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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kare, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a blessed picture of the birth of the son of a couple.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found it enchanting, a combination of the beating of the baby's heart and the baby's middle name. Very cleverly written. Description is vivid, eg Warm, darkened place of translucent light and muffled sounds.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Query Megan's Man  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Purple Princess, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your letters, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This query letter paints a picture that any publisher should sympathize with.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I fully enjoyed reading your query letter and found it evoked sympathy and was very cleverly written. Best wishes in your pursuit. For your consideration: Paragraph 2: affect NOT effect

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Plumber Geek  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ben,   I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a plumber and a leak .

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your comical poem in the poetic style of "The Raven". Hilarious! The rhyme scheme of your poem is quite complicated and classic too. Rhythm is upbeat. What a great flow of words. The description of your poem is vivid, eg Pale, pathetic geek. Here are a couple of suggestions for your consideration.

Stanza 3: "Morning Ma'am," NOT "Morning Ma'am."
Stanza 3: "...I'll get on this," he just mutters. NOT "I'll get on this" he just mutters.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of WHAT YOU MEAN  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brent, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's friendship, love and bond with his beloved.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem of romance and felt it was quite inspirational. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Poems don't usually have periods at the end of lines. More often you see commas at the end of stanza lines except at the end of the stanza or no punctuation at all. Stanza 3: Good simile, eg like porcelain. Description in your poem is vivid, eg the color in my days would have greyed. Stanza 3: complete NOT complete.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jaya, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes unusual beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and the values to be learned from nature, the stars and the sky. Most incredible. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Description in your poem is expressive, eg giving out twinkling rays of joy and light. Your lovely poem is full of description.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Making Friends  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Schnujo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes friendship from the perspective of two friends.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I found your partner poem fun to read, fun looking for friendship. Suggestions: You might want to think about this. Periods are not usually placed at the end of stanza lines except the last stanza line. Commas might be placed instead or no punctuation at all. The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. Your pacing is upbeat and spot on. The description in your poem is vivid, eg I think I'll go out in the fray.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of My favorite name  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Payal, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a name and the strength the poet has gained from it over time.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found it interesting that it is part of the strength you've gained over the years. A name is to be proud of! The description in your poem is vivid, eg It runs through the recesses of my ego and superego. Your poem is Unrhymed verse.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Mused  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pamela Sue, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the imagination or muse.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I really enjoyed reading your poem, as it has some lessons to learn about the muse. Rhyme is sprinkled through your free verse poem. Your description is expressive, eg You inspired me, fed off me, engulfed me. Suggestions: You have used the word me at the end of the line several times. You might want to use another word other than me to avoid redundancy.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Lonely Tower  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
H Ben, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem attempts to answer the question, Who Ives in the lonely tower?

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found your pacing quite excellent. The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent and well done. The description in your poem is vivid, eg I chanced upon a shady glen, though far from any road it lay. No issue, as this poem is very well written.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Guardian Angels  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a very unusual picture of a fledgling bluejay and his guardian ange.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I thoroughly enjoyed your story poem. It is highly descriptive and expressive throughout.. I especially like how you continued one stanza into another stanza with a transition thought. Beautiful! The rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. Your pacing is excellent and spot on. Thank you, Guardian Angel!

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Our Summer  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Heleny, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, , which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a very brief summer in January in Wellington.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and found the seagulls' laughter humorous. I chuckled when the seagulls laughed because they knew your summer in January had melted away. Description in your poem is vivid, eg salty caramel readily blended with the briny breeze. Metaphor is effective, eg seagulls swirled and stole the discarded dream. Good job with consonance, eg seagulls swirled and stole. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. There is a nice flow of words in your poem.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Frozen  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi M.J. DeLuna, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of one who is frozen, lacking the ability to respond because being hurt so much.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem although it saddened me to think of the hurt you must be suffering. Effective metaphor, eg black smoke which turns into thick impenetrable walls. Your poem is sprinkled with rhyme. I think your meant the title of your poem to be "Frozen" NOT "Fozen". Description is vivid, eg Our love has become a jar of bile.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Forever Gift  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem paints a picture of the poet's proposal to his beloved.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem about your beloved. The rhyme of your Balazzi stanza poem is fascinating. I like looking for the rhyme within the stanzas. A surprise every time even though the scheme is clearly communicated. Description in your poem is vivid, eg She now felt reassured that all could be endured with his love all around her. Effective metaphor, eg at last the sun had found her. Perfectly written.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Winter Series  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Angel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem of five Haikus paints a picture with a winter flavor.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your very expressive poem.. Your five Haikus joined together make for a lovely poem about winter. Description is vivid, eg forlorn, they stand tall, de-void of their verdant cloak. Your rhythm is beautiful, as Haikus are. Rhyme is not part of a Haiku.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Love  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Razia, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your letters for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This letter describes the writer's feelings for her good friend.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your letter and sympathized with your lack of ability to communicate your feelings, as well as your friend's lack of ability. A letter is a good way to communicate your thoughts. You have errors in the use of past and present tense, punctuation, language usage, grammar and paragraphing. I did not see any errors in spelling. If you would like to edit and re-write your letter, I will review it again for you.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Denniston1500, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your articles for our account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the writer's plans for his occupation in the future.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your article about your future. Best of luck to you.
Suggestions:
Paragraph 1: NBA, National Basketball Association
Paragraph 2: introduced wNOT introduce
Paragraph 2: she doesn't NOT don't
Paragraph 2: quit NOT quite
Paragraph 2: class work NOT classworks

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Arguing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi OrcaNerd, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a flawed side of human nature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem and found it humorous although it portrays a very serious subject. The vocabulary you have chosen is what makes it serious and humorous too! It seems to me the use of egress is unusual and normally refers to an easement! Well-written poem! The description in your poem is vivid, eg you begin to aggress without any finesse. Your pacing is excellent and spot on as they say. Your rhyme pattern is unique and consistent too. Congratulations on your account anniversary.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Warm  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Congratulations to you as our featured reviewer for March. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of warmth in the home where good friends are welcome.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem and felt it was a magnificent invitation to a thoughtful neighbor on a chilly day outside. Description is vivid, eg Those who you have helped love you so. Effective metaphor, eg Our fireplace is warm on a cold day and so is your heart.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Starlight Parlor  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Alala, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a }review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's starlight parlor.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem and easily visualized the essence of the evening in front of the campfire, warm and toasty by the fire, lapping up the fresh clean air and conversation. Stanza 1: You might think of using a different word other than the second starry.to get away from being redundant eg under starry starry skies. Nice flow of words and rhyme in your poem. A warm thought!


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of About My Writing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ollie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's thoughts of his own writing.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed your poem, as I sympathize with our private thoughts and being separate entities, each of us individual and unique personalities and yet there is a connection of humanity. Description is vivid, eg there is that light, that connection. Your poem is Unrhymed verse and has a nice flow of words. Good job.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Fear  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi KyshaNycol, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of overcoming life's obstacles and failures.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Rhyme pattern in your poem is consistent. You have a good cadence. Description is vivid, eg preying on my weakened spirit. Nice simile, eg like a storm carried in the wind. Stanza 3: too long NOT to long

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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#1300305 by Maryann

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Review of In my mind  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Southern Diva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your letters for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This letter describes the writer's outlook.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your letter, as I could identify with the many things you need to accomplish, but the few things that you are actually motivated to do, such as painting the porch.
You might try organizing your letter so each paragraph has a main idea sentence and supporting detail. Paragraph two, for example, talks about detail, but I don't see a main idea.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of My Girls  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Butterflies, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with q review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's love for her daughters.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, as it brought back meloncholy moments to me in the raising of my family. The rhyme pattern of your poem is consistent except for stanza six. You might want to re-visit that stanza to evaluate the rhyme. For a smooth flow of words, try reading poem aloud and re-writing. Description is vivid, eg the smallness of your hand in mine. Try no capitals to correspond to no punctuation.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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GerMac

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Review of Look Inside  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi SDSMan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your essays for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This essay describes how the world appears to the writer.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your essay and am reminded of the age-old adage, Don't judge a book by its cover. Look within to see how unique each book is. I find your idea that each book represents individual persons is quite interesting. Well-written with good descriptions of different personalities. Suggestion: Paragraph 3: possible still NOT possible, still

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The word Goodbye  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Rosevina, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's relationship with her fiancée who passed away.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
I enjoyed reading your poem, but felt saddened by the lament you felt, having lost your fiancée and wanting nothing but him. Your reference to freedom and soaring in the skies, even joining him someday is hopeful. The thyme pattern in your poem is consistent. The pacing/cadence of your poem is excellent. Very effective metaphor, eg Take to the skies and find your true destiny. Description is vivid, eg I feel less than alive.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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