Greetings Wanda Jane !

I am navigating randomly through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. The title "Mother" immediately caught my eye and the description "I have never tried poetry but this seemed to want out. Warning: It is a bit dark." fueled my interest to delve deeper into its content. Here are the things I found out after reading your creation:

The very act of surviving such profound trauma as childhood abuse and wrongful imprisonment speaks volumes about the protagonist's inner strength. Facing legal repercussions while grappling with fragmented memories and a distorted sense of self demonstrates an immense capacity to withstand adversity. This initial act of survival sets the stage for the possibility of reclaiming their life.

Although the poem doesn't delve into explicit details of healing, the protagonist's conscious decision to "go my own way" suggests an attempt to forge a new path independent of the abuse they endured. This can be interpreted as a crucial step towards breaking the cycle of trauma, preventing its perpetuation, and fostering healthier patterns in their own life.

The brief mention of the protagonist's father "standing by their side" signifies the presence of at least one supportive figure. While the poem doesn't elaborate on the extent of this support, even a glimmer of connection can be invaluable in navigating the aftermath of trauma. This external support system, however limited, could serve as a source of strength and potentially encourage seeking professional help, which is crucial for long-term healing.

The poem concludes with the speaker asserting their agency by stating their intent to "go my own way." This shift from being a victim of circumstance to someone who makes their own choices, however limited they may seem initially, signifies a crucial step towards reclaiming control over their narrative. While the scars of the past remain, this newfound agency empowers the protagonist to move forward on their own terms.

It's important to acknowledge that these interpretations exist within the context of a deeply disturbing narrative. The poem doesn't shy away from portraying the gravity of the trauma, and solely focusing on "positives" could risk minimizing its impact. However, recognizing these elements of resilience and the potential for hope can offer a multifaceted understanding of the protagonist's journey and the complexities inherent in confronting and overcoming such experiences.

Remember, if you or someone you know is struggling with similar experiences, please reach out for professional help. There are resources available to support healing and guide individuals towards a brighter future.

Ultimately, this is a great piece. You made mention that you never tried poetry but this poem said otherwise. The structure and rhyming scheme are well-established making this poem a beautiful piece to read. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Keep on Writing!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Beholden !

I am randomly cruising through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. The cover image and the title "The Jester King" captured me to read its content. Here are the things I noticed and how I understood the piece:

First, the poem paints a vivid picture of a dark and twisted realm, hinting at a larger mythology or backstory. This worldbuilding can be fascinating for readers who enjoy getting lost in imaginative settings and piecing together details to understand the broader context.

In addition, although the characters are grotesque and unsettling, they're not simply one-dimensional villains. The Jester King's twisted sense of joy, Maligna's mischievous cruelty, and the Unnamed One's silent manipulation suggest complex motivations and inner struggles, adding depth and intrigue to the narrative.

Furthermore, you explore themes of power, destruction, and the corrupting influence of negativity. It challenges traditional notions of heroes and villains, presenting a world where malevolent forces hold sway and the line between good and evil blurs. This subversion can be thought-provoking and unsettling, prompting readers to question their own perceptions. Your poem's vocabulary is rich and evocative, employing words that paint vivid pictures and create a dark atmosphere. The imagery is often unsettling, using grotesque metaphors and descriptions to amplify the poem's impact. Additionally, the rhythm and flow of the language contribute to the overall reading experience, creating a sense of anticipation and unease.

And Finally, you leave many questions unanswered, inviting readers to interpret its meaning and draw their own conclusions. This ambiguity can be a positive for those who enjoy pondering deeper themes and exploring different possibilities within the narrative.

Remember, these are just some potential interpretations, and the poem's true value lies in its ability to evoke unique thoughts and feelings in each reader. Truly, a magnificent piece worthy of the ribbon it bears. Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Bunny_nene !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and review section of this page and your poem appeared. As a love/romance genre lover myself, I was immediately drawn by the title. "To the boy I loved" suggests a romantic experience of the writer to her lover. And this is what I wanted to know. Delving deep into its content, here are the things I found out:

First, the poem's strength lies in its unfiltered expression of longing. The direct use of "I miss you" sets the tone, followed by specific details about the boy's physical features and personality. This rawness creates a sense of intimacy and allows readers to connect with the speaker's vulnerability.

Second, instead of solely dwelling on loss, the poem employs a subtle shift in perspective. By acknowledging "first loves" in past relationships, the speaker hints at growth and acceptance. This adds complexity to the emotions, avoiding a one-dimensional portrayal of grief.

Third. Despite the perceived distance, the poem emphasizes the enduring connection. Phrases like "truly you were my first love" and "I truly miss you" suggest a profound impact that transcends superficial changes or feigned "moving on." This lingering attachment adds depth to the portrayal of love and loss.

Fourth. Though specific to the speaker's experience, the poem touches upon universal themes of lost love, nostalgia, and coming to terms with change. Readers can easily relate to the bittersweet ache of remembering someone fondly while acknowledging their absence.

Fifth. The poem's ability to resonate with diverse audiences lies in its emotional honesty and relatable themes. Readers are likely to find themselves reflecting on their own experiences with love, loss, and personal growth, fostering a sense of empathy and shared understanding.

And lastly, while offering clear emotional expression, the poem avoids being overly prescriptive. The use of quotation marks around "too cool" and "moved on" suggests a layer of uncertainty and leaves room for readers to interpret the boy's motivations and the speaker's true feelings. This ambiguity adds intrigue and invites deeper reflection.

Overall, "To the Boy I Loved" shines through its emotional honesty, its exploration of complex themes, and its ability to connect with readers on a personal level. Thank you so much for sharing this to us! Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Roari ∞ !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of the site and your poem appeared. "No Longer Will I Fear" immediately caught my attention. I gave it a read, hence, this review.

This poem's strength lies in its ability to evoke raw, relatable emotions surrounding grief and hope in the face of loss. The opening image of rain mirroring the speaker's sorrow is powerful, and the angels' tears add a touch of ethereal comfort. The transition from fearing the inevitable ("Just as we feared") to acceptance and a newfound strength ("Death no longer will I fear") resonates deeply with anyone who has grappled with loss.

The poem's language, while simple, exudes genuine sentiment. The personal details, like reciting Psalm 23, create a sense of intimacy and draw the reader closer to the speaker's experience. It's not a grand, dramatic expression of grief, but rather a quiet, heartfelt reflection, making it all the more impactful.

Your poem doesn't wallow in sorrow but offers a glimmer of hope with the promise of reunion and the conquering of fear. This bittersweet ending provides solace and leaves a lasting impression.

Thank you so much for sharing this. Truly a beautiful piece worth reading. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings w0lfbane !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and review section of this site and your poem appeared. I was immediately drawn by your title, like a moth drawn to a flame. Hence this review.

"I Love You Mommy" captures the essence of a child's love for their mother through its unpretentious and sincere language. Its strength lies in its directness, offering a heartfelt "thank you" for the fundamental aspects of care and affection.

The poem shines in its straightforward expression of gratitude. The repeated "Thank you" acts as a powerful refrain, emphasizing the profoundness of simple things like having a roof over one's head and receiving love. It's a reminder that even the most basic acts of care hold immense meaning for a child.

Although the poem effectively conveys its message, consider enriching it with personal details. Think back to specific instances where your mother's love shone through: a warm hug after a scraped knee, a bedtime story that painted vivid landscapes in your mind, or a shared laugh over a silly moment. Weaving these memories into the poem will add emotional depth and make it resonate even stronger with your mother.

In addition, instead of solely stating "Thank you for loving me," consider using evocative language to paint a picture of that love. Describe the feeling of safety in your mother's embrace, the comfort in her voice reading stories, or the joy shared during an outing together. This "show, don't tell" approach will bring your mother's love to life and create a lasting impact.

Furthermore, if you're comfortable experimenting, consider incorporating figurative language like metaphors or similes. Comparing your mother's love to a warm blanket or describing her smile as sunshine could add a touch of creativity without compromising the poem's sincerity. Remember, the key is to keep it age-appropriate and genuine.

Remember, Heartfelt Matters Most. Ultimately, the beauty of "I Love You Mommy" lies in its heartfelt expression. Whether you choose to embellish it or leave it in its pure form, ensure it reflects your genuine love and appreciation for your mother. That's what will truly make the poem special and cherished.

Thank you so much for sharing this to us. I had a wonderful read. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Joey's Summer Sparkle !

Here's my fourth review for you. I am again doing you a port raid to continue the task I started last night. You have a bunch of exquisite poetry in your port, and I enjoyed every composition you offered. And again, "A Father's Lament" caught my attention. I had also written a poem for my father. It's called "I Love You Father"  and it's about my regrets for not doing things the right way, it's about those precious moments I failed to recognize back then.

So much for that, here are my thoughts about this piece after reading its content:

"A Father's Lament" resonates with its raw portrayal of regret and the yearning for a deeper connection. The poem's strengths lie in its emotional potency and its exploration of universal themes.

The poem's emotional core is undeniable. The father's lament, echoing through lines like "I missed the moments, with only myself to blame" and "In his heart, echoes of shame," strikes a chord with anyone who has grappled with prioritizing work or obligations over personal connections. The use of vivid imagery, such as "Work was a battlefield; life was a war," further amplifies the sense of sacrifice and missed opportunities.

Your poem poignantly underscores the theme of time's fleeting nature. The lines "time, relentless, marches on / And before we know it, the moment is gone" serve as a stark reminder that precious moments with loved ones can easily slip away. This resonates deeply, prompting introspection and encouraging readers to cherish the present.

The structure effectively guides the reader through the father's journey. The clear beginning establishes the context and emotional state, the middle delves into the missed moments and regret, and the ending delivers a plea to others. The use of rhyme and meter adds a layer of musicality and makes the poem more memorable.

Overall, "A Father's Lament" is a well-written and emotionally powerful poem that explores themes of regret, missed opportunities, and the importance of cherishing time with loved ones. It has the potential to resonate with readers who have faced similar experiences.

Indeed, a true magnificent piece worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Joey's Summer Sparkle !

Here's my third review.

"Rhyming in the Rain" is a very captivating title. I was expecting rhymes here and you didn't disappoint me. And a rhyming Acrostic? I'm impressed! The following are my thoughts about the contents of your piece:

Your poem's core strength lies in its optimistic and uplifting message. It portrays humanity as undeterred by obstacles, rain or shine, driven by an insatiable urge to explore and conquer. This message resonates deeply, particularly in today's world where resilience and adaptability are highly valued.

The acrostic structure using "TRANSPORTATION" is cleverly intertwined with the poem's narrative. This not only adds an extra layer of meaning but also provides a framework for vivid imagery. Descriptive phrases like "Towering structureless roads extending far" and "Sailing vessels cutting through the ocean's storm" paint a clear picture of the various journeys undertaken, immersing the reader in the spirit of exploration.

You masterfully employ literary devices to amplify its message and engage the reader. Personification brings the elements to life, with the wind whispering and the thunderstorm roaring, intensifying the atmosphere. The consistent rhyme scheme and rhythm create a musicality that adds to the poem's flow and memorability.

Your poem cleverly contrasts the raw power of nature (rain, wind, thunder) with the unwavering human spirit. This juxtaposition highlights the remarkable capacity for humans to navigate challenges and find joy even amidst adversity. Additionally, the concluding line, "Navigating, soaring, sailing through our interconnected world," emphasizes the unity of humanity in its shared pursuit of exploration and discovery.

Ultimately, "Rhyming in the Rain" is a well-crafted acrostic poem with a clear message and impactful imagery. It celebrates the human spirit of exploration and resilience in a way that is both uplifting and engaging. This is yet another beautiful words from you. Thank you so much for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Joey's Summer Sparkle !

I am currently doing a random member port raid, and you will be my recipient for tonight's reviews. This is actually part of my Habit Heroes goals. I especially visited your portfolio and searched for your poetry folder (since I prefer reading poems than narratives). I found your folder called "Some Poetry (Maybe)"  and this poem immediately caught my eye. The title "On the Other Side" suggests that this poem will talk about the writer's experience with long distance relationship and this is confirmed by your description "Two lovers separated by an ocean wide". Somehow, I can relate to this because my current partner lives in a place far from where I am now.

Anyway, delving deep into the contents of your offering, here are the things I found out while reading it:

The poem beautifully captures the bittersweet pang of long-distance love. Lines like "Across the vast Atlantic, under the same moon's gaze" set the stage for a poignant exploration of yearning and connection across physical distance. The "gentle blaze" of her eyes and the "ocean's endless song" become poignant symbols of both the vastness of separation and the enduring resonance of their bond.

The use of nautical imagery is particularly effective. The "lighthouse beacon" and "anchor" metaphors serve as powerful anchors in the emotional sea of separation, symbolizing the stability and hope that their love provides amidst the turbulence of distance. This imagery goes beyond mere decoration, actively shaping the reader's understanding of the relationship's strength and endurance.

The poem's musicality enhances its emotional impact. The consistent meter and rhyme scheme create a gentle rhythm, mirroring the ebb and flow of the speaker's emotions. The repetition of "Atlantic" throughout the poem acts as a refrain, reinforcing the undeniable presence of distance while simultaneously highlighting the power of love to transcend it.

While acknowledging the physical separation, the poem ultimately celebrates the connection that transcends it. The concluding lines, "An Atlantic apart, but in heart, together forever," provide a sense of closure and affirmation. This hopeful note leaves the reader with a comforting belief in the enduring power of love, even amidst physical separation.

Overall, "On the other side" is a well-crafted poem with evocative imagery and a clear emotional core. Truly a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Keep your creative juices flowing. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Sum1 !

I was navigating randomly through the Read and Review section of the site and your poem appeared. Your title "Goodbye!" immediately caught my attention. The title suggests something about letting go. And the description "Our love has decayed to nothing, it's time to say Goodbye" confirms this. Here are the things I found out while reading your words:

"Goodbye!" embarks on a passionate, albeit tumultuous, exploration of heartbreak's multifaceted nature. While it effectively captures the raw emotions – the anger, sadness, and confusion – that often follow a relationship's demise, there's potential to weave a truly captivating tapestry of words and feelings.

The poem doesn't shy away from the messy reality of heartbreak. The speaker's conflicting emotions – the desperate pleas for the person to stay intertwined with the firm push to leave – feel genuine and relatable. We're drawn into the emotional rollercoaster, experiencing the chaos that often defines the aftermath of endings.

The insistent "Goodbye!" acts as a recurring motif, punctuating each stanza with a sense of finality and emotional momentum. It burrows into the reader's mind, echoing the lingering pain and unresolved feelings.

The multilingual farewells ("Hasta La Vista Baby," "Ciao Mi Amore'," etc.) add a unique touch. They acknowledge that heartbreak transcends cultural boundaries, resonating across languages and experiences, drawing in readers from diverse backgrounds.

Ultimately, a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Fyn !

I was navigating randomly through the Read and Review section of the site and your poem appeared. The titled looks very intriguing, so I give it a read.

Here are the things I found out after reading the piece:

Your poem "Condemnation" packs a powerful punch despite its concise form. Lines like "two weeks of living hell" and "insisting it was what she wanted" effectively deliver a potent condemnation without unnecessary elaboration. This impactful delivery makes the poem memorable and thought-provoking.

The poem's strength lies in its clever use of juxtaposition. Directly comparing the woman's treatment to that of condemned criminals instantly exposes the injustice and forces the reader to confront the discrepancy. This unexpected contrast serves as a potent catalyst for critical reflection, pushing the reader to question societal norms and inherent biases.

The poem effectively taps into a range of emotions, stirring both anger and empathy. The starkness of the situation leaves a lasting impression, prompting the reader to consider the human cost involved. While the poem remains concise, the emotional weight of the subject matter ensures it lingers in the reader's mind.

Ultimately, this is a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Lou-Here By His Grace !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of the site and your poem appeared. I was immediately drawn to its title and so I thought of giving it a read, hence, this review. Honestly, I don't know what Pulpwood is or what kind of tree it is. I believe it only grows in your place because I never heard of such here.

Anyway, delving deeper into its content, here are the things I found out:

The poem effectively uses strong verbs and descriptive language to create a clear picture of the pulpwood truck, its journey, and the environmental impact it leaves behind. Lines like "blinding dust curtains" and "hardwood stacked 18 feet or more high" paint a powerful image, while "smell the smoke, hear the engine cry" draws the reader into the experience.

The contrasting imagery of the "summer heat" and the "blood and sweat and toil" effectively adds depth and complexity to the poem. Similarly, juxtaposing the "river drivers" of the past with the "future, nature laid waste by mankind" raises questions about progress and its cost.

The poem has a consistent rhythm that reinforces the relentless progress of the truck and the sense of urgency in the message. It flows smoothly throughout, making it easy to read and remember.

Overall, "Pulpwood Truck" is a well-written poem with strong imagery and a clear message about the environmental impact of the paper industry.

I enjoyed reading this beautiful piece. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings elephantsealer !

Thank you so much for reviewing one of my pieces lately. And to return the favor, I especially visited your port to find something to read on. This poem caught my attention. Well, who wouldn't get captured by this? It's about the writer's grandpa and surely this poem would tackle the writer's experiences while taking a walk with him. Delving deep into your poem's content, here are the things I notice:

"I Love to Walk with Grandpa" is a poem that transcends its simple form and charming narrative to deliver a powerful emotional punch. Its strengths lie not only in its ability to evoke warm memories and tender feelings but also in its exploration of deeper themes about life, loss, and the enduring power of love.

The poem's emotional core lies in its portrayal of the strong bond between the grandchild and the grandfather. It effortlessly navigates between moments of pure joy, like shared laughter and playful races, and moments of poignant sadness, like the acknowledgment of the grandfather's illness and the eventual loss of the grandmother.

These emotional shifts are not abrupt or jarring; instead, they flow naturally, mirroring the ebb and flow of life itself. This allows the reader to connect with the speaker's experience on a personal level, fostering a sense of empathy and understanding.

The poem's strength lies not only in its emotional resonance but also in its ability to paint vivid pictures in the reader's mind. Lines like "He tells me jokes that tickle / And stories of his youth" and "We make and share a paper boat / To sail among the fishes" transport the reader directly into the heart of the narrative.

These sensory details engage the reader's imagination and create a sense of immersion in the story. We can almost feel the warmth of the sun on our skin, smell the fresh air, and hear the gentle babbling of the river.

The grandfather figure in the poem is not just a kind and loving presence; he is also a wise mentor who imparts valuable life lessons to his grandchild. He teaches the "Golden Rules" of respect and courtesy, shares stories of his own experiences, and instills in the child a love for nature and simple pleasures.

This positive portrayal of grandparenthood is heartwarming and resonates with readers who cherish their own relationships with their grandparents. It highlights the important role that grandparents can play in a child's life, offering guidance, support, and unconditional love.

As the poem celebrates the joys of the grandparent-grandchild bond, it also subtly touches on the themes of growth and loss. The missed walk due to the grandfather's illness and the eventual mention of the grandmother's passing add a layer of depth and complexity to the narrative.

These moments remind the reader that life is not always sunshine and rainbows. They also highlight the impermanence of things and the importance of cherishing loved ones while we still have them.

Despite acknowledging the sadness of loss, the poem concludes on a hopeful note. The final lines, "I remember well one sunny day / During our walk under the sun / I run along, while Grandpa walks / What fun for me to win the race!", leave the reader with a sense of warmth and optimism.

They remind us that even though loved ones may be gone, the memories we shared with them will stay with us forever. The love that binds us transcends time and loss, offering comfort and solace in the face of grief.

In conclusion, "I Love to Walk with Grandpa" is a poem that is both heartwarming and thought-provoking. Its evocative language, relatable characters, and exploration of universal themes make it a timeless piece that resonates with readers of all ages.

Thank you so much for this wonderful offering. Indeed a truly beautiful and meaningful piece worthy of the ribbon it bears. Thank you for sharing this. Keep your creativity flow and continue to inspire us all.

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Odessa Molinari !

This review is to return the favor for reviewing one of my pieces. I especially visited your Portfolio, ventured to your Poetry folder and this poem caught my attention. "Along the Twisty Path" is not bad for a title. While it suggests the writer's experiences about life, it also provides images on your readers' mind the possible things the Protagonist may encounter.

Delving deep into the content of your poetry, here are my thoughts:

"Along the Twisty Path" isn't just a stroll through a whimsical landscape; it's a metaphorical odyssey, tracing the human experience from wide-eyed wonder to weary acceptance. Its brilliance lies in the interplay between playful imagery and sobering insights, capturing the bittersweet essence of life's winding road.

Each verse becomes a distinct stage in this journey. We skip alongside the speaker, enthralled by a fantastical fourteen-eyed cat, a surreal creature mirroring the boundless curiosity of childhood. Then, we run with them, swept up in the fervor of youthful pursuits, perhaps echoing the rush of first love or the thrill of discovery.

The poem's rhythm shifts. Dancing replaces running, a proof to the carefree exuberance of adolescence, where moments pirouette like leaves in the wind. But the music changes. Suddenly, we're trudging, burdened by the weight of textbook anxieties and the looming pressures of responsibility. The fantastical cat and Napoleonic armies retreat, replaced by the stark reality of a life circumscribed by "daily grind" and "things done for pay."

The final verse slows to a lumbering gait, each step heavy with the weariness of experience. The trip, the fall, the struggle – these stark verbs paint a poignant picture of our inevitable encounter with age and mortality. Yet, even in the face of this daunting truth, the poem avoids despair. The repeating refrain, "Along the twisty path I go," persists, a proof to the enduring human spirit, the will to continue the journey even as the shadows lengthen.

The beauty of "Along the Twisty Path" lies in its ability to hold these contrasting elements in tension. It celebrates the exuberant highs of the early verses without glossing over the sobering realities that await. The fantastical imagery, far from being mere escapism, becomes a vital counterpoint to the mundane, reminding us of the ever-present potential for wonder amidst the routines of life.

Furthermore, the poem encourages self-reflection. The fourteen eyes of the cat could be windows into different facets of our own personalities, anxieties, and perspectives. Napoleon's army might represent internal battles we wage against personal demons or societal pressures. The textbooks, too, might symbolize the weight of knowledge and expectations we carry on our shoulders.

Ultimately, "Along the Twisty Path" transcends the simplicity of its form. It becomes a poignant mirror reflecting back the bittersweet beauty of our human experience, a journey marked by fleeting joys and inevitable struggles, where wonder and disillusionment intertwine in an ever-shifting dance. It's a poem that lingers long after the last verse, prompting us to ponder the paths we walk and the stories etched onto their winding curves.

Indeed, a beautiful piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Hi again BIG BAD WOLF is Merry !

Alright, here's my second review to return the favor of reviewing some of my items. Honestly, your words hooked me. I was like a hungry carp drawn to your bait. "Scent of Memories" is one great of a title. From this coined with your discription, images started to form in my mind. Fishing had been my favorite childhood hobby and I expect that this poem would be relatable.

Delving deep into the content, here are my thoughts:

"Scent of Memories" delicately unravels the fabric of time, weaving together sensory threads to resurrect a childhood vignette. The poem's strength lies in its ability to transport us directly into the speaker's experience, not through grand narratives, but through the subtle yet evocative power of smell.

The poem opens with a grounded, almost earthy note – the "smell of worms." This seemingly insignificant detail immediately anchors us in a specific memory, perhaps of fishing trips with family or friends. From this olfactory trigger, the poem embarks on a sensory journey, each line building upon the last like notes in a delicate symphony.

The progression feels organic, as natural as the ripples spreading across a lake. The "smell of fish" conjures visions of a sparkling lake, the glint of sunlight on its surface. The sight of a "pole" leaning against a weathered dock, the anticipation of a tug on the line, the thrill of the catch.

As the poem unfolds, the emotional intensity rises. The "sound of laughter" rings in my ears, a joyful chorus of shared moments. I witness the "sight of a carp," the biggest fish the brother ever caught, a proof to their skill and perseverance. The poem invites me to celebrate this small triumph, to share in the speaker's pride and joy.

While the poem is undeniably charming and evocative, its potential lies in delving deeper into the emotional core. Is this merely a joyous remembrance of childhood? Or does it carry a whisper of bittersweetness? Are the brothers still connected? Exploring these nuances could add depth and complexity, transforming the poem from a nostalgic snapshot into a poignant reflection on the passage of time and the enduring bonds of family.

The current poem structure adds a playful touch, but the poem could also be reimagined in adding more lines. This would allow for a more fluid and emotional flow, mimicking the way memories unfold in our minds, not in neat stanzas, but in a swirling vortex of sights, sounds, and smells.

"Scent of Memories" is a captivating poem with the potential to blossom into an even more impactful piece. Remember, the most powerful poems often lie hidden within the nuances of experience, waiting to be unearthed and shared with the world. Keep refining, keep exploring, and trust your creative instincts. The seeds of a masterpiece are already sown within "Scent of Memories." Thanks for the wonderful read. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Octavius !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing one of my pieces. I especially raided your port, looked for the poetry folder and then this piece caught my attention. "Evolution of Tears" is a perfect choice of title. It connotes a deeper meaning about life. The title alone, wraps me with threads of interrogations that I hope to untangle. And only by reading through its content would clear the questions formed in my mind.

"Evolution of Tears" transcends the typical religious poem, weaving threads of emotional complexity under the banner of faith. It's a whispered prayer sung in the dark, its beauty residing in the raw honesty of its protagonist's struggle.

The poem opens with a masterstroke – acknowledging the paradoxical intertwining of pain and pleasure. This refusal to neatly categorize emotions resonates deeply. Pain informs joy, loss births gratitude, and the speaker chooses not to sanitize this truth. By embracing the "meta-morphs" of experience, the poem lays bare the messy reality of being human, creating a foundation for a profound exploration of faith's role in navigating these choppy waters.

The poem then leaps from the internal to the external, finding parallels in the ever-changing scenes of nature. Raindrops morphing into sleet and snow mirror the speaker's own descent, yet harbor a whisper of hope. The wintery elements, cold and unforgiving, hold the promise of spring's rebirth. This subtle juxtaposition reflects the protagonist's journey – even in the harshest depths, faith whispers the possibility of renewal.

As the poem unfolds, the vulnerability becomes palpable. The speaker bares their soul, acknowledging the gnawing loneliness, the desperate search for consolation in a seemingly barren landscape. These lines "Bear me up on Your wings, | So my feet don't touch the ground- | For I am looking for consolation | Here in this place, but none can be found." conveys the writer's desperate plea to get away from his struggles. This open wound of need invites the reader into the heart of the struggle, forging a powerful emotional connection.

When all else fails, the poem finds refuge in the luminous threads of faith. The speaker clings to every divine word, their dependence not blind piety, but a lifeline cast into the abyss. These promises are not abstract pronouncements, but tangible anchors, whispering hope and sustenance in the face of despair.

One of the poem's most striking images is the reframing of tears as "tiny triumphs." Here, suffering transforms into a badge of honor, a proof to the battles fought within. They are not mere droplets of sorrow, but the very currency of surrender, paving the way for release and transformation.

DEEP THOUGHTS BEYOND THE TEXT:

Evolution of Tears" transcends the confines of the page. Its rich imagery lends itself to other art forms. Imagine the poem's vulnerability set to a melancholic piano melody, the speaker's yearning echoed by a soaring violin. Such a rendition could elevate the emotional impact, creating a multi-sensory experience that resonates even deeper.

This poem reminds us that faith is not a sterile sanctuary, but a battleground where hope wrestles with despair. By embracing the raw fabric of human experience, "Evolution of Tears" offers a poignant proof to the enduring power of faith in the face of life's storms.

Indeed, a very thought-provoking, meaningful piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings BIG BAD WOLF is Merry !

This review is to return the favor of reviewing some of my pieces. I especially visited your port and I found this poem "Forever Dark".

I was immediately captivated by the title, like a moth drawn to a flame. The title suggests a sense of horror and that's what I wanted to uncover. Then your description clears the mystery that crowded my mind. A poem about a tragic occurence of nature.

Here are rhe things I found out after reading the content:

"Forever Dark" evokes a haunting image of a world choked by an endless eclipse. Its strengths lie in its strong imagery, the desperate refrain of "Where is the light?", and its concise effectiveness. However, delving deeper can unlock even greater potential.

Firstly, the cause of the perpetual eclipse remains shrouded in mystery. Is it a celestial anomaly, a technological mishap, or something more enigmatic? Exploring the source could add layers of intrigue and complexity. Imagine, for instance, a poem detailing the scientists' frantic attempts to understand the anomaly or a myth whispering of ancient forces unleashing an eternal shadow.

Secondly, as the poem paints a vivid picture of the world, it lacks the touch of a human experience. Introducing a character, a lone farmer desperately nurturing crops under artificial light, a soldier haunted by battles under the blind sun, or a child yearning for a glimpse of dawn, could make the poem deeply personal and emotionally resonant. Their struggles, fears, and perhaps even their fleeting moments of hope would draw the reader into the desolate world they inhabit.

Lastly, as the bleak ending effectively captures the gravity of the situation, a hint of resilience or the spark of rebellion against the unending darkness could leave a more lasting impression. Perhaps the crops, nurtured with unwavering determination, sprout luminescent flowers. Maybe the whispers of a forgotten song of light resurface. Or perhaps, a lone scientist discovers a glimmer of hope in a data stream, hinting at a possible way to pierce the eclipse. Such possibilities leave the reader with a sense of lingering agency, even in the face of immense darkness.

Expanding on these elements, playing with structure or rhyme, and injecting figurative language can further enrich the poem. Similes might compare the perpetual night to a suffocating blanket, while metaphors could liken the characters' hopes to flickering embers defying the gloom.

By exploring the cause of the darkness, adding a human voice, and introducing a glimmer of hope, "Forever Dark" can transform from a strong poem into a truly captivating and profound exploration of our own resilience in the face of seemingly insurmountable darkness.

Overall, this is a great piece worth reading. Thank you for sharing this piece. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Sumojo !

I was cruising randomly though the Read and Review section of Writing.com and your poem appeared. The title "Hidden thoughts" captivated me to delve deep into your poem's content. I enjoyed reading it and thought of giving you this review.

Also I am reviewing as part of "SuperPower Winter Fun Raid" . Without much a do, Here's what struck me most:

"Hidden Thoughts" resonates as a raw exploration of navigating one's inner labyrinth. Your poem, in its brevity, masterfully captures the disorientation of feeling disconnected from your own emotional core.

The opening lines, "Sometimes I feel locked out/ Of how I truly feel," plunge the reader directly into the speaker's existential vulnerability. It's a sentiment many can relate to, the unnerving uncertainty of where authentic emotion hides amidst the masks we wear.

Your poem doesn't shy away from delving into the perplexing nature of self-perception. Questions like "What is it all about?" and "Which part of me is real?" echo in the reader's mind, mirroring the speaker's struggle to grapple with their own identity.

The image of "old skin" brilliantly symbolizes the layers of constructed selves we present to the world. It evokes a sense of shedding, of the potential for uncovering something rawer and more genuine beneath the surface.

The final line, "I find it difficult to know/ As hidden depths I still discover," is both a confession and a promise. It leaves the reader hanging, yet hopeful, as the speaker embarks on a journey of self-discovery towards their unknown depths.

Overall, this was a great write worth reading. Thank you so much for sharing this. Keep your creative juices flowing.



Best regards,
Gervic

Greeting sindbad !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of Writing.com and your poem appeared. I was immediately captured by your title's allure. I was like a thirsty butterfly drawn to a honeysuckle vine. As a lad who likes romance genre, I can't help but delve deep into your poem's content.

The poem masterfully paints a contrast between the woman's vibrant exuberance and the speaker's melancholic longing. "Lost in her world of make-believe" beautifully juxtaposes the woman's carefree joy with the speaker's grounded pragmatism, silently yearning for a connection that remains elusive. Each stanza peels back a layer of the woman's personality, showcasing her fluctuating emotions through "prattles, guffaws in glee" and "fret and mourn invariably." It creates a dynamic portrait, constantly questioning whether she's truly oblivious or holding back a veiled vulnerability. The poem's tone seamlessly shifts from hopeful anticipation ("So caught up in all that she feels") to a resigned acceptance ("She'll go on with this fiddle-dee-dee"). This subtle evolution reflects the speaker's emotional journey, making their unspoken desires all the more palpable.

And how could I forgot the excellent rhyme and rhythmic pattern of this beautiful composition! You masterfully crafted this piece that made me detect not a single flaw.

Overall, this is a great piece and I thank you for sharing this with us. Keep your creative juices flowing.

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Tim Chiu !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of this site and your poem appeared. I enjoyed reading it and thought of leaving you this review.

Your poem, "The Hum and the Thumb," effectively captures the contemporary experience of relying on cell phones for social connection. The opening line, "Wow, the best is beginning to hum," immediately piques curiosity, leaving the reader wondering what the "best" might be. This intrigue is cleverly revealed to be the familiar hum of a phone coming to life, setting the stage for the poem's exploration of this ubiquitous device.

The poem's strength lies in its clear and relatable depiction of everyday phone use. The specific details, like "flipping open the cell with my thumb" and the "lasting chime of the cell phone ring," paint a vivid picture that resonates with anyone who has ever eagerly awaited a call or text. The consistent use of end rhymes and a steady rhythm further enhance the poem's accessibility, making it enjoyable to read aloud or silently absorb.

However, to truly elevate "The Hum and the Thumb," consider delving deeper into the emotional core of the experience. The poem effectively conveys anticipation and thankfulness and it could benefit from exploring the full spectrum of emotions associated with phone use. Does the speaker feel a sense of excitement, loneliness, or even dependence on their phone? Are there underlying anxieties or frustrations about the constant connectivity it provides? By exploring these emotional nuances, you can add greater depth and complexity to the poem's message.

Furthermore, infusing the poem with figurative language can significantly enhance its imagery and impact. Instead of simply stating that the phone hums, consider using a metaphor or simile to evoke a more evocative description. Perhaps the hum is a "siren song," luring the speaker into a world of virtual connection, or a "steady heartbeat," symbolizing the constant presence of the phone in their life. Similarly, the anticipation of the call could be described as a "fizzing anticipation" or a "knot of nervous excitement" in the speaker's stomach. By employing these literary devices, you can create a richer sensory experience for the reader and elevate the poem's emotional resonance.

Finally, consider experimenting with the poem's sentence structure. Although the current structure is clear and concise, introducing more variety can add dynamism and emphasis. Try incorporating longer, flowing sentences to build anticipation, or use shorter, fragmented sentences to capture fleeting thoughts or emotions. This variation will keep the reader engaged and allow you to highlight specific moments within the poem.

By incorporating these suggestions, you can transform "The Hum and the Thumb" from a well-written poem into a truly captivating and thought-provoking piece. Remember, the best poems often go beyond the surface, delving into the emotional complexities and hidden meanings that lie beneath the everyday experiences they depict.

Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful piece. Keep your creative juices flowing.

Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Maria Pen !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of this page and found you writing. I enjoyed reading it and thought of giving you this review. But before I'll proceed, let me take this opportunity to welcome you to our wonderful writing community - Writing.Com! Welcome!

"LOVE TAKES TIME" is a good choice of title. I firmly believe to this, indeed Love takes time. I was immediately drawn to delve deep into the content of your writing.

Here are the positive things I found while reading this:



Although the story is good, I still found areas the your might consider improving. Instead of directly mentioning your emotions (elated, felt like winning the lottery), consider using descriptive actions and dialogue to show them. For example, you could describe your heart racing, a wide smile lighting up your face, or your voice trembling with excitement.

In addition, the story focuses heavily on the emotional reunion but lacks details about the church setting or your friend's appearance beyond the metaphor. You could describe the church's warm interior, the familiar scent of incense, or your friend's specific outfit or hairstyle. This adds depth and immersion for the reader.

Furthermore, briefly mentioning being busy and missing church leaves room for exploration. Consider delving into the reasons behind your absence, the potential struggles, and the significance of returning. This could add conflict and complexity to the story.

And lastly, the final sentence about love and time feels disconnected from the immediate interaction with your friend. Consider tying the themes of friendship, faith, and time back to the specific context of your reunion to create a more cohesive ending.

Oh and before I forgot, I found one typographical error. "Your You're here now, and its so good to see you!"

Overall, this is a sweet and feel-good story with potential for further development. By adding sensorial details, exploring the characters and setting more deeply, and weaving in the themes through actions and dialogue, you can make your story even more engaging and impactful. Thank you for sharing this and keep your creative juices flowing. Write on!


Best regards,
Gervic

Greetings Netty !

I was cruising randomly through the Read and Review section of this site and found your piece. I enjoyed reading it and thought of leaving you this review.

"A REUNION IN HEAVEN" is pretty well chosen for a title. It evokes a clear message of a glorious meeting of your passing loved ones who are now in heaven. I was immediately drawn to delve deep into the content of your poetry.

The text you've written captures the essence of a joyous and awe-inspiring reunion in heaven. Here are some suggestions for further enhancing its evocative power:

Specificity: Consider adding specific details about the loved ones and friends you imagine being reunited with. This could personalize the vision and make it more emotionally resonant.



Sensory details: Adding sensory details can immerse the reader in the celestial scene.



Figurative language: Using metaphors or similes can elevate the text and add deeper meaning.



Emotional impact: Although joy and awe are clear, consider exploring other emotions that might arise.



Structure and flow: The text can be further enhanced by considering its structure and flow.



Overall, this was a great write with deep meaning and emotional impact to readers. Thank you so much for letting me read this. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic