells what your piece is all about. Placing a period after the title is I guess unnecessary. In that case you may remove the placing of period.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

This is wow! I love the message relayed. It's very deep and worthy to ponder upon. This is the reason why I love writing Nature genre. You made it dear and this write was excellent.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:

Though rhyming is a little bit inconsistent, yet the whole stanza runs thoroughly s river's smoothness. Every word has its contibution to make the whole stanza meaningful.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

As I have said above, there's a rhyming inconsistency along the flow. Yet this doesn't ruin your piece.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

None Found. Keep it the way it appears.

Favorite Lines:

Every word. I love the concept of comparing now and then.

Suggestions:

The only thing I can suggest is ridding off the period after your title.

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#3753763

Review of Cooking with Words

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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Overview:

I found your poem though Port Visit. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

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Title:

Perfect Choice!

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

I love the style. The way you write this was perfect. The hyperbolic words being used in this piece make it more funny and interesting to read.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:

Job well done! Two thumbs up!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

Awesome imagery! I can really see how you cook and serve a piece of poetry. And if it can be tasted, I would be the first one to make a try. LOL.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

Perfect.

Favorite Lines:

Every word.

Suggestions:

This was excellent. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing.

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