Greetings Arakun the Twisted Raccoon !

I'm here to celebrate your anniversary with a review. Before I'll proceed let me say,


You know, clicking on your poetry folder was like opening a treasure chest, and "Winter Night" was the first glittering jewel I found. The title, oh man, it was pure magic – it conjured up visions of snowflakes swirling and crackling fires. And me, being the nature nerd I am, just had to dive in. And guess what? You totally delivered on the snowflake front! Your poem was like a walk through a winter wonderland, crisp and enchanting.

Here are the things I particularly liked:



Overall, "Winter Night" is a wonderful write. Perfectly executed and I couldn't find a suggestion for improvement. I enjoyed reading this and I thank you for sharing such a beautiful masterpiece. Keep your creative juices flowing. Write on!



Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Mary Ann MCPhedran !

I was cruising through the Read and Reviews section of the site and found your piece. I enjoyed reading it and so I thought of leaving you this review. May you find this helpful.

First Impression:

"PINIC ON EASTER MONDAY" is not a bad title. It immediately lured me to read your creation. One thing I noticed that made me wonder is having it in all caps. Perhaps, you did it for emphasis? The description "A POEM OF MY CHILDHOOD" suggested that this piece was written based on your childhood experience. Adding that is just right. Good job!

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Here's how I would word this poem, if given the chance:

Sun-drenched Sunday, church bells chime,
Holy whispers, family entwined.
Easter Monday, baskets in hand,
No gilded geese, just sandy land.
Egg shells dipped in dandelion gold,
Simple smiles, a story told.
Picnic spread, crusts curled with care,
Wrapped bread whispers, "Someone's there."
Fizzy water, sunlight's kiss,
Happier heart, I couldn't miss.

Final Thought:

"Picnic on Easter Monday" is a charming and heartwarming poem that captures the simple joys of family and tradition. With some refinement to rhythm, sensory details, and emotional depth, the poem has the potential to become even more evocative and memorable.

Thank you for sharing this! Keep your creative juices flowing. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings Anni Pon !



Since it's your account birthday, I especially visited your port to find something to review. This poem "Circle" immediately lured me to click and read on it. I am impressed at the very strong message this poem offers to your readers.

Here are the things I particularly like:



Here are some minor suggestions for improvement:

Overall, "Circle" is a well-crafted poem that effectively explores the themes of life's ups and downs and the continuous nature of existence.

Thank you for sharing this. Have a blast during your anniversary! Write on!

Gervic

Greetings Tim Chiu !

I was cruising through the random Read and Review section of the site. I found your piece and thought of giving you my review.

"A Beauteous Gift - A Joyous Homecoming" is a good choice of title. I was immediately drawn to read your creation. Though it's somehow a long title for a poem, it still is a good choice.


Here are the Strengths of this piece:



Overall, this is inded a great piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings jaya !

I was randomly reading poems through the Read and Review section of the site. I found your poem and enjoyed reading it, hence, this review.

First Impression:

I appreciate the positive and hopeful message of your poem, "Christmas Cheer." The use of simple language and rhyming verses makes it easily accessible and impactful.

"Christmas Cheer" is a perfect choice for a title. It's very captivating and will instantly give insight to readers about what the poem is all about. The word "cheer" creates a possitive impact to readers. Good job!


Here are some specific points that made your poem wonderful:

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If I were to rewrite this poem, here's how I word it:



This revised poem retains the spirit of the original while:




Final Thought:

"Christmas Cheer" is a heartwarming poem that captures the spirit of the season. By incorporating the suggestions above, you can further enhance its emotional impact and originality.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings Xander Riley !

I was reading through the Read and Review corner of the site and found your poetry. I enjoyed reading it and thought of dropping you some points of information.

First Impression:

I was lured by the title right away. "Love Angel" is a great choice as it provides a strong and captivating impact to most readers. Good job for that!

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If I were to rewrite this piece, here's how I word it:



Final Thought:

"Love Angel" is a sweet and heartwarming poem that celebrates enduring love. With some minor revisions to the structure and character development, the poem could reach even greater heights of emotional resonance and originality. Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings drainfall !

I was cruising through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem emerged. I enjoyed my read and thought of dropping you some points of information.

First Impression:

"A Dear me submission!" being its title is not a good choice. You can merely say "Dear Me" and simply elaborate further under the description field that this is an entry/submission for a contest.

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Final Thought:

These are strong personal affirmations with the potential to guide your actions and create positive change. Refining the wording and adding some specifics could make them even more impactful. Thank you for sharing this piece. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings Pearlwrites !

I was cruising through the Read and Review section of the site and found your piece. I enjoyed reading it and thought of dropping you my take about your writing.

Here are some things I particularly liked:


Here are some additional thoughts to consider:



Overall, this is a well-written and inspiring piece that highlights the importance of consistency. With a few minor tweaks, you could make it even more impactful and motivational for your readers. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Gervic

Greetings Kåre Enga in Udon Thani !

I was cruising through the Read and Review section of the site and found your poem. I enjoyed reading your creation and thought of leaving you this review.

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Overall:

This is a powerful and evocative poem with stunning imagery and a cosmic scope. Its concise expression and open-endedness invite multiple interpretations. Thank you for a wonderful read. Write on!.

Gervic

Greetings elizjohn !

I was cruising through the Request Review section of this site and I found your piece. I enjoyed reading it and decided to leave my take on this wonderful creation.

First Impression:

The poem is a powerful and poignant exploration of loss, grief, and societal indifference. HOW THEY BURRIED ME IN MISSISSIPPI is not a bad choice of title. For me, it's not that good either. Although, it's kind of lengthy for a poem it has this awesome drag that will certainly capture everyone's attention. If I were to create a title for this piece, HOW THEY BURRIED ME, is enough. It's short and possesses a strong impact.


Here are some aspects that stood out:

Strong Imagery: The poem uses vivid imagery to create a strong sense of place and atmosphere. Words like "dirt," "old soil," and "brambles" paint a picture of a neglected and forgotten space. The "blue curtain of lies" effectively conveys the feeling of deceit and secrecy surrounding the speaker's death.

Emotional Impact: The speaker's voice is raw and full of pain. The repetition of "They buried me" emphasizes the speaker's powerlessness and the injustice of their fate. Lines like "loved ones to never know our fate" and "condemned to this no man's land" evoke a sense of despair and longing for connection.

Social Commentary: The poem goes beyond the personal experience of the speaker to raise questions about societal attitudes towards the marginalized and forgotten. The speaker's anonymity and the lack of investigation into their death highlight the indifference of authority figures and the potential for the system to fail those who need it most.


Final Thought:

This is a well-written and thought-provoking poem that tackles difficult themes with sensitivity and emotional depth. It's sure to stay with the reader long after they've finished reading as much as it stays with me.

Thank you for the wonderful read. Keep your creative juices flowing and write on!

Gervic

Greetings strlcuckoo !

Thank you for requesting a review from me. It took me some time to read and review your piece since I'm so preoccupied with things in real life. Without much ado, here's my take on your poetry.


First Impression:

The poem is full of emotion and has the potential to be truly moving. With regards to the title "AML AML", I'm having a hard time figuring out what it meant, what it stands for. It's quite confusing to readers like me. I could only suggest to peruse the description provided to specifically elaborate this. It's not that bad though since it would definitely entice readers to take a read and find out what that means and I'm happy that I found the meaning of it at the end part of your piece.

Strengths:

Repetition: The repetition of "AML AML" effectively emphasizes the speaker's yearning and the weight of their promise. It creates a rhythm that reinforces the message of unwavering love.

Contrast: The use of contrast between the joyful declaration of "perfect mate" and the sadness of "more tears" highlights the challenges the couple faces, making their love even more poignant.

Emotional weight: The poem evokes a strong sense of longing and devotion, especially with lines like "Words to my future wife" and "These...”All My Love, All My Life”."


Suggestions for improvement:

Clarity of "AML": Consider adding a subtitle or some context to clarify what "AML" stands for. It could be the person's name, initials, or even a personal code you share. Knowing the meaning adds another layer of intimacy to the poem.

Show, don't tell: While the poem expresses emotions effectively, adding more details about the specific challenges faced or specific memories shared could make the story more relatable and impactful.

Ending: The poem ends abruptly. Adding a final line or stanza that summarizes the enduring power of the love despite the hardships could provide a more satisfying closure.


Here are some additional ideas to consider:

Explore the reason for the separation and how it affects the relationship.

Show how the letters offer comfort and hope during the difficult times.

Use specific imagery or metaphors to paint a vivid picture of the couple's bond.


Final Thought:

The poem is good to read and it showed to me the deep affection and love the writer feels for his lover. I'm glad to know AML AML stands for All My Love, All My Life. Thank you for this wonderful read. Keep your creative juices flowing.

Gervic

Greetings JCosmos !

I was reading through Read and Review page section of this site and found your poem entitled "The Color of Justice is Green Color". I was having a great time reading it and thought of leaving you this review.

TITLE:

The title is not that bad, though it's quite lenghty for a poem. There's also a presence of redundancy when you mentioned "The color of Justice is Green Color". You may omit this last word "color" or change it to something stronger. Perhaps, "Justice is Green" or something similar.


STRENGTHS:

Powerful Symbolism: The use of green and gold effectively symbolizes wealth and privilege, highlighting the link between money and access to justice.

Imagery: The poem's brevity creates a punchy message, with short, clear lines highlighting the inequalities in the justice system.

Emotional Impact: The poem evokes a sense of frustration and anger at the unfairness of privilege influencing justice.
Areas for Improvement:

Oversimplification: While the message is powerful, it potentially oversimplifies a complex issue. It might be beneficial to acknowledge the existence of individuals and organizations working to fight against these inequalities within the justice system.

Nuance and Complexity: The poem could benefit from adding nuance to its portrayal of justice. Perhaps explore instances where money doesn't guarantee justice, or individuals without wealth who fight for fair outcomes.

Possible Misinterpretations: While the intent is likely to criticize the influence of wealth, the poem could be misconstrued as endorsing wealth as a means to achieving justice. Adding depth and complexity to the portrayal of justice could help avoid this.

Alternative Color Symbolism: While green and gold work well, other colors could be considered to represent the themes of privilege and justice. Black and white, for example, symbolize contrasting ideals of good and bad, which could add another layer of meaning.


SUGGESTIONS:

Explore specific examples of how wealth influences the justice system to add depth and credibility to the message.

Consider including voices or perspectives from those who are denied justice due to lack of wealth.
End the poem with a call to action or a hopeful glimpse of a more equitable future. Play with the symbolism of colors beyond green and gold to add layers of meaning and avoid potential misinterpretations.

FINAL THOUGHT:

Overall, "The Color of Justice is Green" is a powerful piece that effectively highlights the unfair influence of wealth on the justice system. By adding nuance, complexity, and engaging with potentially misinterpreted interpretations, you can strengthen the poem's message and make it even more impactful.

Thank you for this great piece! Write on!

Gervic

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