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Review of Recollections  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Brom21, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece describes looking back at childhood memories after both parents have passed away.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You speak of childhood memories, riding your bicycle all day around the lake near the forest. I understand the wild environment of which you speak. I experienced that kind of environment for 12 years. There were some disadvantages, but there more real benefits. I'm sure you wouldn't trade your childhood for anything on this earth. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of reminiscing that is just precious. The title of your piece "Recollections" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestions: You have made some errors that are probably just clerical errors. I think you need to edit more. See below:
Paragraph 3: toward NOT towards
with those who were as I was NOT to those who were as I was
a slender fellow NOT slender fellow
like him, but NOT like t
I suppose NOT is suppose
So often, but NOT so often but

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Review of Springtime Colors  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the real purpose of springtime colors.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You describe your backyard as ablaze with vibrant colors.n The flowers attract insects to aid in pollination. Robins, finches and hummingbirds come out. They are migrating north after a long winter. Colors are sent to make hearts sing. They renew the soul of man.

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Nice use of metaphor, eg colors of spring are sent to make the heart sing. Description is vivid, eg a blaze of vibrant colors. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent and the pattern is rhyme in second and fourth lines of each stanza.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Flower's  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi DBingham3, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a way to smile.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Color and scent of flowers say many things, one of which is God's creation. If God can bring a smile to one's face, think of what He can do with us if we allow Him full access.

I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of appreciation of God and what He does Es with nature. The title of your poem "Flower's" is fairly appropriate in that you named the poem after your topic. Flower's show possession; Flowers is plural. You need to title your poem "Flowers" to be grammatically correct. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid, eg such an array of beauty. You have written a very nice Unrhymed verse.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi G. M., I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of comforting someone whose loved one has passed away.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When a person grieves for a loved one, are there any kind words that can be said? Are there deeds that can be done when a person is angry with God and heaven? Are there ways that can heal the pain? You state you'll pray for the person and loved one. You offer your heartfelt services in the name of Jesus.

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The rhyme pattern of your poem is fairly consistent. You need to check Stanzas 3, 5 and 6 for re-wording as some of the words do not rhyme.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jace, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes true friendship which is often found in unexpected places.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your essay describes genuine friendship found online, WDC writing.com. While you never thought it possible to find a true friend online, you are thrilled to have found a lifelong friend, Shannon Chapel through a secret angel program in which you spent four weeks doing special things for her, i.e. reviewing her portfolio. You are separated by geography and joined by a bond between the two of you. Some thoughts to ponder: You might think about giving some examples of reviews of her work. Did she review some of your work? Can you give some examples? This is all an effort to show not tell. Essays are meant to persuade. Can you show me how your essay does this? I enjoyed reading your essay. as I felt you were exploring a new avenue of an online friendship. The title of your essay is appropriate "Friendship~~A Tribute.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. or spelling. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Love Denied  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Cubby, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poetry, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of falling in love, infatuation. .

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You fell in love. He hoped to rise above and see his fantasy. She disappeared and his passion raged uncared. She was the sun and moon. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of infatuation, yet denied though not untried. The title of your poem, "A Love Denied" is appropriate, as happens with infatuation. Areas of improvement. N/A.

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Description is vivid, eg became uncaged. Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Metaphor is effective, eg consumed with fire by his desire.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This haiku sonnet paints an exciting and adventuresome picture.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You describe the adrenaline rush that you get from doing risky activities, eg skydiving, diving with sharks in the vast ocean, skiing the back country and taking Avalanche chances on your life. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is a tone of excitement among challenges. The title "That Which Kills Me" is appropriate in that you are referring to the risk element. Areas for improvement: N/A..

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Nice job with your haiku sonnet. Your poem is Unrhymed with syllable counts of four quatrains and two couplets at the end. Consonance is well-done, eg bated breath.
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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Red Roses  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Joy,, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a heartfelt of roses and romance flowering.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Crimson romance and ashes are meant for joy, meloncholy or love. You send your beloved jubilant rose petals: Sentiments find refuge in flowers. Roses are scented, blushing like midnight smiles inside a dream and heartfelt longing. I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of emotions expressed with nature. The title of your poem "Red Roses" is appropriate in that red roses can express deep love or melancholy moments. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Effective use of metaphor, eg jubilant rose petals, Unrhymed verse. Description is vivid, eg sentiments find refuge in flowers.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of A Bit about Roots  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the many different facets of roots.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You share that not to know a family's history is sad. Strong roots that will withstand a strong wind are beneficial so a tree can withstand a strong wind and not fall on its face. Spring makes seeds come alive and allows them to sprout and thrive. Some roots are good, some bad. Roots in your sewer lines clog your toilets and drains. May all your roots be

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of exploration of a thought. The title of your poem "A Bit About Roots" is appropriate in that you have studied and reported on some roots.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Effective use of metaphor, eg, strong, widespread roots keep a tree in a strong wind from falling on its face. This example can be applied to family history or trees. Your rhyme pattern is fairly consistent, except stanza four the word roots is used for rhyming twice.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Our Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Carly, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This lovely poem was written for the poet's wedding.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You become one, like silken threads on a beautiful tapestry. You are one heart, one mind, one life. Your voices blend in perfect harmony. You move forward and destiny's path awaits.
I enjoyed reading your poem celebrating the most important event in your life. There is an underlying tone of rejoicing as one. The title of your poem "Our Love" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: I wouldn't change a thing.

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You have used simile well, eg like silken threads in a beautiful tapestry. Description is vivid, eg our voices blend in perfect harmony.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Bathed  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi T.L. Finch, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a beautiful picture of change with all the imagery you could imagine.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Rays of sunlight warm a frozen lake, bathe and tickle the white oak branches until they're awake. You greet spring with a warmer breeze while birds take wing. Thawing ice on leaves is on the ragged shoreline. The wrath of winter fades and what survives is scathed and left to heal in spring.

I agree that spring is a great healer, but bathing from thawing lakes is a healer too. I enjoyed your poem. There is an underlying tone of reverence for nature. The title of your poem is appropriate as the trees are bathed even in winter as the sunlight thaws. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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You have a wonderful ability to show, not tell or paint a picture of the winter landscape. Your rhyme pattern is consistent and there is a smooth flow of words. You have been effective using metaphor, eg bathing white oak branches and tickling them awake. Description is vivid, eg rays of sunlight warms the frozen lake. Consonance is used, eg wrath of winter.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on thepublic review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
In this poem the poet is searching for Christ's soothing light, His hope.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You were lost in the darkness looking for light with no stars to guide you and no moon to calm your fright. You kneeled and prayed to our Great God. In that moment dawn brought rays of warmth to your trembling soul. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of reverence for Our Lord. The title of your poem "Seeking and Finding" is very appropriate, in that you sought the love of Our Lord and were given dawn's rays that warmed your trembling soul. That is exactly how we are told to pray. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: dawn's rays warming your trembling soul.

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Your poem is Unrhymed, unmetered verse and fits the mood of your poem perfectly. Description is vivid, eg dawn's bright rays warmed my soul. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Double Duty  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hii Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. } Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes double duty when you are a ski instructor and blackjack dealer at a casino.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You are a blackjack dealer at night and a ski instructor during the day. Franklin, the ski instructor and black jack dealer gives advice at his gambling table. He is upbeat and keeps hope alive. He gives skiers of all ages instruction to avoid disaster and deal with pleasure and pain.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of exploration and adventure. The title "The Double Duty" is appropriate in that you have two jobs, both glamorous. Areas of improvement: N/A.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid, eg snowy terrain presents many obstructions. Your poem tells a story.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pony Tale, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a talking, singing guitar.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your guitar sits in its case, leaning back into plush, blue lining. It speaks of harmony, rhythm and unfulfilled dreams. It whispers in its most electrifying voice. Your past is in its strings. Your fingers tell it all, ice on clear winter nights that reverberates and trembles off arpeggios. The instrument nods its head, bends its neck then snuggles in the cushion of its case and speaks about students of the strings.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Good use of personification, eg it speaks about harmony, rhythm and dreams. Well-written.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Sanctuary  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's finding peace within.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You go to a secret place in your mind where quiet rivers flow and you unwind. Whispering winds of memory sing in dulcet tones to you. You go to a place of solitude, a library of all you know and have accrued. It's unconfined and has no end. Your secret place is filled with calm and peace where you release concerns. You float in time, no longer blind from worry's mist.

Your poem is written in abstract, figurative language. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of restfulness. The title of your poem "Sanctuary" is appropriate in that you are protected in your mind and memory. It seems that the purpose of your poem is to state that the greatest resource a person has for solitude is his own mind.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Metaphor is excellent, eg Whispering winds sing in dulcet tones to you. Description is vivid, eg where quiet rivers flow. Consonance is effective, eg whispering winds. Your rhyme pattern is consistent as part of the form. Your poem is written in abstract terms along an intellectual path. No syntactical knots to un-do. This poem appeals to the reader's emotions and intellect. Mood is evoked by words, sounds and rhythm.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Choconut, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's run-down home from her lost childhood.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Years have past since you dared to stand before this house. Dancing leaves draw you in . You take one step toward the uncared for splintered door. A vast looming storm steals the sunlight from the sky, leaving a vestige of time long ago. Light and darkness mingle, dotting the interior with sadness. You ascend the stairs to the height of your fear. Outside suffocation leaves and light suppresses darkness. I can't say I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of melancholy regret in what used to be in the past. Your poem hooked me from the beginning and I just had to know what kind of sadness loomed. Then I decided it was probably something you had no control over as many children experience. The title of your poem "A Childhood Lost" is appropriate. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: After visiting the uncared for house, it seemed to me you were able to let go of the memory and hope now suppressed darkness.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your description is vivid, eg dotting the interior with sadness. Metaphor is used effectively, eg peek-a-boo shadows of a childhood lost.
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Bald Eagles  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
H Tim,. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the bald eagle, our most important national symbol, and his environment.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem is loaded with description and metaphor. You paint a classical picture of Mother Eagle, perched nobly in her lofty nest, watching three spotted eggs with a pristine gaze. Dad Eagle ever diligent in search of prey, soars high among the clouds. To think that fourteen lines can create such a vivid scene of description of the bald eagle's environment is incredible. Mother Nature controls the wind and allows daytime to be ruled by the noblest of all. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying reverence for nature. The title of your poem "The Bald Eagles" is appropriate and would be even better if you added "Our National Symbol". Areas fr improvement: N/A.

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Well-written. I was hooked from the beginning on the visual aspect of your poem. Thank you! Thank you!

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions: I found your poem easier to follow with three changes; two grammar change and one addition of a word.
soars NOT soaring
allows NOT allowing
were many miles closer. Add were

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Review of My Lover's Wings  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a young couple's ability to soar.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You and your beloved are befitting of the most blessed relations. You even describe her embrace and compare your relationship to a bird with a magnificent wingspan: together you soar. You are but two lovers who conquer treacherous terrain with deeply rooted trust. You support each other with immense trials and focus with fortitude. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of imagination and great dedication to your beloved. The title of your poem "My Lover's Wing" is appropriate in that you give your beloved credit for letting your relationship soar. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Your ability to communicate imaginatively. The point of your poem: Communicate and love imaginatively.

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Poetic convention is used well, eg treacherous terrain. Metaphor is well-done, eg our bodies are sewn in timeless grace. Simile is effectively used, eg like a rapturous wingspan of an awe-inspiring bird. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Blessed Be  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your poem paints a picture of whether you are a sleeper or a seeker.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The mustard is Faith's reality in which the seed becomes a tree and love's Phoenix builds its nest. The sleeper is awakened by dawn's wind and inhales God's fragrance. The seeker finds the Tree of Life and shares its fruit with humanity.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Rhyssa, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture and is a play off of a chapter in "The Hobbit".

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The things in your Hobbit pocket are health related. They aren't Bilbo's Magic ring. They're medicine that goes from tube to pump to needle in your skin. You also have glucose intolerance and low blood sugar. They'll never guess what's in your pockets. Just follow Gollum and find the cave's exit.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of secrecy in your poem. The title for your poem "What Have I Got In My Pockets?" is appropriate. Just answer the question. Areas of improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Well-written. Good choice of words and smooth flow of words. Nice job.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
H Dr. Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of never giving up, even in the face of adversity.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Never say die even though friends often become enemies. Fate may subdue all your plans, but never give up even in the face of wickedness. Be honest; self help is rewarded by God.

I enjoyed reading your poem. There is a tone of underlying tone of perserverence as your poem honors the idea of never quitting. Your title "Never Say Die" is appropriate.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Poetry  
for entry "Fur" 
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
H Cat, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is one poem from your collection, entitled "Fur".

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Wolves howling in the moonlight long to bite as they stare at the sky. No-one knows why.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of curiosity of the Wolves' animal behavior. Wolves are known to tree their prey: they get between you and the tree. Once they have you where they want you they would love to scratch you with their claws and then have you for lunch. The title for your poem "Fur"! is fairly appropriate, especially if the wolves eat another animal and leave the fur behind. Areas of improvement: You might offer more explanation as to why no-one knows why.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Thaddeus, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your poem provides a canvas to paint a picture of sunsets and storms.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
As kids you had no care about what life threw your way. No question about what to do today. Now older, you have less time to spend. Dusk waits for dawn. Sunsets are so grand you wondered if this one would ever be topped. Rain is much needed for farmers to grow grain. Storms bring danger Fearing we'd miss thunder storms and lightning bolts over Kansas held us in wonder. Wind gusts with bruised clouds sway and break treetops.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of drama and appreciation of nature. The title of your poem "Sunsets and Storms" is appropriate in that you are describing those aspects of the climate. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Stylistically, your rhyme pattern is consistent. Well-written piece. Effective use of metaphor, eg wind gusts with bruised clouds sway and break treetops. Description is vivid, eg fearing we'd miss lightning bolts and thunder storms over Kansas held us in wonder.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Broken Promises  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your , which I found on the. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your poem provides a canvas for a picture of the Earth's environmental condition.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Mankind hasn't learned that he has a debt to pay nature caused by his thoughtlessness. You have expressed the Earth's environmental condition in a most eloquent way. You describe everything imaginable from African food riots among the poor, glaciers melting too fast, deserts expanding , water pollution, and nature's catastrophes. When Earth is freed from man's thoughtlessness, in the future there is hope it will revert to what it was in the beginning. It will discover its balance and start to recover.

I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of hope for the Earth's environment. The title of your poem "Broken Promises" is appropriate, in that mankind has made promises and not kept a solemn trust. Most memorable: One future day a green, tender shoot will push its way out of the Earth and the wind will whisper, "Let's try again."

Stylistically, once again you are a master of consistent rhyme pattern, smooth flow and proper choice of words. Metaphors are perfect, eg a soft breeze will whisper. Consonance, a poetic convention, is effective, eg bounteous beauty and description is vivid. Personification is evident, eg we grow and thrive from her nurture.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of My Favorite Pair  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Elisa, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a tribute to your favorite pair of socks.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You wash your grungy old socks with holes at the toes and hope they won't disintegrate. You love them dearly even though your toes protrude. You say you're too poor to buy another pair.

I enjoyed reading your poem as there is an underlying tone of security associated with those old socks. The title of your poem "My Favorite Pair" is appropriate in that even if they're falling apart, they give you comfort. Areas for improvement: See suggestion.

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Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
disintegrate NOT disintergrate

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