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Review of No Pity  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Elisa I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a poet's feeling that she is a frustrated, bad poet.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say you think you can let go of the hurt you've felt on these lands. The last of your stink has floated into the clouds. You never have been good fighting against the crowds. So long, stinkers! are your parting words. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of disgust and throwing up your hands. The title of your poem "No Pity" is appropriate in that it seems you have none for yourself or any other members. Areas for improvement: I admire your courage and ability to make a decision. Perhaps a few days of rest and a fresh outlook will be helpful. Best wishes.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Nice Office Job  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a pleasant job in a good company.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of conscientiousness. You enjoy your office job and are stimulated by making money. You get along with your supervisor. She trusts you: you are reliable and diligent. You're never late. She trusts you with new demands and never has to sit close by. You're given due respect and try to do your best. The title "A Nice Office Job" is fairly appropriate. My Favorite Part: You are stimulated by money and get along with your supervisor. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Nicely written. Rhyme pattern is wonderfully consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Music to the Ears  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of different schools of musical thought/performance.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
There are myriads of different schools of music: symphony, jazz, country, blues, rock 'n roll, rap, hip hop, r&b, and your favorite, the best of all is pop. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of surveying music. The title of your poem "Music to the Ears" is appropriate in that most all music is good, but tops in your book is pop, which is music to your ears. Areas for improvement: N/A. My Favorite: jazz, country, pop and my very best: classical piano/symphony, especially the romance period from the Renaissance.


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Rhyme is a consistent pattern. Good description. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What I say  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Me and My Thoughts, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes what the poet and how she says it.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of discriminating judgment or finesse. It's not what you say, but how you say it. They now ask you about sorrow, but only a few people understand your feelings about the emotion.. Now those people know that problem too. The title of your poem "What I Say" is appropriate in that it tells what to expect without giving it all away. My favorite part: Your comment: It's not what; it's how. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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There is a splash of rhyme in your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of soothing water  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your haiku poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This haiku poem is most refreshing.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your haiku poem, as there is an underlying tone of peacefulness. The title of your poem, "soothing water" is most appropriate and gets at the essence of what's happening in your poem. I easily envision your poem. First, I imagine myself alone at night, sitting on the bank as the water trickles down the rocks of the creek. The water is oh! so soothing and I am at peace. I reluctantly leave: I surely don't want to give up my place in the non-sun. Areas of improvement: N/A My favorite part: calming is the water.

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Your poem is a Japanese haiku. No punctuation or capitals are used, as traditional of the Japanese. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
H Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of fields of grain alien artists canvases.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of appreciation of science fiction. The title of your poem "Crop Circle Armada" is appropriate in that there is a fleet on this mission. Flying saucers fly across the sky as a mother ship directs them. Citizens tremble with fright as the saucers hover over fields of rye. Grain stems flatten and take geometric shapes.


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This Octavia Roma form poem is effective, including a rhyme scheme of abababcc with eight lines. and 10 - 11 syllables in each line. The poem moves along like the platinum saucers move across the sky. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
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Did you mean to say canvases or did you mean a verb canvas?

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Review of Spiritual Echoes  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes morning meditations.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of expressing the love of God. Spiritual echoes enchant one's soul. as I chant God's name. I meditate on His word and give thanks for another day. Your title of the poem "Spiritual Echoes" is appropriate in that echoes are found when you meditate on His word. Areas for improvement: N/A. My favorite part: giving thanks for a new day.

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Your poem is Unrhymed. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.


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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes one of Monet's paintings of water lilies.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I truly enjoyed reading your poem of French painter Claude Monet's impressionist painting of water lilies on a light green lily pad with shadows from the jungle in the background. There is an underlying tone and tue appreciation of art history. The title of your poem is appropriate in that you are reporting your knowledge and appreciation of Claude Monet, well- known for water lilies. My favorite part: Your wonderful description throughout the poem. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid, eg the gorgeous and colorful aqueous plant life in watery opalescence. Your attention to detail in this poem is exquisite. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Tower for Two  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Marcus, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your narratives, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This short narrative is about your life so far.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
It seems that the answers you are seeking have to do with not so much your. actual thoughts of being average and then achieving more when you became a renaissance man, but in your self-image of yourself. You have to be confident to find that tower-mate, which by your admonition you have lacked until you became a renaissance man. If you approached potential tower-mates the way you approached paintings, music and the like, you just might find a tower-mate. . I enjoyed your narrative, as there is an underlying tone of searching within yourself. Your title of "Tower for Two" is very appropriate. My favorite part: your description of the Renaissance man. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Well written. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Me and My Thoughts, . I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes where your heart lies.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your heart lies between your lungs and your rib cages. It also lies when you're next to your beloved friend. A sad state of affairs when you need to lie to your beloved. I enjoyed your poem, as there is an underlying tone of cagey or Tom foolery. The title for your poem 'Where My Heart Lies" is fairly appropriate in that you do answer where, but you also answer when which colors your poem with a different perspective. Favorite part: The cleverness of your poem.

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Your poem is Unrhymed verse.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.


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Review of Snow Fall!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Cubby, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the effects of snowfall.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You cannot go very far as snow is everywhere. You might fall on your derrière. Your tires are worn; your tread is bare. Snow is falling on your car. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of caution. The title of your poem "Snow Fall" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: iIt seems that future tense "you'll fall on your derrière" is more logical than the wording you have. My favorite part: Snow! Oh No! It's everywhere. I cannot go so awfully far. There is an element of gleefulness with a new snowfall. I remember from my Northern California experience living in the mountains. My family could hardly wait for the sun to shine so they could play in the snow.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Green  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Green is a popular color and environmental term fairly recently. You speak of grass, leaves, pine needles, the vines of tomatoes, and limes. Life abounds when green's around.

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You spoke of new tomatoes of the vine. Technically you are really referring to the vines of new tomatoes, and you should call it that. This is a minor error in language usage. Rhyme pattern is consistent unless you decide to get accurate with language, i.e., the vines of new tomatoes.

I was distracted by one error in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Me and My Thoughts, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a complex poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Definitions are necessary to analyze your poem: First, The, definite article especially before a specific noun as compared to a or an, a general or indefinite article; Second: Most, in the greatest quantity or degree; Third: Complex, interconnected or interwoven parts, adjective; Fourth: Poem, composition that, though not in verse, is characterized by great beauty of language or expression. Your most complex poem is stated herein: LIFE. It qualifies from a dictionary point of view. I liked reading your terse poem, as there is an underlying philosophical tone. When I first read your poem, I couldn't imagine how I would review it or what I would say. Then I decided I could study your poem for years, so here is a beginning! The title of your poem is very appropriate in that it applies to just that: The Most Complex Poem. My Favorite part: LIFE. Areas to improve: N/A

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Fireworks  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Amay, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a fascination with fireworks.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Cascades of colorful sparkling light. Whoosh! Follow it. Earth shaking. Goosebumps grow. Sparks fly through the air. Emotional encounters. Look at him. Swept off your feet. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of excitement and happiness. The title of your poem "Fireworks" is appropriate for your poem. My favorite part: Sparks fly through the air. Swept off my feet.

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Whoosh! Your poem begins on an upbeat note.of onomatopoeia. I can just hear the sound. Description is vivid, eg darkness encroaches, a charge ignites. Your poem is Unrhymed.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Love Letters  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the reminiscing, remembering of mom and dad too, how you're affected by your childhood and the emotions that tear you apart.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Sweet sentiment engulfs your past and brings my emotions to a peak as my mind's eye follows you around your parents' home. Adventure runs rampant as you speak of the different things from your past. And what a magnificent idea your mom had in which she wrote you letters regularly for many years. And gave them all to you when she knew her last day was near. The last letter she wrote you right before she died, she told you she missed your dad and was going to join him in heaven soon. She knew her children and knew you'd be the one who grieved the most with your loss. Telling you she'd be in your heart was a special message because that's where you need her. Then she spoke to you like a tender, young child you must have been. And goodbye was "Quit crying. I love you" to her sensitive child.

I enjoyed reading your poem. as there is an underlying tone of compassion and loyalty. You must have had a good friendship with her. The title of your poem "Love Letters" is appropriate. My favorite part: Down at the bottom of the trunk, wrapped in linen and tied with twine, I found a packet of hand-written letters. I envision a precious package of which you touch it, smell it, look at it. It must be special because look how it's wrapped.

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You have done a perfect job of showing not telling. Your pacing is perfect with a smooth flow of words and fits your rhyme just right. Effective use of personification, eg you have given human traits to her chest which sat there all alone at the foot of the canopy bed in the guest room. Description is vivid, eg a misty morning when lilacs bloomed. I can easily see this.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of 'Dante Alighieri'  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is metaphorically pleasing and paints a picture of risk.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Circumstances navigate the vessel. Pushed and shoved by moons of discontent and the ability of choice-driven diggings, you take the helm and raise the sextant. With tact you tack your way. My favorite part follows: We set forth upon the Dante Algieri, riding the winds of chance toward our destiny. You speak of the human traits of circumstance dictating, discontent, choice, leadership, and tact. There are other refences to the human condition in your poem.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of adventure on the high seas. The title of your poem is appropriate in that Dante Aligieri is the name of the vessel.

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Use of metaphor is very effective, eg circumstances navigate the vessel through uncharted waters. Your poem is written beautifully in the language of the metaphor of sailing.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Pyrrhus's Lament  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
His Percy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poem provides a canvas to paint a picture of Pyrrhus' lamenting a situation.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your friend's love was unsolicited and relentless. It crushed you with hopelessness. Only the gods would find that amusing. All appreciated her beauty and what was beneath. eg her pride and her rich purse. I find your poem requires focus and knowing what the allusions are, eg who is Pyrrhus? The dictionary says he is a ruler of a kingdom, a male monarch. Historically, he was a king of Epirus who defeated the Romans in two battles. Off that, the title of your poem "Pyrrhus's Lament" tells me you are writing about yourself as the male ruler. She is the one woman you would never hope to win because there is too much bitterness between you. Her mother would never forgive. You are a condemned man, yet innocent. This line tells me you were accused of an impropriety, but you believe you're innocent, mainly because the love was unsolicited. Whether it's solicited or not, I believe, is a moot point. My favorite part: She remains unblemished despite all that's happened. She is a strong, unbroken and compelling woman. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of analyzing emotion.

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Simile is used effectively, eg like a serpent's coil of unrelenting grip. A poetic convention of consonance, eg coin to compromise.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Finally Free  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of unrequited love and an unexpected twist at the end.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your beloved left you forty years ago. Now when things are going well, and after all your heartache and tears, you received a letter from your beloved, telling you she's getting old and she'd like to get together with you again. She was right. Your love returned quickly, but with teary eyes, you slowly walked away, no longer chained. I can understand that even though you still had feelings for her, you also needed to protect yourself from an unrequited love. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of honesty and courage to walk away from the situation. The title of your poem "Finally Free" is very appropriate in that is exactly what happened. My favorite part is: He slowly walked away, no longer chained.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid, eg no longer trapped in a quagmire.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Simpler Times  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem tells a story of a more simple childhood in 1954.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You were an energetic, involved, enterprising young boy. You were even compassionate to your dad's work day. You were learning the value of a dollar, or more accurately a nickel in 1954. Learning the value of money and having to save it made you quite sensitive to your dad's long day. The activities flying the simple glider and the more complex propelled plane helped you become a more responsible child. I find your growing up years very interesting. I should probably congratulate your mom and dad. Nice job.

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Well-written. Your changing from past to present to present perfect tense jarred my reading of your poem a little. You might want to give that some thought.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Vocabulary  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Elicia, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas to paint a picture for the study of vocabulary.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When talking to the nation, shorten your words and sacrifice your education. Exercise your brain with a new word or two. Did you check the dictionary or are you too lazy to check it? In a display of lgnorance, keep writing to increase your vocabulary. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of humor and satire in parts. Write on!

*Pen*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Metaphor is used well, You've become a black sheep in an intellectual slipping backwards. Description is vivid, eg writing intricate works.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Frolic  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Pat, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your tanka poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This tanka poem paints a picture of water and has a wonderful lyrical quality.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I can easily envision your delightful tanka of water dancing through wooded hills and soothing weary visitors, perhaps allowing them to put their toes in the water. Water is frolicking over pebbles and makes melodies. It dances through wooded hills and soothes weary visitors. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of creativity and visualization. My favorite part: soothing weary visitors.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
The Japanese tanka is an Unrhymed lyrical verse made up of morae or syllables. Lines 1 and 3 consist of five syllables and the rest are made up of seven syllables or The Japanese use the term morae. Other languages use syllables. Personification used effectively, giving water a bit of a human quality. Description is vivid, eg frolicking over pebbles. Metaphors are expressive, eg dances through wooded hills.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Life and Death  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Angel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems,, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the emotional complications of death..

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
As life is leaving, pain is utmost in his mind. You watch unconcerned. He's gone now. Sadness is expected, and you're dead inside. I read your poem with sensitivity, as there is an underlying tone of grieving and compassion for him. I'm sad for the two of you, yet in a way I'm also happy for you too. Death is such an ordeal and now you two can be peaceful, you on earth, him in his afterlife. The titlle "Life and Death" is appropriate to your poem. Most memorable: Yet I'm dead inside. This is sad, but at least it's over.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas to paint a picture of young teenagers in middle school.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You speak of fond memories of childhood, then the onset of adolescence marked by old shoes and games. The line becomes blurry if the crowd disapproves.Until we get through the big change of adolescence, it's rough weather. Those middle school years are tough when the 13-year-old feels gangly and awkward. It is a time of not knowing whether you like yourself or not. This is a time when you should develop lifetime interests and good friendships. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of evaluating. The title of your poem "The Children in Middle School" is appropriate. Most memorable: The lines become blurry if the crowd disapproves.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, and consonance is effective, eg popularity plummets. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Stanza 3: lines 1 and 3 need to be re-worked.
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Review of Love is a sunset  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Spidey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a sunset by the poet in love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The colors of a sunset form patterns, each a unique vision of beauty and perfection. The passionate sun sets behind the earth. A sadness sets in as you realize you will never see that unique beauty again.

I enjoyed reading your lovely poem, as there is an underlying tone of appreciation and love of sunsets. The title of you poem "Love Is a Sunset" is appropriate in that you are fascinated with sunsets.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Well written. Description is vivid, eg each one a unique pattern of beauty, of perfection.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Place of GOD!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Jaiam, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of where God belongs.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Before all things there was God. In the end there will be God. Lord is God. Where does the reader place God?

I enjoyed reading your short poem, as there is an underlying tone of examining theology. The title of your poem "The Place of God" is appropriate. Areas of improvement: I was confused by your last question, "Where place you God? ". Clarification of your thought would help.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is Unrhymed verse. You used the word 'things' four times in eight lines. Try using synonyms for some of these.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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